Hate to bother you, but is my CS accepted or not? If not, how would you like for me to improve it?

Drake Sydell [+]

Name: Drake Sydell
Alias: The Dragoon
Age: 17
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Arc bio:
Power or ability:
The Dragon Talisman: this ancient relic allows its wearer the ability to use the elements of each dragon soul that resides in the Talisman. To be able to use the elemental abilities, the wearer must make a bond with each dragon soul inside. Once the bond is made, the wearer can just speak the dragons name and he or she will be able to use the dragon’s elemental powers.

Dragons:
Inferno: Fire
Aqua: Water
Terra: Earth
Cyclone: Wind

Personality: Drake is a kind-hearted soul that loves to help others. He loves cracking jokes and make others feel better in times of sadness. However, he also suffers from faking his happy mood when he’s down. He doesn’t want others to know he’s sad or depressed so he fakes a happy smile to make them think he’s ok.

Bio:
Drake grew up in a normal home, even if his father walked out on him when he was young. His mother, being a single parent did her best to raise him on her own, but she soon found help in her twin sister who took up the role of his other parent as she helped raise drake when his mother couldn’t due to her work. Drakes aunt introduced him to MMA at an early age and when she surprised him with tickets to an MMA event. Drake exploded in happiness as he waited for the day to come.

When the day came he couldn’t control his excitement. She had gotten front row tickets and Drake watched as the fighters of each match brutally beat one another. He was hooked and when he turned 12, he asked if he could train to be an MMA fighter. His mother was reluctant since she knew how brutal the sport was. However, after a few begging and pleading, she gave in. He began training at a local gym near his house.

It was taxing at first as his body felt like it was going to fall apart, but after a month's’ worth of training and working on his body strength. He started to get the hang of MMA and start to show promise. Even his trainer told him he would be a great fighter in the octagon. However, fate usually has other plans.

His mother and aunt took him to the state fair to celebrate his progress. There, Drake saw a small cart selling Knick knacks and other trinkets. Drake was instantly drawn to a necklace that had a silver chain that was attached to a dragon wrapped around a pure white crystal that was the size of a pea. Drake’s aunt bought him the necklace and when he placed it on, he started to hear a small voice in his head.

For the next month, Drake trained to better his skills as an MMA fighter. Throughout that month, he kept hearing the voice again and again. However, it would relay messages to him during training like ducking, move to the left, block with your right arm. He worried he might be going crazy so he told his aunt and mother about the voice and what it said.

They didn’t seem all concerned and said it was just his brain telling him what to do next. It made sense since the voice only appeared when he fought and trained in the ring. However, he would see just what the voice was soon enough.

Three weeks after his 17th birthday, he was out shopping for his mom who had to work a double. The town he lived in was quite small so to walk from his house to the bank wasn’t a long trek. However, all the way there the voice kept saying one world. It kept repeating this word over and over again. To try and silence the voice, Drake listened to his music on his music.

At the bank, Drake waited in line to withdraw money from his part-time job. To help pay for the lessons, Drake took a job at a local diner as a dishwasher. While he waited, a man busted through the front doors brandishing a rather weird gun.

He demanded everyone on the ground and once everyone was on the ground, he began to demand money from the bank tellers. When the last teller stuffed the last bit of money into the man’s bag, police sirens echoed outside.

The simple bank robbery turned into a hostage situation as Drake at on the floor of the bank for over two hours. The man said if the police didn’t back off, he would kill a hostage. When the robber thought the police didn’t listen. The man cursed again before he grabbed a woman next to Drake and pushed her to the far wall. He pointed his gun towards the woman and when he pulled the trigger. A blue stream shot out of the barrel. In a split second the woman was frozen in ice. Once the woman was encased in ice, the man then said if the police don’t leave. He’d freeze another person.

The man then took Drake and shoved him next to the frozen woman. He pointed his gun at Drake and all Drake could hear was the voice screaming at him. Screaming the same work it had said all the way to the bank. The man pulled the trigger and the blue stream hit Drake and he felt the freezing ice on his body. It felt like knives cutting into his skin as he screamed in pain. In that moment he yelled the word the voice had been screaming: INFERNO!

The pure white crystal in the middle of his neckless turned red and flames shot out of the crystal. The flames melted the ice as the flames wrapped around his hands to create flame gauntlets, around his legs and feet to create greaves and sabatons made of flames, the flames wrapped around his head to create a Helm made of flames, and finally the flames extend from his shoulder blades to create wings made of flames.

Drake looked at his hands and was stunned at what he saw. The robber was also stunned for a moment before he shot another blue stream at Drake. Drake put up his hands to block the stream and flames shot out of the gauntlets towards the stream. The two collided in the middle and steam filled the bank. The flames overtook the stream and slammed into the robber, sending him to the opposite end of the bank. He hit the wall so hard, he was knocked out.

Drake was stunned at what he just did but he soon realized that the woman next to him was still encased in ice. He quickly turned his attention to her and placed his gauntlets on the ice. It began to melt. He was surmised that he had such full control of this new power. However, he didn’t know that this power he had, was just the tip of the iceberg. After that, Drake knew that he wanted to do. he wanted to help those who needed it. by becoming a hero, but what he didn't know was how hard that goal would be.

Appearance:

Name: Thomas Richmond "Icicle"

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Powers: Cryokinesis, Marksmanship, A bulletproof stealth suit with the ability to turn invisible for a short amount of time, and a cowl that allows him to see with infrared vision.

Appearance

Everyday [+]

Suit [+]

Bio: Thomas was an average kid. Except for being a tech genius, he was painfully normal. Until that day on the frozen lake. When he was 13, his mother and father took him to a lake they thought had been frozen over thickly, but it was a fatal mistake. His mother and father drowned, but miraculously, before Thomas was taken into the cold grip of the water, the ice formed under him. This wonderful power was discovered at a cost, and he was unable to save his parents. Ever since then, he was adopted by a very rich and very nice man, who despite being thirty is more like an older brother. He constructed his current suit using the resources given to him by his guardian, and vowed to use his powers for good and to rid the world of crime, no matter the cost. Since then he has become a bit darker and more willing to kill the criminals he encounters.

Theme: Dark Necessities by the Red Hot Chili Peppers

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My Hider [+]

Name: Maeve Hayes aka Red Haze

Age: 18

Gender: Female

Powers: Perfect aim, knowledge of pressure points.

Appearance:
Street clothes - Short red hair, combat boots, all black clothes.
Costume - Gray dirt bike and gear, a dark red helmet, and as many projectiles as she can hide on herself.

Bio: Maeve grew up in a rough neighbourhood. Her parents were the founding members of a local gang known as the Main St. Monsters: a group that committed robberies in monster costumes. Her parents wore The Swamp Thing and Bigfoot. When she was 14 there was a coupe, and her parents were killed.

Maeve and her 9 year old brother, Gilroy, should have been sent to foster care... But they discovered that their parents had never gotten them birth certificates. No documentation, no legal records... They were ghosts. So Maeve was left to raise her brother alone.

At 16 years old, Maeve was hired as a body guard by actress Kiri Henare. Along with a paycheck, Maeve and Gilroy received a place to stay and access to Kiri's tutors. But how the three met remains a mystery to most.

At 17, Maeve began spending her free hours breaking up gangs on the sly. She would knock key members out, one by one, and leave them where 'proper' heroes could bring them to justice.

Now 18, Maeve's getting good at both of her jobs. In fact, she thinks it's time her alter ego Red Haze moves up the big leagues.

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I'm going to let my go-gm's decide your CS's fate as i'm unable to decide as I can see the pros and cons of your char being on the team and in the RP but to me the pros a nd cons are pretty even

Name: Thomas Richmond "Icicle"

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Powers: Cryokinesis, Marksmanship, A bulletproof vest.
Appearance

Everyday [+]

"Suit" [+]

Bio: Thomas was an average kid. Except for being a genius, he was painfully normal. Until that day on the frozen lake. When he was 13, his mother and father took him to a lake they thought had been frozen over thickly, but it was a fatal mistake. His mother and father drowned, but miraculously, before Thomas was taken into the cold grip of the water, the ice formed under him. This wonderful power was discovered at a cost, and he was unable to save his parents. Ever since then, he was adopted by a fairly well off and very nice man, who despite being thirty is more like an older brother. He got his tools using the money given to him by his guardian, and vowed to use his powers for good and to rid the world of crime, no matter the cost. Since then he has become a bit darker and more willing to kill the criminals he encounters.

Theme: Dark Necessities by the Red Hot Chili Peppers

Weapons [+]