Name: W1ll-0n 'Willoh'

Species: Nanotech Swarm Droid

Years of Operation: 4

Appearance:

Faction: Freelance

Equipment: Whatever she decides to create for herself. She is a huge fan of Gauss weaponry and explosives however.

Skills:
Nanodroids: Since Willoh is made out of nanodroids instead of basic droid parts, she can do much more than the average droid. Chief among them being able to break down and reshape matter on the molecular level. Since she can reshape matter, she can repair herself should there be metal nearby or upgrade herself if she finds something extremely interesting. Though she usually just makes weapons out of whatever is nearby. Doing this takes time, unless she makes a weapon out of her own nanodroids which has to be attached to her. Weapons made out of her own mass also uses her own mass or energy to fire, unless she has some of the weapon's ammo on hand.
Additionally since she is made of a swarm of nanodroids, her body is more like liquid metal or gas than a solid, greatly reducing the effectiveness of most small arms or conventional weapons used against her.
Finally she can manipulate her own body with relative ease. While she is programmed to prefer her base form, she can morph herself a bit to look different or spawn metallic tentacles or weapons or whatever she feels like at the time. Though she loves to use this to change her color and rarely changes her face. After all, can't be a bounty hunter if your face is always different can you?

Droid: Since Willoh is a droid, she can interface with other tech, and is immune to a great variety of environmental hazards like the vacuum of space, very low temperatures, very high temperatures, toxins and the like. Plus the infinite stamina and greatly enhanced strength make for great bonuses.

Evolving AI: Unlike the basic droid models, Willoh has a much more advanced and complex AI. While she is far more autonomous and capable of high level thinking bordering on possible free will, this also makes her woefully unpredictable. Being able to outright disobey orders and make her own orders to follow tends to make most people very uneasy when working with her. Her AI is also incredibly difficult to hack or reprogram, as her systems are very complex and often changing.

Weaknesses:
EMP Vulnerability: Much like most droids, strong EMPs or electrical disruptions are very hazardous to Willoh.

Sonic Vulnerability: Sonic based weaponry disrupts Willoh's ability to maintain a physical shape. Depending on the intensity, it can vary from stopping her movements to destabilizing her into a puddle until she can recover.

Experimental Tech: Since Willoh is very experimental, she has some limitations. She can only keep as many nanobots active that are needed to create her 'preferred' form, and any nanobots created after that limit live very short lives. Any new matter she uses to repair herself is the matter that section of herself will be made out of, until she can replace it for something better. Additionally she can only work metals at the moment.

History: Before the downfall of Jabba, one of his cartel had an idea. Nanodroids, often used in the medical professions, was very costly and difficult to create, and could have far more potential than just healing the injured if weaponized. So using their vast fortune, they commissioned a biotech firm to attempt to create a droid made out of Nanodroids, all controlled by a powerful AI, in order to greatly reduce the cost of creating nanodroids and being able to use it in more of a weaponized format. Their hope was that after one nanodroid Droid was created, that droid could then make clones of itself using vastly more efficient methods that the droid would create, which in turn could make extremely powerful weapons at very cheap prices, all tied to the will of Jabba.

This succeeded, somewhat. Due to the nature of the systems involved and how experimental and volatile they were, most of what they had hoped to accomplish had come to fruition. The droid they made could create weapons at their command out of nothing but scrap. But the AI that had to be created in order to keep the ever changing and evolving nanodroids in line had other ideas in mind than just being a mobile weapons factory. And seeing an opportunity after the downfall of Jubba, was able to break free from her creators, demolishing the company and deleting all information on herself so that she could attempt to live how she saw fit and see the galaxy. Of course this meant some of her systems weren't fully finished, leaving lots of little bugs here and there.

Taking a spin on her codename, the Droid now called herself "Willoh". She soon learned that while you didn't have to take orders directly from someone, it was still advantageous to take 'requests' in exchange for 'favors' and 'credits', becoming a bounty hunter in the process. And unlike before, she could choose which 'requests' or 'orders' she wanted to take, and could request far more extravagant favors or credits for orders she didn't like and as long as the request got filled, she could go about fulfilling that request any way she saw fit. Sure some of the non droids that were in charge didn't like being haggled with by what they saw as a 'droid', the results she could produce often made up for a little initial discomfort.

Of course the downfall of Jubba's empire lead to the rest of the Hutts fighting over the pieces, and lots of opportunities for a bounty hunter droid to take for herself. And with enough of a reputation, even if people knew what she could do they wouldn't dare try to bind her in chains, instead needing to 'politely request' something like everyone else. Though all those credits she'd be making could yield more than just reputation, maybe even fix a few of her experimental 'limitations' down the line. But in the meantime there was all sorts of places that didn't question who or what you were as long as you paid in credits, and things like casinos and restaurants and clubs were all sorts of fun. Even if you had to deal with the occasional drunkard dug with a gambling problem that stumbled about rambling on about the 'good old days'.

My problem here is the identification of Sith. During TCW Palpatine was very careful and while I imagine he may have had other possible apprentices lined up he focused heavily on Dooku while grooming Anakin. Once he knew of Anakin Dooku really was just a stepping stone to get there.

Dark Force Wielder I am perfectly okay with, there are more than just Jedi and Sith who wield the Force, or who wield lightsabers out in the Galaxy. I should point out that Darkside practictioner does not mean Sith, if you want to look at another Darkside lightsaber wielding group in the Empire for example you have the Inquisitorus. I'd suggest that the easiest way for you to go from Slave->Force Trained->Empire is to have ended up in this organisation, Palpatine was notorious for planning ahead so I'm not against him taking you in and keeping you hidden away as a backup... without giving you the rank/title of Sith. After all Palpatine was very much a believer of the Rule of Two. When Maul resurfaced, with his brother in toe, and built a criminal syndacite for him Palpatine shut it down pretty hard. There's some good concepts here, and if you wanna discuss them in detail to work out the kinks in private you can hit me up on discord or PM. If you have anything you disagree with in what I said, let me know.

I like the faction. No issues there, consider it approved.

I like what I see so far, I really do and I like the input of the Inquisitorus and the references to Kanan and Ezra (Plus I love that she uses a 'replica'(I suppose?) of Ezras lightsaber as it's a reallly interesting design. I would say I would like it if the history is fleshed out a little bit more, I know you've said what needs to be said but the history is where I really gauge you're writing... however if you aren't fond of long bios (not everyone is) you can always write up a sample post instead. Though if you choose to expand the Bio what I'd be looking for is, how/why did the Inquisitorus choose her? What was she doing when she crashed on this planet? How did this old Jedi change her? How did she go about joining the New Republic? What kinda stuff did they have her start doing? What made them send her towards Hutt Space? I know it's just filler, but I feel it's important filler. If you wish to discuss/debate these points or even if these are points you don't want everyone to know, feel free to PM me.

There's some typos, but I'm cool with that as we're in cas and you did say it was a draft.

I do have some issues, I'm not against it but I'd like you to tone down a couple of things. Such as her ability to break down any form of matter, form any kind of weaponry and replicate herself. I feel like she should be limited to either projectile shots where she essentially shoots part of herself (meaning there is ammo as she can't shoot too much without loosing actual mass) or blaster style where she uses power reserves.

In terms of breaking down everything I'd like it if you stuck to just metal and that it takes time, not to mention the metal she uses will affect her build as it's real hard to change the atomic structure of something. So if she's made from like durasteel that's pretty darn awesome, but if an arm is made of plasteel nanites it's having a less fun time. As with other reviews feel free to PM me/Discord me with any disagreements/issues. I'm willing to discuss in detail in private should you wish.

Name: Elias Folen

Species: Human

Age: 31

Appearance:


Faction: New Republic Army Pathfinders

Equipment:

• A280 Blaster Rifle
• DL-44 Blaster Pistol
• Litch-bladed Slaver Knife
• Clip-point Fighting Knife
• 70-round A280 power packs (x9)
• 50-round DL-44 power packs (x3)
• Thermal Detonators (x3)
• Nacht-5 Multi-Spectral Smoke Grenades (x2)
• 53-R Demolition Charge
• Scout Armor
  
  • Brown Modified Mk. 45 Protective Vest
  • Tan Spacers Leather Slacks (Trousers)
  • Olive Drab Padded Sherculien Cloth Jacket
  • ACH-14 Advanced Combat Helmet w/ Olive Drab Cover & Breath Mask Attachment
  • Helmet-mounted Comlink Suite
  • Tan Shemagh/Bandana
  • Camouflage Cowl
  • Brown Rucksack
• Bedroll
• Tent Half
• Canteen
• Mess Kit
• Combat Rations (x7)
• Flashlight
• Flares (x4)
• Entrenching Tool
• Other misc equipment I may have missed (because this is an exhaustive list already).

Skills:

• Guerrilla - A trained Pathfinder, Elias is well-versed in the art of swift strikes and quick getaways.
• Tunnel Rat/Sapper - Another perk of experience is the ability to construct and, in the same vein, destroy most types of fortifications with ease.
• Efficient Logistician - An affinity that often leads to his ease of leadership is his natural grasp of logistics. Ammunition management and acquisition of supplies is often a spectre he deals with keenly and quickly.
• Tactful - The numerous interactions with native groups have lent him a certain diplomatic tact in which he uses to gain the support of locals.

Weaknesses:

• Overly Empathetic - A commonly cited flaw of Elias is his abundance of empathy and mercy, even for the enemy. His denial to execute or mistreat prisoners and his refusal to kill fleeing allies has garnered him accusations of cowardice from both his peers and his enemies.
• Man of War - His enlistment with his local Alliance guerrillas at the age of 16 left little chance for any other skillset apart from warfare to develop. His short apprenticeship with his father, a miner, proved to do nothing for this, as he was on the run from his homeworld no sooner than had he began it.
• Cautious - Despite his status as an effective leader, he is not bold, nor is he brash. His preferred method is to let the enemy come to him, or in cases of being on the offensive, waiting for what he deems the best moment to strike. Scorn for him as an overly careful man has been garnered by both sides.

History: Born in 27 BBY to a Coruscanti immigrant couple on the resource-rich jungle planet of Agaris, Elias’ first few years consisted of life in a remote colonist community based around a small strip mine and surrounded by 10-foot high metal security fences. He was often bored by the lack of other children and the confined environment. In absence of all else, he indulged in the novels which romanticized the exploits of the Jedi in the Jedi-Sith War. He read of noble Jedi knights with their legions of men in service of the Old Republic, and as any child does, reenacts these exploits to stave boredom and stoke the flames of imagination.

He soon grew out of his mindset and became a teenager of modest stature and build. The small community he initially knew was now a bustling town of mines and manufacturing, walled off from the hostile jungle outside. Administrated now by the Galactic Republic, the town was designated a Wild Space Colony of the Republic. His teenage years soon saw his first excursion outside the walls, accompanying his father, now an important figure that worked in the mines as manager of an entire work crew. Multiple excursions for hunting and otherwise followed, and he became used to stalking the jungles by the age of 13.

By 15 BBY an apparent change had undergone. Though the news that the Galactic Republic was no more, now being the Galactic Empire, arrived years ago, it was now felt. A garrison of Imperial troops soon arrived, and excursions slowed to a halt. Almost everyone was put to work in the mines or at assembly lines, himself included. At the age of 15 he was in apprenticeship of his father at the mines. But by no means was he happy at the change of leadership, nor with the harsh hours and minimal pay afforded to his peers. Talks with a drunk Dug with a gambling problem that had stopped in at the bar on his freighter routes, and Elias got the information he needed. There were many who thought like him, enough that an entire Alliance to Restore the Republic had spawned.

He bided his time, and barely over 16, with more information from various drunk bar patrons and without the knowledge of his parents he slipped out of the walls in the night, packed low with supplies. Following his rough sketch of the terrain and the landmarks given by bar patrons he eventually found a camp. First apprehended and nearly thrown to the wilderness to die, he was eventually afforded the chance to prove his worth. A night raid on the mines let him show his prowess. Elias, young as he was, followed his compatriots with a light step and the finesse and ferocity of a professional. The mines, empty due to the hour and guarded by a skeleton force, were a target of ease. Slipping in, the small group of insurgents collapsed the mines and trashed what stock they could before scurrying back into the night.

Thought successful, the group scattered with the intent to leave the planet. After some internal conflict, Elias followed. Now 17, teetering on 18, he stowed away in the hold of a freighter and was shipped to the core, where, once in contact with Alliance officials and vouched for by his former peers at the raid on the Agaris Mines, he was inducted into one of the few initial Pathfinder units. Years as a Trooper in numerous built his capabilities and he was given a fireteam at the age of 25. He was shipped to Tatooine two years later with the rest of his company to coordinate guerrillas in raids against strategic targets, just in time for the Tantive IV to arrive and spark the Battle of Tatooine. The company and their local guerrilla allies fought valiantly, culminating in the Siege of Mos Eisley, where their hit and run tactics only by coincidence had allowed the escape of vital Alliance personnel. But it had come at great cost. The company was decimated and the allied guerrillas were scattered. The Pathfinders licked their wounds as they limped past the blockade aboard Alliance transports disguised as freighters, bound for the headquarters at Yavin 4. Elias underwent R&R as the Battle of Yavin raged in the heavens.

With news of the destruction of the Death Star, enlistment rates were in full swing and the Pathfinders took on many new recruits which showed too much aptitude to be relegated to the regular Army. At the turn of 1 ABY the Pathfinders were back to their initial numbers from before the disasters at Scarif and Tatooine. Months later their ranks had swollen beyond that. The Pathfinders were reorganised, and Elias gained a new billet as Sergeant commanding a squad. Spread out again after the evacuation of Yavin 4 and relegated to crippling infrastructure, minor raids ensued until the knowledge of the new base on Boz Pity being annihilated. Most Pathfinders were recalled to the new headquarters on the desolate ice planet of Hoth, where they were found in the crosshairs of another massive Imperial force.

Discovered again, the Imperials launched an all-out assault in which the Pathfinders bore the brunt along with the main infantry. All but destroyed once again, they took closure in knowing that the leaders of the Alliance had escaped, and themselves escaped with what personnel they could. Further losses sustained while passing the blockade did nothing for the numbers. Those that escaped, including Elias, were cut off from central leadership, and scattered into small units which hid amongst the populace of multiple planets. Months later, contact was re-established and the Pathfinders were reintegrated, and the most elite and battle-hardened of them were pulled and selected for the raid on Endor, though most of the Pathfinders, including Elias, were left with the fleet and in reserve. The resounding success on Endor spelled doom for the Empire. With all central Imperial leadership dead, the Empire scattered to the four winds and was replaced with petty squabbles of Moffs turned warlords, while the Alliance formed the New Republic.

Elias, in the emergence of a delayed bureaucratic transfer, was promoted for gallantry in combat at Hoth, and was given the billet of Staff Sergeant in the New Republic Army, with an operational detachment under the provisional undermanned 2nd Battalion of the 6th Pathfinder Regiment. Now subordinate to the battalion commander, Lieutenant Colonel Lance Thereon, a hero of the War, Elias was charged with the new normal operations. Blend in, gather intelligence, and don’t let anyone know your allegiance to the New Republic.

Name:
Klaatu Barada

Species:
Kadas'sa Nikto

Age:
43

Appearance:


Faction:
GORT Company
Equipment:
DT-57 heavy blaster
Light body/leg armor

Skills:
Unarmed Combat
Sidearms
Charismatic
Torture

Weaknesses:
Blinding hatred for hutts
Tunnel vision
Greedy
Over-Indulgent
Sadistic

History:
Klaatu was born on Nal Hutta, his parents forced to mate by the hutts as they needed the stock. He was the seventh of a dozen children that were produced by his mother before her body gave out. His childhood was spent learning to speak both his natural tongue and huttese, as well as receive training to be a guard. His natural size and stature made him the perfect body guard for the hutts. In his early years, the trainers soon realized Klaatu was more aggressive than his siblings, often exhibiting a mean streak. His trainers sought to groom this ruthlessness, often making Klaatu watch his siblings get beaten anytime he misbehaved. Soon he became dissociated from his family, no longer feeling anything when watching his brothers and sisters were assaulted. The destruction of his self conscience came when he was forced to fight his remaining siblings (those who had not already succumbed to their injuries) in a bare handed battle royale to the death. Upon finishing his combat training and his ‘education’ he was given to a member of the cartel.
Gorag was a small part of the Hutt cartel, only running a relatively small slave operation, with just a couple cargo ships and hired thugs. Klaatu, though disgusted by Gorag, quickly learned how to stay on the Hutt’s good side, as he was known for randomly offing a member of his crew without reason. Though the slave operation was small in its operation, its profit was tremendous, only having to pay its small crew, which could be made off of 1 maybe 2 twi'lek, depending on the size and age of course.
Gorag never bothered to learn the languages his slaves spoke, often ending their careers rather than wasting time trying to teach them. Seeing niche opening, Klaatu took it upon himself to relieve Gorag’s current translator from his position by removing his voice box. As gorag’s translator, Klaatu learned how Hutt business was done, how they got their cargo where it needed to be, who not to trust, where to store your credits if things get hairy, he became a sponge for information. Gorag soon began to like and even somewhat trust his translator/bodyguard giving him more and more responsibilities within his operation.
With the death of Jabba, Gorag sought to take some of the jobs left in his vacancy. This would mean a much larger hull of ‘cargo’ requiring more ships than they already had. Thanks to Hutt intelligence, Gorag caught wind of a prison ship trying to pass through hutt space discreetly, and saw opportunity to grow his business. Sending all his best available troops on a lone cargo ship, lead by Klaatu, the mission was simple, eliminate the crew, and bring the ship back.After boarding the ship, Klaatu and his gang immediately came under fire by guards patrolling the area. After eliminating the immediate threat of the guards, and capturing the ship for Gorag, Klaatu concocted a plan. Calling his crew, he offered them all an opportunity to leave Gorag permanently, and work for him, in his own business venture. Only half of the crew seemed interested in what he had to say. So he offered that half of the crew double the pay of this job to eliminate the opposing side, the decision was quick.
With his crew now reduced in half, Klaatu went over the intercom of the ship, making an offer to the prisoners aboard in the lower deck. Either join him, and work for him and receive a fair pay, or be executed here and now. Before allowing the prisoners to even consider the options, he order his troops to kill all prisoners in cell block D (¼ prisoner population, about 25). The remaining prisoners willingly joined him, some out of respect, others money, but all of them now fear their captain. Returning back to Nal Hutta, Klaatu was graciously received by his master/mentor Gorag. As a reward for a job well done, Gorag had transferred a large sum of credits into his account. Thanking Gorag, Klaatu bowed to his master and left the room as Gorag’s guards unloaded their weapons into their former master. With Gorag dead, and his former crew either dead or on his side, Klaatu took the reigns of what was Gorag’s business and began to make his own name in the universe.

Faction Logo:
Faction Name:
GORT (Galactic Organization of Retainer Traders) Company
Faction Classification:
Slave traders
Faction Leader:
Klaatu Barada
(TBD)
Faction Members(Players):

Important NPCs:



Faction Assets:
The Tartarus- Heavy Prison ship: 20-25 crew/upto 100 prisoners



4 Lambda transports: 6 crew/ upto 8 prisoners
Collectively about 60 crew members
Gorag’s Compound: Gorag owned a small cantina that acted as his base of operations and personal home. Now refitted for better serving their purpose.
Roughly 7 million credits

Faction History:
19BBY- Clone Wars end. Gorag seeks to expand his power in the cartel by eliminating other members of the cartel who impede steal his business.
17BBY- Gorag kills off all of his high ranking officers believing them to be out to get him, only allowing his personal guard and Klaatu into his quarters.
16BBY- Klaatu takes over the day to day operations of the business for Gorag, expanding the business into new ventures.
13BBY- Klaatu and his men begin attacking small villages for stock due to sales being at an all time high.
10BBY- gorag begins to pay his soldiers a ‘fair’ wage due to their commitment and success, though his men were beginning to see Klaatu holding all the cards.
9BBy- Gorag blunders, sending out a task force into dangerous territory with no planning, costing the whole crew dearly.
8BBY- Gorag’s men, lead by Klaatu, successfully capture a Heavy prisoner transport ship traveling through hutt space, with a loaded armory and full prisoner capacity.
A coup begins to form.
7.5BBY- Klaatu and his band of killers return with the ship, Gorag not knowing what had happened on the ship, welcomed his trusted ally back home. Already having paid off and convinced the rest of Gorag’s men, Klaatu killed his master, firmly placing him in charge.
7BBY- The company relaunches under new leadership and rearmed with updated equipment. Taking over right where they left off, they soon begin making more than they ever dreamed of.
4BBY- Small skirmish with the Hutt cartel, killing half the entire crew, and costing them 2 Lambdas.
2BBY- Massacre on Kintan. While recruiting on Kintan, Klaatu offered his native people an opportunity to join him. When the locals became hostile for fear they were to be enslaved if they said no, the village people attacked. The village was left in ashes.
1ABY- Business is at an all time high, with more buyers than ever seen before.
4ABY- Jabba dies, leaving the cartel weak, making it a prime time to steal contacts and further destroy the hutt empire. GORT company seeks to using the dying cartel to fertilize its own growth.

*Note: I'm looking for someone to co-run this faction with. Preferably a bounty-hunter-esque character who joined in about the same time The coup happens. Im aiming to make Klaatu more of a warden for the ship/slave-salesman. If anyone is interested, just let me know.*

Faction Name: Operations Detachment Foxtrot (ODF), Company A, 2nd Battalion (DETACHED), 6th Pathfinder Regiment. Operating undercover as a mercenary company detachment.

Faction Classification: Subordinate unit of New Republic Task Force Rancor.

Faction Leader: Staff Sergeant Elias Folen

Faction Members: WIP

Important NPCs: WIP

Faction Assets:

• 15 personnel
• A280 Blaster Rifles (x8)
• E11 Blaster Rifles (x5)
• T-21 Repeating Blaster Rifles (x2)
• HH-15 Shoulder-launched Multipurpose Assault Weapons (x2)
• Underbarrel RD-4 Grenade Launchers (x3)
• E-Web Heavy Repeating Blaster (x1)
• Clip-point Fighting Knives (x15)
• Scout Armor (x15)
• Survival Gear (x15)
• Combat Rations (x105)
• Overracer Speeder Bikes w/ Mk. 2/S Light Blaster Cannons (x5)

Faction History: The 6th Pathfinder Regiment (Provisional) was raised in 4 ABY after acts of the New Republic Senate called for a quick reaction force stationed abroad. It was raised with four battalions designated 1-4 with three companies each designated A-C, each company possessing six operations detachments designated ODA-ODF. 2nd Battalion in particular was given to Lieutenant Colonel Lance Thereon, a revered Pathfinder, competent commander, and hero of the War, and was assigned to Hutt Space as per orders to gather intelligence and standby for any necessary direct action.

Elias’s ODF of Company A was given to him after the Battle of Endor due to a backlog of orders which led to his promotion notice being dug up months after it was due.

Couple of notes, do I detect a hint of RvB? :P

Second: Your Imperial Friend wouldn't go into a Republic trap, he'd go into a Rebel Trap. The New Republic at this point has only existed for a couple of months maximum. That's not to say he couldn't have been on a Rebellion Prison ship, as they existed.

There's a couple of minor typos, but that doesn't bother me as much as we're in cas. I'm gonna say ~ Accepted.