[OOC] The Wards: A Grimdark Teenage Superhero Story (Page 5)

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@Mintz and I have gone over the profile and have a few things we would like to see change and get clarification on before being able to accept your profile. We would be glad to work with you to figure out a direction you want to go in while keeping it within the world that has been created.

1: We would really appreciate a written description in the Appearance section. I know this might seem redundant but this allows us to get a feel on what your character likes to wear, how they view certain things, if there is anything particularly valuable to the character, and so on. Please look in the character tab for examples if you are unsure.

2: We are confused about the memory-altering of the father in the background. It feels a bit out of place and doesn’t seem necessary. We would like a bit more clarification on it and to see if there is any possible hidden importance on why that section is needed. We aren’t saying no yet but we just would like to know some of the reasoning as it feels abruptly placed in. 

3: The Trigger event of this character is kept too vague for our liking. It is vague enough that we literally can't say in good faith that his Power fits the Trigger. If you could provide more detail or let us know if there is some hidden element we are missing that would really be helpful. We are also confused by the fact that it sounds like they ended up in a forest but Redline is a coastal city. We ask this because something that big (dragon form) leaving the city would have been a huge red flag so we need a bit more detail. 

4: The Power has a lot going on and with such a vague Trigger it’s hard to know where to really start. We understand that subclasses exist but those are a direct correlation to a power and not so much additions to a power. Also, these powers all together contain almost half the classifications. It doesn’t seem to hold a deep reason other than playing to the dragon aesthetic which is where there is a problem if that is all that you are going for with the subclasses. That being said, some of the powers listed could be powers in their own right which is concerning as we are leaning towards overpowered. We can obviously work together to keep the aesthetic you are going for but fitting more for a Changer. 

5: One of the aspects of the powers that we are flat out denying at this time is the ability to change into any animal. This is just not how Changers work as they are mostly bound to a single alternate form. 

I hope you understand our points and are open to the corrections we have requested. We look forward to seeing the updates and again, are more than happy to work with you to get this so we can fully accept.

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@Mintz and I have gone over the profile and have a few things we would like to see change and get clarification on before being able to accept your profile. We would be glad to work with you to figure out a direction you want to go in while keeping it within the world that has been created.

1: We would really appreciate a written description in the Appearance section. I know this might seem redundant but this allows us to get a feel on what your character likes to wear, how they view certain things, if there is anything particularly valuable to the character, and so on. Please look in the character tab for examples if you are unsure.

2: We are confused about the memory-altering of the father in the background. It feels a bit out of place and doesn’t seem necessary. We would like a bit more clarification on it and to see if there is any possible hidden importance on why that section is needed. We aren’t saying no yet but we just would like to know some of the reasoning as it feels abruptly placed in. 

3: The Trigger event of this character is kept too vague for our liking. It is vague enough that we literally can't say in good faith that his Power fits the Trigger. If you could provide more detail or let us know if there is some hidden element we are missing that would really be helpful. We are also confused by the fact that it sounds like they ended up in a forest but Redline is a coastal city. We ask this because something that big (dragon form) leaving the city would have been a huge red flag so we need a bit more detail. 

4: The Power has a lot going on and with such a vague Trigger it’s hard to know where to really start. We understand that subclasses exist but those are a direct correlation to a power and not so much additions to a power. Also, these powers all together contain almost half the classifications. It doesn’t seem to hold a deep reason other than playing to the dragon aesthetic which is where there is a problem if that is all that you are going for with the subclasses. That being said, some of the powers listed could be powers in their own right which is concerning as we are leaning towards overpowered. We can obviously work together to keep the aesthetic you are going for but fitting more for a Changer. 

5: One of the aspects of the powers that we are flat out denying at this time is the ability to change into any animal. This is just not how Changers work as they are mostly bound to a single alternate form. 

I hope you understand our points and are open to the corrections we have requested. We look forward to seeing the updates and again, are more than happy to work with you to get this so we can fully accept.@Akayaofthemoon

Okay. I'll do those today~

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"The stars weep for you. Just kidding, I already forgot your name."

Name: Thelonious Kastrati

Alias: Constellation

Nicknames: Thelony

Age: 17

Gender: A boi

Personality: Thelonious is somewhat awkward, with a pretty quiet disposition and a few words. He is noted to be highly enamored by ‘cute, fluffy animals’, and possesses a keen sense of intuition of trustworthiness. Thelonious is pretty protective of those folks he happens to like, though those that he had a bad experience of could expect to be suddenly abandoned in the middle of a fight. 

Aside from that, Thelonious is incredibly petty. Ruin his day, or his property? He’ll do the same, but he’ll try to make it a bit worse for whoever pissed on his parade. He is pretty much the embodiment of karma in this regard; actions will come back around, so better be nice to the guy, or else you’ll find yourself randomly inconvenienced by small, but infuriating things. Rule of thumb with Thelonious, then, is that he always returns to sender.

Appearance:

Thelonious is 5’3” in height, with markedly Caucasian features, though he gravitates to the somewhat tanner side. His pupils are amber in color, accompanied by black framed glasses. His clothing choices usually gravitate around cloaks and other comfortable, flowing garments. Apparently, he sees it as ‘liberating’. The flat cap seems to be a favorite of his whenever he doesn’t have to use the Cape costume.

As a Cape, he uses a suit that is shielded from the effects of his own stars, such as bright flashes and radiation. The cape on his back has a star pattern on it, which seamlessly blends into the starry sky at night. The vital areas are covered by protective kevlar, while a high grade helmet with a wide visor keeps his head safe. Overall, it is quite comfortable to be in, just as he prefers all clothes to be. It is not the most mobile of outfits, but it serves its purpose.

Biography: Thelonious wasn’t from Redline originally. Nor was he originally a citizen of the United States, either. His earliest memories, at least as far as he is willing to admit, traces back to their apartment in the city of Pristina, Kosovo, as the firstborn son of Selim and Jelena Kastrati. He was not born as ‘Thelonious’ either, but as Valon Kastrati. That is all long behind him, however.

Either way, Thelonious doesn’t remember all too much of his home country, as his family left it when he was five years old due to the highly volatile situation that it was in. They first arrived in New York City, and then moved up further north into Maine, where they finally settled down, somewhat. There, they all changed their first names, though they kept the surname that they had back in Kosovo. Now, though, they faced a whole new world.

As a child, he had the dream of becoming an astronaut, and reaching out towards the stars. Every night, he would look through the telescope, thinking of impossible dreams as typical for someone of such a young age. He knew every famous star and constellation, recognizing them as they shone in the night sky. Thelonious, as he was called since then, had quite a few difficulties with the English language, and was as such bullied for it in school, though that was simply the first reason. Other causes arose, namely because of his lack of aptitude for sports, and other generic reasons.  He was passive though, and simply took it without telling anyone else, as he knew he couldn't fight back against the likes of them. Not like this. He would just get beaten even more. To make matters worse, his mother had been feeling unwell a lot of the time, but she always said that it was just her getting tired at work, which just made Thelonious worry to the point of being nearly physically sick. It seemed that the sorry state of everything was going to stay that way for a very long time.

One day, however, everything changed. Thelonious' mother had fallen ill. All those headaches weren’t just from the stress of work; it was a brain tumour. Alas, they didn't have the money to pay for the medication/medical bills to aid with her situation. She was, in all respects, dying.

In desperation, Thelonious’ father and uncle went to a dangerous, but deceptively friendly connection. They did not know what price they might pay in the process of getting the funds they required, but surely any sacrifice was worth it, if only her life was saved? By this point, Thelonious’ mother’s cancer was close to getting to a terminal stage, and there was little time left before it would begin to be difficult to dislodge. 

That connection that they went to, it turned out, was a group for organized crime, who had them meet outside at night, where the Milky Way itself was visible in the sky. They were apparently willing to provide the money that the Kastratis needed, if only they would do something in return. That something, however, was heinous in its nature. Murderous, even. The boss wanted someone dead, and the assassination was their price. Thelonious father and uncle balked at this. They had expected something that would involve them and themselves alone, but it now seemed that this would be a life for a life. Now that they know who was the target, though, they cannot leave. Not until they say yes to the deal. 

And so, the gangsters took hold of Thelonious’ father and uncle, and began to beat them to submission. The crime lord made him watch, forcibly keeping his eyes open even as he tried to look away. Here, he felt rage, and chaos. Rage at his father for believing that it was a good idea to plead the mafia for aid. Rage at the mafia for what they were now doing, and what they would make them do in exchange for a promise they may never carry out. He managed to close his eyes shut, if only for a moment, and heard only the chaos from his surroundings; the laughing of vicious thugs, the cries of pain, the sounds of blunt implements impacting against flesh. Rage. Disorder. They were all his to bear.

At that moment, an entity that skirted in the dimensions far above the ken of mortal perceptions found a suitable vessel. A shard unraveled, and in a split second, Thelonious was enlightened. He could now create the shiniest of lights, the fiercest of flames. And so, instead of his family being the victims that night, the gangsters were annihilated. Orbs of starlight blinded them, before searing hot orbs set clothing and flesh alight. The chaotic constellation that ensued wiped out the gangsters, purging them from the face of the earth. The gang were all dead, and the Kastrati clan still lived. The money, which had been in a suitcase as a fleeting proof of the deal they could have made, was now theirs for the taking. His mother will live, but at what cost?

Later in the morning, as the Kastratis recovered and spoke to one another about the events of last night, the PRT showed up at their door. PRT investigations found traces of ionized gas within the area of concern, as well as charred bodies belonging to some of the most notorious gangsters in the state. Investigations pinpointed just who these gangsters were supposed to meet at the night, which led them to this moment. It was clear, however, that Thelonious cannot remain in regular society like this. His parents were somewhat resistant to the idea that their only child is to go away from them, but they relented after about a week as the ultimatum became heavier. In exchange for around the clock protection for them, Thelonious was to enter the Wards Program. 

Powers:

Cosmogenesis (Blaster 6): Thelonious produces and channels plasma energy. He is as such able to create and maintain up to four miniature stars at a given time, with three distinct modes that operate in a sliding scale of heat and light. They can move at around 7 to 8 meters per second, with any turns requiring pauses in movement.

Mode 1 (Searing Star): Capable of melting through most metals, as well as turning sand into glass at physical contact. By far the dimmest, but the most potent in terms of destructive potential. These can immolate most materials that they may come across.

Mode 2 (Blinding Star): Little to no destructive capability, but the brightness emanating when it is created acts as a powerful flashbang, temporarily disorienting and blinding those who had not protected their eyes.

Mode 3 (Main Sequence): Seemingly unremarkable, these main sequence stars, as he calls them, are able to sear wood and stone, and can be difficult to look at for prolonged periods. This is the foundation from which the other two derive from in their creation. 

Skills: When he was still unpowered, Thelonious was noted to be a great painter. 
Other: No girlfriend since birth, sadly.

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"The stars weep for you. Just kidding, I already forgot your name."

Name: Thelonious Kastrati

Alias: Warpstar

Nicknames: Thelony

Age: 17

Gender: A boi

Personality: Thelonious is somewhat awkward, with a pretty quiet disposition and a few words. He is noted to be highly enamored by ‘cute, fluffy animals’, and possesses a keen sense of intuition of trustworthiness. Thelonious is pretty protective of those folks he happens to like, though those that he had a bad experience of could expect to be suddenly abandoned in the middle of a fight. 

Aside from that, Thelonious is incredibly petty. Ruin his day, or his property? He’ll do the same, but he’ll try to make it a bit worse for whoever pissed on his parade. He is pretty much the embodiment of karma in this regard; actions will come back around, so better be nice to the guy, or else you’ll find yourself randomly inconvenienced by small, but infuriating things. Rule of thumb with Thelonious, then, is that he always returns to sender.

Appearance:

Thelonious is 5’3” in height, with markedly Caucasian features, though he gravitates to the somewhat tanner side. His pupils are amber in color, accompanied by black framed glasses. His clothing choices usually gravitate around cloaks and other comfortable, flowing garments. Apparently, he sees it as ‘liberating’. The flat cap seems to be a favorite of his whenever he doesn’t have to use the Cape costume.

As a Cape, the Warpstar uses a suit that is shielded from the effects of his own stars, such as bright flashes and radiation. The cape on his back has a star pattern on it, which seamlessly blends into the starry sky at night. The vital areas are covered by protective kevlar, while a high grade helmet with a wide visor keeps his head safe. Overall, it is quite comfortable to be in, just as he prefers all clothes to be. It is not the most mobile of outfits, but that’s what his powers are for.

Biography: Thelonious wasn’t from Redline originally. Nor was he originally a citizen of the United States, either. His earliest memories, at least as far as he is willing to admit, traces back to their apartment in the city of Pristina, Kosovo. He was not born as ‘Thelonious’ either, but he either doesn't remember or isn't willing to tell what the previous name was back then.

Either way, Thelonious doesn’t remember all too much of his home country, as his family left it when he was five years old due to the highly volatile situation that it was in. They first arrived in New York City, and then moved up further north into Maine, where they finally settled down, somewhat. There, they all changed their first names, though they kept the surname that they had back in Kosovo. Now, though, they faced a whole new world.

Thelonious, as he was called since then, had quite a few difficulties with the English language, and was as such bullied for it in school, though that was simply the first reason. Other causes arose, namely because of his lack of aptitude for sports, and other generic reasons.

During that time, however, he was a passive one, and simply took it without telling anyone else, as he knew he couldn't fight back against the likes of them. Not like this. He would just get beaten even more. At the very least, his one and only friend shared in that misery, so Thelonious wasn’t alone in all that. Even so, he secretly harbored plans of bitter revenge. He had coincidentally watched ‘Carrie’, and wondered if that could be done in real life. Parahumans were a thing, after all. He heard that the valedictorian of the high school he was now going to was one of those so-called Thinkers. Maybe he too was a Parahuman that just needed… what was it, a Trigger Event?

Sure enough, it was a Trigger Event that he will get from these barbaric people. It was prom night, and Thelony had hoped that this day would be different, that there would be no encounter between them and him. It seemed, however, that they were actively seeking him out with acts of malice and cruelty all planned out. They dragged the comparably weak boy to the shower room, where his hands were tied and cold water rained upon him.

There wasn’t much physical pain in those moments. Just the mental shattering of the constant shame and humiliation, the inaction of the authorities simply because these miscreants were the offspring of some high officials. He could see them now. Bright twinkles of light in the darkness. Was this it? Was this the end? Has the suffering ended?

Unfortunately, or fortunately, depending on who’s asked, this was not to be the end. Twin stars formed around Thelonious within that shower room as he drifted between wakefulness and silence. He no longer remembers what happened next, but he awoke on the steps of his house, seemingly transported there in an instant. 

Later that night, breaking news opened with the mysterious destruction in a shower room in Redline High; six high schoolers were gravely injured. Publicly, it was chalked up to faulty powerline and a gas leak, but PRT investigations found traces of ionized gas and solar radiation within the destroyed room. That, combined with the testimonials of the injured high schoolers, led the PRT to the Kastrati household, specifically the one and only son. By that time, Thelonious had a better understanding of his abilities, conjuring stars within the basement when no one else was home. That, and he sometimes portaled from the yard to the basement. It was clear, however, that he cannot remain in regular society like this. His parents were somewhat resistant to the idea that their only child is to go to some program, but they relented after about a week. As for Thelonious, he was up to it. Knowing what he wielded, he may get tempted to portal his bullies into the sea the next time he sees them.

Powers:

Cosmogenesis (Shaker 6): Thelonious produces and channels star energy in a small scale. He is as such able to create and maintain up to two miniature stars at a given time, whose size can vary from a ping pong ball into a larger basketball (though mass is a different matter). They can be a light source for dark places, but they have more destructive purposes. These can either be set to detonate with approximately the same power as a stick of dynamite with a radius of six feet, or detonate harmlessly, save through the powerful flashbang that results.

The stars float at all times, and can be launched in a specific direction, though they are rather slow moving and are easy to spot. Their detonation sequence also has a universal delay of about five seconds, making it most effective against static targets.

Getting too close to the stars will cause sunburns; extremely close skin contact inflicts radiation burns.

Wormhole Tunneling (Mover 6): Using the same energy, Thelonious can open a crack in the fabric of space, allowing instantaneous travel between two points. This ability has a maximum safe distance of 40 kilometers (further distances incurs lengthy comas),  and requires a reference; live footage, memory, or an up to date photograph is required for him to be able to open the rift.

Skills: When he was still unpowered, Thelonious was noted to be a great painter. 
Other: No girlfriend since birth, sadly.

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Hm...Without saying too much about the new variation we have here (and there are some issues, I'm afraid), but how much do you know about Trigger Events and the classifications, Emperor? Because it feels like you don't, and if that's the case, I'd be happy to help clear up any confusions to ensure a clear picture on things.

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Hm...Without saying too much about the new variation we have here (and there are some issues, I'm afraid), but how much do you know about Trigger Events and the classifications, Emperor? Because it feels like you don't, and if that's the case, I'd be happy to help clear up any confusions to ensure a clear picture on things.@Mintz
Not too much, it's just that I've been in a different Wormverse RP before. I know Trigger Events are traumatic, but how related the event itself has to the powers themselves isn't clear to me, as the OP of that other RP didn't really clarify it.

Also can I just add you in Discord, so that communication/discussion about the app and its issues is easier rather than back and forths with an hour in between them lol

Edit: So I revisited that old RP, as well as looked upon the Wormverse wiki. It had been quite a long time, but I had edited the app accordingly again. Hopefully it is better now.

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Not too much, it's just that I've been in a different Wormverse RP before. I know Trigger Events are traumatic, but how related the event itself has to the powers themselves isn't clear to me, as the OP of that other RP didn't really clarify it.

Also can I just add you in Discord, so that communication/discussion about the app and its issues is easier rather than back and forths with an hour in between them lol

Edit: So I revisited that old RP, as well as looked upon the Wormverse wiki. It had been quite a long time, but I had edited the app accordingly again. Hopefully it is better now.@The Man Emperor

It is better, but there are still some problems here. I agree though, that handling this on Discord is the fastest way to help. Just DM me your info and I'll getcha together with me and my Co-DMs to talk lol

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I have a question, if that is ok to ask (sorry if I am interrupting anything, about to head to work shortly and feel curious enough to ask). 

While it says in the OOC that the Heralds Archangel and Gaia will be explained at a later time, would there be any basic info to know if someone ever made a character that triggered amidst/during one of their attacks perchance? Just as a hypothetical thing of course, considering such a thing as a Herald attack would be filled with a lot of crazy trigger potential perhaps. 

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I have a question, if that is ok to ask (sorry if I am interrupting anything, about to head to work shortly and feel curious enough to ask). 

While it says in the OOC that the Heralds Archangel and Gaia will be explained at a later time, would there be any basic info to know if someone ever made a character that triggered amidst/during one of their attacks perchance? Just as a hypothetical thing of course, considering such a thing as a Herald attack would be filled with a lot of crazy trigger potential perhaps.@Crusader Lord

Sorry for the late response! For sure though, I left it at that so as not to clog up the initial post and the G.O.I.s more than they already were; most people in this world are vaguely aware of some of what the Heralds are capable of, and I'd be more than happy to elaborate for those interested in making Triggers resulting from their attacks, because, yeah, lots of Triggers can occur during them lol

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Sorry for the late response! For sure though, I left it at that so as not to clog up the initial post and the G.O.I.s more than they already were; most people in this world are vaguely aware of some of what the Heralds are capable of, and I'd be more than happy to elaborate for those interested in making Triggers resulting from their attacks, because, yeah, lots of Triggers can occur during them lol@Mintz

Thank you for your response! Just got back from work as well. Whew. 

I was in a Worm RP a long time ago, and in it someone helped write up a power idea for me that happened during an Endbringer attack. Behemoth I think? I am not a Worm expert by far, but I do find the power concepts and their ramifications and so forth to be interesting in application! And just liking superpower RPs in general really. That, and I was in a Not!Worm RP in the past on another site, one that ended up rather fun and got me curious by the time I joined the aforementioned Worm RP! XD

But I figure one could get a simple looking but relatively complex situation out of triggering during a Herald attack, so in reality I would love to learn more. Not for power-gaming, but more for 'yeah it might be strong, but it gets to have a lot of nuance to it!' things. The potentials would be fascinating!

Of course I feel more confident in writing a trigger than determining a resulting power from it, though getting experience in that area would be nice admittedly. Safe to say I am interested in your RP though! ^^;

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Thank you for your response! Just got back from work as well. Whew. 

I was in a Worm RP a long time ago, and in it someone helped write up a power idea for me that happened during an Endbringer attack. Behemoth I think? I am not a Worm expert by far, but I do find the power concepts and their ramifications and so forth to be interesting in application! And just liking superpower RPs in general really. That, and I was in a Not!Worm RP in the past on another site, one that ended up rather fun and got me curious by the time I joined the aforementioned Worm RP! XD

But I figure one could get a simple looking but relatively complex situation out of triggering during a Herald attack, so in reality I would love to learn more. Not for power-gaming, but more for 'yeah it might be strong, but it gets to have a lot of nuance to it!' things. The potentials would be fascinating!

Of course I feel more confident in writing a trigger than determining a resulting power from it, though getting experience in that area would be nice admittedly. Safe to say I am interested in your RP though! ^^;@Crusader Lord

Glad to hear it! Yeah, if you'd like to talk more in-depth on the matter, feel free to get with me on Discord via DM; me and my Co-DMs could help you iron out a solid concept. And I'm happy to hear you're interested, more the merrier! lol

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"Yes I am aware my power is gross, no I do not enjoy causing harm to myself, no you may not touch it..."

Alias
Bloodlet 

Nicknames
Walker, Li(Lee) though he hates that one. 

Age
17

Gender
Male

Personality
Lito is rather stand-offish, emotionless, and maybe even a little cruel. Though most of this is due to the fact that Lito isn’t really capable of showing his true emotions. Lito is awkward around others at best, though he does try to come off as friendly sometimes this can be a little…intense. He doesn’t fully understand personal space and either gives people entirely too much space, or  not enough. Despite all this Lito is a deeply caring individual to those who can get past the initial thick shell, even though he might not always show it. 

Appearance
Lito stands at a nice 6 foot 1 inch, with a slender but very slightly muscular build. He sports disheveled fiery red hair and almost sickly pale skin. His yellow eyes often sport a tired or bored expression accompanied by slightly darkened circles. His skin, especially on his arms and hand, is absolutely riddled with various scars. 

His clothing style is equally as disheveled as his hair and pretty boring. Opting more often than not for a simple pair of jeans, an oversized t-shirt, and a hoodie, though when forced into more formal clothing it is almost always wrinkled, and untucked unless someone fixes it for him. 

Though instead of white it’s red. 

Biography

Lito was more or less a street kid, his father did his best but with the two of them in and out of homeless shelters and his father unable to get work due to an injury from an accident shortly after Lito was born that killed his mother, life was not easy. Living on the streets Lito had to learn quickly how to survive. Not just for himself but also to take care of his father. He learned how to steal and how to fight and how to avoid fights fairly quickly. Though it was not without trial and error.

At one point. When Lito was 8 or 9 he had been caught by the cops attempting to steal some food from a grocery store. Upon questioning they decided it would be best if Lito was put into the foster care system. This didn’t last long, Lito had run away from his foster home within a week worried for his father. It took him a few months to find the older man but eventually the two were reunited and Lito went back to providing for the two of them. 

He was much more careful in the years to follow. Begging on the streets for money, dumpster diving, occasional theft when he could, but always careful not to get caught. During this time his father did his best to give Lito a somewhat decent education. At least enough to know the basics, how to read, simple math, the usual. 

[Actual trigger warning ahead: Violence, Blood, Near Death experience]

Lito’s trigger event didn’t happen until he was closer to 14. He and his father had found a decent spot to set up camp for the night and had even managed to scrape together a somewhat decent dinner. As the two were eating a group of burly men walked up to them demanding they hand over everything they had and leave the area. Lito’s father tried to get the teen to simply comply but he didn’t listen. Annoyed by the teen’s audacity they began to move toward him when his father stepped between them. The men decided to teach his father a lesson on raising his kid better first and began to mercilessly beat the injured man while Lito stood there in shock. The men didn’t seem to stop and Lito could see that things were not going to end well for his father if they kept going. He begged the men to stop, telling them they could have what they wanted if they just stopped, but they weren’t listening. Lito, tried to move in to pull the men off his father but he wasn’t strong enough, he was easily batted away by one of the men. In a panic Lito reached for the knife his father normally kept for emergencies only. Cutting himself on the blade in the process. Once again Lito rushes in and once again he is stopped and disarmed. Panicked and helpless, and in tears, Lito wasn’t sure he could save his father who had seemed to lose consciousness at this point. He cried out one last time and this time something happened, the blood seeping from his hand hardened into a spike and lashed out at the men, injuring one of them. In desperation Lito opened another wound on his body and ran at the men, anger in his tear filled eyes. They released Lito’s father and ran, but not before Lito got a solid strike on another of the men. Lito’s attention went to his father as soon as the men were out of eyesight. 

Lito dragged his father’s unconscious body to the nearest hospital where his father went into surgery as his own wounds were treated. Once bandaged and questioned by officers he was once again entered into the foster care system. This time under much closer watch. He attempted to run away several times however he was caught each time. Eventually he gave up, or so it seemed. When the watch on him finally laxed about a year later he was once again on the streets looking for his father. Though this time he was unable to locate his father. 

He spent the next two years on the streets looking, unsuccessfully, as well as learning to use this new power of his. Though he mostly stuck to himself. When news of the Ward program reached his ears he was at their door offering, rather unenthusiastically, to join in exchange for help finding his father and then comfortable living for him if/when he was found.

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Lito can manipulate his own blood in a variety of ways. Whether it be to create weapons out of hardened blood or cover parts of his body with it in order to make him more durable. This hardened blood is durable enough to be used to attack however strong enough concentrated power can chip or even completely snap portions off.  In order to do this Lito must have an open wound near the area he wishes to create the desired effect. The wound does not need to be deep it simply has to bleed, but the deeper the wound the more reinforcement for blood creation is. 

Blood Sword: Usually created by opening a wound in the palm of his hands, he can create Sword blades or daggers. 

Blood Scythe: Created by opening larger wounds on his forearms. These require more blood than the sword or the daggers but have a longer reach. 

Blood Armor: Lito opens a wound or uses a pre-existing wound to manipulate the blood into a durable armor around the body part. 

Blood Shield: Lito creates a small round shield from a wound on his forearm (picture Captain America size) which is strong enough to block most standard bullet rounds. 

Lito can create other simple items such as pole-arms or hammers however he doesn’t like to make things that he doesn’t view as effective so opts for the main 4 listed above.

Blood manipulation takes a lot out of Lito. While the blood is hardened he is not in danger of bleeding out but swapping between blood creations can result in large amounts of blood loss. Though Lito can lose quite a bit more blood than a normal person before passing out he will still reach a limit in which his body can no longer handle it. The more wounds on his body the stronger his ability however the more likely it is he will lose consciousness. He also has to be careful as his body can and will lash out on its own if he pushes himself too hard, with no regard for who is friend or foe. 

•Street Smarts
Having spent most of his life on the streets Lito has learned the eb and flow of street life, as well as various shortcuts around the city. Not to mention the knowledge of where and where not to go at certain times or at all if one wishes to stay out of trouble 

•Street Fighting
Lito has had no formal training when it comes to fighting. His fighting style is not nearly as disciplined as it could be but he is good at thinking on his feet and reacting to quick changes. 

•Heightened Pain Tolerance
Lito’s pain tolerance is significantly higher than the average person’s from several years of intentionally causing bodily harm to himself.

NGL my fave power is Gambit’s Kinetic energy manipulation (hehe make things explode)

I will prolly need to fiddle with something so any issues just let me know. I was bored and hypervixated on this soooooo....

Some minor edits have been made: 
Changed his Alias
Added to his appearance
Added a tiny bit to his power for clarification.

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@LostDestiny ooh nice sheet! I'm curious, we're you intending to him to be a Ward or did you have other plans?

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@yoshua171 He is intended to be a Ward even though his power is actually really gross. He is fully aware and it grosses even him out if he thinks about it for too long. He is kinda on a one track mind right now though so if some bad guy can figure out Lito’s motives and convince him they can help him better than the good guys I might have him flop. At least early on. 

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Glad to hear it! Yeah, if you'd like to talk more in-depth on the matter, feel free to get with me on Discord via DM; me and my Co-DMs could help you iron out a solid concept. And I'm happy to hear you're interested, more the merrier! lol@Mintz

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@Crusader Lord Our Discord is only for accepted players. They’ll send one once you’ve made a sheet and you’ve been accepted!

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@canaryrose Gotcha! But wait...how do I contact Mintz over DM there like I was asked to do? @_@

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@canaryrose Gotcha! But wait...how do I contact Mintz over DM there like I was asked to do? @_@@Crusader Lord

PM them your discord username I am sure they will add you. ^-^

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@LostDestiny Thanks! :D

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"The stars weep for you. Just kidding, I already forgot your name."

Name: Thelonious Kastrati

Alias: Constellation

Nicknames: Thelony

Age: 17

Gender: A boi

Personality: Thelonious is somewhat awkward, with a pretty quiet disposition and a few words. He is noted to be highly enamored by ‘cute, fluffy animals’, and possesses a keen sense of intuition of trustworthiness. Thelonious is pretty protective of those folks he happens to like, though those that he had a bad experience of could expect to be suddenly abandoned in the middle of a fight. 

Aside from that, Thelonious is incredibly petty. Ruin his day, or his property? He’ll do the same, but he’ll try to make it a bit worse for whoever pissed on his parade. He is pretty much the embodiment of karma in this regard; actions will come back around, so better be nice to the guy, or else you’ll find yourself randomly inconvenienced by small, but infuriating things. Rule of thumb with Thelonious, then, is that he always returns to sender.

Appearance:

Thelonious is 5’3” in height, with markedly Caucasian features, though he gravitates to the somewhat tanner side. His pupils are amber in color, accompanied by black framed glasses. His clothing choices usually gravitate around cloaks and other comfortable, flowing garments. Apparently, he sees it as ‘liberating’. The flat cap seems to be a favorite of his whenever he doesn’t have to use the Cape costume.

As a Cape, he uses a suit that is shielded from the effects of his own stars, such as bright flashes and radiation. The cape on his back has a star pattern on it, which seamlessly blends into the starry sky at night. The vital areas are covered by protective kevlar, while a high grade helmet with a wide visor keeps his head safe. Overall, it is quite comfortable to be in, just as he prefers all clothes to be. It is not the most mobile of outfits, but it serves its purpose.

Biography: Thelonious wasn’t from Redline originally. Nor was he originally a citizen of the United States, either. His earliest memories, at least as far as he is willing to admit, traces back to their apartment in the city of Pristina, Kosovo. He was not born as ‘Thelonious’ either, but he either doesn't remember or isn't willing to tell what the previous name was back then.

Either way, Thelonious doesn’t remember all too much of his home country, as his family left it when he was five years old due to the highly volatile situation that it was in. They first arrived in New York City, and then moved up further north into Maine, where they finally settled down, somewhat. There, they all changed their first names, though they kept the surname that they had back in Kosovo. Now, though, they faced a whole new world.

Thelonious, as he was called since then, had quite a few difficulties with the English language, and was as such bullied for it in school, though that was simply the first reason. Other causes arose, namely because of his lack of aptitude for sports, and other generic reasons. As a child, he had the dream of becoming an astronaut, and reaching out towards the stars. Every night, he would look through the telescope, thinking of impossible dreams as typical for someone of such a young age.

In school, though, the torment continued. He was a passive one, and simply took it without telling anyone else, as he knew he couldn't fight back against the likes of them. Not like this. He would just get beaten even more. At the very least, his one and only friend shared in that misery, so Thelonious wasn’t alone in all that. Even so, he secretly harbored plans of bitter revenge. He had coincidentally watched ‘Carrie’, and wondered if that could be done in real life. Parahumans were a thing, after all. He heard that the valedictorian of the high school he was now going to was one of those so-called Thinkers. Maybe he too was a Parahuman that just needed… what was it, a Trigger Event?

It took a while, though. He devised ways to ruin the day of his oppressors without drawing too much attention to himself, such as secretly placing laxatives in their drinks. It was the least he could do to avenge himself and his friend, who had unfortunately been away from Redline. This was a rigged battle from the very start, as he was up against the misbegotten offspring of high officials. Money and influence, it seemed, had its way in these halls.

One day, however, everything changed. Thelonious' mother had fallen ill, but they didn't have the money to pay for the medication/medical bills to aid with her situation. She was, in all respects, dying.

Thus, Thelonious' father and uncle, along with an older cousin, went to some dangerous connections, gangsters, whatever, to make a deal to get the money for his mom's medication and bills. They don't know the price, but as they arrive, the negotiations begin. His father leads, telling them what they're asking for. Thelonious and his family members are surrounded in that grassy field, with the clear starry night sky up ahead.

His father asks what they'll need to trade in exchange for the money. The mobsters grin and give some suggestions, all business. Some of the thugs around them jeer or try to intimidate them almost playfully. His father, however, is unable to afford any of the prices and says so. The mobster smiles and says something like 'well, looks like you'll have to trade some lives for your wife.' He gestures and the gangsters close in on the family. His uncle resists, but is beaten to a pulp. The mobster meets Thelonious' eyes with a sinister grin, as if to say 'you're next.'

Thelonious felt unbridled rage because of the terrible situation they're in. He was angry at his father for such poor decisions, and at these horrible people. At once the tension is extremely high, violence abounds, but he can't keep track of all the thugs. He triggers as his anger and the chaos of the situation totally overpowers him, blotting out his senses--and indeed his sense of reason.

At that moment, an entity found a suitable vessel. The shard unraveled, and Thelonious was enlightened. He could now create the shiniest of lights, the fiercest of flames. And so, instead of them being the victims that night, the invaders became cowering insects. Orbs of starlight blinded them, before searing hot orbs set clothing and flesh alight. The chaotic constellation that ensued wiped out the gangsters, purging them from the face of the earth. The gang were all dead, and the Kastrati clan yet lived.

Later in the morning, as the Kastratis recovered and spoke to one another about the events of last night, the PRT showed up at their door. PRT investigations found traces of ionized gas within the area of concern, as well as charred bodies belonging to some of the most notorious gangsters in the state. Investigations pinpointed just who these gangsters were supposed to meet at the night, which led them to this moment. It was clear, however, that Thelonious cannot remain in regular society like this. His parents were somewhat resistant to the idea that their only child is to go away from them, but they relented after about a week as the ultimatum became heavier. In exchange for around the clock protection for them, Thelonious was to enter the Wards Program. Knowing what he wielded, he may get tempted to explode the bullies the next time if he sees them. 

Powers:

Cosmogenesis (Blaster 6): Thelonious produces and channels plasma energy. He is as such able to create and maintain up to four miniature stars at a given time, with three distinct modes that operate in a sliding scale of heat and light. They can move at around 7 to 8 meters per second, with any turns requiring pauses in movement.

Mode 1 (Searing Star): Capable of melting through most metals, as well as turning sand into glass at physical contact. By far the dimmest, but the most potent in terms of destructive potential. These can immolate most materials that they may come across.

Mode 2 (Blinding Star): Little to no destructive capability, but the brightness emanating when it is created acts as a powerful flashbang, temporarily disorienting and blinding those who had not protected their eyes.

Mode 3 (Main Sequence): Seemingly unremarkable, these main sequence stars, as he calls them, are able to sear wood and stone, and can be difficult to look at for prolonged periods. This is the foundation from which the other two derive from in their creation. 

Skills: When he was still unpowered, Thelonious was noted to be a great painter. 
Other: No girlfriend since birth, sadly.

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Oops I dropped something...

"Yes I am aware my power is gross, no I do not enjoy causing harm to myself, no you may not touch it..."

Alias
Bloodlet 

Nicknames
Walker, Li(Lee) though he hates that one. 

Age
17

Gender
Male

Personality
Lito is rather stand-offish, emotionless, and maybe even a little cruel. Though most of this is due to the fact that Lito isn’t really capable of showing his true emotions. Lito is awkward around others at best, though he does try to come off as friendly sometimes this can be a little…intense. He doesn’t fully understand personal space and either gives people entirely too much space, or  not enough. Despite all this Lito is a deeply caring individual to those who can get past the initial thick shell, even though he might not always show it. 

Appearance
Lito stands at a nice 6 foot 1 inch, with a slender but very slightly muscular build. He sports disheveled fiery red hair and almost sickly pale skin. His yellow eyes often sport a tired or bored expression accompanied by slightly darkened circles. His skin, especially on his arms and hand, is absolutely riddled with various scars. 

His clothing style is equally as disheveled as his hair and pretty boring. Opting more often than not for a simple pair of jeans, an oversized t-shirt, and a hoodie, though when forced into more formal clothing it is almost always wrinkled, and untucked unless someone fixes it for him. 

Though instead of white it’s red. 

Biography

Lito was more or less a street kid, his father did his best but with the two of them in and out of homeless shelters and his father unable to get work due to an injury from an accident shortly after Lito was born that killed his mother, life was not easy. Living on the streets Lito had to learn quickly how to survive. Not just for himself but also to take care of his father. He learned how to steal and how to fight and how to avoid fights fairly quickly. Though it was not without trial and error.

At one point. When Lito was 8 or 9 he had been caught by the cops attempting to steal some food from a grocery store. Upon questioning they decided it would be best if Lito was put into the foster care system. This didn’t last long, Lito had run away from his foster home within a week worried for his father. It took him a few months to find the older man but eventually the two were reunited and Lito went back to providing for the two of them. 

He was much more careful in the years to follow. Begging on the streets for money, dumpster diving, occasional theft when he could, but always careful not to get caught. During this time his father did his best to give Lito a somewhat decent education. At least enough to know the basics, how to read, simple math, the usual. 

[Actual trigger warning ahead: Violence, Blood, Near Death experience]

Lito’s trigger event didn’t happen until he was closer to 14. He and his father had found a decent spot to set up camp for the night and had even managed to scrape together a somewhat decent dinner. As the two were eating a group of burly men walked up to them demanding they hand over everything they had and leave the area. Lito’s father tried to get the teen to simply comply but he didn’t listen. Annoyed by the teen’s audacity they began to move toward him when his father stepped between them. The men decided to teach his father a lesson on raising his kid better first and began to mercilessly beat the injured man while Lito stood there in shock. The men didn’t seem to stop and Lito could see that things were not going to end well for his father if they kept going. He begged the men to stop, telling them they could have what they wanted if they just stopped, but they weren’t listening. Lito, tried to move in to pull the men off his father but he wasn’t strong enough, he was easily batted away by one of the men. In a panic Lito reached for the knife his father normally kept for emergencies only. Cutting himself on the blade in the process. Once again Lito rushes in and once again he is stopped and disarmed. Panicked and helpless, and in tears, Lito wasn’t sure he could save his father who had seemed to lose consciousness at this point. He cried out one last time and this time something happened, the blood seeping from his hand hardened into a spike and lashed out at the men, injuring one of them. In desperation Lito opened another wound on his body and ran at the men, anger in his tear filled eyes. They released Lito’s father and ran, but not before Lito got a solid strike on another of the men. Lito’s attention went to his father as soon as the men were out of eyesight. 

Lito dragged his father’s unconscious body to the nearest hospital where his father went into surgery as his own wounds were treated. Once bandaged and questioned by officers he was once again entered into the foster care system. This time under much closer watch. He attempted to run away several times however he was caught each time. Eventually he gave up, or so it seemed. When the watch on him finally laxed about a year later he was once again on the streets looking for his father. Though this time he was unable to locate his father. 

He spent the next two years on the streets looking, unsuccessfully, as well as learning to use this new power of his. Though he mostly stuck to himself. When news of the Ward program reached his ears he was at their door offering, rather unenthusiastically, to join in exchange for help finding his father and then comfortable living for him if/when he was found.

Powers/Skills

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Lito can manipulate his own blood in a variety of ways. Whether it be to create weapons out of hardened blood or cover parts of his body with it in order to make him more durable. This hardened blood is durable enough to be used to attack however strong enough concentrated power can chip or even completely snap portions off.  In order to do this Lito must have an open wound near the area he wishes to create the desired effect. The wound does not need to be deep it simply has to bleed, but the deeper the wound the more reinforcement for blood creation is. 

Blood Sword: Usually created by opening a wound in the palm of his hands, he can create Sword blades or daggers. 

Blood Scythe: Created by opening larger wounds on his forearms. These require more blood than the sword or the daggers but have a longer reach. 

Blood Armor: Lito opens a wound or uses a pre-existing wound to manipulate the blood into a durable armor around the body part. 

Blood Shield: Lito creates a small round shield from a wound on his forearm (picture Captain America size) which is strong enough to block most standard bullet rounds. 

Lito can create other simple items such as pole-arms or hammers however he doesn’t like to make things that he doesn’t view as effective so opts for the main 4 listed above.

Blood manipulation takes a lot out of Lito. While the blood is hardened he is not in danger of bleeding out but swapping between blood creations can result in large amounts of blood loss. Though Lito can lose quite a bit more blood than a normal person before passing out he will still reach a limit in which his body can no longer handle it. The more wounds on his body the stronger his ability however the more likely it is he will lose consciousness. He also has to be careful as his body can and will lash out on its own if he pushes himself too hard, with no regard for who is friend or foe. 

•Street Smarts
Having spent most of his life on the streets Lito has learned the eb and flow of street life, as well as various shortcuts around the city. Not to mention the knowledge of where and where not to go at certain times or at all if one wishes to stay out of trouble 

•Street Fighting
Lito has had no formal training when it comes to fighting. His fighting style is not nearly as disciplined as it could be but he is good at thinking on his feet and reacting to quick changes. 

•Heightened Pain Tolerance
Lito’s pain tolerance is significantly higher than the average person’s from several years of intentionally causing bodily harm to himself.

NGL my fave power is Gambit’s Kinetic energy manipulation (hehe make things explode)

I will prolly need to fiddle with something so any issues just let me know. I was bored and hypervixated on this soooooo....

Some minor edits have been made: 
Changed his Alias
Added to his appearance
Added a tiny bit to his power for clarification.@LostDestiny

Lookin' good there, Destiny. Get 'im on up there!

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