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@Ruined Melody It says in the CS skeleton. 14-20 :)
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@Ruined Melody It says in the CS skeleton. 14-20 :)


I didn't think to look there. Thanks :) I'll work on a character now.

Also I'm down with adding people on Skype if its easier for me to get in touch with you guys and ask questions if I need to.
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@Ruined Melody Sure. If you could add me under the name Vurige_Vos you should find me and I can add you to the Skype group that we already have going.
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@BuddhaI think I fixed what you wanted me to. I also added the affiliation section, and elaborated on the Smoke Release: Deadly Pellet Incursion technique. I forgot to mention the technique's offensive capabilities (because I forget that not all of you are figments of my imagination).

I'd appreciate it if you gave it another read.

Also, as for earlier, I was not trying to be a sarcastic twatnipple. I really enjoyed reading your reactions towards different aspects of the CS.
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@Krot Seems fine to me. Move it to the char bin.
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Yuuuus it's here! I'll have my character in an hour or two since it takes me a while to make them :)
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Review is in Green.

Allow me to be the first non-Jonin that submits my character app. gg first non-special snowflake, and yet you make it sound like he is



Let me know if anything needs fixing. I'll gladly do it.

P.S I had some huge coding trouble along the way. I'm a noob when it comes to that. it's awful ik


The CS is good, really good. Just answer my question in the Kekkei Genkai section. Approved once that is sorted.
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You know I told myself Hex, you are going to keep this one short and sweet. I failed dramatically to keep it short but hopefully it is still a little sweet.



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The clan sheet is optional, guiz.
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@Savato alright I think I fixed that. Either that, or I'm missing something.

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@Krot Doesn't really explain why he's immune to illusions tbh. I'm being picky on this because so many have taken immunity to genjutsu for granted in the past. Though the weakness does balance it out, it essentially makes you dominate most genjutsu specialists. And yes, a kunai bomb suffices to rip you up, but I'm mostly asking for a reason as to why it gives immunity to illusions. If anything, I'd assume something as intangible as illusions would be one of the biggest things to counter immaterial people.

I'm mostly asking for reasoning here, not an outright denial.
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@Savato, I'd like to clear up and fix all the problems you have with it, but I can't seem to identify those problems exactly. Maybe I don't have enough knowledge on how genjutsu is transmitted, however it doesn't make sense to me for anyone to be able to use any type of genjutsu (outside the one I mentioned - audible) on a giant puff of smoke. You can't touch it, you can't inflict ocular-type illusions. Maybe I should have clarified that his imperviousness to genjutsu is only possible if he's in full smoke mode?
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@Krot Genjutsu is used through the senses, so it doesn't really have anything to do with 'touch' so much (okay, that one is one that you can dodge because smoke is intangible) but more like sound, smell, taste, ummm, anything like that, and also chakra.

Genjutsu comes forth from either senses or foreign chakra inside your own chakra paths. So if I inject chakra into you, you will still have my chakra inside of you despite being in a smoke form (because your chakrapaths still remain otherwise you'd die.. lol)

Similarly unless your character literally has 0 senses while he's in his smoke form (can't see, can't hear, can't smell, can't breathe) he will always be susceptible to sensory based genjutsu. For example even in his smoke form he can see, therefore any genjutsu that begins with a motion (say, me snapping my fingers is the 'key') your character will see that and thus be affected by the genjutsu.

Because sensory genjutsu are 'easier' they are also less powerful (so for instance, switching left and right is something that can be done with a finger snap, but you can't cast a infinite tsukuyomi with a finger snap, logically.). Therefore what he is saying is that unless your character has 0 senses, and kills his chakra paths (and thus commits suicide) he will still be susceptible to genjutsu...

Genjutsu is fucking stupid and nobody really knows how it works, but this is the gist of it.
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@Krot He can see even if fully smoked, right? That's enough for vision based. As long as you SEE vision based ones, it affects your chakra flow anyway. If he cannot then well, obviously vision based doesn't work.

I'm unsure if he can smell or taste in that form, if he can, then they work too.

If you mean APPLYING a genjutsu can't be done when he's in smoke mode, that makes more sense, rather than purge genjutsu he's already succumbed to for free while being immune to future applications.

Thing is, I don't know how a cloud of smoke is supposed to feel and what senses it has. Only OBVIOUS immunity is touch based ones.

EDIT: Vuur i am the genjustu minister here pls, call me tuuj 2

EDIT II: All genjutsu are sensory based. I have one that directly affects chakra instead of senses, but otherwise they are all applied via a sense. Infinite Tsukuyomi is barely even a genjutsu.
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@SavatoOkay, I'm schooled now thanks to you and Buddha.

So, he can't see, but he can sense chakra signatures in that form. He can't taste.

He can hear, he can smell and I guess you could inject chakra on his pathways. Hold on, I'll fix it.
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@Krot Yeah may want to add these details then, they're kind of relevant. Thanks for clarifying though.
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@Savato, now?
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@Krot Okay now the main color now has to fuchsia and you must remove every word with the letter L while having it make sense.

Jk.

Approved.
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You know I told myself Hex, you are going to keep this one short and sweet. I failed dramatically to keep it short but hopefully it is still a little sweet. It's not that long don't stroke that ego, boy

Review in red.



There's some things I need to see addressed in the jutsu section but asides from that it's a pretty good character. Address the issues in the jutsu's and feel free to make any other changes before putting it in the bin. @Savato will also do a review as far as I know.


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Is this RP still accepting ?
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