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@NarcissisticPotato
I don't see where the addiction to the change comes into your idea. It's a cool idea, but the parasite seems like a completely different entity.

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Her hair can change colour if you want it that way. But both ideas are fine with me.
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@my Lalia I have completed my character sheet (excluding the 'opinions' section.) I was wondering if you could give me your insight on how I may make it better? :)
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@NarcissisticPotato
I don't see where the addiction to the change comes into your idea. It's a cool idea, but the parasite seems like a completely different entity.

@Obscene Symphony

Her hair can change colour if you want it that way. But both ideas are fine with me.


I'm just having trouble deciding, that's all. I think I'll go with the latter, though - maybe have her feathers/hair change colour throughout the RP as some sort of symbolism blah blah blah eh?

With that, my character will be up momentarily.
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@NarcissisticPotato
I don't see where the addiction to the change comes into your idea. It's a cool idea, but the parasite seems like a completely different entity.


That's ok! I think I'm going to go with some sort of shadow-type monster. The parasite was a decent idea but I didn't really know how to make the addiction work with it! Is it ok for the monster to share the same physical appearance as the character?
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@my Lalia I have completed my character sheet (excluding the 'opinions' section.) I was wondering if you could give me your insight on how I may make it better? :)


Apologies for the double post, but would you mind if I made a suggestion? If you DO mind, feel free to ignore me.

Firstly, I'd make her older, at least 20, but that's more of an 'ick' factor creeping up on me after reading her background. Not really a flaw, more of a personal preference, haha.
I'd also say maybe try and find a different way that she got into Nixus' hands? Perhaps she was on one of her 'appointments' and was brought to the ball by a noble as arm candy? Seems a tad more plausible to me, that's all.

I really do like her though, I think she'll be an interesting addition, perhaps a charge of one or more of the other characters. The 'baby of the family' so to speak.

Ugh, I hate critiquing, I always feel like I'm being an ass.

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That's ok! I think I'm going to go with some sort of shadow-type monster. The parasite was a decent idea but I didn't really know how to make the addiction work with it! Is it ok for the monster to share the same physical appearance as the character?


I'm really quite psyched to see what you come up with, comrade.
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@Vee

It looks good to me, other than is there a way to bring serious damage to her? Like for Mariah is cold and Gwendolyn is gold
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@NarcissisticPotato
Yes that is fine

@Vee

You can also make the changes that Obscene Symphony has made, up to you.
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I hurt one of my wrists, so I'm not sure if I'll be able to get my backstory done for a couple of days.
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It seems that there's quite a few females... does it particularly matter if there's such a gender imbalance because my character can work both ways?
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It seems that there's quite a few females... does it particularly matter if there's such a gender imbalance because my character can work both ways?


We could justify it on the side of Nixus being creepy?
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We could justify it on the side of Nixus being creepy?


Yeah, I was gonna say, Nixus only wants women, or guys who could pass off as women.
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Lmao

It doesn't matter about gender balance since some of the girls are bi or homo

EDIT; and yes Lord Nixus is a bit of a creepy perv
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Lmao

It doesn't matter about gender balance since some of the girls are bi or homo

EDIT; and yes Lord Nixus is a bit of a creepy perv


He brands people and puts them in cages; we were all pretty much getting the creepy perv vibe off him!
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@The Omnipotent Sphere

That's okay just type it up whenever you feel you can :)
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Voila! I'll probably be messing with her, but thar she blows.
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Yeah, I was gonna say, Nixus only wants women, or guys who could pass off as women.


Just to screw that up, I'm now considering making my character the most ultra-mega-super-manly man I can.

Alright, but seriously I have no idea what sort of character I'm making yet. I'm thinking of a sort shadowy, invisible-man type character.
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@Hael

Haha be careful, Lord Nixus likes to break people........
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Haha be careful, Lord Nixus likes to break people........


This'll be an ordeal for Linta, I can feel it!

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Here's mine so far, let me know if there's anything you'd like me to change or fix! :D



Doesn’t look bad but could you expand on his past?
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@Obscene Symphony

You have no idea...... The Drakkens in my other rp have nothing on Lord Nixus ...... *evil smile*
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