[OOC] Darkness Within (A Dark themed rp)

[my Lalia]

@NarcissisticPotato
I don't see where the addiction to the change comes into your idea. It's a cool idea, but the parasite seems like a completely different entity.

@Obscene Symphony

Her hair can change colour if you want it that way. But both ideas are fine with me.

[Vee]

@my Lalia I have completed my character sheet (excluding the 'opinions' section.) I was wondering if you could give me your insight on how I may make it better? :)

[Obscene Symphony]

@NarcissisticPotato
I don't see where the addiction to the change comes into your idea. It's a cool idea, but the parasite seems like a completely different entity.

@Obscene Symphony

Her hair can change colour if you want it that way. But both ideas are fine with me.

@my Lalia

I'm just having trouble deciding, that's all. I think I'll go with the latter, though - maybe have her feathers/hair change colour throughout the RP as some sort of symbolism blah blah blah eh?

With that, my character will be up momentarily.

[NarcissisticPotato]

@NarcissisticPotato
I don't see where the addiction to the change comes into your idea. It's a cool idea, but the parasite seems like a completely different entity.

@my Lalia

That's ok! I think I'm going to go with some sort of shadow-type monster. The parasite was a decent idea but I didn't really know how to make the addiction work with it! Is it ok for the monster to share the same physical appearance as the character?

[Obscene Symphony]

@my Lalia I have completed my character sheet (excluding the 'opinions' section.) I was wondering if you could give me your insight on how I may make it better? :)

@Vee

Apologies for the double post, but would you mind if I made a suggestion? If you DO mind, feel free to ignore me.

Firstly, I'd make her older, at least 20, but that's more of an 'ick' factor creeping up on me after reading her background. Not really a flaw, more of a personal preference, haha.
I'd also say maybe try and find a different way that she got into Nixus' hands? Perhaps she was on one of her 'appointments' and was brought to the ball by a noble as arm candy? Seems a tad more plausible to me, that's all.

I really do like her though, I think she'll be an interesting addition, perhaps a charge of one or more of the other characters. The 'baby of the family' so to speak.

Ugh, I hate critiquing, I always feel like I'm being an ass.

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That's ok! I think I'm going to go with some sort of shadow-type monster. The parasite was a decent idea but I didn't really know how to make the addiction work with it! Is it ok for the monster to share the same physical appearance as the character?

@NarcissisticPotato

I'm really quite psyched to see what you come up with, comrade.

[my Lalia]

@Vee

It looks good to me, other than is there a way to bring serious damage to her? Like for Mariah is cold and Gwendolyn is gold

[my Lalia]

@NarcissisticPotato
Yes that is fine

@Vee

You can also make the changes that Obscene Symphony has made, up to you.

[The Omnipotent Sphere]

I hurt one of my wrists, so I'm not sure if I'll be able to get my backstory done for a couple of days.

[NarcissisticPotato]

It seems that there's quite a few females... does it particularly matter if there's such a gender imbalance because my character can work both ways?

[Obscene Symphony]

It seems that there's quite a few females... does it particularly matter if there's such a gender imbalance because my character can work both ways?

@NarcissisticPotato

We could justify it on the side of Nixus being creepy?

[Vahir]

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We could justify it on the side of Nixus being creepy?

@Obscene Symphony

Yeah, I was gonna say, Nixus only wants women, or guys who could pass off as women.

[my Lalia]

Lmao

It doesn't matter about gender balance since some of the girls are bi or homo

EDIT; and yes Lord Nixus is a bit of a creepy perv

[NarcissisticPotato]

Lmao

It doesn't matter about gender balance since some of the girls are bi or homo

EDIT; and yes Lord Nixus is a bit of a creepy perv

@my Lalia

He brands people and puts them in cages; we were all pretty much getting the creepy perv vibe off him!

[my Lalia]

@The Omnipotent Sphere

That's okay just type it up whenever you feel you can :)

[Obscene Symphony]

Voila! I'll probably be messing with her, but thar she blows.

[Hael]

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Yeah, I was gonna say, Nixus only wants women, or guys who could pass off as women.

@Vahir

Just to screw that up, I'm now considering making my character the most ultra-mega-super-manly man I can.

Alright, but seriously I have no idea what sort of character I'm making yet. I'm thinking of a sort shadowy, invisible-man type character.

[my Lalia]

@Hael

Haha be careful, Lord Nixus likes to break people........

[Obscene Symphony]

@Hael

Haha be careful, Lord Nixus likes to break people........

@my Lalia

This'll be an ordeal for Linta, I can feel it!

[my Lalia]

Here's mine so far, let me know if there's anything you'd like me to change or fix! :D

My Hider

Treant

Generic Information

Name: Goram Dorr
Gender: Male
Age: 26
Height: 6'2"
Sexuality: Heterosexual

Psych Profile

Traits

• Gentle - A man of gentle heart, Goram always shows does his best to show compassion to those around him, whether they are deserving of it or not.
• Cool Headed - Goram has always been a calm man, unable to be provoked easily. When he does become angry, however...
• Patient - Tying in with his inability to be angered, Goram is one of the most patient individuals in existence.
• Treant Strength - Goram is incredibly sturdy and strong, capable of lifting and breaking apart large objects with ease.

Flaws

• Slow - Though nobody would question his intelligence, Goram can sometimes take longer to come to certain conclusions than others.
• Unable to Identify Danger - Due to his gentle nature, Goram will rarely see a situation as dire or inherently dangerous towards himself and/or others.
• Afraid of Machines - Living near machines his entire childhood, Goram developed an inherent fear of machinery and it's workings.
• Afraid of Fire - Owing to his transformation into a monster, he has developed an inbuilt fear of fire. Wood burns, after all.

Backstory: The son of a wealthy and established blacksmith of the noble class, Goram was born into the life of metal working and the building of machine components. However, as a young boy Goram was always more fascinated with the outside world. Unfortunately, due to inheriting his father's "smithy" build, namely the tall height and expansive muscular torso, Goram was forced to work the forge, helping to build the very machines he could not stand. After his father passed away due to a smithing accident, Goram begrudgingly inherited his titles and workshop, unable to take the freedom he so desired.

Character Motivation: Wishing only to be rid of his title as Master Blacksmith, Goram seeks to escape and find freedom. Going to the Lord Nixus' party was his chance to sell his workshop and be free of smithing, but that didn't go to plan.

Opinion Of Others: (What does your character think of the other characters in the rp?)

Other:

@LoneSparrow

Doesn’t look bad but could you expand on his past?

[my Lalia]

@Obscene Symphony

You have no idea...... The Drakkens in my other rp have nothing on Lord Nixus ...... *evil smile*