Bolt was disappointed (1) that the hero had destroyed his precious kittens and he was annoyed. He then noticed that the hero was focused on the alien invaders and he rolled his (2) eyes, how hard was it to get someone's (3) attention, it was only aliens for Christ's sake! He decided that he would have to take down the aliens and attack the hero (4) as well get the arrogant asshole's full attention. He saw aliens attacking people on the ground and he flew at incredible speeds towards the invaders. Not caring about the (5) people he fired off a very powerful blast of electricity towards the alien creatures and it caused a powerful explosion which killed the aliens as well as several innocent people. Bolt then turned his sights on the ships and Press and flew towards them. He smiled when he came within thirty feet of the hero and the ships. "Hay asshat! Never turn your back on Bolt! Let's bring on the thunder!" he shouted and released an extremely powerful electric blast from his body (6) in the form of an explosion. It (7) blew away a few ships and caused them to fall from the sky and it was headed straight for Press and if it hit then the hero would sent flying and electrocuted badly.

I have bolded and numbered all the things wrong with your post, either grammatical, confusing, or just plain wrong. 1. Press did not destroy the kittens, the aliens did while trying to destroy Press. 2. There should be a period there instead of a comma. 3. Question mark should go there instead of a comma. 4. Minor thing, that should be "as well as". 5. Comma. 6. What's that supposed to mean? If what I interpret is true, then all Bolt did was create a single solitary explosion, with the initial blast appearing directly in front of him, rather than the huge wave of electricity I believe you were going for. 7. Multiple things here. First, I believe that the alien drop ships have forcefields and armor, so I doubt that even your lightning blast could have caused them to "fall from the sky" that easily. Most likely they'll be badly damaged at best, but probably not enough to destroy them outright. However, for the sake of argument, let's say it was possible to do what you had described. Having multiple ships destroyed in such a manner would most likely leave anyone our age pretty damn tired, trained by a shady organization or not. I mean, we are still adolescents. Also, that is one huge run-on sentence. There should not be so many "and's" there, and most should be replaced with commas.

now might be a good time for another story post!

<Snipped quote by The Patriarch> I have bolded and numbered all the things wrong with your post, either grammatical, confusing, or just plain wrong. 1. Press did not destroy the kittens, the aliens did while trying to destroy Press. 2. There should be a period there instead of a comma. 3. Question mark should go there instead of a comma. 4. Minor thing, that should be "as well as". 5. Comma. 6. What's that supposed to mean? If what I interpret is true, then all Bolt did was create a single solitary explosion, with the initial blast appearing directly in front of him, rather than the huge wave of electricity I believe you were going for. 7. Multiple things here. First, I believe that the alien drop ships have forcefields and armor, so I doubt that even your lightning blast could have caused them to "fall from the sky" that easily. Most likely they'll be badly damaged at best, but probably not enough to destroy them outright. However, for the sake of argument, let's say it was possible to do what you had described. Having multiple ships destroyed in such a manner would most likely leave anyone our age pretty damn tired, trained by a shady organization or not. I mean, we are still adolescents. Also, that is one huge run-on sentence. There should not be so many "and's" there, and most should be replaced with commas.

Well I edited it

Ahh, fuck my tits off. Posted my CS in the char list by mistake. Darn tabs. Anyway, Wipperino in Pepperoni. Background should be done soon. Lemme know if his powers are okay. Name: Aren Steele Alias: Shockwave Age: 16 Personality: Aren is, for lack of a better term, a smart ass. Always having some kind of sarcastic comment or quip to fire off at whoever has the misfortune to garner his attention, his snarky behaviors tends to land him in some trouble from time to time. He's jovial lad though, always looking to put smiles on the faces of others with his admittedly acquired taste in comedy. You could say he's a bit of a clown in that regard. Although he doesn't have very many friends thanks to his habit of poking fun at damn near everybody he meets, the lack of camaraderie has inspired him to be quite the loyal friend to those who can put up with him. He possesses a strong sense of personal justice, having always been the type of kid to speak out against mistreatment in his trademark vocal fashion, although it often tends to get him in a bit of a pickle thanks to his rather brash way of stating his feelings. He also fancies himself a bit of a ladies man, although whether or not he truly does try to woo the lasses of the world of simply does it for the amusement has yet to be seen, as finding the his true intentions can be quite a difficult task. Powers: Aren possesses the ability to create and control vibrations, giving him dominion over several fields. First, and perhaps the field he is most experienced in, is the ability to manipulate sound waves by changing the vibrations which comprise the sounds themselves. With this, he is capable of dampening sounds he or others create within a radius of himself by working against the waves to silence them. He is also capable of doing the opposite and instead causing the vibrations to grow in intensity, causing a simple cough or whisper to change into a concussive blast of sound thanks to the pressure such violent vibrations cause. He is able to manipulate the direction the vibrations that comprise sound take as well, helping him direct his attacks so he doesn't blast everyone away. Secondly, he is capable of generating vibrations himself. This can range from something as simple as causing his body to pulse softly to enhancing his physical strikes by forcing his vibrations through the opponent's body, causing internal damage thanks to the unnatural shaking it causes with them. With this ability, he can also cause items to 'shake apart' and if he concentrate hard enough, he's even capable of causing small, faux earthquakes by contacting the ground and channeling his powers into the earth below, causing it to shift constantly. His third ability and one he's yet to explore very far, is the ability to influence temperature with his abilities. As heat is merely the amount of movement found between particles, he can cause these particles to vibrate quicker and in doing so, cause the heat in a particular area or object to increase, or do the opposite and cause them to vibrate more slowly, thus causing the heat in an area of object to decrease. It is likely his powers are capable of doing more, but thanks to the complexity, he has yet to find any others, or lacks the finer control over his abilities to try some of his more outlandish ideas. Weakness: As his powers can be quite volatile, he poses a threat to his allies or the very civilians he tries to protect should he lose focus over his powers. Because vibrations are quite sporadic, he also has some difficulty attaining precise control over them. This is especially true in the offensive sense, where externalizing his abilities to harm opponents only makes it harder for him to contain them, allowing clever opponents to exploit his lack of control with underhanded tactics. Appearance: Bio: Arc Ideas: Jump City taken over by giant, intelligent apes. Other: Has a tattoo of a butterfly on his left buttocks. Also, Titans forever.

I can't seem to find the CS I was going to play as so I am working on modifying another to use.

now might be a good time for another story post!

I'll get to it soon now that I'm home. I just wanted to give some of the others a chance to post if they haven't.

I agree with Rin, accepted.

I'm not to sure about the earthquakes, but I do understand they aren't full on events. Other than that the powers look okay, continue to work on it when you feel.

<Snipped quote by Asura> I'm not to sure about the earthquakes, but I do understand they aren't full on events. Other than that the powers look okay, continue to work on it when you feel.

If it helps, they're not real earthquakes, just him causing the immediate ground to shake like an earthquake. His powers don't go all the way down to the plates below or anything.

@Scarifar waiting on you

Alright, um, now I need to figure out how to start.

Bolt is dying to give Press a taste of Vodka and Pepsi @KriticalKrab Kobby attacked some aliens too

I noticed none of your characters are communicating with each other. Whatever works guys lol. Anyways I'm still trying to sort of push you guys, maybe I should make a character for that, but after this first event the RP will largely be in you guys' control.

<Snipped quote by KriticalKrab> If it helps, they're not real earthquakes, just him causing the immediate ground to shake like an earthquake. His powers don't go all the way down to the plates below or anything.

Oh okay then, so his opponents would just get dizzy or unbalanced form the quake, I understand now.

Alright, um, now I need to figure out how to start.

Well I read in your bio that your character was visiting family, perhaps you can intro your character protecting them? Or perhaps you were all abducted and you're being escorted somewhere along with River. [Edit] post your character in the characters tab when you feel like it.

I noticed none of your characters are communicating with each other. Whatever works guys lol. Anyways I'm still trying to sort of push you guys, maybe I should make a character for that, but after this first event the RP will largely be in you guys' control. <Snipped quote by Asura> Oh okay then, so his opponents would just get dizzy or unbalanced form the quake, I understand now. <Snipped quote by VitaVitaAR> Well I read in your bio that your character was visiting family, perhaps you can intro your character protecting them? Or perhaps you were all abducted and you're being escorted somewhere along with River. [Edit] post your character in the characters tab when you feel like it.

Kobby attacked the aliens

<Snipped quote by KriticalKrab> Kobby attacked the aliens

That's awkward, thanks for telling me I just fixed it.

You know what would be a good plot line? Giant robots. Chicks dig 'em, after all.

You know what would be a good plot line? Giant robots. Chicks dig 'em, after all.

You're speaking my language, you know that?

You know what would be a good plot line? Giant robots. Chicks dig 'em, after all.

my girlfriend hates robots lol

Naaaahhh robots would be best. Would be a nice transition from the gore.

<Snipped quote by Asura> my girlfriend hates robots lol

Only one explanation

Demons would be cooler

Naaaahhh robots would be best. Would be a nice transition from the gore.

You guys are the ones that are doing the goring though...

Demons would be cooler

I'm thinking about using brother blood and friends down the line, but their whole story revolves around raven so I'm not sure how i'm going to do it. Though I don't have a problem about playing her here as an npc like I plan some other characters if you guys make certain decisions, but that's other stuff.

You know what would be a good plot line? Giant robots. Chicks dig 'em, after all.

That would be clanjos's thing if he's still around, I don't blame him if he's not.