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ok, stuff time. Noster, what is your system for the leech arrows? Also, your character's bio states that his father was a gatekeeper that disappeared when Sylus was much younger. Maybe I'm just arguing with wording here, but if your character is a 200 year old Elf, and the Black Gale has only been around for 20 years, the Gatekeepers only being around for around 14 or so years, so how young would Sylus have been? AWFUL, your character sheet is good except for one point. With his abilities, we would prefer you had some sort of clause that prevented him from using his abilities against other students, or something, as it is probably a good idea not to have a character who can change the physical make-up of other characters. As for your question about Lucis-Earth contact through the black gale, travel is probably not the most difficult thing, since humans have advanced aircraft for transportation, and Lucians have everything from Griffons to dragons. There would at least be 1 or 2 corporations trying to monetize black gale transportation. Though, transport between the 2 worlds probably wouldn't be the most common thing, given that cultural differences are a thing, and only 20 years have passed. Humans, as well as Lucian countries would probably have a large portion of their populations against allowing the other group from intruding on their society. Though, given that it has been 20 years by this point, some acceptance/lenience has occurred. A Lucian historian that decided to move his family to New York to learn more about human culture? Entirely possible. Drew, I am still a bit confused with the "listening to machines" thing. Wouldn't it just be more logical to state that she has a natural talent for recognizing the problems with machines by sound, instead of making it sound like some sort of psychic power?
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Sorry, I got away with myself with my writing style. I didn't mean to make it confusing. I was going for the identifying machines and their innards by sound. It was an ability inspired by the main character of Clockwork Planet, one of my favorite manga/LN that I've been kind of wanting to make a character with a similar ability.
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Alright, you make a fair point NW. I've altered his mutagens so that they only affect his homunculi.
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Noster, what is your system for the leech arrows? Also, your character's bio states that his father was a gatekeeper that disappeared when Sylus was much younger. Maybe I'm just arguing with wording here, but if your character is a 200 year old Elf, and the Black Gale has only been around for 20 years, the Gatekeepers only being around for around 14 or so years, so how young would Sylus have been?
NW, I do not understand what you mean by "system" for leech arrows. I edited his bio and it probably fits much better into the setting now, saying his father became a gatekeeper when the Gale appeared and that he vanished about 3 years ago. Man, I'm such a noob XD
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Oh wait... is the the fact that I used the word "voices" in her weaknesses? I'm sorry I can see how it could be seen as psychic; that isn't meant as like that I was basically filling out the form in-character... I probably shouldn't have done that in this case I guess. She's a young girl that perceives the sounds she hears from machines as their "voice" since she's lived with it all of her life.
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Drew and AWFUL, go ahead and throw your CSs in the Character section. Noster, sorry, that was a question from another GM, but I guess they meant something like "How much mana could the arrows leech, how fast, and other stuff." I don't really know why they asked, though. You are also accepted, anyway. Yay, accepting people, woo!
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All right I think that covers everything, tell me if you see anything that needs to be changed.
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shweeeet, can't wait to start playing :DDD. Thanks for letting a newb like me be part of this lol.
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I'm with Noster. Thanks! :)
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Shiny! I look forward to playing with you all :3
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Is my CS okay?
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Since you asked: No, we did not find it acceptable. As in, not even a revision will fix it since the problems are in regards to the fundamental concept. You're better off making a new character.
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  • Your female image isn't working
  • What's the adverse effects of not munching on hearts?
  • Leeching off magic locales is... eh. Seems kinda like it's trying to dodge the weakness of dealing with organ eating. But like, sentient beings are anything that can perceive or feel. Just eat livestock liver.
  • Your illusions should be only single target.
  • Nix the pocket dimension for your orb, it negates your weakness.
  • What kind of fire spells?
  • The electric collar is hardly a restriction, considering she can just shapeshift out of it. Make it an anti-power collar.
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Finally finished him up, he ok?
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@Gray Really!?...Well that's depressing
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I hope this is still open...
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  • Your female image isn't working
  • What's the adverse effects of not munching on hearts?
  • Leeching off magic locales is... eh. Seems kinda like it's trying to dodge the weakness of dealing with organ eating. But like, sentient beings are anything that can perceive or feel. Just eat livestock liver.
  • Your illusions should be only single target.
  • Nix the pocket dimension for your orb, it negates your weakness.
  • What kind of fire spells?
  • The electric collar is hardly a restriction, considering she can just shapeshift out of it. Make it an anti-power collar.
No problem with most of that, the only one I want to ask about is the choker was so I can have something physically try to stop her from killing someone just for food. If it's just an antimagic collar, not really anything stopping her from attacking someone unawares physically. Other than that I can see the reasoning behind, I'd imagine the choker would adjust to fit if she shapeshifted. Although I never said it could so I see part of the problem there. Edit: also Amon doesn't have any illusion, I never put that in the cs, opting to play into the vampire-ish nature to let Amon be able to give out her energy to others, no matter how rare that may happen due to her selfish streak. The magic leeching would only be viable in areas rich in magic, such as sacred areas and the school, if only for how many practitioners gather there. But if you want the leeching taken out, I'm fine with that.
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Full Name Vish Kalastria Gender Male Age 19 Year 4 Birthday January 18 Astrological Sign Capricorn Species Vampire: Legend tells of ancient times, when mortals of Lucis lived in fear of a monster known as Tepes, the Blood Dragon. Master of forbidden sorceries, as well as a murderous cannibal, he was reviled by other dragons as well as mortals. As punishment for his sins, a council of dragons formed and trapped him in the shape of a mortal, stripping him of the vast majority of his power. However, Tepes used his mortality to his advantage, and bred with the savage beast-men of Agadeem, extracting his vengeance by unleashing his dark brood. These descendants are today known as Vampires, half-living monsters in the shape of men that feed on flesh and blood to survive. Adapted to the fetid swamps and volcanic jungles of the land of Agadeem, Vampires are adept predators, with keen senses, and the strength and speed of ten men. They live for hundreds of years, some longer with the use of magic, but their infant mortality rate is shockingly high. Their bodies' magical constitutions are weakened by dark arts, and many cannot bear the strain of the power in the blood. The brood of the Blood Dragon share in their progenitor's skill in dark and unholy magics, and have spent many years constructing arcane monuments, upon which they conducted bloody rituals. Civilization is not entirely below them, though, as they have founded the port city of Al'Akir, where traders flock to sell and procure all manner of illicit or unwholesome goods. Class Blood Sorcerer: Vish is heir and student to the ancient Vampiric arts of blood sorcery, forbidden arts passed down by the Blood Dragon himself. Weapon While direct combat is largely below him, if needed Vish wields a traditional Vampire sword, forged of dragonglass, and with a handle of ebony and sinew. World Lucius Biography Scion of the Kalastria clan of Vampires, the current tribe wielding the most power within Agadeem, Vish is among the "highborn" of his clan: those with enough wealth or influence to cow other Vampires (and their respective thralls) into their service. Despite his dubious status as nobility, Vish has little interest in the squabbles and feuds that the majority of his clan frequently involve themselves with. His is a higher calling: one of might and magic. Vish seeks to uncover the lost secrets of Tepes, and reclaim the true power lying in wait within his draconic blood, with the ultimate goal of conquering all of Lucius. Or rather, that was his goal. With the merging of worlds, Vish has reorganized his priorities. By attending one of these merged academies, he can bring the might of the Earth to his cause, and once his own world has been brought to heel, the next world may very well follow. Personality Vish displays an aura of stoicism, arrogance and casual sadism to most that encounter him. Not that he is a particularly unfriendly person, this is simply what a life raised among sociopathic power-mongers does to a person that would have been charming had they been raised elsewhere. Though he is paranoid and cruel, he does hold a personal code, and can be affable when the mood strikes him. Partner We shall see. Fear(s)/Weakness(es)/Limit(s) As with all vampires, Vish has a fundamental weakness to magic, particularly that aligned to light or fire. Holy magic scorns him, and he hates and fears fire. Sunlight, while not immediately lethal, sears his flesh on direct contact, and is disproportionately painful. If he is exposed to too many of his banes, left unfed for too long, or is surrounded by great bloodshed, he can lose control of his higher reasoning and fall into a berserk frenzy, where his only thoughts are to fight, flee or feed. Skills/Abilities/Traits Extremely intelligent and coldly cunning, Vish has traits that lend well to his status as a sorcerer. Having been schooled and trained in the dark arts since he could speak, Vish's skill is such that one would expect from someone several years his senior. Blood sorcery has many applications, including divining of knowledge from blood, weaponizing the blood of oneself or others, draining the life of others to heal his wounds, creating minions of flesh and nightmares, invading or controlling the minds of others, inducing rot and entropy, and laying painful curses on one's foes. Vish is well-read on the ancient history of Lucius, and is both accustomed to and decently adept to the maneuverings of court politics. Like any Vampire worth their blood, he can catch and kill his prey as silently and efficiently as any common assassin without any particular effort, and has the numerous physical advantages conferred by his race. Theme Song "Not many have the honor of standing in the presence of a king." Other That's not paint on his face.
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Ah before I forget, I meant to ask for a point of reference, what kind of fire spells would a fairly novice caster have available to them, since I'm a bit unaware to what I should limit Amon to when it comes to that area.
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Sorry, busy weekend. ^^" I bolded what I added, hopefully that clears it up a bit more. ~Alice
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Hmmm... kinda quiet around lately. Mind if I try to do some more worldbuilding?
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