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Well I hope you find more quality than quantity in his history. I remember seeing that some world building was allowed and so I made Archeron. Of course the Wild Wood claimed it as its own so Anselmo's territory was shrunk back to what it is. I thought it would be interesting.
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@FallenTrinity Ok so reading through your guy there are a few things I'd point out. The first being that many of your skills I'd consider to be innate things from just being a Ranger like Map Reading, Situational Awareness, and Instinct seems more like a personality trait versus an actual skill. Also in the skills tab is that he's trained with snipers and pistols but he doesn't carry a pistol and instead an assault rifle. I'm not gonna say you can't do that but it seems a tad redundant to me. If you don't mind me asking what's up with that?

Next is his equipment. The picture you linked for the rifle isn't popping up for me. There may be something wrong with the coding, unless you meant the picture you used for him. Also like I said previously, you will receive a standard survival pack when you head out with the team, so you don't NEED to have your Special Operations pack. Of course you don't need to get rid of it, just that you don't need it.

For his appearance. This is just more of an FYI about that custom Ranger tattoo. There is an emblem for the Anselmo Rangers, but it's of a man holding a flag that's stuck into the ground. All to symbolize the primary goal of the Rangers, to seek out and reclaim the world. On that topic though each Expedition Team often makes up their own emblem to show off their team pride. Similarly Outposts will often adopt an emblem to show off what their Outpost is about. So while that tattoo isn't of the Rangers it's probably of Archeron.

For your backstory, the first thing I found that's off Duvari are herbivores and while there are wild packs out in the Wild World, they only eat plants and attack when they feel threatened. So for the threat in that city, I think monsters would make a bunch more sense given they monsters also move in packs, make nests in abandoned cities, and really like the taste of human blood.

Lastly I'd like you to be more specific in the Trauma section about what exactly has him traumatized by it. Like what does he fear from that situation to this day?

Oh and I'm gonna say to bow out from all the modern day military stuff like MOSs, Combatives levels, etc. As in this day and age it's more of just training to survive and knowing what you need to do in order to do it. There wouldn't be different levels of combatives, just "This is what you need to know to not die out there." And MOSs would kinda go on the wayside to for just being folks who work as X-Job for the military.

Beyond that I like him, so do me a favor a fix up a thing or two and you'd be set to put him in the CS tab.
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For the skills I'll edit the innate ones and see if I can replace with something more substantial.

The rifle is the one seen in his CS picture. That's what I meant by see pic above

The pistol issue was I was thinking that a SR, an AR and side arm would be a bit cumbersome when traveling through the brush so he is trained in handgun proficiency just in case but considering he is a long ranged fighter who provides overwatch, he's not necessarily going to be in a lot of predictments that would require a pistol. COs are usually trianed in handguns anyway. Finally I thought haing a pistol on top of the other two weapons would be a bit much but I'll go ahead and add one because now thinking about it, it might be best.

For tattoos that's fine. They are of Archeron's "rangers". He will eventually get one of Anselmo but not right now of course.

For backstory, I was planning on adding in that he provoked the duvari when they spooked him. He shot at them, causing the duvari to get defensive and thus the shoostings begun, drawing attention of other creatures as the fighting moved through the city.

So I'll cut back the military jargon a bit.

Please lemme know if there is anything else you want me to change. I'm currently at work so when I'm done I'll take care of Ithaca you liked him
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@FallenTrinity Ok so to respond in order...

It's ok not not fill your character with a fully stocked list of gear and skills. You're a member of a team and providing a theme is what you are supposed to do. Don't go making him a Pilot, sniper, shotgunner, driver, CQC master, who can also cook and dance, if it doesn't fit his theme.

Fair enough. I just wasn't sure but it's good to know!

If you want my advice... take away the pistol proficiency and just give him assault rifle proficiency. Then he gets his two weapons he's good with, gets to kick ass and be awesome, and it fits into the already established theme.

Fair enough bud! I just wanted to let you know what was up with the tattoo of the Wild World.

That both makes sense and sounds good to me. It would also lead him to that level of, "We don't trust you not to kill us" that he gets later in his backstory so I REALLY like that idea.

You don't need to cut back on the stuff that connects it to tactics like callsigns, commands, etc, just the like... IRL military training, job titles, etc. Speaking of you know a bit of jargon, are you prior service?

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Have a brother that was. Friend of the family but he's practically my older sibling. I learned a bit from him and other former military personnel
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No no. Former Outpost scavenger who around the age of 20 something joined the military
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I guess for the trauma section it would have to be the reality and the gravity of the situation as a whole. Like, he was fairly wreck less before, hence why he had that reputation. So the Leviathan attacking Archeron's Outpost gave him clarity as to how real the threat was or could be.
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@FallenTrinity Birb means like IRL former service in another RP we had we had like 4 former or active serviceman in it. It was REALLY weird.

Anyway, I'm thinking about making a sort monster template and well as codex for monsters so that not only can we keep track of what we've encountered, but also how to make your own cool monsters.
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Oh then no. Just have friends and family that were or currently are
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@deos morran I like this monster codex idea!
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Would the codex be programmed into the UPOS?
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@FallenTrinity Birb means like IRL former service in another RP we had we had like 4 former or active serviceman in it. It was REALLY weird.

Anyway, I'm thinking about making a sort monster template and well as codex for monsters so that not only can we keep track of what we've encountered, but also how to make your own cool monsters.


Looooove this idea.
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I think I made the necessary adjustments
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@FallenTrinity Well you still have a lot of modern day military jargon that doesn't exist in this RP's current day, but it's not really a big deal, just a slight lore infraction which is NOT a big deal at all...

You have my green light!

Oh and on the topic of the monster codex being uploaded into a computer... I'm going to say yes, but it's not super flushed out. Like it only tells you names and types, versus what they can do and what their weak points are. As that level of knowledge falls to the Seers. And besides this is more of like a Pokedex type thing where you guys find out about the types of crazy that exist in the world as you find them. SO maybe your computer does have monsters.... but only basic and common ones.
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Actually just to say it I think we're nearing the start point. We've got a decent cast of characters and I think I know a good place to kick things off. Ya'll ready for this?

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I promise I'll keep working on the Monster Codex as we go.
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