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Let the bloodbath commence!
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Also, @Nightrunner@Skepic I couldn't choose between you. I had too hard of a time.

So I decided the internet could help.



So i'm just going to go with that. I figure it's not a huge deal as Nightrunner said he was okay with it this way, but I do feel sort of bad about it. So Skepic, i'll get in contact with you about stuff, and Nightrunner, if you ever want to GM a game, or ever want some experience in it, hit me up and i'll be glad to help you out and give you some pointers and such.
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Almighty, got my post up :D
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Cool cool.

Could it be possible that someone (doesn't necessarily need to be NewSun, but it might be nice to have this in the OP) catalog a list of who is in what conflict zone, at least starting out?
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@OneEyedChurro

Already one step ahead, in a way.

Every player has forces in every conflict zone so that we can all respond to events and interact without restriction, but I am listing all current events in each conflict zone hider in the OP. If whenever you make a post and you want something specific added to the list of current events, just PM me your own synopsis.
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Posted! A quick note on that Agent 437 stuff:

It's not uncommon to say the least for the Empire to appear out nowhere and have the ground below them toxic before anyone can blink. Agent 437 is the more commonly used chemical warfare that is highly corrosive. If the enemy is not totally protected, i.e. wearing full body suits and sealed helmets with high resistant filters, they usually die a horrible death of chocking on their own bile as the chemical burns its way through the skin and into the bloodstream. This was specifically launched on the a particular area of the outskirts. Feel free to gauge who or what was out there to actually get hit and whether or not they survived it or not.

Also, Empire forces are now in the air near the city, feel free to engage in creating cinematic puffs of flack and smoke trails from missiles as they arrive! XD
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Right, hope y'all aren't to harsh on my factions NS, they're a mobile "policing force" trying to restore peace to Anuria, haven't finished it, & have not written a lot of details like the empress thinking of committing additional resources / military forces to the forces already present on the planet etc... basically a lot of stuff is either bare-bones or not done yet.

Right so lemme know what you're thoughts are reading over it. :)

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Species Name
Homo-Sapiens (Humans)

Species Description
Humans are distributed across the universe and form a very variable species. In adults, average weight varies from around 40 kilos for the smallest and most lightly built tropical wolders to around 80 kilos for the heavier arctic worlders to around 120 kilos for the heavy gravity worlders size also varies between the sexes. The coloration of skin, hair and eyes also varies considerably, with darker pigmentation domination in warmer/tropical climates and lighter in colder/arctic climates.

Arkadians are the continued evolution of the human species having achieved impressive advancements in science, gene-advancement, & general medical advancement 'Arkadian Humans' physically age slower than their predecessors and the average life span is three-times longer in comparison as well, However such things as telepathy, mind-control, & psychic abilities remain firmly within the realms of science fiction.

Humans are uniquely adept at utilizing systems of symbolic communication such as language and art for self-expression, the exchange of ideas, and organization. Humans create complex social structures composed of many cooperating and competing groups, from families and kinship networks to states. Social interactions between humans have established an extremely wide variety of values, social norms, and rituals, which together form the basis of human society. The human desire to understand and influence their environment, and explain and manipulate phenomena, has been the foundation for their development of science, philosophy, mythology, and religion to date.

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Nation Name
Republic of Arkadia - Arkadians

Nation Size
The Arkadian Republic holds ten systems, forty-two owned & populated worlds, two "world class" Space stations (massive space stations which are more or less regarded as small artificial worlds which act as industrial, trade, logistics & naval centers between the planets & the capital world) numerous military bases, outposts & space stations are scattered through-out the republics territory. Their total population is estimated to be roughly around seventy-five billion. (Exact population counts are difficult to pinpoint due to the numerous, worlders, spacers, Traders (i.e. migrating space trade-caravans & the families living on the ships) & travelers constantly changing & moving through-out their territory, yet unregistered births/deaths, then also taking into account any new members to republic & refugees seeking a safe haven from the ongoing conflicts elsewhere).

Nation Description
Although Arkadia is a rising democratic republic the majority of power still resides within the hands of the founding Imperial family & the Holy Empress herself, all military forces swear allegiance not to the republic but to the ruling emperor or empress currently on the throne. The senate & its representatives oversee the everyday goings on & double as advisers to the ruling Empress they hold many positions of office and are all freely elected by the people of their respective territories & planets, with the exception of eight of the ten high lord seats within the senate. The ten high lords seats are directly below the throne symbolizing their position & authority over the rest of the senate the two free seats that people can elect someone to hold them are the Seat of the divine (chosen religious leader - which rarely changes & often only in the event of the previous holder passing away), & the Seat of commerce (overall trade & economy official - tends to change regularly on three year averages though often not popular there have been a few holders of this seat the people have respected holding it.)

The republic is a fast growing economic powerhouse its ever expanding trade companies, trade routes, stock-markets, consumer driven supply & demand regulated pricing of goods & free open-markets are slowly becoming the envy of other powers so much so many foreign trading companies have joined in various ventures with Arkadian companies preferring their markets, financial safeguards, & regulations, which in turn have slowly began to weaken the economy of outsiders who have refused to join & work under the regulations of the FTA "Free Trade Alliance" which is the overruling authority managing the domestic & foreign trade networks, logistics, supply & demand regulated fair market pricing & the many trade companies associated with the republic. The republic has many planets abundant with practically untapped resources at their disposal, their agriculture, industry, science, & military are all equally booming & ever growing and expanding as-well as their trade & information networks are, The republic is rapidly making itself known to the universe as a power to be reckoned with.

Ultimately the Arkadian republic is a free, peaceful & content nation ruled by a benevolent Empress, in which the people have freedom of press, free health care, a government system where they freely have a vote to voice their opinions, and as such are fiercely loyal & steadfast in its continued perseverance & defense. However if the Emperor/Empress see's fit they can enact any immediate decisions to which the republic has to abide by though rarely done.

Nation Involvement
The Arkadians had actually been an early & comparatively peaceful diplomatic visitor to Anuria seeking to establish relations with the indigenous population on the planet & unlike other factions had no intention of colonizing the planet or bringing it & its people under their ownership by force. Instead they simply wished to set up several intergalactic commercial spaceports to boost the reach & volume of the republics foreign trade as (at least for the Arkadians position in the universe) would offer them a central trade route which would connect them to the ancient cradle of humanity the Sol system as well as open other trade routes with many other factions otherwise outside of the republics current reach. Not a bad deal for the indigenous people of Anuria either as the otherwise unremarkable planet would become a central trade-hub, tourist hotspot (holiday location for its scenery), & a valued historical site all of which would only bring abundant wealth & prosperity to them. The only halfway selfish thing the Arkadians asked was the right to establish a military outpost or space station for their military & fleets to resupply & operate from, but even this was mainly for a position to provide policing & security for the trade routes which would be established even further elevating dangers for the locals. The people of Anuria where greatly supportive of the proposition as well as being allowed their own independence over the planet, so much so that there were apparently whispers of some Anurians wishing for the planet to join the republic even though it was not asked of them, However both the trade proposition, & the "whispers" were met & clashed with the diplomatic interests of the already present NSNV attache on the planet, which also had no interest in seeing their economy through foreign-trade weakened further than it was already by the Arkadians, as if the trade proposition was accepted it would of allowed the Arkadians to dramatically extend their economic reach & influence, resulting in a severe impact on the NSNV markets & economy, there where several other factions who's interests & similar worries resulted in them joining the NSNV in blocking the Arkadians proposals dead in the water or at least mostly, the Arkadians influence was stifled by the other powers their propositions tied up & blocked in negotiations however as security was a growing concern in the political climate on the planet the Arkadians where granted one request, they had permission to construct an orbital space station for future policing efforts, which had been undertaken almost immediately as if the ships & resources to build it had been waiting in advance (The speed of which caught the eye & concern of the other factions at the time) the basic framework, power-facilities, docks, basic housing & facilities had been finished just prior to the current conflict igniting.



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Common Armaments
Describe the weaponry that your soldiers are known to carry. Tell us a little about the kind of things that your faction uses regularly on the battlefield.

Headquarters
A Heavily fortified & dug in military base / spaceport in the north-western are of the arctic northlands, the Arkadian forced having been forced back in the wars opening fell back & held their position using the terrain & weather to their advantage prior to securing their position, the underground has essentially evolved into a massive base & city housing many of the fleeing refugees seeking their protection from the chaos & is quickly becoming know as one of the largest & one if not the only city on the planet not damaged by the war. (Bare-bones - to be ironed out)

Persons of Importance
Detail important people in your nation. This is an almost purely contextual field. You will NOT be controlling these characters under any circumstance. They are merely for your expendable cast to reference and aspire to (or deify).
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Already one step ahead, in a way.

Every player has forces in every conflict zone so that we can all respond to events and interact without restriction, but I am listing all current events in each conflict zone hider in the OP. If whenever you make a post and you want something specific added to the list of current events, just PM me your own synopsis.


Oh, alright. That's way better.

And after reading the first batch of posts I can already tell this is gonna be epic, not that there was much doubt in the first place.
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Haha, my unguon tank group Is really in for it now... Fighting native humans now, something fun planned with the eym for my next post and now imperial forces!

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I'm starting my post now, will probably have it up by nine-ish.

Also @WanderingRebel, I think your faction is a bit overpowered to be honest. You've basically stated (multiple times) throughout your sheet that your faction is the best at pretty much everything. Best navy, best science, best economy, etc. Now obviously I'm not a GM, but I think it would be considerate of you to tone your faction down a bit. Of course, if the GMs disagree, then totally disregard this. I'm not trying to bash you, as I find your faction rather interesting, but it's honestly a bit frustrating for myself and others to base their nations around trying to be mindful of the other roleplayers and then have someone come out and create an invincible superpower. I would like to politely remind you that this roleplay's goal is not to be "won", perhaps like other NRPs, but to create some really unique and entertaining stories.
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I agree with VoiD
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@WanderingRebel

Alright, now, let me jump to the end of my assessment of your NS so far: I quite enjoyed reading your NS and think its a great idea. An American esq space empire that attempts to be a intergalactic police force as a way to re-brand the word "Conquest" into something more friendly sounding. ITs cool, a great idea. Genuinely good intentions causing complications that lead to your nation essentially annexing a chunk of the planet! I also like the amount of detail you went into with everything.

Now, there are some very serious flaws though. For one, particularly your nation's involvement, you need to rework it in its entirety. This is mainly due to the fact that, on the face of it, you didn't seem to perhaps communicate with your fellow RPers. I think your NS could be a lot better if you actually collaborate with others as it seems you want your nation to be heavily involved, as its been there for the get go. Your involvement describes how your space nation practically took over half a continent and is currently shackled up next to our Maltheciens in the north. The Also, there is a lot of presumed history about Anuria that I think you should have at least run by the GM to see if it fits with the idea he/she had in his head. If it is fine, then by all means, great!

There are things about the NS, seemingly small things, that make a world of difference in NRPs across the board, not just here. Always try to avoid putting sentences or paragraphs that directly characterize your nation to have the best at whatever. Saying things like "Their navy is the strongest most advanced, Largest, best trained, best outfitted, best supplied, Naval force in the known universe," will just initially piss a lot of people off. In any NRP, including this one, your nation will earn that title through the actual RP, not be given to predestine.

Finally, your NS lacks any real... color? Sorry, this may seem really cocky or rude even, for which I have no intention, its just hard to put it any other way. Everything reads to be too sterile, too happy. Of course, I'm not saying that every NS in this RP has to be all about suffering, or corrupt dictatorships, ect. What I'm saying is your nation feels way too perfect, and if that's on purpose to imply that things are actually not all peachy, then it was lost to me.

Anyway, pardon my long post on the matter. Please do not feel shunned or like I'm pushing you away, I am simply trying to help you build an NS more suited for this sort of narrative driven NRP. Yours reads like it was meant for the larger nation building ones, which I do not blame you for. In the end, I guess what I'm trying to say is that about 90% of all of anyone's NS is really there for fluff. A background/origin for your true on the ground or flying through space characters to come from. A little context for why you're here.
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Oh, and sorry if the post is a bit wonkey. Currently on a tablet and I don't do well with touch screen type boards. XD
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Agreed Skepic.

Also, sorry my IC is taking so long. While writing it I've had a ton of new ideas and I've been reworking a bunch of things, including creating an entirely new ranking system from scratch along with some lingo. I'm having a blast and I haven't even posted yet, haha.
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I'm out of town right now. I'll be a few days.
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*staggers wildly like being shot at by multiple gunmen* Ouch... :p

Yea, kinda shy on the communicating front, it's a rl issue too, i do try to contact through private messages at times though, and yea totally had no idea who i was near or next to space-wise couldn't see any info detailing anything like that, also about the presuming history & checking with gm i'm going to chawk that up to my lack of judgement & writing Ns for review my bad... i guess.

And skepic thanks for noting & liking the re-brand of conquest to a friendlier term, the idea behind their overly friendly too good to be true deals & since the war starting etc, the background idea was my faction investing in the "long game" winning over the populous while aiding & arming them with the end goal in mind if they won, the planet would willingly join into the republic for security not just allowing them trade route access but expansion of their "non-aggressive" boarders so as not to incur the direct wrath (war dec) of another faction seeing them as an aggressive expansionist force getting to powerful & so fourth.

Now guy's im sorry, i wasn't meaning to come off as overpowered or proclaiming they actually have the best of everything, which after reading ppl's comments & looking back over i can see i haven't written or presented it right?... I was trying to describe it like it's the Arkadians self-targeted propaganda "their navy is ready for anything, the dutiful common solider is heavily trained to deal with any threat to the people!" etc, their heavy focus on superior massive space fleets was meant to be a hint that they don't want to risk ground combat on their home planets or a full-blown war in general due to their overly "defensive nature" given their tech & size. also meant to hint that while well equipped & trained (fairly short numerically in comparison to others troops - at least in Anuria forces deployment) in they've had little actual combat experience / war experience as having mostly dealt with rouge criminal/pirate organizations which simply doesn't compare on scale of the severity of it. So i am sorry as being 'overly op' was not the intent.

Also again @ Skepic "lacking color" With the Veiled examples that the imperial family (risen to power in their "unification wars") still practically holds the power reins over everything, while outwardly they're viewed as a peaceful and industrial republic of the people. And i haven't finished the Ns yet, I was intending to add that several of the more recent planets & people that got amalgamated into the republic (along with what i said about "the empress thinking of committing additional resources") while being treated as second class citizens where launching anti-war or anti-republic protests, while the recent "drafts" for the increased investment in the policing action where being focused on these planets. The republic wanting them to pull their weight & be productive members proving themselves by serving while the protests get violent & law enforcement has to suppress them, causing rumors & upset for the troops. And write more hints at the republics news agencies being regulated by the state on what they can report always placing the republic in the "good" light to help keep its citizens happy knowing they're always doing the right thing & be proud of their government, etc...

But thanks for the feedback guys!, although admittedly i am feeling a little down from whats been said & all... again sorry for any misunderstandings & such. L8r'z
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Hey hey, just going to pipe in from my phone at work. I will note at the moment that I have not had the time to completely read through your NS, @WanderingRebel, but I will offer what I have on the subject.

While in general I agreed with Skepic and the others' evaluation of the sheet regarding the flaws, I find myself a somewhat lenient God in this situation because deep down I know that we're all going to have our forces horribly murdered, regardless. Now of course it is bad form to explicitly say that any force in an NRP is the best in any aspect, I can appreciate the miscommunication is presented writing style for the application. I too have fallen into the trap of attempting to write a NS as a propaganda piece in the past and it is a truly difficult thing to do, especially without appopriate graphics and such, and as a result I would warn away from that style this time.

I think what we failed to address isthe fact that your sheet is actually [i]really, really[\i] cool, so bear that in mind. At the end of the day it just needs some reworking in specific places to make their power a little more ambiguous. There are no strongest nations in this universe or the conflict would have been over long ago.

Anyway, that's my input, I'll continue when I finish the sheet when I get out of this hellish work I hole.
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Working on my next post. At the end of it, ill react to skepics doods moving in
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Fantastic, i'll get to a response to Sigma soon.

And a note to all, i've moved the Current Events to a titanpad linked in the OP. This is so that both Skepic and I can edit it with new information as it happens. Feel free to check it out as often as you need to keep up to date with the most recent events on Anuria, but I would ask that you refrain from editing it directly without the consent of Skepic or I. MUCHO GRAÇIAS, team Anuria!
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So what is the status on the natives? Not that I want to rush or anything, just wanted to know.
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