blah still alive guild was having issues last night and tonight i was out so no post until tomorrow and I've still gotta work on that warrior character too.
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Okay, so our great and powerful GM @Caits is not on right now, so I'm going to point out the more obvious problems here, along with a few specific ones.
First, as @Raijinslayer said, It is painfully obvious that you didn't even bother to read the whole first post, where the premise is located.
Second, your character is barely defined. The personality is a single sentence. The History is vague, and the title, Motivation, and strengths seem completely random.
Why is he good at writing?
Why is he called "Overlord?"
Why is his motivation stopping Dark Guilds?
That age. Hoo boy. He is an A-Rank Mage at the tender age of 13? That is extremely unrealistic. A-rank would mean that he could hold his own against the likes of Gajeel, Grey, or Juvia. It takes time for any mage to get stronger through practice, experience and maturity. To be that stong, he would have to be some kind of genius, and if he was, there is no explanation, or reasoning why.
To a more specific thing that you would not know, Maker magics are restricted, unless there is a very good reason for it, or it is very cool or unique. Even then, they will have to pass inspection.
Final Questions: Why does he not know his birthday, and if he doesn't know when he was born, how does he know how old he is?
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To be fair, 2/3 of those characters were originally S-Class from Phantom Lord
But Romeo is thirteen and probably a B or C rank mage. Wendy is also 13(14?) and is probably in the lower tiers of A-rank, unless her dragon force is activated.
But yeah the rest looks like some of my lazily done shadow heart guys, when I stopped caring about some of them as they're not that important XD
@Crimson Raven
Juvia and Gajeel are former S-Class wizards from Phantom Lord....So it's kinda hard why they are as powerful as they are.
Then I was naming the 13 year olds in Fairy Tail. I missed pink haired god slayer from Lamia Scale, but always forget her name XD
Oh and farmer girl from Mermaid Heel would be somewhere in that ball park but she's probably a C at best.
@Crimson Raven
To be fair, that Gray Juvia fight was horrendous and Juvia pretty much gave up. And Natsu was getting the crap kicked out of him till he got a power up.
They're also protagonists in a shounen. They could've been up against god tier characters, they're still gonna win.
I will try to get an Ike post up today. Sorry if I have been delaying you Lugu
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So are you going to stop delaying me and post, or should I continue?
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Perhaps you should post? And maybe you should chill?
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So are you going to stop delaying me and post, or should I continue?
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I agree, chill.
There are times we can't post.
It's called life.
If anything needs my attention I'll post after work
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He did say he was sorry for delaying me, but then didn't meet the deadline he set for himself and thusly continued to do what he's sorry for; I'm merely informing him of it in his own words. I don't bear him any extraordinary ill will for it, it's a common occurrence that even I am guilty of. I'm merely trying to ascertain what I should be doing. And I didn't ask you. If Oblivion takes issue with my verbosity, I'll apologize to him for it.
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Jeez, sorry.
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That's alright. No harm done.
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So what's up?
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I think I've pinned down the nature of the plague at last, and I'm quite excited to delve into this poor little town. Very soon, I'm also going to have Nero do something with Ayame, Eve, and Malice--a sort of test run to see if she might like being in Miracle Eye.