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Hidden 6 yrs ago Post by Hitman
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@Hitman are demons something that will be involved in this rp?


....maybe

@HitmanI'm guessing I'm already cleared then?


yes, move em over



All done!

Cheers!


will review more thoroughly tomorrow morning, but will say looks nice :)
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<Snipped quote by pkken>

....maybe

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yes, move em over

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will review more thoroughly tomorrow morning, but will say looks nice :)


Thank you!

I'm really looking forward to your review.

Let me know if I need to make any changes!

Cheers! :)
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Was my CS overlooked despite being done?
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Was my CS overlooked despite being done?


Looks like it might have gotten lost in the business of the last day. I look forward to having someone else with an unnaturally large weapon to whack people with!
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There's honestly a lot. I'd say those not yet accepted should bring theirs up again. Even I miss CS' frequently when dealing with a lot of entrants.
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There's honestly a lot. I'd say those not yet accepted should bring theirs up again. Even I miss CS' frequently when dealing with a lot of entrants.

It's just in my experience GMs review sheets chronologically, so I am not used to this. Not trying to be rudey-rude, tho.
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@Hitman Just in case you missed it, I have a sheet all the way back on page 2.


So, about your sheet.

I know, I'm not GM but I'm just gonna give my quick two cents. Feel free to ignore me if you want.

First, there are numerous plot-related reasons that Dragon Slayers shouldn't really exist in fandom. At least, first and third Gen anyway. And it seems to me you know none of them, which reeeealy hurts your ability to properly do a DS. I can't explain them at all here because it's so wrapped in spoilers it's basically radioactive.

But, that aside...from the sparse details of your bio, it seems like a Dragon just came upon a two-year-old and decided to...kidnap him? Even with his dad (who probably smells the same) probably lying unconscious not that far away?

Then the dragon...taught the kidnapped kid magic...designed to slay it "as a way to protect himself from the dangers of the forest".

That's like handing a random kid a flamethrower and teaching him to use it to protect your house from burglars. Then testing him by pretending to be a burglar yourself.

And finally, but most importantly, Hitman has officially closed S class spots. Quoth:

"I'm going to close S-Rank off with this, in order to prevent insanity. If you're already in and cleared, don't worry, but if you're just reading this, sorry :p."

So I don't think you are in because you even had to ask. You'll have to tone power way down if you want to be accepted.

I really suggest going back and doing a rewrite.
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Here ye go @Hitman



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For your review, if ever it fits your standards :D

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Hidden 6 yrs ago 6 yrs ago Post by ShwiggityShwah
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@Hitman

I know you are getting hit with bios up down and sideways. I would like to get started on a character but am wondering if there are too many applicants already.

Again, I'm hoping to make the guilds primary healer. Uses alchemical formulations with magic that delves into healing, medicine, chemistry, poison, disease, and entropy.

I want this character to have ties to the world serpent, one of their alchemist that created their potion that has spurned his old guild for something more fulfilling and more positive. Maybe he owes the Guild Master a debt for taking in a known criminal. Just an idea, i can help develop a whole bunch of dramas with the World Serpent and my character that meshes with the Guild Master's story.
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@Hitman


Reposting my character sheet due to changes made.

-Added the location of his guild mark.
-Changed and simplified his magic.

Cheers!
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@Hitman PMed you the character sheet to make the review easier. That's legit the reason. Totally didn't do it exclusively because I don't like searching stuff in the OOC.
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@Quincy sorry, I thought I had reviewed it and responded. You're in.

@Reflection While I'm open to having your character be the S+ mage and think he's balanced personally and magically, there's a couple plot holes.
1. The Zanthrax family, as one of Dragon Slayers, would probably be recognized as a distinct threat to Dragons and be executed if put in a vulnerable position.
2. Even if the Dragon took pity on Lil Boy, he wouldn't teach a Zanthrax...the art of killing Dragons.
3. Where did that cloth come from? Dragons can't really write all too well.
Please make those clarifications STAT.

@Aeolian Lor is accepted! Welcome in!

@pkken and @Esran- welcome in! You're accepted. Nice chairs btw.

@Spanner- seen! Will comment soon.

@ShwiggityShwah :) aye aye

I'd like to close all Dragon Heart entries for now (save @Lmpkio's other char, ). Any villain entries may be submitted via PM.

Moving to begin Arc #1 soon- keep em eyes peeled! Watch the thread btw, so many of you to mention I cant really 0_0
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@Hitman Have you thought about making a Discord for this RP? That way we can discuss things more easily.
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@Valor I'm seconding that. Am too lazy to refresh the forum every once in a while.
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I'd like to close all Dragon Heart entries for now


Er… does this include WIPs? I'm still finishing my sheet. I have more time than I though I would because my day wasn't as busy as I expected.
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Er… does this include WIPs? I'm still finishing my sheet. I have more time than I though I would because my day wasn't as busy as I expected.


I'm in the middle of typing one now, but this is my question as well. I'm sorry, I got an 'Aye Aye' followed by 'no more entries' Unless you're squarely looking for villains and I can easily do this as well.

I was in the middle of a house move when the OOC went up.
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discord.gg/JD582pn

^^^^ join for fun

EDIT: just saw forum update, any WIPs (including @ShwiggityShwah) are OK, just no new people (you lurkers reading this).
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@Hitman So may I add Saya in?
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