Oh alright, I mean, real life comes first. I just wanted to know if anybody knew what was going on. @Aphelion I would, I just wanted to give Tatsua a chance to respond first, because my character had said something to hers. So it would be a little awkward if I posted something before she did, right?
Before I post an update to my character profile, I was wondering if anyone who has a more...dominant, leader-like character would be preexisting friends with MC, Mimiru. I'd like to keep her as the 'shy but kinda strong in battle' character, and to do that I'd basically have to alter her and make her a sort of follower, which I think would be easy enough.
Any one? Pretty please with sparkles and ribbon twirls?
Sorry for not posting, real life has been brutal for me and will stay like that until friday. Though my character seems to be the only one in the first year so nobody can really interact with her right now.
...actually, you know what? I'm just not gonna waste more time on this than I have already.
To everyone else present, I want you to know that you shouldn't worry about this happening to you. None of the other apps thus far have warranted the level of response that this one has. You're all wonderful and I hope we can have fun together~
Now then, let's address our newest applicant. My assistants aren't tyrannical enough to do this, so I'll be attending to this personally.
You know, here's a fun little fact about me. I have my deviant masochistic moments from time-to-time, but that's always something for the short-term. In the long-term, I'm a wholehearted sadist.
So then, let's play, shall we?
Find a towel to bite down on, you lecherous pig~
Review for Akemi:
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Okay, this is fine. In the age range, weeb name, good.
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Er..."normal look" is kind of a bad way of putting things. Try to make it flow better, you know? It's not a big deal, but it just sounds kinda infantile and-
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Um
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UM
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"Anime girl blue hair game cute"
MOVING ON
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Why do you not put spaces after commas?
Why do you format it like this?
Why do you do this to me?
Did I brutalize you?
What did I do?
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...alright. This...this merits some talking down to.
FIRST UP:
THIS IS NOT A PERSONALITY.
THIS IS A LAUNDRY LIST OF TRAITS, AND NOT EVEN A GOOD LAUNDRY LIST. IT IS TWO TRAITS.
TWO.
YOU ARE REDUCING A HUMAN BEING TO TWO TRAITS.
AND YOU KNOW WHAT? THAT'S FINE.
THAT'S NOT A PROBLEM IN ITSELF. HELL, MY CHARACTER IS ONE TRAIT: "LOVE".
THE PROBLEM IS THAT THOSE TRAITS ARE MORE TWO-DIMENSIONAL THAN THE WORDS I AM TYPING RIGHT FUCKING NOW.
ALSO "TOMBOY" IS ONE WORD.
YOU'RE NOT EVEN USING COMPLETE SENTENCES.
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Did you even read this?
That's a legitimate question. Did you?
If so, I don't know how you got to the conclusion that this was okay.
The DESCRIPTION ON WHAT SHOULD GO IN THE PERSONALITY SECTION IS AS LONG AS YOUR ENTIRE PERSONALITY SECTION.
You're not using punctuation. You're not using capitalization. You're not using anything.
I think you're not even trying to employ grammar by this point. I'm reminded of a time when I was five, and saw one of my classmates learning what a period was for the first time. He put a period after every word, ie "The.dog.went.to.the.park."
I honestly think what you have here is worse.
Also:
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Now, ordinarily, I'd assume this means "shopping for photos". I wasn't aware that was a hobby, but sure, okay, if you have weird hobbies that's cool. It adds some originality, as long as you justify it, explain what they like about it and things like that. The fact that you didn't do any of that just makes it trash, though.
However, seeing as you don't seem to understand English, I'm going to assume you actually meant "photoshop" in one word, as in Adobe Photoshop.
If that is the case, what the actual fuck?
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Oh.
You're one of those.
You're using.
Fucking.
First.
Person.
I'm not even going to explode about this.
I'm not going to mock it.
I just want you to know I am laughing at you.
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Good for him. At least he's making something of his life.
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Wow, what a fucking nerd.
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I'm going to stop talking about your lack of grasp on the English language. I want to finish this before the Sun finishes fusing hydrogen.
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Is this a game of fucking Mad Libs or something?
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"She's a tomboy but she spends her life on the computer I promise okay guys back off"
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If this is referring to you and not the character, I will honestly be impressed.
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Yeah, I spend too munch time on shitty RP sites.
I'm really wasting too munch time on this.
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Ah. I hate it when I'm sleeping and then accidentally throw my lunch. That's the worst. You have my condolences.
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...okay, pal, I'mma level with you.
Chuunibyou =/= what the fucking hell
You're just saying things.
"Accelitron" isn't even a word.
You used the word "induction" twice.
Why do you exist?
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Two exclamation marks.
No, no, that's fine.
I said it's fine.
No, I'm not mad.
IT'S FINE. I'M FINE.
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This isn't a sentence.
Why did you use it as a sentence?
Why did you capitalize "Brushing"?
Is it some sort of brand name?
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It hurts.
It hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts it hurts-
How high of an "out put" does this field have?
How big is the field?
Do you decide these things?
Can you even turn it off?
What the fuck are you doing?
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You don't get to decide that. I hate it when people give their characters relations to things outside of themselves, or make events that impact the lore or canon of the universe in their biographies, or any of this other trash you're doing. It's heavy-handed, it's contradictory, and it serves no point other than making your character a special snowflake. Stop doing it.
Besides, this trash doesn't even deserve a stalker. Also, no boys allowed.
Oh, you think we're done?
No, no, I'm reviewing your bio as well.
Yes, I am reviewing your profile's bio.
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I'm living right now. I've been doing it for a while.
I'm not changing the world, though. I'm making fun of a shit character on a roleplaying website.
Your edge isn't even well-sharpened.
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TRAAAAAAASH THROWN IIIIIIN A BIIIIIIIIIIN
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THIS GRAAAAAAMMAAAAR IIIIIIIS UNREAAAAAAAAAAL
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BY GOOOOOD YOU HAAAAAAAVE THE GAAAAAAAAAALL
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I THIIIIINK I'M GOOOOOOONNA KEEEEEELL
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Are you real, or are you yourself just a bad OC designed by some malefic deity that wants me to cry?
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I'm pretty sure that in just about every instance, you can be more evil by going around and kicking puppies while good dies.
Verdict: Here's the crux of it. If I ignore that you're using first person, ignore the flatness of your character, ignore the terrible writing quality, and ignore the utterly asinine power basis, then there's nothing.
If I ignore this profile's flaws and try to pretend they aren't there, I literally cannot conceptualize that without making your post utterly blank.
Failure is built into the essence of this character.
Denied with the twitch of the right eye, a half-hearted laugh, and the soft sound of crying as the lights dim.
You don't know me and I don't know you and by now you are probably sick of this but I couldn't care less. This is gold and I'll let you rub my stomach for it.
Before I post an update to my character profile, I was wondering if anyone who has a more...dominant, leader-like character would be preexisting friends with MC, Mimiru. I'd like to keep her as the 'shy but kinda strong in battle' character, and to do that I'd basically have to alter her and make her a sort of follower, which I think would be easy enough.
Any one? Pretty please with sparkles and ribbon twirls?
Alright, so I realize that 'slow' is an understatement for this RP at the moment.
There's not a whole lot I can do, considering Kiyoko's position and the fact that I'm the one who posted last, but I can still see about hassling Tatsua and Sonata on behalf of y'all. Meantime, just posting to check if everyone's still here/willing to roll with this.
And I guess if need be, I can make some NPC's to get things moving.
Well, as long as a gm such as you is around, and people are willing to keep going, I think we can do this. ^^ Whenever Tatsua and Sonata come back, all the better.
I can post tomorrow, but it'd be breaking the interaction I had with Natsu pretty abruptly. I can always say the teacher dragged her out of class and to the principals office or something.
Yeah, sorry guys,l I was actually gonna try to post something with Hikaru a few days ago, but I had some sucky deaths in the family, and that kinda threw everything into a tailspin. I just had the last funeral today, so I should be able to post tonight or tomorrow.
I'm very sorry to hear about that, Natsu. You have my condolences, and please, take as much time as you need. I'm sure nobody here would think any less of you for it.
Alright, quick plan to get us out of this hole. 1. I write a responce to what Hikaru did, and have them both sent out of class. 2. Then, becuase they're delinquent punks, they just skip out and head to the dojo, where they can meet up with the lovely spinster. That work with you guys?
Alright, quick plan to get us out of this hole. 1. I write a responce to what Hikaru did, and have them both sent out of class. 2. Then, becuase they're delinquent punks, they just skip out and head to the dojo, where they can meet up with the lovely spinster. That work with you guys?
Well, if I can retroactively approve things, you got the go-ahead. Catch up to Kiyoko and I'll see what I can do plot/character-wise.
I was away for a few days; managed to track Tatsua down, but she's still busy.
I guess I can get KiKi moving if people are still around and want to do things- could at least get her away from the Dojo and towards Akira and/or Hikaru? Or anyone else if someone else wants to get in on this.
