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Hidden 10 yrs ago → 10 yrs ago Post by Vicier
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I love the idea of him hun, I think he'll be a great addition to the roleplay; I'll add him to the roster! Welcome aboard!

Not long now guys! I would like a couple more characters before I open up the IC!!
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*Tips hat* Ma'am.
Hidden 10 yrs ago Post by ScarlettWaters16
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I will try to have both CS's for the twins up by the end of today so you can make your decision.
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Name:
Blaze

Real Name:
Blaire Daniels

Age:
25

Position:
Assistant Trainer, Hacker

Occupation (If Any):
None

Appearance:
ON LEFT




Personality Traits:
Blaire is exactly like her name implies. She is a very bright, blaring, vibrant person who loves to have fun and never takes anything seriously. She does have a very short temper and is easily angered, especially when it comes to her past and her family. She loves to get into fights and is a total tech geek, though she does not look it when you first meet her. She is fearful of water, snakes, and spiders, but everything else she seems to be fine with. She is a very daring person and loves to take more risks than to hang back and be in the background. She loves to be the center of attention and can be a little narcissistic at times. She sometimes has her head in the clouds, but once she’s in a battle, she is grounded and focused and seems like a completely different person.

Abilities:
Fire Manipulation- She has the ability to manipulate fire to her whim, which includes forming the fire into fiery shapes, like whips or swords. She mostly likes to send them off in shot blasts though. She feels like it is more effective that way.

Skills:
She is very skilled in hand to hand combat and with multiple kinds of medieval weaponry like swords and bow and arrows. She is also good with ninja weapons as well, such as Katanas and Nunchuks.

Biography:
Blaire and her twin sister are a very unusual case for mutants. Both of their parents were mutants, which it is really strange for there to be a family of mutants. What is also strange is that they are TWIN mutants, and no more, complete opposite in powers. There is also fear when it comes to a family of mutants. When her and her sister were only six years old, their mother, a shape shifting movement, was taken from their home and had experiments done on her. They waited for days for their mother to come back, but, unbeknownst to them, the humans had killed her mother in the process of one of their experiments.

Her father did not know this as well. He scouted for days until he came across the facility which she had been taken. He led an attack against it, only to find that his wife had been killed and he, in turn, was killed. Blaire and Jessamine waited for days for their parents to come back, hoping that they could be a happy family again. They were about eleven at this time. When they had heard of their parents’ deaths, they did not mourn. They knew immediately that they needed to go into hiding. They found some other mutants who were also in hiding and stayed with them until they were fifteen. They then got their own place, within the compound of the Pit, and have stayed there ever since.

Other:
She is the older of the two sisters.

Theme Song:
"Sympathy for the Devil" by The Rolling Stones


Name:
Breeze

Real Name:
Jessamine “Jess” Daniels

Age:
25

Position:
Strategist, Lookout

Occupation (If Any):
Nothing Right Now

Appearance:
ON RIGHT

Up above.
Jessamine has very light blue eyes and her sister has red. Dark red.
Jessamine is also slightly taller than her sister.
Jessamine has a slight a light blue tinge to her skin color where her sister has a little bit of red to her skin color.

Personality Traits:
Jessamine seems to be the complete opposite of her sister. She more serious and takes things very logically. She does, sometimes, go with the flow of whatever is going on, but normally, she is the brains behind the operation. While others might go into the field to fight, she stays back at headquarters and relays commands out to mutants who are out in the field. She does love to go out into the field though. She will always go with her sister whenever her sister is out there, which is often. She is fiercely loyal to her family. She does not seem to have a temper, but when it comes to her family, you do not mess with them or she will mess with you.

Abilities:

Air Manipulation: She has the ability to manipulate the air around her and form it into strong winds or tornadoes. She can also increase air pressure, causing the ability to crush objects. She can repel objects with the air as well. She can also use sonar with the air as well.

Flight:She can use the air to lift her up into the air and caring her a short distance (kind of like Jack Frost in Rise of the Guardians)

She can do power moves with her sister. Her sister can super-heat her tornadoes, causing them to burn anyone that they touch.

Skills:
She is very talented when it comes to math and science. She is very good at close, hand to hand combat. She is also very quiet and stealthy and can climb trees faster than most people.

Biography:
Same as Blaire (Up Above)

Other:
Secretly, she is very jealous of her older sister because she seems to be the one everyone likes.

Theme Song:
"Bottom of the River" by Delta Rae
Hidden 10 yrs ago Post by FaithsRose
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Hey Vicier, really like this idea ^^ Is there any chance you've still got room for one more?
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We should start soon!!!!! I'm really excited!!!
Hidden 10 yrs ago Post by Vicier
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Name: Blaze
Real Name: Blaire Daniels

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Name: Wave
Real Name: Jessamine “Jess” Daniels


Okay, so what I'll do in this instance is give you feedback for each of them individually; first starting with Blaire, then with Jess, before looking at the backstory together.

Blaire:
I like the idea you have going for this character, a fire manipulator is a good character when done well, there are a few things though that I would like you to go over however before I can accept her.

1. When it comes to her position within the compound, because of her age she herself would still be in training so she wouldn't be able to be an assistant trainer, plus she would also only be learning what it takes to be a hacker in the compound. A lookout is okay for her, however there is something else that I will bring up later that will determine this.
2. I wouldn't say that being a thief is an occupation in the compound, it's more of a skill than an occupation.
3. I love where you're going with her powers, fire manipulation is really cool, but however I do have my concerns with the "Phoenix Physiology". Being the "bird of rebirth" effectively makes you immortal and unkillable due to being reborn from the ashes, unfortunately I'm not going to be able to accept this particular part of her abilities.

Jess:
I like the idea that you have going, however I'm not quite so sure if a water manipulator is going to particularly fit in with the roleplay setting too much.

1. Like her sister, when it comes to her position within the compound, because of her age she herself would still be in training. Again a lookout is okay for her (and I will bring up something soon that will determine this), however playing "bait" isn't something that leaders would encourage as it would put more lives in danger.
2. Unfortunately, because of the setting the roleplay is in, I'm not going to be able to accept this particular set of powers; sorry...

Backstory:
Okay, this is the part (that mentioned above) I was going to talk about in regards to determining their positions and such in the compound. As mentioned in your backstory, both Blaire and Jess don't actually live within the compound, they only live near by to it; because of this I take it as they are still trying to hide within the human society, so in that case they wouldn't be able to participate in activities in the Pit due to safety issues (it would make them a target for the government because they aren't living in The Pit like the other mutants). The only way I can see it working with them having their own place for a while is if you make them both new recruits, this way they won't have a position or occupation within the compound yet however once they are recruited they would move into the compound like the others.
Hidden 10 yrs ago Post by ScarlettWaters16
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So I didn't know if they could be in the compound, so I will switch that immediately.

If I make them older, will the positions be okay? I'll still switch the "bait thing"...

What should I change Jessamine's powers to, then, if she can't be water?
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Changed it... Is it better? Changed age, positions, and powers for Jessamine.
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Changed it... Is it better? Changed age, positions, and powers for Jessamine.


Their a lot better however, for their positions, they still wouldn't be experts in their fields (even my girl is still learning), it takes years to develop those types of skills. If you could change that, it would be awesome.
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Their a lot better however, for their positions, they still wouldn't be experts in their fields (even my girl is still learning), it takes years to develop those types of skills. If you could change that, it would be awesome.


Changed again. I put them as intermediates, which is above novice, but below expert. Is that good?
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Changed again. I put them as intermediates, which is above novice, but below expert. Is that good?


You just needed to write that one was a hacker and the other was a strategist, didn't need to put a level on them at all. I'll add them to the accepted characters now
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You just needed to write that one was a hacker and the other was a strategist, didn't need to put a level on them at all. I'll add them to the accepted characters now


Done. Sorry, I always feel like a need to be specific for a few things... xD
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Oh! Btw, changed Jessamine's name to Breeze since she can't be water and can't do wave.
Hidden 10 yrs ago Post by Vicier
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Hey guys! Just letting you all know that the OOC is now up and running!

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