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Hidden 8 yrs ago Post by Zeroth
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@liferusherAn outright destruction Quirk is a no-go too, I'm afraid, because it's virtually unbeatable as anything that tried to oppose it would just get destroyed. If it were more "defined," it might actually work, but what you have now is far too vague. One of the things I'm noticing about your various attempts is that none of them are fleshed out very well; you don't put a lot of substance into the use or description of the power.

Here's an example of a "destruction" type ability that is, in my opinion, well defined: In a manga series called Psyren, the main character develops an ability that seeks out and destroys matter similarly to a black hole, but without the vacuum aspect. When this character first uses the ability, it takes the form of a large black sphere that moves around destroying whatever is in its radius. As the character develops the power, it takes different forms to become more controllable and more versatile.

This power has a "form" that it takes, has a clear method of its use, and its "destruction" is powerful, but limited--it had a limited reach, it could only absorb so much matter at once before imploding, it was extremely taxing on the user's mind, and it would seek out targets of its own accord, so the character had to be very careful when using it so as not to endanger his own allies.

Compared this to your characters' "she just destroys things," and do you see what I mean when I'm asking you to flesh out your powers more? I don't mean to be discouraging, but maybe you should try improving the quality of your writing overall as well, because the profiles have been...lackluster, let's say, compared to the other characters in the RP.
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@Zeroth

I am ashamed and amazed that I only now noticed that your avatar was from Konjiki No Wordmaster. Fun stuff man.

Also I'm really sorry about how long this profile is taking, just been a bit stuck on Backstory but I'm working through it, the grasshopper will be hopping soon.
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@Zeroth well that is pretty much just because i have thought up about 5 quirks by now and getting a little tired of trying every time. Each time i make one it just get sloppyer since basically all my writing goes down the garbage
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@Zeroth okay ima use something I used in another rp before so i will trow the whole cs around
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@liferusher Just simply go for invisible woman lol I think that can work.


god dammit why was he right >.> I chose for this after all now

@Zeroth roleplayerguild.com/posts/3690940 Senpai, please if you would be so kind
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@liferusher Lol I just simply thought it would be the logical solution for both worlds. I figured you'd probably choose that regardless if I told you or not. Looks good though!

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@Lmpkio i watched a lot of anime today. Inclussive 3 eps of hero academia. Conclusion invis girl waifu of the season. I dont know though. I didnt want to completely copy her but without everything she just misses something
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@Lmpkio i watched a lot of anime today. Inclussive 3 eps of hero academia. Conclusion invis girl waifu of the season. I dont know though. I didnt want to completely copy her but without everything she just misses something


Always nice lol

But yeah, just do what you gotta do. I'm sure it'll be fine.
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@liferusherInvisibility will work, yes. Now you'll just need to finish the rest of the profile and flesh it out a little more.
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<Snipped quote by liferusher>

Always nice lol

But yeah, just do what you gotta do. I'm sure it'll be fine.


You think I can add anything else to the quirk? I dont really know what to write more
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<Snipped quote by Lmpkio>

You think I can add anything else to the quirk? I dont really know what to write more


Tbh, I'm not so sure. You may want to look at Fantastic 4's Invisible Women if you want some more info on power abilities.
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Aaaaaand posted!
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I'll work on a post tomorrow~
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I'm still here. I'll see if I can get a post up tomorrow.
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@liferusherInvisibility will work, yes. Now you'll just need to finish the rest of the profile and flesh it out a little more.


I hope I am good for now. Ideas are welcome
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Got another post up with the other three teachers and Corrosion.

@liferusherYep, everything looks good. Though the school this time is Brave High, not U.A. But your power and limits work out, and everything else has been filled out satisfactorily. Welcome aboard! Post her in the Characters tab whenever you're ready.
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Got another post up with the other three teachers and Corrosion.

@liferusherYep, everything looks good. Though the school this time is Brave High, not U.A. But your power and limits work out, and everything else has been filled out satisfactorily. Welcome aboard! Post her in the Characters tab whenever you're ready.


Thank you ^-^ I'll change that :P
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@ZerothSo is the senior class just chopped liver? Because what was the point in splitting the Junior class to even have a senior class if you're only going to GM post for Freshman-Junior?
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Didn't the seniors skip to the next day?
lmao

Why would he gm if you guys skip a day ahead, it just makes it confusing, why did you guys even skip a day ahead.
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@InertiaI read over the IC posts and all of the Seniors are STILL in the home room where they were left. No one has moved to the "next day." We're waiting on the GM or something to happen.

And if the GM doesn't want to post for "Scruffy guy," or even acknowledge the existence of the Senior class, then there really shouldn't be one.
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