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@RoflsMazoy I knew I forgot something... Zach does Have a joking Side...
@Burger I think our characters could actually be good friends...
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@RoflsMazoy

I'll insert my interest to this one here haha, looks promising.

Also Siege is the bomb.
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If this is all right so far, I'm having trouble coming up with a third ability. I know I don't need three, but I don't just want to leave it on the table. If this isn't all right I've got a different idea.
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@RoflsMazoy

I'll insert my interest to this one here haha, looks promising.

Also Siege is the bomb.


y v a n you cuck. Long time no see.

Anyways, I'd probably be interested...if I can get off my ass and actually write for once.
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@Gentlemanvaultboy I think my approach to this might be a bit too specific, but I'd recommend some kind of utility skill like maybe creating a flashlight or something along those lines. Vision is always nice to play around with so maybe a periscope? Or some cameras? It's a little bit of a stretch, even for me, though.
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Took your advice and modified her profile.
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Alright, I've finished The Vigilantes! Took a lot longer than expected *looks around sheepishly >.>* but with this, you should all aim to finalize your faction alignment.

(Also I'm pasting the section here because the other two are all the way on the first page)


I noticed a bit late that all of your relationship sections are a bit empty, so I'll say once you finalize alignments it'll be good to establish something for your faction leaders at the very least. If you want to have a deeper relationship with your faction leader than just having thoughts at them, just run it by me, although I'm going to go to sleep right after this.

But tomorrow I'll try and get the OOC thread up and running as soon as I can. The discord server link will also be there to make it easier to run stuff, but until then, night all!
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*salutes*

Sir, @RoflsMazoy, sir! I have edited my character's relationships, sir! I gave my character not a deeper relationship, but a bit of history with Clara, sir! Please tell me if this is OK, sir! I think it fits with the humorous tone you want for this RP, sir!

Sorry, I'll stop being weird now... sir...

The word sir now looks strange to me because I used it too much...

Edit: Noticed just now that even King hasn't been able to get a rise out of Clara, so my idea might not make sense... that or it makes it twice as hilarious. Up to you of course, but I figured I should let you know I did see that.


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Lmao. I'll be done with my CS shortly....

...sir?
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Hidden 7 yrs ago 7 yrs ago Post by Bartimaeus
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Here's mah dude. :D

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I know my backstory creation/description isn't the greatest but I try D:
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I've edited my post with an appearance pic, and Brutus' alignment.
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@Bartimaeus Triple post much XD
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@6slyboy6 Shhhhh
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@Bartimaeus Btw, I ain't no GM or anything, but your dude is appereantlky super strong and fast, can manipulate gravity, and cancel magical abilities (how does that cancel electricity?). Like, that seems to be MILDLY *cough cough* overpowered. Plus, if I'm being honest, your core power has nothing to do with your other abilities. Which isn't exactly forbidden, but I'm under the assumption that non themed powers are always worse. Especially since extra power and speed are a default for almost every character.
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Not sure where is says every character has extra power and speed, but if that is so, having essentially no secondary power is a pretty good drawback, wouldn't you say?
(It doesn't exactly cancel electricity, more like it will dispel a ball of electric energy, or cause any forced forms of it, like maybe a weapon, to be dispersed.)
Also, I was under the premise that being OP 'doesn't matter as much'.
Could you explain in your opinion which parts are overpowered, so that I may have some opinion on how to adjust it?
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@Bartimaeus Well, since your core is MAGIC NEGATION, having the ability shock foes telephatically is stupid and doesn't make sense. Same with controlling gravity just because you understand a lot about it.

If you made his core power something along the lines of PSYCHIC, then it would make sense that he can use mild telepathy. Gravity would still be unreasonable, but he could definetly levitate objects and such.

Now, advanced physical attributes is just weird tbh. It doesn't fit the picture in any way I see it. THis wouldn't be a big problem, but according to your description, he becomes SUPER STRONG. From what yoU've written, it seems to me that this ability is more than just a mild increase, and almost as powerful as strength based core power. Which is really stupid if you ask me, since your actual core is magic based and not fitness based.

I hope this clears up what I mean.
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OK, first of all, jebas f*ck formatting pls. It's a wall of text and hurts my eyes.

Please make his picture an actual picture, not a link, and then just put it under a hider. It's more pleasant for all involved.

Put in some spacing so we get rid of the great wall of text.

And then as for my opinion (I is still not GM, but slyboy there seems to be off at the moment), I don't wanna accuse you of what I think I'm seeing exactly, but it feels like you built him specifically to counter our characters. We have shadow girl, and your guy can touch the incorporeal, my guy has a shield, and he can cut through those, etc. It could just be argued that since everyone basically uses magic, that's just how it is... but then I can see why some might call him OP. Which could be fine as long as the execution in RP is good.

I'll grant he doesn't seem to otherwise have a directly offensive power, just personal buffs and crowd control from his gravity, but he does seem a little all over the place. Gravity definitely comes out of nowhere. I'd say one, please fix the formatting, two, give us a bit more lore as to why he has that specific set of powers. Give us some common thread that ties them together and make it more palatable and then we'll let the GM decide if his power set is OK.

Edit: Lol, got ninja'd by le potato man.

Edit2: playing devil's advocate, strength DOES make sense in my mind. He negates magic, and then fights back with the physical. But then we argue that telepathy and gravity are major outliers.
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What you said about the "shocking" thing, he isn't really doing that, he is attacking his opponent's mind with his own, causing a severe migraine-type pain. (I know when I have migraine my vision gets really bright and I can't see)
I also didn't mean he could control gravity just because he understands it, but he is an intelligent student, who strives to about more about gravity because he wants to perfect every part of his ability.

Sorry about the formatting, I just pasted it from Docs, the formatting changes xD
I chose the ability to use Magic Negation because I really like that kind of defensive style, and I've had a few of my main characters in the past use it. Quite frankly, it may look like i'm trying to counter you, because that's what negating someone's magic does xD

As I understand it, there isn't a requirement for my powers to be themed..but I may be wrong. The OP's opinion on the matter will be final. But I will definitely take into consideration the suggestions y'all took the time to put forth. I'll either tweak them to make them less OP, or if the OP decides, i'll change the powers all together.(I'll look to make it more lore-friendly too) Thank you.

EDIT: I think I have a way to make it better already
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@KillamriX88 The ninja spud strikes again, his victims unknowing of his incredible typing speed

@Bartimaeus Yeah he can definetly control it: "Samoth can choose to increase or reduce the level of gravity in an area of his choosing, up to 25 square feet." Just ebcause I understand a lot about astrophysics, I cannot summon a meteor to hit my enemy.

A theme wasn't a requirement, yes, but so far everyone has been doing it. Now, that doesn't mean you have to, but still, I personally feel that you have powers in pretty much every possible area, which makes your character omnipotent. He can counter single attack and has CC reduction, he is super strong and fast, and he has crowd control abilities alongside stun. That is not to mention that it ignores magic (which is a weird thing, cause WHAT IS magic in this RP?), allows it to touch the untouchable, sap enemies of their power and basically control the enviroment just because he knows how things work.

My opinion is that the character has a power level WAAAAAAY higher than anyone else. Your Newton Control can do more things that what the entire arsenal of others can. Not to mention that you didn't say any downsides at all, maknig your character basically infinitely good at using all of his abilities.

Set THESE aside, he has military background, is trained in martial arts, and is a physically perfect specimen. Make him strive to help others too, and you'll have a perfect Gary Sue.

Bottom line is, I like the character's IDEA, but the execution feels haphazard at best. Not to mention that the wall of text is making my eyes bleed.

Just to make it clear, this is nothing personal, and it is just my opinion.
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