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I disagree. People make up stories about how they did some minor acts of heroism on Facebook all the time. (i know at least five people who have allegedly stopped muggings at knife-point... Three times... This year.) For likes and shares. If you actually did something, in today's society, I think you'd spread it like wildfire.

Like i said, it's just so weird, since we have such a culture that glorifies vigilantees and anti-heroes. (Dexter. Breaking Bad, all of the Superhero movies and TV-shows, etc.)


Everybody just wants a slice of the pie. Facebook is full of attention seekers sadly.
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It probably depends on the person. Some people don't want to talk about an experience they probably did not enjoy, though they might share it with family and friends just because it was a holy shit moment and they aren't sure they can believe it. Some people might share it cuz they're proud of what they managed. Other people might not be given the choice.

But yeah, it does strike me as weird that more people aren't getting caught in the act, so to speak. Even though I can't help thinking that the attempt would likely just cause more problems unless they actively knew what they were doing.


Oh, I wouldn't for a second think it to be possible to be an actual real life vigilante - not for very long. The best martial artists in the world (Depending on the fighting style, of course.) would lose a fight to four or more "Average" humans, even less if they are armed. Being Batman is obviously impossible unless you're 25 people being Batman.

But like, former Army Veterans taking to the streets to defend their neighbourhood wearing masks and using army tactics would work just fine to take down ordinary street crime. (Though, i recall hearing about something similar a couple of years ago.)

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I imagine that for a lot of people who'd be successful at it they might prefer not to fall back on things from their old life when they're trying to assimilate into a civilian life. Not everyone, obviously. But enough that it's not widely prevalent.

On a side note, the movies that take that route always seem to involve explosions.
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I imagine that for a lot of people who'd be successful at it they might prefer not to fall back on things from their old life when they're trying to assimilate into a civilian life. Not everyone, obviously. But enough that it's not widely prevalent.

On a side note, the movies that take that route always seem to involve explosions.


Funny enough, I can't actually think of any movie where that's the plot, haha. Like, there's sveral lone former soldier guys who becomes vigilantes. (Shooter, Die Hard, John Doe, etc, etc.)

But none where it's a big ol squad of 10+ people. The Losers is probably as close as I can think off.

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The Losers and the Expendables, and Red, and..... I think that's all I got. And it's usually more a matter of revenge or clearing their own name than doing right.
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Out of curiosity, what are some of the majors at the Grimm University of Nature and Science? I'm having Esther attend school there.

(also i promise i'm almost done with my sheet)

EDIT: Aaand done! Her backstory's a bit sparse, but it's passable! ...Right?
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Today was the day the sheets were being reviewed yes?
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Today was the day the sheets were being reviewed yes?


I've been talking to Stein and reviews are underway. I'm sure they'll be posted today.
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Out of curiosity, what are some of the majors at the Grimm University of Nature and Science? I'm having Esther attend school there.

(also i promise i'm almost done with my sheet)

EDIT: Aaand done! Her backstory's a bit sparse, but it's passable! ...Right?


If this is still a problem, just give Esther whatever Major you'd like.
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If this is still a problem, just give Esther whatever Major you'd like.


Alright, cool.
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I'm really itching for this to start, but in the meantime is there anything I should change in my cs? I kind of wanted to start him out pretty underpowered so that I could build him up a lot.
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I'm really itching for this to start, but in the meantime is there anything I should change in my cs? I kind of wanted to start him out pretty underpowered so that I could build him up a lot.


While I am no expert on all things acceptable, the powers looked up to snuff to me. And I don't think they're too worried about characters being underpowered, since character development is awesome and it makes sense for Eric given as I think he just got his powers a day(two?) ago. If you want reassurance, you could look over some of the others and see if they give you any ideas or the like. I'm sort of worried Andrew might be starting out over powered, but provided you have a full idea of the power you're working with, it's easy enough to scale up or down.

I do suggest having another look at the OP though.

Also, the picture looks like the guy has slit pupils. I'm guessing he was taking a selfie and his phone is reflecting or something, but I'm not actually sure where that effect is coming from. It just amuses me, so I had to point it out.
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I'm really itching for this to start, but in the meantime is there anything I should change in my cs? I kind of wanted to start him out pretty underpowered so that I could build him up a lot.


As far as I'm aware of, there's no outstanding issues with your CS. I myself haven't sat down to comb through it with a fine tooth but Stein has.
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@Nemaisare Ha! Yeah, you're right. I kind of like that now that I see it. Thanks for the tips, I'll look over it once again.

@Lord Wraith Alright, thanks. I haven't really been active for a long time so I just wanted to make sure things looked alright overall.
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Now I'm doubting my own CS...
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Been having a bit of trouble in keeping in touch with @Stein. Seems we're ships passing in the night. So in the best interest of the RP, I'm returning to the original plan of reviewing the sheets myself. Reviews and acceptances are to follow.

Just a heads up/apology, I am unfortunately ultimately going to have to say 'No' to two of the submissions. I thank you all for your time and patience and I have enjoyed reading your sheets.
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@Tojin: Unfortunately I wasn’t able to accept your character. There were a few technical details missing and overall--while not bad--the Sheet seemed lacking. The abilities as well needed some further explanation, something that wasn’t even really mentioned in the Bio.

@Nemaisare: Accepted, tentatively but only because I was wondering if you’d be able to elaborate on why a normal person would potentially endanger a transplant heart fighting crime. I love the character, and I like the call to action via that type of tragedy, but it brings me pause because it’s a heart. Those aren’t cheap, and you’ve got pretty strict follow up procedures (I know for a number of years following the operation) if I’m not mistaken.

@Natty: Accepted- however, I’d like to see more in the area of a clearer image of the character, especially because he’s now inhabited by a prevalent demonic spirit. But I feel that can be shown in the IC.

@Knighthawk: Unfortunately, I’m not able to accept the character. There’s a spark for an interesting character, but I don’t feel you executed it like you could have. On top of that, the grammar mistakes worry for what might be to come ICly.

@FantasyChic: Restricted Acceptance. The character is nice, but there’s a lot going on and you break the cardinal rule of giving us a Mary Sue-esque character. There’s good foundation laced in the sheet, but it’s overshadowed by frivolous information. I don’t think there should be so many “quirks” if they don’t play into the character. I don’t really know WHO the character is because of how she’s been rounded so-well, so my suggestion would be to go back through the character creation rules and brush up in some areas. Also in the bio, some cliche’s and contradictions to look at and I would recommend cutting some of the unnecessary information and focusing more on her motivation/call to action.

@Heathen: Accepted on the condition that you’ll clean up your motivation a bit. Skylar sounds a little too passive, though he is well thought out. I’d like to see a little bit more of an overt call to action even if that means tweaking a few things in the backstory.

@Dirge: There’s some technical details missing, but the character is wonderfully thought out and excites me with his potential. So the character is on probation until you go through the Character Creation rules and add/take out a couple of things.
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Fantastic. I actually was planning on putting something really fucked up in his backstory and now I have a reason to do it.
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@Lord Wraith@Stein I am a little tentative about that myself. My justification feels sound though. But probably good to run it by you... Especially since you asked. Ha. Oh and @Hillan too.

So, if I'm understanding your point correctly, pretty sure I am, but y'know, I might not be, anyway! The main reason Andrew would start off with the risk is because he is unaware of it. He knows about the consequences of lowering his density, which aren't great, he'll be honest with you there, but he's never had an issue with a fast heart rate before, so his heart can slow down on its own and, for the most part, he assumes it's like exercising, since it was worse when he started. And the pacemaker makes sure that when he goes back to normal density, all that extra work doesn't just leave his heart giving out. He's also used to watching for the symptoms of arrhythmia, and is aware of his limits, so he's not afraid of testing them or making sure someone is there to spot him.

When he starts out with the fighting crime thing, and it winds up being less preparation and less safe because obviously, he won't be stopping in the middle of a chase or fight to check his pulse or be able to call a time out if he feels some bad palpitations, then I'm hoping for some chance at character development. Since it would be a risk and he'd be fully aware of it at that point. And he'd have to decide if that's something he wants to continue to risk. I cannot promise he will, but I know him fairly well in my head, and it wouldn't be something he'd want to give up on immediately, so he'd want to look for work arounds, compensating methods, that sort of thing. And it would make working in a group a much better idea. ;) Not that he needs the incentive there. He likes people. And if nothing else would motivate him to stay with them, it'd be that. He'd want to help them, even if it's not in the obvious way, he wouldn't like bowing out just because of the risks to him when they're risking themselves too. (granted, risking himself might only add to the complications they'd be dealing with, but that would be another character development moment, I hope)

It's a sort of, it landed at his feet as a solution to 'what do I do with my life to pay it back?' and he wouldn't readily let it go. He was still fairly young when he got his power, so he definitely would have thought about fighting crime or helping out somehow, but he wasn't in much of a position to make that happen, and still had some heart problems, so it was just a fantasy that he half-forgot about. So, I'm hoping that the first time he does it, it's kind of an accident, and then, after that, he realises that it might not be as out of his reach as he's always thought. Then whoops, maybe it is, after all. Psyche.

The heart thing, I will admit I am not 100% in the know on, as I've only been using internet research and a few blogs to get my knowhow. He had the actual heart transplant 15 years ago, and while I know he probably has to take medication for it for life, I'm not aware of any other regular routines he'd have to go through at this point apart from doctor check-ups(if anyone else knows, feel free to toss that knowledge my way). The pace-maker, which he's had for about 8 years, does have a few points of weakness of its own (which I think I've still managed to not include, go me), but apart from the potential for its shocks to get out of alignment with the greater density (don't ask me if that is at all scientific), it is meant to let him do most things, if not everything, as anyone else might manage. And as far as I know, the recovery time for the initial operation is expected to be about 5 months or less depending on the type of operation, with minimal maintenance required.

The only thing I think that could cause a problem (apart from the ones I actually want) is the fact that I had the EMP short out the batteries in it. Since I'm pretty sure it would do that whether I want it to or not. And changing the batteries does require a small operation to get to the pacemaker, but I don't think the recovery time is nearly as long.

Hopefully I've answered your concerns somewhere in that ramble. Sorry, I just kept going... If not, poke me, or something.
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@Lord Wraith@Stein I am a little tentative about that myself. My justification feels sound though. But probably good to run it by you... Especially since you asked. Ha. Oh and @Hillan too.

So, if I'm understanding your point correctly, pretty sure I am, but y'know, I might not be, anyway! The main reason Andrew would start off with the risk is because he is unaware of it. He knows about the consequences of lowering his density, which aren't great, he'll be honest with you there, but he's never had an issue with a fast heart rate before, so his heart can slow down on its own and, for the most part, he assumes it's like exercising, since it was worse when he started. And the pacemaker makes sure that when he goes back to normal density, all that extra work doesn't just leave his heart giving out. He's also used to watching for the symptoms of arrhythmia, and is aware of his limits, so he's not afraid of testing them or making sure someone is there to spot him.

When he starts out with the fighting crime thing, and it winds up being less preparation and less safe because obviously, he won't be stopping in the middle of a chase or fight to check his pulse or be able to call a time out if he feels some bad palpitations, then I'm hoping for some chance at character development. Since it would be a risk and he'd be fully aware of it at that point. And he'd have to decide if that's something he wants to continue to risk. I cannot promise he will, but I know him fairly well in my head, and it wouldn't be something he'd want to give up on immediately, so he'd want to look for work arounds, compensating methods, that sort of thing. And it would make working in a group a much better idea. ;) Not that he needs the incentive there. He likes people. And if nothing else would motivate him to stay with them, it'd be that. He'd want to help them, even if it's not in the obvious way, he wouldn't like bowing out just because of the risks to him when they're risking themselves too. (granted, risking himself might only add to the complications they'd be dealing with, but that would be another character development moment, I hope)

It's a sort of, it landed at his feet as a solution to what do I do with my life to be useful and he wouldn't readily let it go. He's the kind of guy that would have thought about fighting crime or helping out once he got his powers, but he was young enough, and still had some heart problems, to feel like that was just a fantasy. So, I'm hoping that the first time he does it, it's kind of an accident, and then, after that, he realises that it might not be as out of his reach as he's always thought. Then whoops, maybe it is, after all. Psyche.

The heart thing, I will admit I am not 100% in the know on, as I've only been using internet research and a few blogs to get my knowhow. He had the actual heart transplant 15 years ago, and while I know he probably has to take medication for it for life, I'm not aware of any other regular routines he'd have to go through at this point apart from doctor check-ups(if anyone else knows, feel free to toss that knowledge my way). The pace-maker, which he's had for about 8 years, does have a few points of weakness of its own (which I think I've still managed to not include, go me), but apart from the potential for its shocks to get out of alignment with the greater density (don't ask me if that is at all scientific), it is meant to let him do most things, if not everything, as anyone else might manage. And as far as I know, the recovery time for the initial operation is expected to be about 5 months or less depending on the type of operation, with minimal maintenance required.

The only thing I think that could cause a problem (apart from the ones I actually want) is the fact that I had the EMP short out the batteries in it. Since I'm pretty sure it would do that whether I want it to or not. And changing the batteries does require a small operation to get to the pacemaker, but I don't think the recovery time is nearly as long.

Hopefully I've answered your concerns somewhere in that ramble. Sorry, I just kept going... If not, poke me, or something.


Yes you did. Beautifully in fact. Unph.

I love all of it and approve of it. I'd like to see some of that addressed/woven into the bio. Not necessarily the length to which you explained it here, but some awareness on his part. And DEFINITELY that young childish urge to be a hero but being stopped by his heart condition.
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