@Double Capybara ah, i was of the impression that dreams didn't care about whether they on a different plane or not. I mean, it's not like Ull's plane is "outside" the Universe. It exists inside the normal universe, and is shielded by Ull's powers from others.

Hey guys, this most recent IC post is kinda of new to me. I'm trying to switch up the way I write abit. Instead of having Amartía be he focuse all the time, I'm trying to use others to convey feelings and sights that Amartía can't.

I think it worked well. I left alot to the imagination, but if anyone is confused to what happened; Amartía basically found Occult Magic to be extremely interesting and desides to experiment by attacking the Village and rounding up its occupants. Then he has a Priest preform a ritual and kill each an every one of them. Amartía creates stone golems in which he binds thier souls to. Basically turning them into stone marionettes.

Would like some feedback, anythung that would help me grow.

Hey guys, this most recent IC post is kinda of new to me. I'm trying to switch up the way I write abit. Instead of having Amartía be he focuse all the time, I'm trying to use others to convey feelings and sights that Amartía can't.

I think it worked well. I left alot to the imagination, but if anyone is confused to what happened; Amartía basically found Occult Magic to be extremely interesting and desides to experiment by attacking the Village and rounding up its occupants. Then he has a Priest preform a ritual and kill each an every one of them. Amartía creates stone golems in which he binds thier souls to. Basically turning them into stone marionettes.

Would like some feedback, anythung that would help me grow.

On another note, what was the point of the child sacrifice within the post? Was it supposed to parallel the main character? Because to be frank, I find the concept extremely edgy in practice.

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Edgier = better-ier
We're all a bunch of edgelord hipsters here!

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Randomly reminds me of a dumb joke this guy form middle school once told me: Why did the hipster get burnt? Because he drank coffee before it was cool!

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I have yet to read it, but at what post did Slag show up?

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Edgier = better-ier
We're all a bunch of edgelord hipsters here!

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Hider [+]

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Randomly reminds me of a dumb joke this guy form middle school once told me: Why did the hipster get burnt? Because he drank coffee before it was cool!

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There's a point, I feel, where you may start pushing it a little too far, and for no apparent advancement of the plot.

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I would never!

I'm merely a trope supremacist! I simply go for the best tropes, and as many of them as I can cram into one post. *mumbles about how you're implying my edgy tropes are too much*

In an actual seriousness that I lacked before, I'd challenge your logic. From what I gather you just think the child sacrifice had no narrative value and was only in there for 'edginess', but one could say the same for Lifprasil being androgynous, Belvast being a cat, and Bjorn existing in the first place.

Sometimes you just gotta be whimsical to bring something random and different, y'know? Unless it's constant and recurring I don't find myself annoyed with edginess.

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Lifprasil being androgynous is supposed to be representative of his stance on neutrality.

You sure about that whimsical statement?