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First off:
Is Annabelle a native of Oublioth or not? The history does not make this clear, as it's written from a narrative first-person view, followed by a description of a realm that is seemingly seperate from the main world. In the case that she is an outsider, this would not be acceptable, as players are supposed to be natives of Oublioth. If she is a native who got trapped in some sort of shadowplane or minor pocket-world, this needs a bit more clarification.


She's a native. The 'being separate' is merely flavor. I didn't intend to mean that is was something like a different dimension or world. Certainly not in an isekai sense. Magically sequestered, more like. A pocket region, normally inaccessible except by intent or a stroke of bad luck.

Admittedly I know I took a bit of liberty with creating this place in terms of worldbuilding. I assumed, given other's histories that adding in things was fine, albeit everyone else thus far has just been pointing to kingdoms and the like. If you want the fundamental details to this place, I'd be more than happy to send them to you over PM. I was already going to do so, but you got to the review faster.

Additionally, if the only living things in the pocket-plane were Annabelle, the Spirit and the Wraith-monsters, how did Annabelle manage to survive for - what I assume - is years in there? The lack of food, safe shelter, drinkable water as well as the seeming absence of sunlight would all make it near impossible to survive, unless time was somehow also warped in that place.


"No man remained save herself, this wood-surrounded castle city populated only by three things: the various natural fauna of the land, somehow surviving in a desolate, malevolent place..."

The water is untouched, as this is a curse upon the land's creatures first and foremost, and an entire castle, forget the surrounding village, yet remain standing in the region. She was granted what amounts to a light spell to help her upon her arrival, which is supposed to be insinuated to be from the landgod that eventually helped her. Again, I can always give details on this over PM (unless you want it to be out in the open here).

Moving on from her history, we come to her skills and class. She is listed as a Summoner, but has stats and equipment more suited for a barbarian or melee-fighter. Now, I'm not one to tell you how to build your character, but it seems a bit odd for a person who relies on summoned monsters to fight for them to fight on the front-lines themselves.. Albeit, she doesn't seem to be your typical Summoner.


I'm not much of a DnD player, which is to say, I've never actually played DnD. I know all the basics behind it, but things like classes, stats, etc... I'm not familiar with. Obviously your typical summoner in most media isn't a spellblade, but I wasn't sure what else to call her without using a made-up class (and even then I honestly wasn't sure what I'd even name it!). But I'd also like to point out that her Intellect is B, definitely not low by any means.

This brings up another question though: If she was isolated in a world with only monsters who constantly hounded her, how did she have time to get her INT so high? Who taught her? How did she study? Where did she learn the spells she knows? There is no explantion or input about how or why she knows the things that she does - and putting an "amnesia"-censoring on the reasons is sadly not going to fly. If your character knows how to do things, especially magic, you need to specify where and how they learned that.


"With sunless years did she learn under the forgotten landgod until she was bade to leave Holzwand for the wider world."

It's supposed to be implied it taught her the magic, whose nature I can (once again) detail by PM if you'd like. There's a wider flair to this that I didn't necessarily want to reveal in the sheet. All of this occured after her arrival in Holzwand, not prior. She definitely didn't just "get" all this stuff without any mention.

Also, her immunities. I'm sorry to say but being immune to "forced" fear by magic or abilities is not an option. Either you're entirely immune to fear, or you're not. You can have a natural high threshold for it, but as a (what I assume is still a regular) human, you don't really have the capacity to be immune to such an emotion, no matter how horrible or traumatizing your life's been...

... Unless there's something mentally wrong with Annabelle, or she suffered a lobotomy.


I don't have as much of a reasoning for this one besides personally feeling that an intentional manifestation of fear could be thought of as different from an inherent fear of something. Being a spell, I simply thought that it would have an 'elemental quality' in a sense, and distinguished it from simply being 'darkness element'. I can remove it, ultimately.
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ancestral spirit barbarians are summoners don't @ me
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Very good.

However, I think you misunderstood the bit aobut her INT being high.

My issue was that she has a very high intellect for someone who was, essentially, removed from the world and didn't have access to conventional study or learning-methods. Granted, she could just be naturally intelligent, but given her situation, it seems more likely that she would have a high WIS as opposed to a high INT. Again, this is not an actual issue in and of itself, it's merely me pointing something out that, I personally, felt was a bit odd.

As for her class, again, it's not really an issue. Though she does sound closer to a Spellblade than to a conventional summoner. Given her seeming proclivity for blood-related magic, you might also call her Blood Mage or maybe even Blood Battle Mage, or something. Again, the classes aren't clean-cut and there are obviously variations of the standard ones we're used to.

I also need to say that the sutble implications completely flew over my head. This is what I get for being sick and trying to analyze stuff at close to midnight... *Ahem* There's no need to send me any specifics unless you yourself want to do so. I trust you'll be fair and not too liberal with your freedom of creation.

And yes, people are free to add to the world-building, as long as I don't say that what you made isn't feasible. ^^

But yes, Fear is just an emotion, and spells that invoke it do so by invoking your natural Fear. It isn't an element like 'Holy' or 'Ice'. It's basically a magic that forces you to feel a certain way, but the emotion is no different from feeling it 'naturally'. So, you'll hafta remove that particular bit from the immunities. You can still have Fear as a resistance though, if you want.

Once you've done that, feel free to post her in the Character Tab. I'll edit the first OOC post tomorrow and put her in there. Welcome. ^^
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I saw Intellect and "how large your MP pool is, how powerful your magic spells can be" and thought that was fitting. I definitely didn't mean she was intelligent (cause she definitely ain't). But also "How easy you learn" which does apply to her. And I didn't put wisdom cause that felt more like for... well... boomers.
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Just dropping by to say I've got a character sheet ready for the most part, just got the history left. You can throw me on the waiting list because I'm certainly interested in joining whenever you want me to.
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Wretch has been added to the Waitlist. :)

And yeah... The stats are a bit wonky, Asura. I didn't do a great job with them. Just think of them as an overall collection of things, as opposed to having a single purpose.

INT is both your MP, how easily you learn, how inherently smart you are and how well-educated you are. As an example.
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I've added the CS to the characters tab. Anything I should know, or where to start hopping in?
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>The strange heap that had been laying off to the side in the church began to stir.

That's you, Asu.
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>The strange heap that had been laying off to the side in the church began to stir.

That's you, Asu.

No it's not... XD

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You're free to post in the IC, and I would suggest reading the posts and paths of ERode, Click This, OwO and PigeonsOfAstora. They're currently the group that is out in the "open", so to speak, and would be the group you could join up with.

The group of Kazemitsu, Afro Samurai and The Irish Tree are currently locked into a location which prevents entry and escape, so joining their group won't really be feasible until they clear (or die trying) their event. :)
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strange heaps lying on the side of churches stirring drinks is no basis for a system of government...
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strange heaps lying on the side of churches stirring drinks is no basis for a system of government...

You shut your anarchic butt! If you got to decide how the goverment was governed we'd all be dictated over by naked wolf-girls eating apples and rolling around in open-air wagons! WHICH ADMITTEDLY SOUNDS GREAT ON PAPER BUT DOESN'T WORK IN THE REAL ADULT WORLD! D<
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You shut your anarchic butt! If you got to decide how the goverment was governed we'd all be dictated over by naked wolf-girls eating apples and rolling around in open-air wagons! WHICH ADMITTEDLY SOUNDS GREAT ON PAPER BUT DOESN'T WORK IN THE REAL ADULT WORLD! D<


You say that, but it really does sound great, doesn't it?
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Gunna stab a fool.
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Everyone just wants to fight... What happened to using your Intimidate or Diplomacy skills!? D:
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This is both intimidate and diplomacy. No one trusts a sniper that disappears during negotiations though, and neither is there trust for a wizard who can cast magic without verbalizing it.
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So distrusting! Your childhood must've been horri- oh wait...
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Posted!
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A smile didn't suffice for Hawklin :>
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The finest piece of ass he's seen all day will have to suffice.
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The finest piece of ass he's seen all day will have to suffice.

Inbefore Serafaye. o3o
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