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@Monochromatic Rainbow You're the half mad gun toting russian resident. Half mad with guns, that is. We have much love for you.
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@Aeonumbra

Only half mad?

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tl;dr: Aeon saying things meaning he likes your character.


thnks bb

But you did forget my other main question.
yah gahbage. New question though, any limitations for the bestiary? I might have a few ideas to toss into the pot. (inb4 mirelurk, yao guai, radroach)
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Cazadors, Deathclaws, Wanamingos, Super Mutants, The Master, Fred Phelps.
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SirBeowulf What a load of Donk.

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@SirBeowulf

Cazadors, Deathclaws, Wanamingos, Super Mutants, The Master, Fred Phelps.




"These horrifying machinations of flesh lurk the wastes, preying on all those they come across. Beware, traveler. Don't waste any bullet with these bastards."
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Just so long as you don't smoke cigarettes or hang out with bundles of sticks, god hates those for some reason.
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Alright, took more refining than I thought but I believe my character sheet is presentable now. I am aware that in my backstory my character does become awakened yet there is no extended part on that. In thread reason is that it only happened once and when it was done Roland was unconscious until it was over and hasn't used it since. In actuality it's due to me having further questions about what is/isn't allowed for the Awakened form and not wanting it to be misconstrued as me procrastinating posting my sheet.

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I made a creature thing.

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SirBeowulf What a load of Donk.

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I also made a creature thingy.

THEY BLEW IT UUUUUUUUPP.
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@SirBeowulf GIve it a name haha, you don't need a profile until your character awakens. (The Spark. I mean)

Cool creatures guys, but Beowulf exactly what town do these apes occupy? "A rising problem for the town of Dresden, as they occupy an city full of important scavenge-able items." or are the apes trying to scavenge the city?

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Just thought I'd drop by and say 'yeah fuck it I'm in.'

I'll have a sheet toot sweet.
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@Arcanaut I have to go to work like, right now. I will read your cs when I get home.\

@Shotgun Bear Fuck yea! I'm awaiting. Welcome to the wasteland.
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SirBeowulf What a load of Donk.

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@SirBeowulf GIve it a name haha, you don't need a profile until your character awakens. (The Spark. I mean)

Cool creatures guys, but Beowulf exactly what town do these apes occupy? "A rising problem for the town of Dresden, as they occupy an city full of important scavenge-able items." or are the apes trying to scavenge the city?


What I meant by that is that the apes have a colony in a pre-fall city. They occupy it, preventing people from entering the city to look for scavenge-able items and important metal and scrap.
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@SirBeowulf Re-thinking this, the apes are a little too humanoid, making them a faction: And a blatant rip-off, not to be rude. (I Am abrasive). Can I mulligen your creature for a fresh idea?
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SirBeowulf What a load of Donk.

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Blatant rip-offs are my specialty.

And yeah, you can do with them what you will. They were mostly a bored idea. I gave the Spark a name by the way, is Euphie/Euphonos a good name? Euphie being a nickname, of course.
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  • Please add description of eyes (A static image conveys a static idea, whereas perhaps there are moving specks?) You can keep the picture.
  • Reference pictures, while useful, are not as telling as a written description. (Appearance) You can keep the pictures, within hiders: Though do not use hiders for the written portion, please.
  • Aligned Faction: "Considered enemy of The Forsaken as well as those against the Forsaken" is.. a tad confusing, is an enemy to all?
  • Backstory: " It was at this point Roland's abilities revealed themselves sending him across the field ", what abilities? I don't remember reading how, or when, he joined with a spark.
  • Backstory:I don't understand why there would be no evidence of the bodies, blood, or anything, but they leave your character their because.. why? Convenience, purely.
  • Backstory: "by crows and burned by the endless sun that Roland met his spark" Oh, there's that spark joining. Did you bother reading the lore I wrote? Actually, there's more lore errors than just the super powers without the spark. The character can't awake without a spark, as it is a manifestation of the spark. Uriel cannot "help" him remove himself from the cross, as the phenomena is gained by the joining, meaning the Spark has no prior knowledge of it, nor can Uriel take over his mind and do it for him, as the Spark can only take over during the awakened state. I suggest you read, or reread the lore, and redraft your backstory.
  • Backstory: I'm really glad he was found by these doctors dudes who had the equipment necessary to perform microscopic surgery on his intestines, and treat the infections ensuing from wounds like that. Also, Blood loss in this case is still going to be very severe - nearly all the abdominal organs are pretty amply supplied with arterial blood. It's a bit hard to work out precisely, but the combined cross-sectional area of the arteries supplying the liver, kidneys and intestines appears to be about equivalent to that of a femoral artery. Meaning he would bleed to death in a couple a minutes at best, not even factoring in his crucifixion wounds, probable dehydration, and it's popularized that crows would go for the softer tissues first, his open wounds, his disemboweled midsection, and his eyes and tongue. I see absolutely no possible way this character is alive-- In fact he should have died about four times now.
  • Armor: The armor he posses is accurately portrayed in the picture ... but without telekinetic shielding he is considered without armor. What? Does he or doe he not have armor? (Telekinetic shielding is not armor.) Also, Picture referencing his armor.. should be moved to armor section.
  • Abilities: Long name is long: "Run so fast he becomes a blur" I agreed upon improved speed, but that's a bit drastic. Tone it down to like, twice as fast of a person sprinting?
  • Abilities: Gremlin: That is not what tuning is, it does not give him the clairvoyance to see inside the working object and manipulate it. He would have to actually know what he was doing.
  • Abilities: Rail Gun: This is tuning.
  • Abilities: Spy Moon Guy: Training as a spy? You mean Soulless? How exactly does one know to acquire important pieces of information... if they do not understand what they are looking at; other than common sense which really isn't a special ability now is it?
  • Abilities: Elegant Savage: Don't use specific situations as a fact. (This is really just a tip, not really a problem). Everything has a circumstance, that metaphorical room of people he could engage, they could all be immortals, or bears in disguise.
  • Abilities: Muh Honor: Just need clarification on the last sentence, when he does use his powers to incapacitated, or when he does not? The "not" doesn't seem like it fits.
  • Abilities: Muh Hands (:P): I will allow him to move small objects without much weight without tuning to them, and his longinus because of the familiarity of the weapon.
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@SirBeowulf Sir, that is a good name. I also don't feel that the blatantly rip-offed apes quite fit in my world. And for multiple other reasons, I hope you're no too sad at my denying them.

Also keep in mind that for the past three-four days I've had a total of 10 hours of sleep, or less, and I will be reevaluating your character sheet just to make sure I didn't gloss over something. No pressure though, I'm sure it's fine.
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How about my creature?

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@Arcanaut The creature is good, I like it, I will add it when I get a chance. Eating right now and gotta go do lifey stuff though. Also replace "Yellow Zones" with "Sandy Dunes".
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@Aeonumbra

My characters tend to be unapologetically vibrant.

Feel free to nail me for not matching the theme of gritty and brown.



Keep in mind that this is all pretty off-the-cuff, so feel free to pick out things you don't think'll fly.
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