... I am immediately reminded as soon as I start reading that I already know how this is going to end due to the labour. Suppose the REAL labour is about how to take that and still make a good story. God knows I failed. Now, how did you do?

My, ain't you portraying the ideal leadership. Why does that feel like a dream too good to be true? Hah.

… Yeah, it was like that, wasn't it.

… Well. That's one depressing way to do it. It tells a story, which in a way is beautiful. It tells exactly what it needs to tell, nothing more, nothing less. A steady, perfectly paced flux taking place over many years towards an inevitable end. It reads well. Nicely done.

Though, I'd never read this for my own enjoyment. It's not an entertaining story to share and like. It just is. But, suppose that's fitting for the labour. I'll applaud this. Sigh. Oh, well.

I'm a bit confused. Was there, like, a time-skip between each paragraph? He went very quickly from being amused to not being amused. Like, a single sentence with the explanation to why coming first after, which was rather jarring. But, as far as I can tell, there's this giant being/world or so that the people worship, but then they fight each other over it and eliminate themselves, pretty much? … Hm. Okay. Yeah, suppose that's about it.

I do still hope you pass. Even if you only got three hours to write. Now, let's read.

Oh. So because they were going to leave Ariana behind, Metzi burned the ship to punish them. But, by doing so destroyed Ariana's hopes of coming home. So, like, the ship was her link to her world, and it was destroyed. … … … Like that? Well. I certainly see how you came to that reasoning.

The writing is as good a quality as always, despite the lack of time you wrote the entry on. These are characters that I feel I wouldn't have minded to learn more about. Alas, circumstances are circumstances and inspiration doesn't come when we want it. But, for what it resulted in, good job. Haha.

Er. Someone who fights because of the main character. The Ruwdans are only fighting on Earth because Kurt fled there. How exactly is that not ”fighting because of them”? ... Oh, well.

I'm happy you found things about my entry worthy of being described as ”beautiful” and ”lovely”, haha. … Yeah, now that you point that out, that one sentence is very odd. My apologies for that. And, er... I naturally structure my paragraphs as I find them the most readable. Which, er, ends up being like that. Hm. Not sure what I can do about that. Oh, well.

Thank you for your review.

... Ignore my last post, that's not what I was thinking at all. I did not get the memo that it had to be allies that destroyed everything. Because, the enemy is entirely driven by want. They want nothing more than to hunt down Kurt Fortitude. The degree they want him is enough to hunt him across the galaxy and declare wars on worlds just because he landed upon them. That was my reasoning. And then, on top of that, the world would not have been destroyed had not humanity been inspired by Kurt to fight with him to take back their planet. Essentially this results in Earth being destroyed in a war about who gets Kurt Fortitude. And that's what I saw as that it would pass the criteria. … Oh, well. Oh, well. OH, WELL.

Yeah, the detail about that Ruwdan limbs detaching when injured was something I came up with during the planning-phase, but somehow it never ended up in the story until way back then because my own failure to actually make use of it before then... XD

In any case, yeah. I do believe I see what you're saying. Hm. I shall see what I can do next time I write an action-scene.

Tihi. I really liked my odds-thing. It was inspired by that, in the scenario, the odds are heavily, HEAVILY stacked against him. It became annoying after a while, huh? Somehow, this does not make me regret it at all. My apologies. Haha.

Thank you very much for the review!