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Quick question, you mentioned in the opening post that the RP would have three episodes, following rebel infantry, imperial agents, and mercenary pilots. Did you mean that you wanted everyone to make a Rebel for the first part, an Imperial for the second part, and so on?


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I've started work on a sarcastic, pacifist (99.9% of the time) Bith medic. He will save your life and he won't let you forget it.


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So this is extremely WIP, the image link keeps breaking for some reason, the background is missing some padding and detailing and obviously the latter two sections are not filled out at all, but I figured I'd post what I have so far here for you guys to critique and hopefully give a bit of constructive criticism to flesh out the character further and point him more in the right direction. As always, thanks for any and all feedback!



EDIT: Added a full inventory and flaws to the sheet, leaving just skills, a working image and a callsign. Any callsign recommendations please feel free to suggest as I am stumped.
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@Gcold Gotcha. And don't worry, if he had any of the fancy Mandalorian jetpacks or flamethrowers I would have listed it.
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the image link keeps breaking for some reason


I think it's associated with the DOS scan, try and upload it to discord or Imgur and then post that link
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Excellent, @POOHEAD189. The captain is approved.


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Hello there, @The Elvenqueen.
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@Gcold Filled out the rest of my sheet, call it a first draft. I shall await your feedback eagerly.
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@Gcold Filled out the rest of my sheet, call it a first draft. I shall await your feedback eagerly.


Very nice! Fibu is a well-crafted character hitting all the right notes (and I'm seeing a bit of Desmond Doss in him ). His background, personality and capabilities play nicely with each other, and his inventory has a lot of details. The only thing I would add is some more motivation; what horrific act did Fibu witness the Empire commit?

As for his callsign, the generic "Doc" works just fine. Something like "Buzzer" or "Plug", referencing his sound sensitivity and less-than-spectacular music talents, are also fitting choices.

That's all from me. Let's see if @Zoey White has anything to say.
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@Blitzy hell yeah brother that's a really cool character please come into the RP now yes
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@Blitzy You should join the Discord! Would be nice to have all the official members on the channel together.
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I seem to have lost the discord link...
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And I'm seeing a bit of Desmond Doss in him


Won't even try to hide it, I knew I wanted to do a medic but was struggling for an idea I really liked and then happened to watch Hacksaw Ridge again. Fibu is basically Spacedoss. I'll pad out his motivations a bit more when I get home this evening!

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This is what I have so far. Thoughts, ideas, concerns?

EDIT: Didn't realize how barren it is since I can see the backstory. NOW any questions, comments, thoughts, or concerns?

EDIT 2: And now the whole sheet is there. Boy that Back story though.
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Good stuff, @Zarkun. Ren is an intersting character, with a detailed childhood that explains his motivation in the galaxy. There's a few things I'd like you to clarify before he's approved.

  • Ren's age is 42, but his background says he's served for two years since the age of 32, making him 34. 34 seems like the more resonable one here.
  • Appearance needs more details. Ren seems like a relatively big guy. How does he take advantage of his size? And how does he maneuver in those tight quarters?
  • I couldn't find MA65 carbine or T-70 pistol in SW databases. Custom equipment is fine, but it'd be better if you change one of these blasters to a canon one, and explain how Ren obtained his custom one.
  • How fluent is Ren at Shyriiwook and Dosh? And how did he reach these levels of fluency?
  • Being a poor ranged fighter is a good balancing weakness. What are the causes of this, though? Perhaps nearsightedness from growing up in poorly lit slums? Maybe his hands get twichy from previous injuries? Or a fear of open spaces from living exclusively in tightly packed areas?


I'm enjoying what I see so far! Let's see what @Zoey White has to say.
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@Zarkun I pretty much agree with GCold. He's a very big and hypothetically strong guy, but who says big guys can't be quick guys, hmm? certainly not me.

i do like the idea of him having some wacky tobaccy gun he built/heavily modified himself, but i do agree that at least some of his loadout should be canon and recognizable, you know? but if like, that MA65 is something he kept around from his Gang War days would be pretty cool IMO.

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@Zarkun I pretty much agree with GCold. He's a very big and hypothetically strong guy, but who says big guys can't be quick guys, hmm? certainly not me.

i do like the idea of him having some wacky tobaccy gun he built/heavily modified himself, but i do agree that at least some of his loadout should be canon and recognizable, you know? but if like, that MA65 is something he kept around from his Gang War days would be pretty cool IMO.


That's actually exactly what it is. I might have forgotten when I finished to go back to all the spots where it says "snub-barreled blaster rifle" and fix it. I couldn't find anything specifically from canon that fit that role, since I imagine the E-11 wouldn't be something civilians would want to get caught with.
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@Zarkun Great! I don't think the modified rifle is the issue, instead his dueling pistols could be something from the canon.
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@Zarkun Ren speaks Dosh? Cragdor approves!
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