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@Spanner Eh, the actual reasons for the war are much larger than that, and serve as a better trigger for war to begin with. It'll be explained in due time. Having him be a trigger wouldn't really work that well.

I'm fine with him having swift release as long as we have a mutual understanding that he just uses it to be faster, but that it isn't like body flicker as in instantaneous movement to the point where he might as well be teleporting. As long as that's clear I don't think it'll be a problem.
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@Spanner Eh, the actual reasons for the war are much larger than that, and serve as a better trigger for war to begin with. It'll be explained in due time. Having him be a trigger wouldn't really work that well.

I'm fine with him having swift release as long as we have a mutual understanding that he just uses it to be faster, but that it isn't like body flicker as in instantaneous movement to the point where he might as well be teleporting. As long as that's clear I don't think it'll be a problem.


That's fine. I'll just change this part of his history as a whole and put it in a more generic way, without making reference to villages.
As for the swift release, that was pretty much what I meant for it to be anyway.
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And here is the edited version. Please tell me your thoughts for anything that still need correction, as I'm pretty sure there will be some mistakes somewhere - especially because I'm editing it by cellphone and in the middle of class that i felt like ignoring.

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@Spanner Besides some minor errors, I don't really see anything wrong at the moment. Consider it accepted and thereby the applications for a jonin will close.
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@Spanner Oh, actually. I just realized you don't have an S rank. While I'm okay with you not having one, I think he should have one. Maybe something related to his swift release would be cool. Combine it with an element, or his sword, maybe?
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@Spanner Oh, actually. I just realized you don't have an S rank. While I'm okay with you not having one, I think he should have one. Maybe something related to his swift release would be cool. Combine it with an element, or his sword, maybe?


I have one tho? Custom Jutsu.
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@Spanner Shit, I misread, thought that was an A rank jutsu. Sorry, ignore what I said then.
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@Spanner Shit, I misread, thought that was an A rank jutsu. Sorry, ignore what I said then.


Well, it was supposed to be an A Rank before to be honest. Thought it was a little bit too strong and changed to S.
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Alright, it's finished. I might add more to the personal biography later but it won't be of relevance for the RP I think.
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Take a look, improve where you see fit and post it in the char tab.


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@BladeSS4 It still doesn't really explain why her mother was allowed to stay. Also I don't really understand why you went for the Hozuki clan specifically since you don't really use their jutsu or anything. You don't have to edit it in but maybe you can give me an explanation here?


Well it was a toss up between Hozuki and Yuki clans, it was mostly to give him the water nature from clans that are water users. Yeah, not a really good reason but I figured he could learn some of the jutsu the Hozuki clan can use later on. Just right now this is just his own personal jutsu he learned on his own or through his time through school. I figured it would be better this way since he is a Genin he could learn new things as he goes though the rp.

As for his mother I could have her thrown out of the city but I figured making her a servant would be just keeping her as a resource, I mean she might not be able to use jutsu but she can clean floors and do other chores for the kage, but I can change the history to get rid of her I can but I didn't see the need to have it that way but I can change that if I must.
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@BladeSS4 I believe that the Hozuki hydrification techniques can actually be learned by anyone though, not just Hozuki. It's just a hiden?
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@BladeSS4 I believe that the Hozuki hydrification techniques can actually be learned by anyone though, not just Hozuki. It's just a hiden?


I don't think its even that tbh. Looking it up it doesn't say it is, it just says it is the signature of the Hozuki so I guess anyone could learn it. It sort of sounds like the uchiha fireball jutsu and that anyone could really use it. I think if a Hozuki clan member used it I would think it would be easier but I don't think it matters with who is in the clan. If it doesn't really matter, then Hozuki is just really a name or a prominent canon clan.

I guess it really isn't important to keep him as a Hozuki other then it is just a name of clan that uses a lot of water Jutsu that anyone could really learn on their own. So do you want me to change his name because I can I just didn't want to call him an Uchiha because I felt it would be unique I guess to have someone who was of that bloodline but didn't have their name.
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@BladeSS4 I mean we have Neurovoid's character who has also got a Sharingan. Having an Uchiha would be acceptable if they arrived as refugees during the recent war. But you can give him a regular surname, that's up to you.
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@BladeSS4 I mean we have Neurovoid's character who has also got a Sharingan. Having an Uchiha would be acceptable if they arrived as refugees during the recent war. But you can give him a regular surname, that's up to you.


I could make a regular surname or just make him part of being a refugee family, then I would have to completely redo his backstory or well a part of it. I start on the rework and just go with the refugee thing and make it a bit more simpler instead of making it more complicated then it has to be lol
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@BladeSS4 I think that's a solid idea lol. Complexity isn't always good.
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Here we go again. Another back story this one got a bit darker then I intended it to get but I hope it is 'simpler' but it is very obvious I am not very good when it comes to coming up with a backstory, but I changed it from what it was I hope it works now.


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@BladeSS4 Alright, despite some issues in the bio (it says his mother raised him but he was raised in a foster family?) I'll accept it on account of knowing that your IC is typically a bit better than your CS's.
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@BladeSS4 Alright, despite some issues in the bio (it says his mother raised him but he was raised in a foster family?) I'll accept it on account of knowing that your IC is typically a bit better than your CS's.


Thanks, I moved him over to the character slot after editing that first part. He was raised with a step mother, that first part was accidental error. Sweet, he will be the second male character. Lol
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@BladeSS4 All good. And we have a few more female characters coming in. I think yours is the 3rd though, lol. Sakana is male.
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