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man Arn got all the ladies lol
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@NaturalTendency An interesting character but here are a few things I need clarified or fixed up.
-Appearance: Pointed ears
This is fine, though I will remind you that there are only humans and those humans with magic. You cannot be some precursor to elves or the like.
- Skills: embroidery
Where did she learn this along with her other skills? Sewing I could see, but embroidery is the fancy pictures people decorate clothes with.
-History:
You say she learned reading, writing, finances, etiquette... However, books are rare. Reading and writing is a skill kept mostly to the nobility and priesthood. It is even less common among the North- which I assume your character is from. Finances could be something but up north it's mostly bartering. Etiquette, I need an elaboration on... She's not learning the politics of a noble, so is she just learning good manners?
Also, while I like the bio, I must insist on knowing what this rage Isolde went through was. Green magic allows a connection to the forest but it does not turn you into a werewolf. I have no knowledge as to why she was doing some sort of count? Or why that suddenly triggered her to go berserker? And why were there corpses in the opening paragraphs? Do you have any ideas on what happened to Luna or should I as the DM draw something on my own for that? Also, how and why did a Southern woman met a Northern man who it seems have the Green? How did Luna get to the North? Why was she being chased by wolves? (Note, Wolves rarely will go after people. They will if it's a famine year, but it's not something that is common. Nature, in truth, rarely attacks without reason.)
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@LadyRunic

The pointed ears are a morphic result of her green magic so no worries about elves.

She learned her skills from the woman that raised her. The woman was once a high tier merchant that lost out to competition and now lives alone and by her own needs. If you wish I can remove the skill as it is mostly there for the depth of the character. If it is not a reasonable skill you believe her to have I can remove it immediately. No harm - no foul.

As I stated for the above the woman that raised her knew of these things because I thought it was something a high tier merchant would have but it was a misunderstanding on my end. I can remove any and all skills you feel is not realistic for my OC to have. And yes my character is Northern. The rage came about due to the imbalance of the forest she lived near. Whenever there is destruction to the forest (eg a fire) it upsets her emotions and puts her into a rage or depression (mostly rage). And I was merely trying to be poetic about the connection didn't realize I made it seem like she was transforming. I do apologize for getting too carried away. The counting was she was learning dance steps and was counting them in her head. Again if you wish it I can remove it. I do love your story and lore and would love to be a realistic part of it. The berserk was a fire that set her emotions off and calming was when other people put it out. She at the time did not know this and assumed the connection was just her running in the forest. And ah, the corpses. I made it seem like a lot but it was only 3 poachers that her mother came across and nearly died for and her father saved her from. As for the mother, I was debating on whether she is dead or has amnesia. Pardon me for the vague details on some points since I created her shortly after finding this roleplay so I do not have every detail laid out. If you wish to add or subtract anything you find interesting I am open to input. As for why the biological mother was in the North to meet the father I haven't figured out yet either. I, honestly, wasn't trying to think of a reason. I just thought of how her parents met and essentially rolled with it. I can think on it to give further details if needed but I will require some time. As for being chased by wolves, she was weak, ready on labour and alone in their territory to me it seemed she would be easy enough prey for them. They were simply hungry wolves wanting to eat. I thought of them as animals with no motive other than their own survival. This is another detail we can change if you wish.

I apologize for the late reply. I have not lost interest. I believe I am in another one of your roleplays (or trying to be lol) and explained my situation so I hope you don't mind if I don't repeat myself at this time. As much as I have respect for keeping communication it is not something I want to have to keep saying. I hope in all this you do not perceive me being upset or rude for I am not either. (or trying not to be rude.)
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@NaturalTendencyNot at all! And you are fine. I'm just nit-picking now so that we are on the same page. I've been in an Rp where not enough questions or thoughts about my character were asked and a lot was assumed very different on my side and the GM. So that's why I'm picking thing apart now. If you want to take time and think things out and change anything, go ahead. And PM or @ me any questions. I usually look three times (at least) a day.

Assuming the adoptive mother was from a Northern merchant family, she could be very well off. The Adoptive mother would know dances and embroidery then, though not in the same style of the Southern ladies. She may also have a firm grasp on the basics of reading or writing and a very firm grasp on arithmetic. Though these skills would lean more towards the merchant side of things. Northern girls were involved in the business, unlike Southern women.

As for wolves chasing the mother and her past. I believe I have the root of an idea forming there, but it comes at a cost for you. One, I will need to know why Isolde's adoptive mother lives alone and not in a town as she is from a merchant family. Plus, Isolde and the adoptive mother would be located in the Southern reaches, near the border between North and South. You can either be surprised or ask more questions and I will answer all I can and you can approve or disapprove of the ideas.

And you're writing is lovely, my only suggestion is to work on clarity.

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Update is coming soon. Sorry for the wait!
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Again, sorry for the wait. I'm planning for an update in the next few days, it's been one thing after another this month!
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That's alright. Stuff happens.
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I'd...actually meant for Gwen to stay in place while mimicking Arn's movements...
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@CyraniaFixed it up. Sorry about that!
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im under the impression someone's been fooling with magic and that's what happened

anyway im not sure where to take Mira rn so she's just kinda vibing at that tavern, i'm not quitting im just not sure what else to do until something occurs in town

so if i seem quiet im still here dont worry
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@Blizz Geel free to go about town, talk to people. I can agree there is magic however its not what you think.
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my bad, for some reason i thought that @LadyRunic was next. I try to get something up to work with.
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A reply will be coming tomorrow.
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Hidden 4 yrs ago Post by Cyrania
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I'm sorry guys. I've been losing motivation for this...
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@CyraniaAnything I can do to help on my side of things?
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@Cyrania sorry to hear that. I was looking forward to more interactions with you. Like @LadyRunic said, anything I can do?
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Thanks. But...

Maybe I could try more.
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Because you guys have been great. I just know that I have been the shorter poster of everyone, even as I try to streatch out what I post.
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@Cyrania
We're in a more action oriented scene to be fair. You can't really be expected to write an essay about applying a poultice. You are hardly Tolkien!
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