[OOC] Wrath of the Gods

[Undine]

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[Witch Cat]

@Holy Soldier

We rejected your character because we counted nine individual powers when the maximum was three. Giving a character multiple powers under the name of one doesn't work.

If you have any more thoughts about our decision, please take it to PMs. We're willing to work with you and compromise if you are.

@Undine

*realises the powers he chose may possibly fall into that category and is seriously thinking of doing a revision later today*

*also noticed some grammatical errors and is screaming. Asking why he notices these AFTER he posts them.*

[HalfOfLancelot]

@Holy Soldier

Hogwash or not, the CS is the general outline for how you intend to play your character. Being presumptuous with your personality traits just makes you look like an asshole. Just because you have agency over how you're playing your character doesn't immediately refute the argument. But, that's all I'll say about it - it's morning, I have class. If you'd like to continue arguing you can take it to PMs like Undine said.

[McHaggis]

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[HalfOfLancelot]

@Witch Cat

Magic's tricky. ;p Your powers are something else entirely and we'll help you tone it down a knotch. There's no issue with growing stronger, it's just... We can't start out so strong right now.

[Undine]

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[Witch Cat]

@HalfOfLancelot@Undine
Oh of course, Danielle will start out incredibly weak! I'm not gonna have her throw around fireballs just yet, but I still do want Danielle to have potential to be someone powerful.

And like you said, magic is really broad, but hopefully you guys can trust me to keep it under control and not use it as a cheap plot device. I'll try to keep Danielle focused on magic that relates more to hecate. Y'know necromany, nature, etc.

_{(Also if you guys have any suggestions and/or criticisms, send them my way! I can take it.)}

[MiddleEarthRoze]

AHHHHHHH

Sorry for the delay my friends, been a busy day so far - I log on, and then I had to do like five different things for my parents. I shall be reviewing CS's and other things immediately!

[Legion02]

Okay, this is probably a really weird question but: do powers need to be like subtle? Or can they be big? Because I'm seeing a big but that makes me feel as if some demi-gods will be better in a fight than others. Actually, I think my question is more like: what do the GM's prefer for the story? Should a demi-god be able to hold his ground?

Oh, just a minor titbit but if you take 1 power instead of the max of 3, can it be really versatile/powerful?

[MiddleEarthRoze]

Okay, let's get down to business! TO DEFEAT. THE HUNS

@Witch Cat
Lovely character! First of all, "The Mist" is a solely PJO term as far as I can tell - I wasn't even sure myself so I had to look it up, haha. So, I would recommend you change that section to just illusion magic; now that will take away the ability to teleport, and hold items, and all the other things the Mist does. However, Illusion magic alone is still a pretty cool power.

That brings me to the whole issue with magic - as stated, it is a very broad term to use. So, I really like the point you've made about focusing on Hecate's own specialties; nature's already been covered in the second power, which is awesome. Illusion magic could replace your first, and necromancy is fun for the whole family, so that could take up your third power - entirely up to you.

The thing is with magic, from what I can tell, most Demi-Gods in the stories are capable of doing magic (Just as they're overall more resistant and stronger than a regular human); a child of Hecate will just be stronger, more talented, and more resistant to the consequences of magic. So while Danielle - and the other Demi-Gods - are capable of casting spells of any kind, the ones mentioned in the powers section of her CS will be her specialty; her talent; and more importantly, the ones that won't kill her in attempting them.

Other than that, she is good to go!

@Didos
Another great character - just some minor tweaks needed here.
For your first power, I would recommend turning it to a more... chameleon affect, rather than insinuating no harm has or ever will come to her. She has the ability to make eyes pass over her without noticing anything at first, as opposed to someone threatening looking at her, and then deciding not to be threatening. I only say this because in the IC, with monsters and whatnot, it doesn't seem likely they'd decide to just not attack her; not noticing her at first is different, and also very useful.

And I'm somewhat confused over your second power - how do you plan to use it usefully in the IC?

@CrystalApple
Sorry for the delay on your updated CS, I've had a few crazy days. Daniel is wonderful as an Aphro kid rather than Apollo, it suits him overall far better - he's accepted, and you're good to put him in the character's tab. Thank you very much for agreeing with our alterations!

@Holy Soldier
Any points I have myself have already been issued by my wonderful GM's - if you would like to continue the discussion further, kindly take it to PM. I think we've been very reasonable with you so far, and there's no need to clog up the OOC with further problems on the matter when it can be discussed privately.

@Legion02
Not a weird question at all! For powers, the two main things we aim to avoid are over-powered ones, and ones with the potential to Godmod other characters. Now, over-powered ones are somewhat subjective, because what is over-powered? Basically, all you need to keep in mind is that although your character has Godly blood, they are still half human, and mortal. They're not going to have powers in the same realm as the Gods - at least at the very start of the roleplay.

Because the Gods themselves are so diverse, you can have powers that are totally ineffective in combat or not - it is up to you, we have no real preference over things like that. Obviously if you give a really random one like "Can click their fingers and suddenly everyone's wearing neon jorts" or something, then we'll have a slight issue with it. Basically, make your powers whatever you'd like but make sure they're acceptable to the setting, not over-powered, and not god-modding.

As for your second request, eh... I think we'd have to see what you have in mind first, just to make sure it isn't OP.

[Undine]

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[Didos]

@MiddleEarthRoze

I like the suggestion, and I'll definitely incorperate it into Reza!

I just wasn't too sure how far I should have described her powers, since they've played a pretty passive role in her life.

The Trendsetter power would be a social power that could help gather some following or favor or approval should the cause need it. It's like almost like persuasion, or initiating groupthink to those not yet aware of it.

Edit: Also, thought infiltration could be an aspect of it.

[Witch Cat]

@MiddleEarthRoze

I just too realized the Mist was just a PJO thing and now I feel dumb. Anyway, yah I totally understand about the whole Mist thing, and I'm kinda hesitant to change it to Illusion magic. Danielle is supposed to be this great spellcaster, so adding a power that is basically just another form of magic seems wasteful. Then again, I don't have to have 3 powers for my character. Saying she draws power from nature and can cast spells better than the rest seems good enough. But I'll do a bit of revision later and I'll see if I can come up with any good powers. Thanks for your feedback and taking the time to read through my CS!

[OneWayOut]

Ah I start to feel somewhat unoriginal when people have better ideas than me sometimes. XD really cool looking sheets so far tho!

[MiddleEarthRoze]

@Didos

I'll allow the second one, as long as it clearly states it isn't controlling other people - they may feel the influence, but they have the choice to act on it. Just like any social pressure, be it good or bad - like a trend, as you said. As for infiltration, I think that would factor more into your first power than your second - but as the roleplay progresses and the character's use their powers more, your character may be able to control her power more closely - perhaps even becoming invisible? Your choice, of course!

So, make those tweaks, and she's good to put in the character's tab. :)

@Witch Cat

It's no problem at all - thank you for being receptive to suggestions! There's no real rush as of now to finish your CS, so don't feel like you need to think of something fast. And just because the maximum is 3, doesn't mean you have to have that amount. :)

[Witch Cat]

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[Didos]

@MiddleEarthRoze

Just want a final seal of approval before I stick it in there!

Reza Widjaja : Daughter of Sobek

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Reza

Child of Sobek

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"Selling my soul would be a lot easier if I could just find it."

Nikki Sixx

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T H E C H A M P I O N

▻ NAME ◅

Arwireza Sastra Widjaja
● Nicknames : Reza, Ari, Sassy, Dub
● Aliases : The Molly Fairy, Medic

▻ AGE ◅

Twenty-Seven

▻ GENDER ◅

Female

▻ ROMANTIC INTERESTS ◅

Reza has always shown interest in men in some position of power, but not any who may feel any power over her. Whether it be the varsity jock, or the chill frat bro, or the aspiring start-up venturer, she enjoyed the company of anyone that could really validate her. Her few short-lived relationships were power struggles, but she refused to let anyone feels dominance over her.

Regardless, she still daydreams of men worthy of more than just a one-night stand. She's weary of keeping her distance, letting men down easy before an obsession can really develop. She doesn't want a partner who's life came to revolve around her. She simply desires someone she can coexist with: someone who could challenge her and strengthen her without feeling burdening.

▻ APPEARANCE ◅

Standing with extreme dignity at 5'7 on a thin, slightly athletic frame and lightly tanned skin. When she walks, she does with grace, and all her movements seem fluid and deliberate. She's always enjoyed keeping her hair fairly long, seeing it complement her deep black eyes.

She sees herself as fashionable and versatile in her styles, with what could be the only common trait as tight. Her attitude can be seen in her outfits, which she calls her "costumes". Her persona in that moment reflects her outfit and whatever vibe she feels is appropriate to give off. She is a huge fan of makeup and jewelry, too, pouring over online vlogs over ideas on how to subtly tweak her looks.

She regularly speaks with some Bay Area slang parallel to ironic and sarcastic tones, thinking it gives interesting character to her East Coast persona. When she has to, she straightens out her native accent for a more professionally acceptable one. She walks around with a friendly, polite smile, and is polite in most social environments.

She views all aesthetic, from her demeanor to her voice, as a science. She's calculative in her clothing pairings, and even manages to look good in some intentionally mismatched outfit. Her style leans towards a subtle uniqueness that has gradually come to define her.

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T H E M Y T H

▻ PANTHEON ◅

Egypt

▻ GODLY PARENT ◅

Reza's father is Sobek, apotropaic god of the Nile, pharaonic power, the military, fertility, and crocodiles.

▻ POWERS ◅

● Hater Repellant : Throughout her life, Reza has somehow come out unscathed. Robbers, attackers, predators in general have all seemed to neglect her as a target. Never once did she get into a fight she could not absolutely win. No incident has ever been serious enough to leave a scar on her body or psyche. Misfortune avoids her, clearing about the safe path she treads with only achieving success to worry about. Even her most hated enemies fail to confidently grasp the thought of concretely bringing harm to her. Her existence seems passive to those around her when directed negativity arises in their thoughts.

This dumb luck could be attributed, at least partially, to the divine. Her chameleon-esque effect comes as a social power, depending on her own mood and mentality. If she wants to, she can become neglectable, heightened as the environment offers more distractions. Until she becomes the actualized object of someone's attention, she can slip by without drawing any.

● Trendsetter : It feels like everything Reza touches turns into gold, or at least that's how people seem to treat everything she shows even the slightest amount of interest in. One lunch hour during grade school, she sat with the class nerd and come the next day he was chatting it up with his bullies. For a week in high school, she wore neon running shoes to class, and as the academic year progressed, even the teachers seemed to be getting into it. During her semester pledging her sorority, every fraternity house on the row was blasting the Bay Area rap anthems she'd play in her dorm room. In the classroom, she could spark discussion in an otherwise shy and reserved crowd. Everything she does feels acceptable.

Her interests manifest into a social pressure, preying on the malleable and momentarily vulnerable. She can print her biases into the minds of the not-entirely-aware. The unsure find inclination through her example, and the indifferent find themselves drawing opinions. The cognizant stand fast, with their own defined convictions, but in the overstimulated days of mass information and multi-tasking, many opportunities arise to leave an impression.

▻ FATAL FLAW ◅

Reza's greatest weakness is her ego. She's extremely intelligent, and can speak to many things, but her insecurities scream inside her mind whenever she finds herself facing them. She struggles with feelings of inadequacy, forcefully forgetting everything she's accomplished. She worries of others thinking ill of her and damaging her fruitful social constructions. She fears loneliness, constantly keeping those around her at arms-length so she will never have to experience the loss. She is selfish, but only because she feels it's necessary.

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T H E L E G E N D

▻ PERSONALITY ◅

Reza is prideful and pretentious, although she still manages to display deep understanding and empathy for others. She's disciplined and ambitious, although the object of her desire constantly fluctuates. She has constant internal contradictions, with sporadic change of opinions, but she believes it all just a continuous learning process. She somehow enjoys literally everything (music, movies, books, etc.) believing that all genres of all art-forms have meaning. She acknowledges virtues in all systems of thought, including policy and religion, believing any could run perfectly in an unrealistically perfect environment. She personally holds the notion that life is just a game, and her emotions and perceptions don't have any intrinsic value.

It is through developing this mindset that she's created a number of personas to accommodate the many facets of her social life. She has always managed to be at least somewhat sociable in any circle she's inserted herself in, which she has frequently attributed to her looks. She can be petty, holding grudges for anything she feels is a direct attack on her, although she's pretty indifferent to things most others find offensive. She rationalizes that it's just all part of the game, while telling herself that she's in control of her emotions. Everything she does is just meant to empower herself, or at least give the feeling thereof.

▻ HISTORY ◅

Reza was born in Oakland, CA to Indonesian immigrants. Both worked long hours, and the relationship between the parents and the Widjaja children seemed disjoint, apart from the few family dinners that ever transpired in that household. Nonetheless, she proved to be a dutiful student, always placing at the top of her class at her parents' behest. After school, she would keep herself occupied with soccer and volleyball at the local youth leagues. On the weekends, her father sent her and her siblings to a small Asian community gym, training in a variety of Southeast Asian martial arts. Still, the Widjaja children found themselves feeling neglected in their little time spent at home.

During the time Reza's older sister, Jamal, was in high school, she picked up selling weed. A few years later, Reza would follow in her footsteps, and soon enough did their younger brother, Zach. They all grew apart in their similar, yet separate, endeavors, and Reza dove into a world of partying with the popular kids and youthful experimentation. Still, she graduated Summa Cum Laude and lettered in varsity volleyball.

After graduation, Reza flew out to a university in Washington, D.C. on full scholarship, majoring in Religion with a minor in Computer Science. Most of her research was spent on the Ancient Near East and Indian mythology. On the side, she developed an interest in computer theory and logical systems. She left sports, lending more focus to her social life. She joined a sorority and resumed selling weed off packages she had shipped from back home. Her srat sisters dubbed her "Medic" after a time, and she expanded her business through her new network. Still, she managed to make the Dean's List every semester.

She soon began including MDMA and LSD in her stock due to the high demand and lack of reliable dealers. Her wholesaler persona turned into a ghost, called only by "The Molly Fairy" around campus. Her professors believed she had a promising future in archaeology after graduation, but Reza enjoyed her life too much. She chose to stick around D.C. once she got her diploma, continuing living off her drug money and rising through the ranks as a public relations consultant for clubs and bars in the city.

▻ FAMILY ◅

● Leanne Perwira Widjaja, Mother : Reza has always been caring towards her mother, a nurse working long, sporadic shifts. She sees Leanne as the only real parent in the household, acknowledging her efforts and often feeling remorse about the burden she may be putting on her.

● Jerome Widjaja, Father (Assumed) : Although Reza sees Jerome with a sort of reverence for what he's accomplished throughout his life, mostly as a naval engineer, she feels contempt towards him for coming off emotionally indifferent towards her and her siblings.

● Aijamal Tamara Widjaja, Older Half-Sister : The two sisters were very close growing up. Reza saw Jamal as her mentor, and probably even a parental figure considering the lack of presence of their own. They drifted apart when Jamal graduated high school, and the rift deepened when Reza left for college.

● Zachary Gunnar Widjaja, Younger Half-Brother : Ever since Zach strengthened his gang affiliations after Reza went off to college, their relationship has been extremely strained. They were close and protective of each other growing up, but Reza couldn't stop Zach's descent into their childhood ghetto.

▻ RELATIONSHIPS ◅

N/A

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[MiddleEarthRoze]

@Didos

Seal of Approval

She's good to go!

[Witch Cat]

Quick question, how many other people are left that need to turn in a CS? I'm just curious and I don't intend to rush anyone still working on theirs!

[McHaggis]

@Witch Cat

looks at all the other GMs, including @MiddleEarthRoze
YEAH GOOD QUESTION GUYS
(im just joshin')