[OOC] Star Wars: A Stormtrooper's Tale.

[ONL]

Exactly why I picked it. Blowing stuff up always works ^^

[Azkott]

Just posted. Looking for critique.

Also, remember to try to interact with eachother as much as possible. You may be part of a 45,000 ship crew, but this is roleplay, and chance encounters occur. It'll be a short while before the 'crash'.

[ONL]

As for critique, the only real thing I feel is missing is the...I don't know, feeling of Star Wars to it. I think it might be the lack of the Star Wars-ish intro with the descending text. But then, that is my only real complain :P

[Azkott]

@ONL - Yeh. Don't really know what kind of Star Wars aspects I could really add into a soldier staring off into the vastness of space. But, hopefully we'll develop it as we go along.

[ClocktowerEchos]

@AzkottAs for the critique I can give you is that your perspective is a bit janky since it sounds like third person for most of it but there's a lack of a third person tone I guess? Anyways, it sounds like you're speaking through her thoughts but at the same time it just doesn't have that sort of vividness or animation to it that makes it sound... alive. Also, that last sentence is really out of perspective since I can't tell if its what kind of perspective it is and if its her thoughts that is just being projected, her actual thoughts or her saying something.

And before anyone else thinks it in their head, yes I know I'm sounding like a bit of an asshole right now, I'm sorry.

[Orlan]

Well the spelling and lack of capital letters irks me a little.

[Anarchy]

I didn't see it.

What happened?

[ClocktowerEchos]

Posted!

I didn't see it.

What happened?

@Anarchy

It got deleted, GM said that they'd try rewriting it later.

[Anarchy]

Well, we are on a starship.

How about we just start our own stuff until something fucks all of our days up?

[Gat Izen]

Can we write first person?@Azkott

[ClocktowerEchos]

Can we write first person?@Azkott

@Gat Izen

Most people tend not too but as long as the GM don't have an issue with it it should be alright? Honestly its unofficially expected that people write third person tho.

[Gat Izen]

@ClocktowerEchos Thats what I thought. Well we shall see.

[Ollumhammersong]

Ill work to get something up tomorrow.

[DarkStar]

Still accepting characters?

Though, I see that there are quite a few :/

[ClocktowerEchos]

Still accepting characters?

Though, I see that there are quite a few :/

@DarkStar

Unfortunately its currently marked as Full by the GM :\

[DarkStar]

Oh well then :p

[Anarchy]

We can't make a new post until the 14th person places theirs, right?

It's my first roleplay I'm actively participating in. I'm excited. (Phew! Thank goodness it's in casual.)

[Three Five]

Hi all. Sorry for the radio silence from me the past few days; I've been busy. I'll get a post up ASAP.

@Anarchy
Generally you can post as much as you want to. You don't have to wait, especially if you are just interacting with other characters and not moving the plot forward significantly.

[Anarchy]

You know, I think I'm going to take my time with it thanks.

Give it some natural suspense.

[Three Five]

@Bishop
Is the clone in your post supposed to be Velker?