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@KoLOh I wasn't sure if you were just going to leave it at that.
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@KoLOh I wasn't sure if you were just going to leave it at that.


I mean, that's a typical intro narration for a tabletop like RP, which is the flavor I'm going with here.
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Hi! I wish I wasn't so late to the party: is there still room for one more?
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Hi! I wish I wasn't so late to the party: is there still room for one more?


There should be.
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PS:

From there on, you guys can choose how the story will proceed, but there's a few obvious issues that you must do, like signing for the quest, if you want any reward, and forming the party. But that's the part were your guys' actions count.

Just to be clear, other things like talking to townspeople, the guards, other adventurers, or "examining the scenery" for the lack of a better term, etc are also possible.
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Hi! I wish I wasn't so late to the party: is there still room for one more?


Yeah, I'll do some counts later, but I figure we still have space for you. Welcome.
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@KoL

I won't let you down, boss. Character sheet on the way.
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@KoL Okay, quick question what is a prose format? Also I'll try to fix it but I'm not sure how to do that exactly, just give me some time and I'll fix it to the best of my knowledge
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Apologies for the length, I have to go for a few hours in just a bit and I didn't want to delay in posting it to pare it down. I'll work on shortening it when I get back.
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@KoL Okay, quick question what is a prose format? Also I'll try to fix it but I'm not sure how to do that exactly, just give me some time and I'll fix it to the best of my knowledge


The same writing style that the others used on their CSs. What you did is more akin to a script post, both styles don't mesh well, that's why I want to avoid it.
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The same writing style that the others used on their CSs. What you did is more akin to a script post, both styles don't mesh well, that's why I want to avoid it.


You using vocabulary that I don't know of but I sure will try to figure it out... This is going to take a while though
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I'll read your CS later. But, yeah, you need to cut the "excess fat" to match more or less the same standard as the others.

To put it simply, "Sometimes, less is more".
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You using vocabulary that I don't know of but I sure will try to figure it out... This is going to take a while though


Just read hope the others made their own posts and try to do it like that. Is what I mean. Of you still can't get it, I can try to provide you with an example, once I'm back on my laptop.
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Just read hope the others made their own posts and try to do it like that. Is what I mean. Of you still can't get it, I can try to provide you with an example, once I'm back on my laptop.


Thank you so much... But I'll re-type the cs by myself before I ask for help. Just give me a good 3 to 4 hours and you should have it by then
I also have an idea of what style you want me to type in... It's like for of a story telling in 3rd person point of view
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@PentagonWhite
Aeolia and Sagant are two sides of the same coin and you can't tell me otherwise.
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It's a rough fix... I'm still trying to figure out how to fix it
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@The1Rolling1Boy
I may have the solution. Give it a shot while writing in the 3rd Person.
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@Mega Birb

I look forward to getting them interacting.

@KoL

Despite the evidence to the contrary, I do understand the value of brevity. I've pared it down to be shorter than @Mega Birb's (which surprisingly only meant shaving off about 200 words), I hope that's sufficient. Please, tell me if there is anything I can change to make her fit better or be a better character, I really am sorry for making you waste your time looking over it again.

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I may have the solution. Give it a shot while writing in the 3rd Person.


PLease tell me this solution
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I'll post either late tomorrow or Tuesday.
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