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Sorry about being slow to post, I'm having trouble with it but it'll be up soon
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Sorry about being slow to post, I'm having trouble with it but it'll be up soon
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Hey guys just a question. In the first IC post the creator says it's been twenty years since Verion but most of the characters are in there teens and I remember one character was 19 when Verion hit so should we all make our characters older or should the creator adjust that to like ten years or something, not to sound to presumptuous.
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Well, besides the Text Wall of Death, there's a few things wrong here. The characters Mark is quite similar to mine, and the fact that she has 'First One' branded on her. Also the fact that she was able to handle thousands of Demons inside her body...eh...not so much. 'Not even the King could handle that many of us', and the rest of it seems like you're kinda God modding your character. Also, one doesn't simply CONVERSE with a Demon. Not to mention the Demon is LILITH. That's effing insane, no 'human' could contain Lilith, being as powerful as she is. Hell, in this world nobody has really and understanding of Demons since they just invaded and kinda..y'know..destroyed everything.
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Aw crap. Good catch there. This is what happens when you do a reboot and only think you have to make minor alterations and believe you remember all the details...

Here's what we will do:
No one have to change a thing, the siege of Veiron actually took 20 years (mostly thanks to the awesome power of the early Warriors there), Some of our characters got out of the city early and some stayed until the end of the battle. Doesn't matter in the long run.

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Like Vlad says there has to be a few changes.
I have nothing against the mark, to humans the marks appear random, so they can be pretty much anything. But the fact that your character could be possessed by so many is really an overkill. We talked about this, and I was expecting just one demon, which is alright. But the whole demon lord-thing is just too much, Lilith would definitely be one of those demons with the power to kill with a thought.
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I am really sorry about the wall of Text. I just sort of get going on a topic I like and I don't really stop. Sorry. I fixed it up a bit so that the Text doesn't look so horrendous. And I removed the demon lord thing.

The black eyes aren't Susanna's mark, they appear when Lilith's power is being exerted. I am really sorry I wrote this at like three in the morning and a couple of different things that I didn't explain very well have come together to form one conclusion that I never meant.

The mark on her neck meaning first one, it's not meant to mean that she is housing the first demon. It's a demonic symbol like say if I was wearing a cross you wouldn't assume I'm Christ. It's the same thing. It's just suppose to be a mark that holds great power, significance and in many communities fear. It's not meant to say that Lilith was the first.

I changed the thousand demons thing. When I first wrote it I meant it to be an exaggeration. That's how much it hurt it felt like she had a thousand inside her but then I was tired and... now I'm rambling and making excuses, really sorry. It was more like she had several demons that surged through her and left in moments and Lilith was the only one that took a liking to Susanna as a host but to Susanna it felt like many many years.

I'm not really sure what you mean by god modding. Sure Susanna has a lot of power but she can't control it and it's far more likely if she uses it to hurt everyone except her target. Most of the other characters have that kind of power but none of them know how to use it so I just thought I'd set her limit high but her achievement low. It's suppose to be a journey.

Why is Lilith insane? Lilith is the name of a Mesopotamian Storm demon that caused death, disease and illness so I'm not really following. If you could clarify I'd really appreciate it. If it's that big a deal I can change the name. You're right she probably shouldn't be a demon lord.

Why shouldn't she be able to talk to Lilith, or more like Lilith is talking to her. When possessed she can be heard when Lilith allows it because the demon enjoys her suffering. Then once Lilith is sealed she is the one who talks to Susanna and can hear Susanna's voice. Susanna doesn't have the power to converse with demons but the demon has the power to converse with humans. Though if they share the same body I'm still not sure why they couldn't talk?
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Sorry to double post.

I looked into it further and I realized that you must all think I'm talking about the Judeo-Christian Lilith. The first wife of Adam and mother of the Succubi and Incubi. She is an incredibly powerful demon that not even I would try to put under a leash in a story.

I am really sorry that was not the Lilith I was talking about. We were doing a unit on Mesopotamia in History class and I just really like the name. I can change it if necessary.
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Well, Halvtand and I appreciate your post edit, and your apology. We weren't trying to make you feel bad, we were merely pointing out some things we were concerned about. I know I come off as an asshole, though I don't try to. Good work editing everything, and I'm sorry for misunderstanding fully what you meant. Besides that, it's a very great post/character and I'm looking forward to reading your future posts. Though for me, I'm just getting back into roleplaying, so for right now when you do your IC posts, if you could keep them to about half of what your Character's Biography is, that'd help me out a lot. I'm pretty stressed and under a huge work load, so the less time I have to spend reading and posting, the better.

Anyway, we have enough people for this to continue. Everyone enjoy our world ;)

~ Vlad and Halv

As for Lilith, I did think you meant the all powerful head bitch of demons, so I thought it was kind of god modding. Once again I'm sorry for the misunderstanding.
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Also, one more thing. I see a lot of people following the whole 'Demon Inside' kind of thing. The Mark of the Demon was left because our characters had some sort of reaction to the Invasion. I'm not saying you can't have a demon inside your character, I'm just saying that not everyone is possessed or has a demon inside. The road Halvie and I were going down was that the Marks went to the people who knew a lot about the world, along with going through incredibly horrible experiences, and on top of that, were not mentally stable and had extremely violent tendencies. There's already two people possessed, so I think that's good enough for now. If anything, it makes for a great plot twist later on. I just wanted to clear up that having the mark didn't make your character possessed :)

Anyway, GREAT POSTING SO FAR. Halvie and I have looked over them many times, and everyone here looks pretty damn promising with their writing ability. Sorry for the double post.
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(Sorry for TRIPLE posting...)

Just as a heads-up, Halv and I will be introducing the Demons, the Demon Hunters / Warriors (Whatever you feel like calling them), some back story on our world, and our characters all in one post. So if you could refrain from having your characters interact with mine for the time being, it would be appreciated.
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Well, in Nianxi's case, it's not a demon inside thing, not much really. The demon attack damaged her soul itself, taking away her ability to use magic, and creating a schism in her personality. Xiandra is the demonic version of Nianxi's repressed personality. Since they share the same body, neither of them is stronger than one another, they do, however, have different fighting styles.
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I know, I was just clarifying on some of the story and whatnot.
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A really nice post. What would be a nice addition, however, that Seth would have some kind of knowledge about the 6 Great Houses of Veiron and their relic weapons. Maybe something along the lines of "Those fools with their fancy weapons did nothing!"
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I like the way you think. I'll edit something in.
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Speaking of which, I've sent you a new PM Halvtand.
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Sorry guys but I'm going to drop out, this writing is beyon my skill level. Sorry.
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Yours is not bad in any shape or form, don't worry. Just because others are good at describing the environment, it doesn't mean everyone is!
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Dude, there's no shame in dropping out but before you do just think about why you're doing it.

I think I can speak for everyone when I say that we don't have a problem with the way you write. Some of us might write longer posts than you but that doesn't matter. You have a good solid character and you're writing is clear.

If you insist that we're writing better than you maybe that's a good thing. After all when a novice blacksmith wants to improve his craft he seeks out a master not another apprentice. (Not saying any of us are masters at this, it just a metaphor.) If you think we're better than you just keep going with us and you style is bound to improve.

Just because your posts might not be as long as some of the others doesn't make one better than the other. Everyone role plays differently and everyone writes differently. Your posts don't have to be as long as my arm like Seth was to be good, just write what comes and we'll work with it.

If you want to drop out go ahead but make sure that it's for the right reasons.

Also I'm having trouble remembering everyone's usernames. Would it be possible for us to give eachother a name to call them. It doesn't have to a real name.

For instance, I'm Quinn.
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Vlad.
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Also, is it already my turn to post again? O.o
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