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Voting and Disccussion Thread


Voting Deadline is 31st August


This time we've got 11 entries to choose from, 11 great entries with a great selection of lies on display. If you've forgotten already, the voting criteria is whichever entry you consider to have the best lie regardless of overall quality. Doesn't matter if the story's good, if the lie is basically just 'I didn't steal the cookies from the cookie jar, Jesus came down from the heavens and said they were mine' then too bad, it can't have the vote >:D

1. If you didn't specify 'anonymous,' I won't have it anonymous. PM me if that needs to be changed.

2. We've broken out the poetry entries with a line break. That's mainly to help out the critique writers, who sometimes express difficulty jumping from prose to poetry.

3. We're probably still having additional entries for if you were slightly late or decided to write something after all, but they won't really be eligible for prizes.

4. We're combining the conversation and vote threads, which will make it super-hard to track down and count up all the votes -- unless we're smart about it. So! To cast your vote, use the 'Ping' tool:

I @vote for entry 11, 'RPG is the real star!'
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This will ping our vote-count account, and we'll be able to tally it up quickly. We're also gonna search the thread, to make sure we don't miss any -- but if you see someone who tries to vote, and maybe doesn't get the ping working, feel free to quote them and ping @vote yourself. As long as we can see it and read it, we'll count it. Exact wording or phrasing doesn't matter -- just make it clear what you're voting for.


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Prose Part 2


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I messaged mdk an Issue I seen. Actually with both this one and a previous RPGC, as well. I hope it's dealt with swiftly. All in all though, some awesome entries. I actually managed to read through them all. My eyes hurt now though. Haha. What is the rules on participants reviewing other participants? Should we? Or should we not? Just curious. Thanks to those that take the time to read mine! :D
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@Impaqt All participants are strongly encouraged to write reviews for other participants. Regarding the other issue, might I ask what it is? I may be able to help rectify it as well.
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@Impaqt All participants are strongly encouraged to write reviews for other participants. Regarding the other issue, might I ask what it is? I may be able to help rectify it as well.


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The issue is currently being addressed in full.

What is the rules on participants reviewing other participants? Should we? Or should we not? Just curious. Thanks to those that take the time to read mine! :D


Should -- definitely should! All reviews from all sources are highly encouraged. Although you should probably hold off on you-know-which-one -- thanks for bringing it to our attention.

OFFICIAL NOTICE -- the offending entry has been removed. Please confine any further thoughts on that matter to the discussion section (see sticky thread for guidelines).
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Reviews, reviews. I read them all. Gosh, that was a lot of text, and I am pretty sure that the last entry was more than all the rest combined. *checks* Yupp, it is. Now, then. As always, these are straight from my own opinion. I do not intend to dissuade anyone from writing if I say something negative. Anyways. Let's see where we get with these. ... I'm honestly not really sure I like my own reviews, but eh, here they are. Haha.





















I haven't voted yet. I'm not sure what I want to vote for, so give me a while to figure it out.
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-snip-

/me hides somewhat in shame

I'll be entirely honest, mate; I didn't even proof read it. Additionally, after I got about half way through writing it, something happened in real life, so approximately the last 9000 words were half arsed. Thus, I cannot in good faith accept any praise for effort because the effort I put in was pitiful. I once spent nearly two full days with no work done on it at all before finally going "Oh yeah, I should probably write..." I entered this because a friend urged me to, I put in only a modicum of effort to write a piece up and have no intention of actually winning anything. I have never entered a contest here before and quite possibly never will again.

As for the ending, I am sorry it disappointed. In truth, I had nothing in the way of ideas for an ending, decided not to think anything ul and so just choose to simply play it straight. This is probably just another sign that I'm lazy haha.

It is the world of Half life and I am glad you think I portrayed it well; Though I am hesitant to pat myself on the back for it could easily have been so much better

I have been putting off reviewing on the grounds of fear because most of them are honestly good... And I am horrible at praise.





















Had I wrote these reviews in any other circumstance than from my phone while half asleep at 04:31 in the morning, they would be longer, more detailed and generally better. Apologies.
I wish to idle a while longer on my vote, but so far I am leaning towards giving it towards Dramatic Reveal.
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we've not yet had time in excess enough to read and review the stories this time, but we hope to get it next week.

But we can't deny that we've looked at the criticism for ours. Something we find very nice to see, be it positive or critical.
... Heh. If I divide a larger, but still not quite large, story up into five parts... then this is either the second or the fourth part. Very well written, as I've come to expect of you. Very interesting and engaging, as I've come to expect of you. And... not the whole tale, as I've come to- eh. XD ... Regardless, everything here felt like it was pulled off exactly as was intended. But honestly, if I got to personally pick which part of the story I wanted to read, I would not have picked this part. Haha. In any case. Flawless quality and narrative skill. If the art of writing engaging stories can become greater than yours, then I can no longer tell the difference. I'm currently feeling an eager desire of reading the beginning and the end of what tale these characters are heading off on. Of course, I can't, I only have this part. Haha. ... Though, what lie are we talking about here? Almost all she said was the truth, wasn't it? The lie which the theme seems to focus on is the lie which she's setting up, that the Countess is still alive, correct? Wouldn't it then be more appropriate to the theme to write about when she fools the prey? Eh, maybe not. In any case. Well done, if I didn't say that. Well done.


The story could easily have more parts, but it doesn't. At least not yet. The lie isn't as blatant as it could be, but we think it might be layered throughout the whole story. Some of our stories, the better ones, tend to be creatures of their own, so we can't force things into them without breaking them. We think the lie is somewhat in the fact that the necromancer is describing what is happening, even as she's doing it to her victim, and then there's the bits about whether they have free will, or whether there's something else controlling them. We don't know.

Well, well... I loved the style. This was a beautiful piece, in my opinion. The lexis was good, the syntax was accurate and the plot was nice in my eyes. Its unfortunate then, that the lie is not the best on here and as such I cannot do this piece justice by awarding it with a vote. I feel, the same I feel with Reality Checkmate, that my understanding of this contest is going to cheat this and that piece out of me considering it for my vote. 9/10


Aye, it didn't ask to be written with "lie" as the core thread. Had we had more time available and fewer other stories demanding to be written, we might have added "chapters" that would have had more obvious lies, but alas, that was not the case this time. But that doesn't matter to us. Its writing stories people enjoy we consider important, not fitting it as good as possible to the theme.
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I personally assumed the lie was the obvious trance placed upon her victims, discharging their autonomy. It was cool, but I'm just not sure whether it can really be classified as a lie since its a spell...? Or whether it is a lie at all, in truth. Its a murky area, I suppose but as you say the writing of the story is more important than a strict adherence to the theme, and I certainly enjoyed the story and think that it was one of the best in there. I am glad I read it so well done to you :)
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There could be trance there. Not really sure. The best lies in our opinion are virtually indistinguishable from truth. a few parts of each, mixed so thoroughly that they cannot be unwound sufficiently to tell what is what without extreme work.
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Sorry for taking a while to get Reviews done.



I guess cause ive done a Story ill do a Poem as well



and im sorry that i couldnt review everyones but i dont have alot of time and i wanted to make sure a few of you had your reviews.
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So all in all, I'm getting, good story, good lie, not relatable. Which is the story of my life. Lol. Ironically so, because this story is also 100% true. Nothing in it is made up. Curious that the response I've come to expect is the one I've written to receive.
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Eh. I @vote for "The Mirror Boy", because it somehow took a really depressing situation, made it heartwarming, threw in a finely executed Maybe Magic, Maybe Mundane for an open ending and caused me to wonder with a deeply positive impression. It also taught me that the contents of the hider bar vanishes upon being clicked on should the contents be surrounded by quotation marks. Well done, @Alice.

Now then. How's reviews and votes coming along for everyone else?
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Now then. How's reviews and votes coming along for everyone else?


Just recently started a second job and university's about to roll back in, so I've only written one review so far. D:

But I swear I'll do my best to finish and vote before the deadline!
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i @vote for Sonnet O because it makes you think about the current state of the world and what is actually happening
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Sorry for the brief delay on reviews, folks, kinda had my hands full for a minute there. I’m doing these as quality-of-writing reviews first, trying to keep them short and manageable… the plan was to get everything reviewed in one long sitting but after these first three I’m overwhelmed with quality. I feel like if I don’t take a break I’m gonna be unfair to whoever comes next. So here’s @Impaqt, @Tyler, and @Byrd Man. You guys are blowing me away. Incredible.






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All but the last, biggest review are now done. That mind-blown feeling I was having earlier, about how good this batch is? It hasn't gone anywhere. I don't wanna oversell anything but..... you guys outdid yourselves. Anyway, @Alice, @PlatinumSkink, @Ellri, and anons, you're up!










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Late! Late! But I made it. @DarkWolf687, your review is finally here!



And finally, voting..... I wavered between several amazing lies. I think though, end of the day, @PlatinumSkink went a step further on complexity AND execution. I'd love to kick a vote out to Crude City because my word that was special, but if I'm honest, I have to @vote for Dramatic Reveal. It was a hell of a job worldbuilding, too. Really nice work.

Reminder -- voting deadline is tonight, so make yourselves heard! And seriously don't vote for Sonnet O. It's a bad joke told poorly.
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My @vote goes to The Mirror Boy
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