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I can only imagine what happens when our Fellowship of Zelda encounters their equivalent of the Water Temple.

Zwei: *Sits there making a tap dancing illusion of his Goron teammate wearing a top hat while the others try to solve the puzzle*
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They'd probably die due to a lack of coordination.

"Alright, lower the water level more!"

"W-WAIT!! I SAID LOWER IT, NOT RAISE IT! I ' M G O N N A D I E!"


Despite the panic, Dekkunda just sort of... Floats up to the top like he's a buoy. Hard to swim beyond that without arms though.
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They'd probably die due to a lack of coordination.

"Alright, lower the water level more!"

"W-WAIT!! I SAID LOWER IT, NOT RAISE IT! I ' M G O N N A D I E!"


Despite the panic, Dekkunda just sort of... Floats up to the top like he's a buoy. Hard to swim beyond that without arms though.


It will be up to the magnificent Trash Wizard to save the day. Nevermind, he is too busy screaming out of his lungs after seeing a random bug crawling out of a pot.
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It will be up to the magnificent Trash Wizard to save the day. Nevermind, he is too busy screaming out of his lungs after seeing a random bug crawling out of a pot.


Solid, understandable reasoning.

bugs are pretty gross
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Hmm, trying to decide which one would add more chaos to the ensemble; a hot-headed, xenophobic Gerudo or an overly trusting, curious Rito? I've got concepts for both, so just gotta settle.
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My opinion; The whole interview / vocal application style of the first half of the CS isn't the greatest to read, but he seems to fit into the ragtag bunch pretty well.


Any suggestions to improve the writing/readability? Since he's basically the "wandering hero/swordsman" archetype with a Confucian/Zen/etc flavor, I made his answers roundabout and wordy, but the more I look at it now the more I wonder if it should instead be kept short and sweet like the quotations/parables he'll be throwing out?

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Any suggestions to improve the writing/readability? Since he's basically the "wandering hero/swordsman" archetype with a Confucian/Zen/etc flavor, I made his answers roundabout and wordy, but the more I look at it now the more I wonder if it should instead be kept short and sweet like the quotations/parables he'll be throwing out?


It's less how it's worded, and more just the clash with the usual style of how a CS is filled out. It's not a big deal, I just personally prefer the past tense/third person informative norm. I think you're fine; It gets across what it needs to, and nobody's asking more than that. (At least I'm not).
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I mean, the GM was pretty loose and abstract in what they wanted with CSs. So I think its probably fine?
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Hmm, trying to decide which one would add more chaos to the ensemble; a hot-headed, xenophobic Gerudo or an overly trusting, curious Rito? I've got concepts for both, so just gotta settle.


I imagine if you go with the Gerudo she'll be wanting some serious reward for travelling with our odd bunch consisting of a rock creature, a bush, a fairy child, a shadow being from another realm, and etc. lol
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@Raddum Ah, I see. No worries, I'll still be using third-person past tense in my posts--I decided to do the CS that way because one point of the character is to be somewhat mysterious about his past, but obviously omitting or shortening things would have made a very sparse profile. For instance, his "backstory" tells you basically nothing at all. But with the "interview" style I felt I was able to give a better feel for the character even though the whats and whys of him, his origins, aren't explored, and of course pad it out longer. Like purple prose but hopefully not groan inducing.

@Product Any chance of an ETA on this IC?
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@Product Any chance of an ETA on this IC?


I'm hoping to get the first IC post up by tomorrow.
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I'm hoping to get the first IC post up by tomorrow.


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I imagine if you go with the Gerudo she'll be wanting some serious reward for travelling with our odd bunch consisting of a rock creature, a bush, a fairy child, a shadow being from another realm, and etc. lol


Ha, not gonna lie, that's definitely why I've been leaning more towards her. Just the constant exasperation on her part. "Go with the foreigners, they said. Learn about the outside world, they said. Nobody told me I was going to travel with a fucking bush. And who let a child in here?! And that-- is that rock naked? I mean, it-- it is a rock, but..."
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Nobody told me I was going to travel with a fucking bush.


Racist!

Dekkunda's not even mad; Just sad and disappointed.

jk fucker you're going to get shot tonight
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Ha, not gonna lie, that's definitely why I've been leaning more towards her. Just the constant exasperation on her part. "Go with the foreigners, they said. Learn about the outside world, they said. Nobody told me I was going to travel with a fucking bush. And who let a child in here?! And that-- is that rock naked? I mean, it-- it is a rock, but..."


"I'm a etc. I feel flattered. Maybe. No not really. What's an etc?" - Bilko before starting to cry in a corner.
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Racist!

Dekkunda's not even mad; Just sad and disappointed.

jk fucker you're going to get shot tonight

bitch bring it

-insert a joke about rowdy bushes and nutjobs here-
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Double posting - avoids the rotten tomatoes- but here's a wip of this trainwreck! Just need some lunch before tackling the history.

Also will probably change the pic like 10000 times. Curse the lack of era-appropriate dark-skinned females.



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or examine that one very suspicious lever that everyone keeps screaming at her not to approach,


So SHE'S the one responsible for killing everyone in the water temple.

For the sake of his leaves not being plucked off and him not being punted across Hyrule Field, I think Dekkunda can keep a level head and accept it as his mistake.

bitch bring it

-insert a joke about rowdy bushes and nutjobs here-


On second thought no, you go right ahead ma'am hahapleasedon'tkillme
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Ha, not gonna lie, that's definitely why I've been leaning more towards her. Just the constant exasperation on her part. "Go with the foreigners, they said. Learn about the outside world, they said. Nobody told me I was going to travel with a fucking bush. And who let a child in here?! And that-- is that rock naked? I mean, it-- it is a rock, but..."


"They say a red thread connects those destined to meet, despite time, place and circumstance. The thread can draw tight, or be tangled--and you, my lady, seem to be tying yourself in knots. But, perhaps I'll be grateful you've no insults for me, haha!"

*Drifter immediately gets punched in the face*
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So SHE'S the one responsible for killing everyone in the water temple.

For the sake of his leaves not being plucked off and him not being punted across Hyrule Field, I think Dekkunda can keep a level head and accept it as his mistake.

Accept it as his mistake, oh my god.

But yes, definitely. If they ever get to the water temple; she'll want to 1v1 the fire temple dragon. And then blame it on everyone else when things go south.

Dekkunda, why did you want to fight the big fire-breathing monster?? For shame.

On second thought no, you go right ahead ma'am hahapleasedon'tkillme
Wise choice.

She'll still poke him repeatedly with a blade though. You know, out of curiosity.


"They say a red thread connects those destined to meet, despite time, place and circumstance. The thread can draw tight, or be tangled--and you, my lady, seem to be tying yourself in knots. But, perhaps I'll be grateful you've no insults for me, haha!"

*Drifter immediately gets punched in the face*

#Accurate. Especially if by punched you mean stabbed and by face you mean-- actually, face works. But he has a cool sword, so she'll be nice and only stab once!

I'm apologizing for 99% of her interactions in advance. To her credit, she will try.
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