TheBiddz said
Okay so what Im getting from all this is that people just hate that Kholodny is a coward who runs from things that may kill him?

When no one has been anything even resembling hostile, yeah. It's incredibly easy to take paranoid fear like that and think: "This guy's a frigging yellow bastard, he is. I don't much like him." Hell, even Talon, a guy who is no stranger to battle, handled his fear and unease in a believable way that was more entertaining than it was annoying. It goes to show that even the battle-hardened clods that you seem to be trying to parody with those characters... can show fear and insecurity.

It's all in how you write your posts. Saying: "Fuck fuck fuck fuck, I'm going to die! Oh dear sweet buttery Jesus!" is a bit off-putting. Whereas internalizing your fear, having a frenzied, yet not overly-dramatic monologue, and perhaps a physical sign of stress such as heavy perspiration or shaking in terror... might be more appetizing and easier to read for most folks.

Simply put, they don't fit the setting. This is a fairly dark and serious sort of setting, that generally benefits from humor only in smaller doses and when appropriate. Were this a cartoony sort of multiverse where characters could run about in fear like Shaggy and Scooby after someone murdered the censors so they could say the word "Fuck", then reactions such as the previously listed one... would work much better.

It goes back to what I've said a couple times now: It's all in how you write the characters/posts. So I suppose I don't hate the characters so much as I am not a fan of how they are currently portrayed.

He's not a battle hardened warrior, and Im not even trying to parody one here. He was a normal dude plucked off the street. Now, he had already ran into death before. He had almost died as a baby, and his parents were eaten/killed by wild animals. Pretty traumatizing. He has what is basically the equivalent of deep seated anxiety, it goes way beyond normal nerves. Without Stribog there, he would have shat himself at the sight of Skallagrim and the big army. Im not saying the tough warriors are bad. I love reading them, and I even have one. I was just trying to do something different and play someone who would be able to grow throughout the RP. I know this is an Arena, and there isn't tooooo much room for character development, but I know this RP will hopefully be pretty long, and its just how I like to do things.

Writing his fear so extreme was to give a good point to look now, and later be able to say "Wow, look how he's handling his fear and standing up for himself". Its the entire reason Stribog made him come here, though he doesn't know that yet. I hope that makes a bit more sense, and I do thank you for giving a more detailed critique. I admit, it was probably pretty naive of me, and not the best character to start off with

I understand that Gods are known to do things on a whim. Sending a character such as yours hurtling into a multiverse rich in strife and inter-planetary wars between universe-spanning empires... goes beyond Godly whimsy and into the realm of the asinine (and no, I don't mean that in a disrespectful way. I'm simply stating an opinion). I get that you're going for the development aspect, but as it stands... you're guy is going to die at least once, maybe more. And given his experience with death and his fear of it, that sort of thing would shatter his mind. Not really the best development, you know?

As for Skallagrim and the army, Talon only has like two hundred guys. Not really an army. But now I'm arguing semantics.

Yeah, the RP will hopefully be a long one. Yeah, there will be chances for at least some character development. But for a character with such extreme fears already... the Multiverse is going to be a horrifying and incredibly traumatizing place. You know?

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A suggestion, perhaps.

Maybe get him under the wing and tutelage of a more experienced and less fearful character?

For what it's worth, I don't find them ridiculous at all.

Bringing in a new baddy, because we don't have enough of them. I hope everyone enjoys psychopathic wanderers from doomed universes.

The old adage, "You get once chance to make a first impression" is true. I understand your motives for making these characters, you wanting to step outside the box and develop them. That is fine. You made your first impression, I didn't like it. Simple as that really.

Skall. I will PM you my newest CS when it is finished. I don't want to muck up the CS bin until he is finalized, edits are requested or confirmed as unnecessary, etc.

Sound good? He's almost done as is, so it should be within the next hour or so.

Alright. I look forward to reading it.

He kinda went from being a psychotic space wanderer to a mad scientist space pirate... just so people know.

Tantalum said
Nobody's earlier character mention (not the Sue) sounded ever slightly similar to what I'd planned for an Intermediate character in this thread. They're proving awfully difficult to draw although..Meh, at least I'm almost done with my Low-tier character sheets, though they're in need of some goals and motives. If I can ask, how are characters expected to travel between worlds here, death aside? I figure that might play a large part in what they'll end up doing.

Each world has a nexus gate.

Tantalum said
Nobody's earlier character mention (not the Sue) sounded ever slightly similar to what I'd planned for an Intermediate character in this thread. They're proving awfully difficult to draw although..Meh, at least I'm almost done with my Low-tier character sheets, though they're in need of some goals and motives. If I can ask, how are characters expected to travel between worlds here, death aside? I figure that might play a large part in what they'll end up doing.

Each world has a nexus gate.

Green said
The difficulty of traveling is more or less the backdrop of the entire setting, if I recall correctly. To find the Nexus would enable one's side to travel anywhere, instantly. As for the rest of us? Spaceships, man. If your character doesn't have one, befriend someone who does.

I thought each world was in a different dimension. Space ships would help little, unless they could travel through dimensions.

Beta said
He kinda went from being a psychotic space wanderer to a mad scientist space pirate... just so people know.

Eeeey! Wanna pm me the details? Sounds like someone who would be affiliated with the faction I'm working on.

Some are. Others are in the same universe such as Darashal and the Angar-Rylla homeworld.

Beta said
Bringing in a new baddy, because we don't have enough of them. I hope everyone enjoys psychopathic wanderers from doomed universes.

Is he looking for work?

Because I have the most exciting job that would be prefect for him...

Also, are LeeRoy and The Biddz waiting on a post from me? If so that's fine, I'll probably have an Arachne patrol find them.

Would be interesting to she how the react to them.

I was going to have onesie there, but is there anything to do? I'd need any ally if I were to fight two characters together, but it's unlikely she'd have an ally, especially with the spiders.

ImportantNobody said
I was going to have onesie there, but is there anything to do? I'd need any ally if I were to fight two characters together, but it's unlikely she'd have an ally, especially with the spiders.

Oh ya, I was going to ask about if you still wanted to have onesie apart of Angar-Rylla. Or otherwise under Tablurath's command.

Okay. Maybe she would be sent somewhere else then?

I'm probably going to go to the Daemon Web pits, perhaps to acquire the layemoid as a resource for the empire.

Okay. As an information broker she'll be working with them for a hefty paycheck for her organization, but after getting cut off from them, maybe she just sticks around with Angar-Rylla because that was her last order.

I suppose us two will fight the other two, and the spiders will be a third party that we both have to fight in the meantime.