[OOC] Royal Rumble: Rumble over the Heavens

[Aqutanama]

I may make a future isekai character if possible. Someone who is in quantum stuff. same looks and name because I'm lazy. Listed in character below.

greed

Name: Val
Greed

Sex: Male
Age: 13
Height: 5’9”
Max Height 6’6” (When he is older)
Weight: 90 lbs
Max Weight: 250 lbs (When he is older)
Hair Style: Long hair down past his waist
Hair color: Brown
Right Eye Color: Brown
Left Eye Color: Blue (Covered by an eyepatch)

Child Genius
Grade: 1st year

Biography:
Some say that great power has a great cost. Either that or one trains in order to gain said power. Val lost his world. Some would probably think that being reborn in another world would be great. However, that was not the case for Val. He was trying to make a breakthrough that would change the galaxy and the future! Fate, coincidence, bad luck, bad timing. These were all things that people would blame. He was happy with his research! Something had to go wrong to get to where he is now, right?

His family were the leaders of quantum computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory. Of course, this was in his past life. In that life and this one he would be considered a genius. However, in his previous life he was messing with black holes, while relying on the quantum field, he fell into one. Well, his ship did. Time seemed to stretch as did his ship and his very being. This seemed to happen for what seemed like thousands of years. This drove the poor once young man insane. Yes, for some reason he was still alive during the process. Eventually, his insanity faded. Everything became one within the event and everything became clear.

His sanity was restored and somehow his consciousness survived the process. What people would call a soul, spirit, mind walking… Well, whatever it was he was doing it. However, when he emerged from the singularity he was in another dimension, realm, or point in space. It is possible that the years he experienced really happened on a galactic scale. Either that or he exited another black hole. There was the theory that black holes are linked. He didn’t have time to process his thoughts as he noticed a strange blob coming towards him. Then a dark being appeared and grabbed him. When he woke up he was in a new body. Had a new family. Things were different yet he understood what was happening.

Val’s life was simple. He was born into a wealthy family. Some suspect that they are of a long lost royal line. Others speculate that they came from a demi-god family heritage. Both or neither could be true. That aside, Val knew enough about his realm and hoped that he could use it to his advantage here. He spent most of his time when he was a baby learning the language as well as anything else he could. Speaking the language was a lot harder than the written and writing. It is possible it was because he already knew twenty other languages from his original life. That isn’t to say that the language was hard to learn, just harder than the reading and written versions of the language.

Once he was able to walk he was training. Be it his body, his mind, or his powers. Somehow he had gained gifts. They reminded him of his time within the black hole, however, they were different. He trained under heightened gravity fields due to his power. Weights were not needed as they could damage his body. He tried to keep up a constant field around himself in order to maximize his training. Eventually, he would get used to the weight. Every time he did he would multiply it. Mind you he has had this ability since he was born. Therefore, using it since he was a baby would be possible. However, the multiples were so small that others wouldn’t notice. It was doing something for his body though.

Due to this training his body transcends the normal limitations of his species. A few things he can do due to this is flight, jumping really far quickly, running really fast, take hits from things that would kill someone,

Powers:
Core Ability:
Singularity Transcendence
Val survived within a black hole for thousands if not tens of thousands of years. Due to this he went insane and regained his sanity over and over throughout the years. This makes his mind immune to mind influences. Furthermore, he has special abilities based on the Black Hole and quantum. Manipulation of gravity, portals, time, and space. Furthermore, he has telekinesis due to the manipulation of gravitic fields. Black hole space is a special space that only he has access to. It can store anything and everything. Living, dead, or other.

Vortex
The ability to devour spells, powers, and other abilities. However, there is a requirement of defeat. He must best someone in some way. Be it combat, wits, or something else. Furthermore, the abilities or spells have to then be allowed. However, once allowed he has a full copy of the ability, power, or spell. (Mainly this is a restriction so if players don’t want to share their powers he won’t take them.) This power can also consume matter. He can use the matter to help heal himself or store it in a black hole space.

Like the black hole he consumes.

Black Hole Space
Black hole space is a special space that only he has access to. It can store anything and everything. Living, dead, or other. He can access it and pull items from it. This space is a special ability of his. Not a spell. Furthermore, this space allows him to shrink items or grow them. This does take time but is possible.

Core of the First Spark
Core of the First Spark grants him immunity to fire. Furthermore, he can control flames at will. His Core fire is the strongest flame in existence. The spark was the first spark that started life in his original realm. It was within the dark hole and became part of him during his time within.

People of interest
Family

I would like to point out that he has a Max weight and height listed for when he grows up. Assuming he doesn't die.

[KillamriX88]

@Aqutanama
OK, what I'm seeing here is largely the same character as before in many ways, except you retooled his powers to be... like... holy crap.

He has time and space and gravity and (the world's hottest) fire. And mental fortress. And power duplication, which means on top of his already insane arsenal, he could hypothetically have any other power too. Normal power stealers/copiers are at least somewhat limited by having a weaker baseline. This guy is a turbo genius who's been gravity training since almost birth and who can basically cast amaterasu.

Again, I'm not the GM, but I would never personally accept a character THAT egregiously overloaded and incongruent with itself. There is a hint of a theme for his powers, but it's being stretched to the max to make him uncomfortably strong.

To put it a bit more simply, you basically packed an ENTIRE power set into just his core, and then added a further three rather strong abilities on top of that. Sheesh.

[Lewascan2]

I may make a future isekai character if possible. Someone who is in quantum stuff. same looks and name because I'm lazy. Listed in character below.

Greed

Name: Val
Greed
Gluttony
Pride

Sex: Male
Age: 13
Height: 5’9”
Max Height 6’6” (When he is older)
Weight: 120lbs
Max Weight: 250 lbs (When he is older)
Hair Style: Long hair down past his waist
Hair color: Brown
Right Eye Color: Brown
Left Eye Color: Blue (Covered by an eyepatch)

Child Genius
Grade: 1st year

Biography:
Some say that great power has a great cost. Either that or one trains in order to gain said power. Val lost his world. Some would probably think that being reborn in another world would be great. However, that was not the case for Val. He was trying to make a breakthrough that would change the galaxy and the future! Fate, coincidence, bad luck, bad timing. These were all things that people would blame. He was happy with his research! Of course, something had to go wrong to get to where he is now.

His family were the leaders of quantum computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory. Of course, this was in his past life. In that life and this one he would be considered a genius. However, in his previous life he was messing with black holes, while relying on the quantum field, he fell into one. Well, his ship did. Time seemed to stretch as did his ship and his very being. This seemed to happen for what seemed like thousands of years. This drove the poor once young man insane. Yes, for some reason he was still alive during the process. Eventually, his insanity faded. Everything became one within the event and everything became clear.

His sanity was restored and somehow his consciousness survived the process. What people would call a soul, spirit, mind walking… Well, whatever it was he was doing it. However, when he emerged from the singularity he was in another dimension, realm, or point in space. It is possible that the years he experienced really happened on a galactic scale. Either that or he exited another black hole. There was the theory that black holes are linked. He didn’t have time to process his thoughts as he noticed a strange blob coming towards him. Then a dark being appeared and grabbed him. When he woke up he was in a new body. Had a new family. Things were different yet he understood what was happening.

Val’s life was simple. He was born into a wealthy family. Some suspect that they are of a long lost royal line. Others speculate that they came from a demi-god family heritage. Both or neither could be true. That aside, Val knew enough about his realm and hoped that he could use it to his advantage here. He spent most of his time when he was a baby learning the language as well as anything else he could. Speaking the language was a lot harder than the written and writing. It is possible it was because he already knew twenty other languages from his original life. That isn’t to say that the language was hard to learn, just harder than the reading and written versions of the language.

Once he was able to walk he was training. Be it his body, his mind, or his powers. Somehow he had gained gifts. They reminded him of his time within the black hole, however, they were different. He trained under heightened gravity fields due to his power. Weights were not needed as they could damage his body. He tried to keep up a constant field around himself in order to maximize his training. Eventually, he would get used to the weight. Every time he did he would multiply it. Mind you he has had this ability since he was born. Therefore, using it since he was a baby would be possible. However, the multiples were so small that others wouldn’t notice. It was doing something for his body though.

Due to this training his body transcends the normal limitations of his species. A few things he can do due to this is flight, jumping really far quickly, running really fast, take hits from things that would kill someone,

Powers:
Core Ability:
Singularity Transcendence
Val survived within a black hole for thousands if not tens of thousands of years. Due to this he went insane and regained his sanity over and over throughout the years. This makes his mind immune to mind influences. Furthermore, he has special abilities based on the Black Hole and quantum. Manipulation of gravity, portals, time, and space. Furthermore, he has telekinesis due to the manipulation of gravitic fields. Black hole space is a special space that only he has access to. It can store anything and everything. Living, dead, or other.

Vortex
The ability to devour spells, powers, and other abilities. However, there is a requirement of defeat. He must best someone in some way. Be it combat, wits, or something else. Furthermore, the abilities or spells have to then be allowed. However, once allowed he has a full copy of the ability, power, or spell. (Mainly this is a restriction so if players don’t want to share their powers he won’t take them.) This power can also consume matter. He can use the matter to help heal himself or store it in a black hole space.

Like the black hole he consumes.

Black Hole Space
Black hole space is a special space that only he has access to. It can store anything and everything. Living, dead, or other. He can access it and pull items from it. This space is a special ability of his. Not a spell. Furthermore, this space allows him to shrink items or grow them. This does take time but is possible.

Core of the First Spark
Core of the First Spark grants him immunity to fire. Furthermore, he can control flames at will. His Core fire is the strongest flame in existence. The spark was the first spark that started life in his original realm. It was within the dark hole and became part of him during his time within.

People of interest
Family

I would like to point out that he has a Max weight and height listed for when he grows up. Assuming he doesn't die.

@Aqutanama

Okay, uh... Wow, so... this character is a thing that exists.
Somehow, the blacksmith build from before looks way more reasonable now.

Right out the gate then, the Singularity Transcendence power is broken as shit and just ggez claps pretty much everything in the setting. Like, that power "slot" (for an apparent definition of the word with this... being) alone contains everything that a single character could possibly need. If you took that and spread it out into a couple sub-powers, then we might be cooking with gas here. Stronk as fukk, but not "God on Earth" broken... maybe. It doesn't seem to have a whole lot of limits (which you better believe would be required as well).

Which, of course, is ignoring that fact that your reasoning for having it doesn't really work with the RP setting at all, since it's completely separate from the "Gift" system. And on that note, humans may be "built different", but they don't manifest supernatural abilities under basically any circumstance outside a "Gift/Blessing" scenario. So, this guy will not, in fact, suddenly spontaneously gain powers from that whole black hole thing. He's only going to get powers from Gods. Also, humans in this setting can't really go full "Dragon Ball" in terms of training. As in, if he's going to be training from birth, he better be real dang careful not to murderize himself through overtraining at too young an age. Further, it's been said by Rofls that his "muscle gains" max out with his age. So, he can be a peak physical strength 13 year old, but he'll lose to a well-trained 16 year old in turn. And he's not going to be able to actually train to superhuman levels. Without a Gift that specifically removes such limiters, he's hard-capped at normal human capabilities.

Vortex: "..."
So, basically Uno Reverse Card: The Power. Never mind that he needs "permission" from the other players to actually copy powers after negating them, the fact that this can just eat and no-sell anything that comes his way is uh... something. Oh, and then it also lets him regenerate as an extra screw everything. I'll just put it out there that power copiers have been... problems in this RP series, so there's some general bias against having another around, especially one that can farm permanent powers with seemingly no downsides that actually matter.

Black Hole Space:
Obito Uchiha's Kamui on steroids but minus the teleportation... maybe. Narrows eyes. Free get out of jail card any time anywhere and also instant nigh-inescapable perma-prison for anyone he doesn't like. This is just getting noped by the GMs for sure. It's literally an insta-win against anyone that can't perform outright dimensional travel to escape (which consists of, I think, literally just Chinami presently... and maybe Andras if her power rolls decide to be lucky).

Core of the First Spark:
At this point, it's both unnecessary and not even thematic to the rest of the powerset, despite the apparent attempts to reach for the literal stars. And honestly, it's easy to overlook after getting slapped in the face with everything before it, but yeah, that "hottest flame in existence" thing... Holy shit, that alone is just... there are no words for how much bullshit that could cause. As written, that's just not going to fly... you know, unless you mean he only controls actual fire that can feasibly exist. But I doubt that's what you mean.

AND THEN, of course, let us not forget that this guy is born into a wealthy family and is supposedly a hyper genius when it comes to technology, which effectively gives him another power slot outside the power system. He has a lot of freaking assets just being born. He hardly needs any more in the form of actual powers, because honestly, someone could literally just run a character like this as a no-powers normie that is basically just Iron Man and relies entirely on their own smarts and "Humanity Fuck Yeah" to win the day against all the chaos.

So, as Killa essentially said, literally just scrap everything except the Core power and then split up several of the core power's abilities into being his sub-powers. It's pretty clear now that you don't understand the power scaling level of this RP. So, to clarify:

Think of any anime tournament arc. Then discard basically all the Dragon Ball examples. Think more like Naruto Chunin exams, Hunter x Hunter. The works. We aren't making outright gods on earth here. These are mostly a bunch of teenagers going to super school (while having spicy adventures on the side, as they slowly root out the sus things happening in the setting's plot).

And by the way, since Erisse is the only CS I'm fairly certain you've read, you should realize that she qualifies as a High Tier by this RP's standards. Combat-wise, she may lag behind, so she's easy to underestimate. But her support power long term is relatively unrivaled in potential and flexibility. So, when you make a character that isn't just stronger than her, but so much stronger than her in every conceivable manner that it's egregious, I think you might be able to see why it would get shot down.

Honestly, as a thought exercise, you should probably ask yourself, "How can my character be defeated?" If you can't answer the question easily or definitively, then he's too strong. A badass "protagonist-kun" or whatever is fine, but he's not going to be one of those "world's strongest" korean manga types. Have some limits; include a relatively accessible "kyptonite" and/or workaround to his abilities. Also, maybe read the powersets of the other characters for a better idea of power scaling. You'll likely quickly see that while there are a few that are somewhat "cheaters", they are by no means invincible and tend to have a counter or three amongst the rest of the cast... and they also all pretty much pale in comparison to this guy as things are.

Oh, and again, you need to rework the source of his powers.
They should come from Gods or something local and god-derived. Not a black hole.

[Spin The Wheel]

This might be a bad time, but just wanted to slip this in while I remember the idea. Feel free to look it over whenever. Kind of planning to use this guy for the next arc, whatever it ends up being.

Thursday/Jeremy

Name: Thursday 3 o'clock

Nickname(s): Jeremy Williams

Age: 15

Grade: St. Laurel's, first year

Appearance: Short and rather scrawny for his age, sitting at 5 feet flat. Wide green eyes and small features, along with chestnut brown hair, which makes him look kind of like a mouse. Wears a big, star patterned wizard hat at all times, though it may be that the wizard hat is wearing him. The hat never comes off and simply allows corporeal objects to pass through it and onto Jeremy's soft, vulnerable head. At least it lets him cut his hair.

Biography: Jeremy was like most boys his age, going to school, playing around with his friends, getting bullied at school for being giftless, the usual. Everyday he thought of turning things around with a gift of his very own, and every night his dreams were much the same. Then one day, his dream came true. With a bolt of magic lightning, a wizard hat appeared on his head and a voice boomed down from the heavens. "I am the God of Reality, Jeremy, and I grant you the gift of all gifts. Henceforth, you shall be one of my Reality Wizards, and you will be known as Thursday 3 o'clock! I have granted you powers befitting your station. Now go forth and use these powers to spread my magnificence!" That very moment, on a sunny Thursday afternoon, 3 o'clock sharp, Jeremy was imbued with untold mastery over reality. Crackling with newfound power, he strolled confidently up to his school bullies the next day... and was promptly beaten into the ground. Jeremy had begun to feel that he had been the victim of some kind of joke.

With that incident, Jeremy decided to try and keep his head down for the rest of his middle school career, difficult as that would be now that he had a very flashy, unremovable wizard hat on it. By knuckling down on his studies he somehow scraped his way into St.Laurel's School of Divine Excellence, where he hopes to lead a quiet high school life. Unfortunately, he had a funny feeling that his troubles have only just begun.

Core: "Reality" magic
Thursday 3 o'clock has been imbued with magic spells that have the power to warp the very fabric of reality! In theory, anyway. In practise, he can use phrases derived from random moments in his life to apply superficial effects to real objects. His spells layer something onto someone's existing reality, but they can't change it, only affect it in rather ineffectual ways. The spells must be spoken out loud to work, and require Jeremy to choose a target. Such reality alterations don't hold for long, either, slipping off like a poorly glued piece of paper.

Ability 1: "Fork the tender!"
Derived from a particularly tasty dinner involving chicken tenders. Jeremy, holding a proverbial fork, spears a target, the proverbial tender. This doesn't do any damage to the target, but he can then move the 'fork' to and fro, and move the 'tender' as a result. He has to be careful though, since, unlike the lovely dinner he remembers so fondly, the tender may be stronger than the arm holding the fork.

Ability 2: "Put on the tuxedo!"
Jeremy was once tasked with attending his older sister's wedding with an acceptable outfit. The memories of his failure haunt him to this day. When used, it puts an awkward, ill fitting tuxedo on the target. Can be useful for tripping up and restraining his opponents for a little while, since it lasts longer than his other spells. Just the like the shame he felt on that day...

Ability 2: "Pause the DVD!"
Probably his most practical spell. Freezes the target, rather too briefly for Jeremy's liking. While they are frozen they can't be attacked or affected. Maybe he can put the tuxedo on while they can't move... Seems to lose effectiveness on repeated uses, as if his friends are taking the remote from him after a while.

Relationships: None so far, though he's kind of friends with Ken? He's trying to keep to himself for the most part. Gets nervous around girls.

[Aqutanama]

I did look at all the current character's abilities. Most have multiple functions from what I could see. So, I'm unsure what I can and cannot do.

Edit done.

greed

Name: Val
Greed

Sex: Male
Age: 13
Height: 5’9”
Max Height 6’6” (When he is older)
Weight: 90 lbs
Max Weight: 250 lbs (When he is older)
Hair Style: Long hair down past his waist
Hair color: Brown
Right Eye Color: Brown
Left Eye Color: Blue (Covered by an eyepatch)

Child Genius
Grade: 1st year

Biography:
Some say that great power has a great cost. Either that or one trains in order to gain said power. Val lost his world. Some would probably think that being reborn in another world would be great. However, that was not the case for Val. He was trying to make a breakthrough that would change the galaxy and the future! Fate, coincidence, bad luck, bad timing. These were all things that people would blame. He was happy with his research! Something had to go wrong to get to where he is now, right?

His family were the leaders of quantum computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory. Of course, this was in his past life. In that life and this one he would be considered a genius. However, in his previous life he was messing with black holes, while relying on the quantum field, he fell into one. Well, his ship did. Time seemed to stretch as did his ship and his very being. This seemed to happen for what seemed like thousands of years. This drove the poor once young man insane. Yes, for some reason he was still alive during the process. Eventually, his insanity faded. Everything became one within the event and everything became clear.

His sanity was restored and somehow his consciousness survived the process. What people would call a soul, spirit, mind walking… Well, whatever it was he was doing it. However, when he emerged from the singularity he was in another dimension, realm, or point in space. It is possible that the years he experienced really happened on a galactic scale. Either that or he exited another black hole. There was the theory that black holes are linked. He didn’t have time to process his thoughts as he noticed a strange blob coming towards him. Then a dark being appeared and grabbed him. When he woke up he was in a new body. Had a new family. Things were different yet he understood what was happening.

Val’s life was simple. He was born into a wealthy family. Some suspect that they are of a long lost royal line. Others speculate that they came from a demi-god family heritage. Both or neither could be true. That aside, Val knew enough about his realm and hoped that he could use it to his advantage here. However, the more he tried to access the memories the more they seemed to fade.

Due to this, he spent most of his time when he was a baby learning the language as well as anything else he could. Speaking the language was a lot harder than the written and writing. It is possible it was because he already knew twenty other languages from his original life, or did he? That isn’t to say that the language was hard to learn, just harder than the reading and written versions of the language.

Once he was able to walk he was training. Be it his body, his mind, or his powers. Somehow he had gained gifts. They reminded him of his time within the black hole, however, they were different. He trained under heightened gravity fields due to his power. Weights were not needed as they could damage his body. He tried to keep up a constant field around himself in order to maximize his training.

Eventually, he would get used to the weight. Every time he did he would multiply it. Mind you he has had this ability since he was born. Therefore, using it since he was a baby would be possible. However, the multiples were so small that others wouldn’t notice. It was doing something for his body though. He would remove the fields when someone he loved was nearby. This gave him some time to recuperate and didn’t allow him to hurt others. He couldn’t recall why but family was something important to him.

Because of his training his body transcends the normal limitations of his species. A few things he can do due to this is flight, jumping really far quickly, running really fast, and taking hits from things that would kill someone. He tried training his mind by getting invested in Magi-tech. However, he started to get plagued by nightmares and stopped. (Caused by a majority of the deities getting bored of his research) Which was sad because he seemed to have a knack for it. Perhaps sometime in the future he can pick it up again.

Powers:
Core Ability:
Singularity Transcendence
Val survived within a black hole for thousands if not tens of thousands of years. Due to this The Goddess of Chaos took pity on him and bestowed a blessing and curse upon him. Singularity Transcendence has forked abilities based on the Black Hole and quantum. Manipulation of gravity, portals, time, and space. Telekinesis due to the manipulation of gravity fields. Black hole space is a special space that only he has access to.

However, he has yet to unlock most of these abilities. This is probably due to the Goddess of Chaos wanting to see what he can do with one of the abilities. Furthermore, these abilities seem to have several levels.

This ability was bestowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Unlocked:
Gravity Control
Basic (Growth)
He can manipulate gravity within 2 meters. The force that can be applied can go up to 5 times the planet's normal gravity.

This ability was unlocked or allowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Gravity Training
Growth(Progression available within story)
While growing up he trained under the highest influence of gravity control he has.

Big Family:
His family is wealthy. Thus, he has no concerns over needing money. "I'm rich." would be an understatement.

Flaws:
Unstable Mind:
Weakness
Val survived within a black hole for thousands if not tens of thousands of years. Due to this he went insane and regained his sanity over and over throughout the years. Due to this his mind is a weak shattered scattered mess. He is weak against mind influencing abilities.

Memory Leak:
When he tries to recall his past life his mind forgets the memories that he tries to recall. Because of this he has to think of the future and not dwell on who he was. That person is gone, for now.

Entertainment for the Divine:
The Deities can “tune in” and watch him every now and again. The Goddess of Chaos set up a voting system in order for him to unlock his abilities. However, there is also a down vote system. This causes the Goddess to send “bad things” his way. Some of the bad things are nightmares of his previous life, chaos creatures that hunt him and don’t let him sleep. Even if he slept he would have nightmares.

Growing Pains
Due to the limitations of his small form, training as he does, causes his body to have intense cramps. These can usually keep him up at night. He has to stretch and massage the area. Usually his calves, feet, neck, and back. Stretching and massaging the area can give relief. Furthermore, eating the correct foods can as well.

People of interest
Family

[Lewascan2]

I did look at all the current character's abilities. Most have multiple functions from what I could see. So, I'm unsure what I can and cannot do.

Edit done.

greed

Name: Val
Greed

Sex: Male
Age: 13
Height: 5’9”
Max Height 6’6” (When he is older)
Weight: 90 lbs
Max Weight: 250 lbs (When he is older)
Hair Style: Long hair down past his waist
Hair color: Brown
Right Eye Color: Brown
Left Eye Color: Blue (Covered by an eyepatch)

Child Genius
Grade: 1st year

Biography:
Some say that great power has a great cost. Either that or one trains in order to gain said power. Val lost his world. Some would probably think that being reborn in another world would be great. However, that was not the case for Val. He was trying to make a breakthrough that would change the galaxy and the future! Fate, coincidence, bad luck, bad timing. These were all things that people would blame. He was happy with his research! Something had to go wrong to get to where he is now, right?

His family were the leaders of quantum computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory. Of course, this was in his past life. In that life and this one he would be considered a genius. However, in his previous life he was messing with black holes, while relying on the quantum field, he fell into one. Well, his ship did. Time seemed to stretch as did his ship and his very being. This seemed to happen for what seemed like thousands of years. This drove the poor once young man insane. Yes, for some reason he was still alive during the process. Eventually, his insanity faded. Everything became one within the event and everything became clear.

His sanity was restored and somehow his consciousness survived the process. What people would call a soul, spirit, mind walking… Well, whatever it was he was doing it. However, when he emerged from the singularity he was in another dimension, realm, or point in space. It is possible that the years he experienced really happened on a galactic scale. Either that or he exited another black hole. There was the theory that black holes are linked. He didn’t have time to process his thoughts as he noticed a strange blob coming towards him. Then a dark being appeared and grabbed him. When he woke up he was in a new body. Had a new family. Things were different yet he understood what was happening.

Val’s life was simple. He was born into a wealthy family. Some suspect that they are of a long lost royal line. Others speculate that they came from a demi-god family heritage. Both or neither could be true. That aside, Val knew enough about his realm and hoped that he could use it to his advantage here. However, the more he tried to access the memories the more they seemed to fade.

Due to this, he spent most of his time when he was a baby learning the language as well as anything else he could. Speaking the language was a lot harder than the written and writing. It is possible it was because he already knew twenty other languages from his original life, or did he? That isn’t to say that the language was hard to learn, just harder than the reading and written versions of the language.

Once he was able to walk he was training. Be it his body, his mind, or his powers. Somehow he had gained gifts. They reminded him of his time within the black hole, however, they were different. He trained under heightened gravity fields due to his power. Weights were not needed as they could damage his body. He tried to keep up a constant field around himself in order to maximize his training.

Eventually, he would get used to the weight. Every time he did he would multiply it. Mind you he has had this ability since he was born. Therefore, using it since he was a baby would be possible. However, the multiples were so small that others wouldn’t notice. It was doing something for his body though. He would remove the fields when someone he loved was nearby. This gave him some time to recuperate and didn’t allow him to hurt others. He couldn’t recall why but family was something important to him.

Because of his training his body transcends the normal limitations of his species. A few things he can do due to this is flight, jumping really far quickly, running really fast, and taking hits from things that would kill someone. He tried training his mind by getting invested in Magi-tech. However, he started to get plagued by nightmares and stopped. (Caused by a majority of the deities getting bored of his research) Which was sad because he seemed to have a knack for it. Perhaps sometime in the future he can pick it up again.

Powers:
Core Ability:
Singularity Transcendence
Val survived within a black hole for thousands if not tens of thousands of years. Due to this The Goddess of Chaos took pity on him and bestowed a blessing and curse upon him. Singularity Transcendence has forked abilities based on the Black Hole and quantum. Manipulation of gravity, portals, time, and space. Telekinesis due to the manipulation of gravity fields. Black hole space is a special space that only he has access to.

However, he has yet to unlock most of these abilities. This is probably due to the Goddess of Chaos wanting to see what he can do with one of the abilities. Furthermore, these abilities seem to have several levels.

This ability was bestowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Unlocked:
Gravity Control
Basic (Growth)
He can manipulate gravity within 2 meters. The force that can be applied can go up to 5 times the planet's normal gravity.

This ability was unlocked or allowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Gravity Training
Growth(Progression available within story)
While growing up he trained under the highest influence of gravity control he has.

Big Family:
His family is wealthy. Thus, he has no concerns over needing money. "I'm rich." would be an understatement.

Flaws:
Unstable Mind:
Weakness
Val survived within a black hole for thousands if not tens of thousands of years. Due to this he went insane and regained his sanity over and over throughout the years. Due to this his mind is a weak shattered scattered mess. He is weak against mind influencing abilities.

Memory Leak:
When he tries to recall his past life his mind forgets the memories that he tries to recall. Because of this he has to think of the future and not dwell on who he was. That person is gone, for now.

Entertainment for the Divine:
The Deities can “tune in” and watch him every now and again. The Goddess of Chaos set up a voting system in order for him to unlock his abilities. However, there is also a down vote system. This causes the Goddess to send “bad things” his way. Some of the bad things are nightmares of his previous life, chaos creatures that hunt him and don’t let him sleep. Even if he slept he would have nightmares.

Growing Pains
Due to the limitations of his small form, training as he does, causes his body to have intense cramps. These can usually keep him up at night. He has to stretch and massage the area. Usually his calves, feet, neck, and back. Stretching and massaging the area can give relief. Furthermore, eating the correct foods can as well.

People of interest
Family

@Aqutanama

Okay, so, how best to put this...? I guess the problem we're running into is expectations of scale? You're doing two things wrong either individually or together.
A: You either make the powers they do have absurdly broad in capability and sheer power, or...
B: You try to spread out his specializations to much. You try to grab too many powers and refuse to commit to a theme.

For example:

"Because of his training his body transcends the normal limitations of his species. A few things he can do due to this is flight, jumping really far quickly, running really fast, and taking hits from things that would kill someone."

This bullshit right here is one of the biggest annoyances. You can't slide extra powers in solely through the background. You need to have them actually take up a power slot. If it allows them to perform superhuman feats, then it's a power and needs to count towards your total, regardless of anything else. You can't just slap it in the background as an offhand mention and pretend like that works. And another thing, I'd mentioned it before, but without a specific Gift/Power for it, Dragon Ball training doesn't work in this setting. He can only get regular human child abilities out of that sort of gravity training, not Dragon Ball power. Humans in this setting only get power from either Gods or magic, and the capacity for magic doesn't provide that sort of passive "anime training" enhancement to humans. Bottom line, humans are stuck with IRL Earth Human limits on their physical abilities without a specific power for it.

So if you want "Dragon Ball Training: the power", literally make it full power. That's the only way this gets allowed. Oh, and it should be noted, but in the past version of this RP, "super-genius" also counted as a power against the total.

That said, this time, I hesitate to say it, but you actually overcompensated in the opposite direction this time with the main powers. When I referred to "flaws" for his powers, I meant actual flaws for the powers themselves, not crippling the character mentally as some sort of "compensation". Honestly, unless you really like the idea, you can just scrap the mental afflictions. So, let's go through what we have left.

Let me try and give you a hand here. So, I'll strip everything down to what you want and show some options, even do a bit of helpful rewording here and there.

Firstly, removed the totally pointless flaws for now, so...:

Big Family:
His family is wealthy. Thus, he has no concerns over needing money. "I'm rich." would be an understatement.

This really isn't a power, just a passive. You should have left this in his background and put the feckin' Dragon Ball training bullshit in his power section.

Core Ability:
Singularity Transcendence, the Divine Entertainment
Val survived within a black hole for thousands if not tens of thousands of years. Due to this The Goddess of Chaos took pity on him and bestowed a blessing and curse upon him. Singularity Transcendence has forked abilities based on the Black Hole and quantum. Manipulation of gravity, portals, time, and space. Telekinesis due to the manipulation of gravity fields. Black hole space is a special space that only he has access to. However, he has yet to unlock most of these abilities. This is probably due to the Goddess of Chaos wanting to see what he can do with one of the abilities. Furthermore, these abilities seem to have several levels. The Deities can “tune in” and watch him every now and again. The Goddess of Chaos set up a voting system in order for him to unlock his abilities. However, there is also a down vote system. This causes the Goddess to send “bad things” his way. Some of the bad things are nightmares of his previous life, chaos creatures that hunt him and don’t let him sleep. Even if he slept he would have nightmares.

There was no real need for the "divine watchers" aspect to be kept separate from this ability, so I combined them. Far less confusion. They're literally directly connected, so I dunno why it wasn't this way before.

Sub-Power 1 - Gravity Control:
Basic (Growth)
He can manipulate gravity within 2 meters of himself. The force that can be applied can go up to 5 times the planet's normal gravity. Alternatively, he can do the reverse and lower gravity in the area around him, inducing a moon-walk zone of effect. This power can be utilized long term as a makeshift training tool, and over time, it is expected that it may grow stronger after sufficiently entertaining the gods.
This ability was unlocked or allowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Okay, this looks okay overall. Just added a little tweak that I think would make this more viable and encourage creative use. After trimming the fat, it's been broadly summarized down to a single actual Core ability and one Sub power. Time to fill up those empty slots.

Sub-Power 2 - Artificer of the Stars:
Raised in his past life by a family known to be foremost in the arts of quantum computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory, Val is (at least in this area of study) what can only be described as a super-genius and technological savant. To compare his potential to the likes of Tony Stark might not be far off. However, there's just a couple small issues. Firstly, this new world simply lacks the bleeding-edge high-tech industry to access the advancements rolling through his mind. He'll need to build the tools to make the tools first, but once that's done? Well, the world is his oyster. A second notable caveat is that this knowledge is purely science-based. His world had no magic. As such, he is a rank amateur in the mystic side of tech, and magitech is completely outside his area of expertise or proper comprehension at this time, especially given that he can't even cast magic.

With this, you now have an actual verbalization of his technological marvel creation capacity. The reason this "power" works, despite clashing with his "theme" is that it's based entirely on High-Mundane capabilities, something that anyone could learn in theory. I could go on, but suffice it to say: "It just works." And, with this version keeping magitech shut out of Val's grasp (for now), he won't innately infringe on the domains of all the other crafters that do use magic in turn.

Sub-Power 3 - Apex Humanity:
One of the first powers granted to him by the Goddess of Chaos to keep his reckless ass from accidentally murdering himself as a child through ignorance and excessive gravity power usage on an undeveloped, infant body. Anything a regular human can do, he can do better, assuming he's put in the same amount of effort. His constitution is highly robust, making illnesses and some poisons less effective on him and letting him endure harm and keep fighting with the kind of grit an anime protagonist would only thumbs-up at. He can run as fast as a peak human, despite being merely a child. His strength carries the weight of a trained martial artist behind it, despite receiving no formal training. His agility and hand-eye coordination make him a master of parkour and deflecting or using thrown projectiles. His 5 senses are practically bestial in how refined they are. The natural human limiters on his body are released, allowing him to manually utilize 100% percent of his actual strength instead of 60% in an emergency... at the cost of inflicting self-damage on his muscules from the strain. That aside, a further effect of these broken limiters is that he is no longer constrained by the normal human maximum in terms of physical refinement. While his feats aren't quite outright superhuman compared to a peak human yet, given his young age, as he grows and continues to train, he will rapidly come to surpass the best of humanity's natural stock, solidly stepping into a realm only other Gifts can challenge... But such things are for the future...

Just saying this now, but he's not reasonably getting flight out of this last power. He'll need to earn the ability to do that with his gravity powers. And besides, given his weight manipulation, he should be able to just make himself lighter instead of heavier and do super-leaps right out the gate. It's not flight, but it's still pretty good and provides a shitton of mobility till he can actually fly. Also, I've now provided reasonable context behind why the Goddess would actually give him this last power. Quite simply, he was being a dumbass and assuming his new world worked on anime logic... when it didn't. So, she saved his life before he could become a complete waste of her time and attention.

So, yeah, that about covers the major alterations I see that could be implemented. Hope this helps.

[Spin The Wheel]

@Aqutanama sorry to ask this but can you wait for me a bit before editing your sheet further? I have some things to say about it that might help you out, player to player, but i don't have time to type it up right now.

[Spin The Wheel]

Ugh, nevermind, sorry. Too tired. Just keep doing what you're doing I guess. I hope you take some time to flesh out your character because I do like the idea at least.

[Aqutanama]

Ugh, nevermind, sorry. Too tired. Just keep doing what you're doing I guess. I hope you take some time to flesh out your character because I do like the idea at least.

@Spin The Wheel

lol. I think I will go with what was recommended.

greed

Name: Val
Greed

Sex: Male
Age: 13
Grade: 1st year of St. Laurel's School of Divine Excellence
Height: 5’9”
Max Height 6’6” (When he is older)
Weight: 90 lbs
Max Weight: 250 lbs (When he is older)
Hair Style: Long hair down past his waist
Hair color: Brown
Eye Color: Brown

Young Genius

Biography:
Some say that great power has a great cost. Either that or one trains in order to gain said power. Val lost his world. Some would probably think that being reborn in another world would be great. However, that was not the case for Val. He was trying to make a breakthrough that would change the galaxy and the future! Fate, coincidence, bad luck, bad timing. These were all things that people would blame. He was happy with his research! Something had to go wrong to get to where he is now, right?

His family were the leaders of quantum computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory. Of course, this was in his past life. In that life and this one he would be considered a genius. However, in his previous life he was messing with black holes, while relying on the quantum field, he fell into one. Well, his ship did. Time seemed to stretch as did his ship and his very being. This seemed to happen for what seemed like thousands of years. This drove the poor once young man insane. Yes, for some reason he was still alive during the process. Eventually, his insanity faded. Everything became one within the event and everything became clear.

His sanity was restored and somehow his consciousness survived the process. What people would call a soul, spirit, mind walking… Well, whatever it was he was doing it. However, when he emerged from the singularity he was in another dimension, realm, or point in space. It is possible that the years he experienced really happened on a galactic scale. Either that or he exited another black hole. There was the theory that black holes are linked. He didn’t have time to process his thoughts as he noticed a strange blob coming towards him. Then a dark being appeared and grabbed him. When he woke up he was in a new body. Had a new family. Things were different yet he understood what was happening.

Val’s life was simple. He was born into a wealthy family. Some suspect that they are of a long lost royal line. Others speculate that they came from a demi-god family heritage. Both or neither could be true. That aside, Val knew enough about his realm and hoped that he could use it to his advantage here. However, the more he tried to access the memories the more they seemed to fade.

Due to this, he spent most of his time when he was a baby learning the language as well as anything else he could. Speaking the language was a lot harder than the written and writing. It is possible it was because he already knew twenty other languages from his original life, or did he? That isn’t to say that the language was hard to learn, just harder than the reading and written versions of the language.

Once he was able to walk he was training. Be it his body, his mind, or his powers. Somehow he had gained gifts. They reminded him of his time within the black hole, however, they were different. He trained under heightened gravity fields due to his power. Weights were not needed as they could damage his body. He tried to keep up a constant field around himself in order to maximize his training.

Eventually, he would get used to the weight. Every time he did he would multiply it. Mind you he has had this ability since he was born. Therefore, using it since he was a baby would be possible. However, the multiples were so small that others wouldn’t notice. It was doing something for his body though. He would remove the fields when someone he loved was nearby. This gave him some time to recuperate and didn’t allow him to hurt others. He couldn’t recall why but family was something important to him.

Because of his training his body transcends the normal limitations of his species. A few things he can do due to this is flight, jumping really far quickly, running really fast, and taking hits from things that would kill someone. He tried training his mind by getting invested in Magi-tech. However, he started to get plagued by nightmares and stopped. (Caused by a majority of the deities getting bored of his research) Which was sad because he seemed to have a knack for it. Perhaps sometime in the future he can pick it up again.

Powers:
Core Ability:
Singularity Transcendence, the Divine Entertainment
Val survived within a black hole for thousands if not tens of thousands of years. Due to this The Goddess of Chaos took pity on him and bestowed a blessing and curse upon him. Singularity Transcendence has forked abilities based on the Black Hole and quantum. Manipulation of gravity, portals, time, and space. Telekinesis due to the manipulation of gravity fields. Black hole space is a special space that only he has access to. However, he has yet to unlock most of these abilities. This is probably due to the Goddess of Chaos wanting to see what he can do with one of the abilities. Furthermore, these abilities seem to have several levels. The Deities can “tune in” and watch him every now and again. The Goddess of Chaos set up a voting system in order for him to unlock his abilities. However, there is also a down vote system. This causes the Goddess to send “bad things” his way. Some of the bad things are nightmares of his previous life, chaos creatures that hunt him and don’t let him sleep. Even if he slept he would have nightmares.

This ability was bestowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Unlocked:
Sub-Power 1 - Gravity Control:
Basic (Growth)
He can manipulate gravity within 2 meters of himself. The force that can be applied can go up to 5 times the planet's normal gravity. Alternatively, he can do the reverse and lower gravity in the area around him, inducing a moon-walk zone of effect. This power can be utilized long term as a makeshift training tool, and over time, it is expected that it may grow stronger after sufficiently entertaining the gods.
This ability was unlocked or allowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Sub-Power 2 - Artificer of the Stars:
Raised in his past life by a family known to be foremost in the arts of quantum computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory, Val is (at least in this area of study) what can only be described as a super-genius and technological savant. To compare his potential to the likes of Tony Stark might not be far off. However, there's just a couple small issues. Firstly, this new world simply lacks the bleeding-edge high-tech industry to access the advancements rolling through his mind. He'll need to build the tools to make the tools first, but once that's done? Well, the world is his oyster. A second notable caveat is that this knowledge is purely science-based. His world had no magic. As such, he is a rank amateur in the mystic side of tech, and magitech is completely outside his area of expertise or proper comprehension at this time, especially given that he can't even cast magic.

Sub-Power 3 - Apex Humanity:
One of the first powers granted to him by the Goddess of Chaos to keep his reckless ass from accidentally murdering himself as a child through ignorance and excessive gravity power usage on an undeveloped, infant body. Anything a regular human can do, he can do better, assuming he's put in the same amount of effort. His constitution is highly robust, making illnesses and some poisons less effective on him and letting him endure harm and keep fighting with the kind of grit an anime protagonist would only thumbs-up at. He can run as fast as a peak human, despite being merely a child. His strength carries the weight of a trained martial artist behind it, despite receiving no formal training. His agility and hand-eye coordination make him a master of parkour and deflecting or using thrown projectiles. His 5 senses are practically bestial in how refined they are. The natural human limiters on his body are released, allowing him to manually utilize 100% percent of his actual strength instead of 60% in an emergency... at the cost of inflicting self-damage on his muscles from the strain. That aside, a further effect of these broken limiters is that he is no longer constrained by the normal human maximum in terms of physical refinement. While his feats aren't quite outright superhuman compared to a peak human yet, given his young age, as he grows and continues to train, he will rapidly come to surpass the best of humanity's natural stock, solidly stepping into a realm only other Gifts can challenge... But such things are for the future...

People of interest
Family

@Lewascan2 Thank you for the suggestions and assistance on this. Is the above what you were thinking? I mean copy paste but still.

[Spin The Wheel]

Oh, wait a sec

@Aqutanama, is your chara part of one of the 4 schools/vigilantes? Doesn't really say on your sheet

Not that you need to be a part of them or anything, would just make it somewhat awkward to join in I think

[Lewascan2]

<Snipped quote by Spin The Wheel>

lol. I think I will go with what was recommended.

greed

Name: Val
Greed

Sex: Male
Age: 13
Height: 5’9”
Max Height 6’6” (When he is older)
Weight: 90 lbs
Max Weight: 250 lbs (When he is older)
Hair Style: Long hair down past his waist
Hair color: Brown
Eye Color: Brown

Child Genius
Grade: 1st year

Biography:
Some say that great power has a great cost. Either that or one trains in order to gain said power. Val lost his world. Some would probably think that being reborn in another world would be great. However, that was not the case for Val. He was trying to make a breakthrough that would change the galaxy and the future! Fate, coincidence, bad luck, bad timing. These were all things that people would blame. He was happy with his research! Something had to go wrong to get to where he is now, right?

His family were the leaders of quantum computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory. Of course, this was in his past life. In that life and this one he would be considered a genius. However, in his previous life he was messing with black holes, while relying on the quantum field, he fell into one. Well, his ship did. Time seemed to stretch as did his ship and his very being. This seemed to happen for what seemed like thousands of years. This drove the poor once young man insane. Yes, for some reason he was still alive during the process. Eventually, his insanity faded. Everything became one within the event and everything became clear.

His sanity was restored and somehow his consciousness survived the process. What people would call a soul, spirit, mind walking… Well, whatever it was he was doing it. However, when he emerged from the singularity he was in another dimension, realm, or point in space. It is possible that the years he experienced really happened on a galactic scale. Either that or he exited another black hole. There was the theory that black holes are linked. He didn’t have time to process his thoughts as he noticed a strange blob coming towards him. Then a dark being appeared and grabbed him. When he woke up he was in a new body. Had a new family. Things were different yet he understood what was happening.

Val’s life was simple. He was born into a wealthy family. Some suspect that they are of a long lost royal line. Others speculate that they came from a demi-god family heritage. Both or neither could be true. That aside, Val knew enough about his realm and hoped that he could use it to his advantage here. However, the more he tried to access the memories the more they seemed to fade.

Due to this, he spent most of his time when he was a baby learning the language as well as anything else he could. Speaking the language was a lot harder than the written and writing. It is possible it was because he already knew twenty other languages from his original life, or did he? That isn’t to say that the language was hard to learn, just harder than the reading and written versions of the language.

Once he was able to walk he was training. Be it his body, his mind, or his powers. Somehow he had gained gifts. They reminded him of his time within the black hole, however, they were different. He trained under heightened gravity fields due to his power. Weights were not needed as they could damage his body. He tried to keep up a constant field around himself in order to maximize his training.

Eventually, he would get used to the weight. Every time he did he would multiply it. Mind you he has had this ability since he was born. Therefore, using it since he was a baby would be possible. However, the multiples were so small that others wouldn’t notice. It was doing something for his body though. He would remove the fields when someone he loved was nearby. This gave him some time to recuperate and didn’t allow him to hurt others. He couldn’t recall why but family was something important to him.

Because of his training his body transcends the normal limitations of his species. A few things he can do due to this is flight, jumping really far quickly, running really fast, and taking hits from things that would kill someone. He tried training his mind by getting invested in Magi-tech. However, he started to get plagued by nightmares and stopped. (Caused by a majority of the deities getting bored of his research) Which was sad because he seemed to have a knack for it. Perhaps sometime in the future he can pick it up again.

Powers:
Core Ability:
Singularity Transcendence, the Divine Entertainment
Val survived within a black hole for thousands if not tens of thousands of years. Due to this The Goddess of Chaos took pity on him and bestowed a blessing and curse upon him. Singularity Transcendence has forked abilities based on the Black Hole and quantum. Manipulation of gravity, portals, time, and space. Telekinesis due to the manipulation of gravity fields. Black hole space is a special space that only he has access to. However, he has yet to unlock most of these abilities. This is probably due to the Goddess of Chaos wanting to see what he can do with one of the abilities. Furthermore, these abilities seem to have several levels. The Deities can “tune in” and watch him every now and again. The Goddess of Chaos set up a voting system in order for him to unlock his abilities. However, there is also a down vote system. This causes the Goddess to send “bad things” his way. Some of the bad things are nightmares of his previous life, chaos creatures that hunt him and don’t let him sleep. Even if he slept he would have nightmares.

This ability was bestowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Unlocked:
Sub-Power 1 - Gravity Control:
Basic (Growth)
He can manipulate gravity within 2 meters of himself. The force that can be applied can go up to 5 times the planet's normal gravity. Alternatively, he can do the reverse and lower gravity in the area around him, inducing a moon-walk zone of effect. This power can be utilized long term as a makeshift training tool, and over time, it is expected that it may grow stronger after sufficiently entertaining the gods.
This ability was unlocked or allowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Sub-Power 2 - Artificer of the Stars:
Raised in his past life by a family known to be foremost in the arts of quantum computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory, Val is (at least in this area of study) what can only be described as a super-genius and technological savant. To compare his potential to the likes of Tony Stark might not be far off. However, there's just a couple small issues. Firstly, this new world simply lacks the bleeding-edge high-tech industry to access the advancements rolling through his mind. He'll need to build the tools to make the tools first, but once that's done? Well, the world is his oyster. A second notable caveat is that this knowledge is purely science-based. His world had no magic. As such, he is a rank amateur in the mystic side of tech, and magitech is completely outside his area of expertise or proper comprehension at this time, especially given that he can't even cast magic.

Sub-Power 3 - Apex Humanity:
One of the first powers granted to him by the Goddess of Chaos to keep his reckless ass from accidentally murdering himself as a child through ignorance and excessive gravity power usage on an undeveloped, infant body. Anything a regular human can do, he can do better, assuming he's put in the same amount of effort. His constitution is highly robust, making illnesses and some poisons less effective on him and letting him endure harm and keep fighting with the kind of grit an anime protagonist would only thumbs-up at. He can run as fast as a peak human, despite being merely a child. His strength carries the weight of a trained martial artist behind it, despite receiving no formal training. His agility and hand-eye coordination make him a master of parkour and deflecting or using thrown projectiles. His 5 senses are practically bestial in how refined they are. The natural human limiters on his body are released, allowing him to manually utilize 100% percent of his actual strength instead of 60% in an emergency... at the cost of inflicting self-damage on his muscles from the strain. That aside, a further effect of these broken limiters is that he is no longer constrained by the normal human maximum in terms of physical refinement. While his feats aren't quite outright superhuman compared to a peak human yet, given his young age, as he grows and continues to train, he will rapidly come to surpass the best of humanity's natural stock, solidly stepping into a realm only other Gifts can challenge... But such things are for the future...

People of interest
Family

@Lewascan2 Thank you for the suggestions and assistance on this. Is the above what you were thinking? I mean copy paste but still.

@Aqutanama

Yeah, copy/paste was the intention. And you're welcome. It was clear that things weren't going anywhere fast or good. from player to player, I want you to be able to actually play something you like without have your entire concept nerfed into the ground and ripped to shreds, but it's clear that either we weren't conveying the power-scale well enough or that you just weren't able to grasp it. So, a direct intervention was needed. I would have included a second gravity power in the mix, but you seem to want that "Apex Humanity"-type power extremely badly (given your absolute refusal to eject it from his backstory), so that ended up taking the third slot.

Other than that copy/paste, you still need to add what school he's going to in his basic information.

Also, since he's no longer inflicted with those brutal mental flaws, his backstory now needs some edits to at least the last two paragraphs, particularly the second to last paragraph. The final paragraph of the backstory just needs to be deleted outright. There's probably a couple more spots that might provoke edits too, but I'll leave it up to you how much you want to do on that end.

Also, honestly, I have to ask, because I'm getting a bit curious. But why is his nickname "Greed"? I realize there's no personality section for this RP's CSs, but nothing in his backstory really hints that he's the sort to seek and hoard wealth and such for the sake of it. I mean, he's rich, but that doesn't inherently mean anything when it comes down to it.

[Aqutanama]

I am currently fixing up the character. Going to change the name as well. I don't know if it fits well. My new name may not either. Just felt like not using an OC name. As far as Greed it is in reference to his thirst for knowledge and creation. It is something that was probably given to him by someone else and others started calling him it because of that. Rumors and such as a rich child. Like how his diet is specific. He spends his family's money to get what he needs in order to stay healthy and balanced. That and spends money to research just about everything he can in this world. I'm not sure if they have some kind of MagiTech computer or phones or whatever. But if they do, he probably collected a few of those to fuel his research. Greed, Gluttony, and Pride. These are all nicknames he could have. He is always eating. I mean just about always. He snacks. Has a crazy amount of pride due to his past life and yeah. Just a sinful one.

Oh, wait a sec

@Aqutanama, is your chara part of one of the 4 schools/vigilantes? Doesn't really say on your sheet

Not that you need to be a part of them or anything, would just make it somewhat awkward to join in I think

@Spin The Wheel

Could he not be that rich kid that got in because of his family's influence? I'm sure that would piss so many people in the school off. Not the players but the characters.

example

"Okay class, settle down. We have a new student." Informed the teacher.

"But it is the middle of the year." One student jokes.

"Please introduce yourself." The instructor said, as he showed Maverick the way.

Maverick quickly made his way up to the section the instructor showed him. The very tall microphone wasn't within reach. Being young has its drawbacks. He also noticed some of his classmates whispering about something or another. Probably saying that he is short or too young. He decided not to stick out by utilizing his ability here. Showing off could only bring him rivals. Ones he didn't want to waste time on. Therefore, he adjusted the microphone.

As he looked out to the classroom, he noticed all eyes were on him. This caused his vision to blur for a moment and his body had a cold chill. His palms started to sweat as he tried to focus. Growing up in a wealthy family that went to big events all the time one should be acclimated to these kinds of environments. However, Maverick was young and felt out of place in most situations. Mainly, because he had almost zero grasp on magi-tech. While his family manufactured said influential artifice.

It always made him feel... off. His knowledge was vastly different from this world but that didn't mean that he was perfect. Far from it and he knew it. This was the reason he wanted to join this school. He wanted to advance the technological levels of this world but needed a baseline to start from. St. Laurel's School of Divine Excellence had the facilities that he needed to do so. However, getting into the classes could cause issues. One was supposed to know how to build already. He didn’t, at least not the same build that this world has, and that made things harder for him.

His thoughts continued to spin around and around as the room became darker and darker, from his perception that is. One of the students cracked a joke about how short he was. Another said something along the lines of him taking forever for a simple introduction. His breathing became quicker as he stood in front of the class. Then a sort of cold calm washed over him. The darkness of the abyss filled the room, his perception of it. He was once again in the void and somehow this calmed him.

“Hello, my name is Maverick Majere. I’m currently 13 years old. Furthermore, I’m willing to learn. Therefore, please take care of me, my elders.” Maverick informed them with a slight bow. He couldn’t help but to smile as he bowed. However, as he came out of his bow his smile vanished.

“I will learn everything required to move magitech forwards!” He thought to himself. With his strange introduction he made himself a target. Perhaps, he was just a trap waiting for them to unwittingly step into. Who knows given his age but the gods seemed somewhat entertained to see what would happen.

[KillamriX88]

Could he not be that rich kid that got in because of his family's influence? I'm sure that would piss so many people in the school off. Not the players but the characters.

@Aqutanama

That's fine, but what they were saying is that on your sheet you have not designated what faction/school if any he belongs to. It doesn't matter which one he's in or how, just that you pick one or explain why he isn't part of one.

The first OOC post lists all the major schools that the RP is based around.

[Aqutanama]

Am I missing anything else? Honestly asking. I just added the first day into the BIO. I can take it out if it doesn't match up or what not. I was going to add that the language spoken has a touch of the magic language within it. Annunciation is usually key to spellcasting depending on the world. But I didn't because that would be worldbuilding. I mean I did add arcana symbols to math because that makes sense to me if all tech has magic in it. It would probably be the higher types of math though. I don't know if this isn't okay then I can change it.

Mav

Name: Maverick Majere

Nicknames and Titles

Mav
Rick
M.
Avarice
Ego
Gourmand
Young Genius

Faction/School/Organization: St. Laurel's School of Divine Excellence
Grade: 1st year

Physical Characteristics

Sex: Male
Age: 13
Height: 5’9”
Max Height 6’6” (When he is older)
Weight: 90 lbs
Max Weight: 250 lbs (When he is older)
Hair Style: Long hair down past his waist
Hair color: Brown
Eye Color: Brown

Biography:

Biography:
Some say that great power has a great cost. Either that or one trains in order to gain said power. Maverick lost his world. Some would probably think that being reborn in another world would be great. However, that was not the case for Maverick. He was trying to make a breakthrough that would change the galaxy and the future! Fate, coincidence, bad luck, bad timing. These were all things that people would blame. He was happy with his research! Something had to go wrong to get to where he is now, right?

His family were the leaders of the quantum field; energy, computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory. Of course, this was in his past life. In that life and this one he would be considered a genius. However, in his previous life he was messing with black holes, while relying on the quantum field, he fell into one. Well, his ship did. Time seemed to stretch as did his ship and his very being. This seemed to happen for what seemed like thousands of years. This drove the currently 30 year old man insane. Yes, for some reason he was still alive during the process. Eventually, his insanity faded. Everything became one within the event and everything became clear.

His sanity was restored and somehow his consciousness survived the process. What people would call a soul, spirit, mind walking… Well, whatever it was he was doing it. However, when he emerged from the singularity he was in another dimension, realm, or point in space. It is possible that the years he experienced really happened on a galactic scale. Either that or he exited another black hole.

It was the theory that black holes are linked. However, he didn’t have time to process his thoughts as he noticed a strange blob coming toward him. Before it could touch him a dark entity appeared and whisked him away. The constant pressure of movement was enough to make him lose consciousness. When he woke up he was in a new body and in the arms of his mother. Had a new family. Things were different yet he understood what was happening.

Maverick was reborn into a wealthy family. Some suspect that they are of a long lost royal line. Others speculate that they came from a demi-god family heritage. Both or neither could be true. That aside, Maverick knew enough about his realm and hoped that he could use it to his advantage here. Due to this, he spent most of his time when he was a baby how to survive. Being a baby is hard especially when one is born with parents who are almost always busy. However, even though his parents weren’t always around Maverick’s life was simple and easygoing.

Well, it was mostly easygoing. Have you ever seen a newborn? They got jack when it comes to strength and motor functions. This is what he spent most of his waking hours figuring out. Eventually he started to mess with his power to change the gravity around himself. He started on an extremely low increase and it was somewhat painful. It is possible that at this time the goddess rolled her eyes at his stupidity at this point and gave him another blessing. The voting system came back with tons of laughter. Seemed a positive response. But this was all just speculation.

Language came sometime between one and two years of age. However, again, the functions of the body were difficult. It had to do with learning how to use them for the first time. He had the knowledge but the muscle memory was what he lacked. Speaking the language was a lot harder than writing and reading portions. It is possible it was because he already knew twenty other languages from his original life. That isn’t to say that the language was hard to learn, just harder than the reading and written versions of the language. Annunciations were key in this language.

Once he was able to walk he kicked up the training. Be it his body, his mind, or his powers. His abilities reminded him of his time within the black hole, however, they were different. He tested the power of gravity manipulation a few times. After feeling confident he would increase gravity. As he grew into a 5 year old, his body was to the point he could fully control it. Furthermore, he asked his father to gather as much information about history as possible. Mind you starting from the basics and moving up. This further allowed him a better grasp on the language as well as the mathematics.

There were some alterations to the mathematics of this world. The strange symbols, he later found out, were mathematical symbols for specific arcana. He had asked his family about it but they couldn’t explain it fully.

“Something that you will learn eventually when you’re older.” At least that is what they said. It was like learning it would make his head explode. He kept the math portion memorized as best as he could. He had nothing to tie the symbols to so he just numbered them by appearance. Arcana symbol 1-/ He wasn’t sure how many there would be.

The history of the world was strange. It seemed like there were tournaments held every now and again. As well as tales of actual heroes of the past. He couldn’t quite figure out what was going on until he looked into his family line. Apparently one of his ancestors was a hero or someone who helped a hero. He couldn’t tell for sure based on the limited information and poor notes on the subject matter. He did train his body as best as he could for his age. Mostly running and swimming. Having a stronger base would help him if he were to learn a martial style. That is assuming that it would be needed in this new world.

The years passed quickly and he absorbed as much knowledge as possible. His training went smoothly but it left him feeling empty. As if he wasn’t doing enough. Either that or he needed someone to train him. However, he couldn’t figure out the answer.

In his spare time he would write down concepts for technology from his time but couldn’t implement them. It wasn’t because he didn’t want to, it was because the technology here was powered by magic. Either that or it was made with magic built into it. It was so confusing and frustrating to him that he couldn’t understand what seemed to be basic knowledge to everyone else. In other words, he needed a new cup to fill. His cup was already full. In the end he just didn’t know.

He couldn’t help but want to know more about how magitech worked in this world. So, he went to his parents and asked if they could help him learn more. That he guaranteed that if he got the desired information that he could bring their company into the future. Being a leader on new Magi-Technology did intrigue his parents. So, they said. However, they were just happy that their son wanted to get into the family business. Therefore, the next day they pulled the strings and sent him to school.

His first day of class.

"Okay class, settle down. We have a new student." Informed the teacher.

"But it is the middle of the year." One student jokes.

"Please introduce yourself." The instructor said, as he showed Maverick the way.

Maverick quickly made his way up to the section the instructor showed him. The very tall microphone wasn't within reach. Being young has its drawbacks. He also noticed some of his classmates whispering about something or another. Probably saying that he is short or too young. He decided not to stick out by utilizing his ability here. Showing off could only bring him rivals. Ones he didn't want to waste time on. Therefore, he adjusted the microphone.

As he looked out to the classroom, he noticed all eyes were on him. This caused his vision to blur for a moment and his body had a cold chill. His palms started to sweat as he tried to focus. Growing up in a wealthy family that went to big events all the time one should be acclimated to these kinds of environments. However, Maverick was young and felt out of place in most situations. Mainly, because he had almost zero grasp on magi-tech. While his family manufactured said influential artifice.

It always made him feel... off. His knowledge was vastly different from this world but that didn't mean that he was perfect. Far from it and he knew it. This was the reason he wanted to join this school. He wanted to advance the technological levels of this world but needed a baseline to start from. St. Laurel's School of Divine Excellence had the facilities that he needed to do so. However, getting into the classes could cause issues. One was supposed to know how to build already. He didn’t, at least not the same build that this world has, and that made things harder for him.

His thoughts continued to spin around and around as the room became darker and darker, from his perception that is. One of the students cracked a joke about how short he was. Another said something along the lines of him taking forever for a simple introduction. His breathing became quicker as he stood in front of the class. Then a sort of cold calm washed over him. The darkness of the abyss filled the room, his perception of it. He was once again in the void and somehow this calmed him.

“Hello, my name is Maverick Majere. I’m currently 13 years old. Furthermore, I’m willing to learn. Therefore, please take care of me, my elders.” Maverick informed them with a slight bow. He couldn’t help but to smile as he bowed. However, as he came out of his bow his smile vanished.

“I will learn everything required to move magitech forwards!” He thought to himself. With his strange introduction he made himself a target. Perhaps, he was just a trap waiting for them to unwittingly step into. Who knows given his age but the gods seemed somewhat entertained to see what would happen.

Powers:

Core Ability:
Singularity Transcendence, the Divine Entertainment
Maverick survived within a black hole for thousands if not tens of thousands of years. Due to this The Goddess of Chaos took pity on him and bestowed a blessing and curse upon him. Singularity Transcendence has forked abilities based on the Black Hole and quantum. Manipulation of gravity, portals, time, and space. Telekinesis due to the manipulation of gravity fields. Black hole space is a special space that only he has access to. However, he has yet to unlock most of these abilities. This is probably due to the Goddess of Chaos wanting to see what he can do with one of the abilities. Furthermore, these abilities seem to have several levels. The Deities can “tune in” and watch him every now and again. The Goddess of Chaos set up a voting system in order for him to unlock his abilities. However, there is also a down vote system. This causes the Goddess to send “bad things” his way. Some of the bad things are nightmares of his previous life, chaos creatures that hunt him and don’t let him sleep. Even if he slept he would have nightmares.

This ability was bestowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Unlocked:
Sub-Power 1 - Gravity Control:
Basic (Growth)
He can manipulate gravity within 2 meters of himself. The force that can be applied can go up to 5 times the planet's normal gravity. Alternatively, he can do the reverse and lower gravity in the area around him, inducing a moon-walk zone of effect. This power can be utilized long term as a makeshift training tool, and over time, it is expected that it may grow stronger after sufficiently entertaining the gods.
This ability was unlocked or allowed by the Goddess of Chaos

Sub-Power 2 - Artificer of the Stars:
Raised in his past life by a family known to be foremost in the arts of quantum computing, engineering, physics, mechanics and theory, Maverick is (at least in this area of study) what can only be described as a super-genius and technological savant. To compare his potential to the likes of Tony Stark might not be far off. However, there's just a couple small issues. Firstly, this new world simply lacks the bleeding-edge high-tech industry to access the advancements rolling through his mind. He'll need to build the tools to make the tools first, but once that's done? Well, the world is his oyster. A second notable caveat is that this knowledge is purely science-based. His world had no magic. As such, he is a rank amateur in the mystic side of tech, and magitech is completely outside his area of expertise or proper comprehension at this time, especially given that he can't even cast magic.

Sub-Power 3 - Apex Humanity:
One of the first powers granted to him by the Goddess of Chaos to keep his reckless ass from accidentally murdering himself as a child through ignorance and excessive gravity power usage on an undeveloped, infant body. Anything a regular human can do, he can do better, assuming he's put in the same amount of effort. His constitution is highly robust, making illnesses and some poisons less effective on him and letting him endure harm and keep fighting with the kind of grit an anime protagonist would only thumbs-up at. He can run as fast as a peak human, despite being merely a child. His strength carries the weight of a trained martial artist behind it, despite receiving no formal training. His agility and hand-eye coordination make him a master of parkour and deflecting or using thrown projectiles. His 5 senses are practically bestial in how refined they are. The natural human limiters on his body are released, allowing him to manually utilize 100% percent of his actual strength instead of 60% in an emergency... at the cost of inflicting self-damage on his muscles from the strain. That aside, a further effect of these broken limiters is that he is no longer constrained by the normal human maximum in terms of physical refinement. While his feats aren't quite outright superhuman compared to a peak human yet, given his young age, as he grows and continues to train, he will rapidly come to surpass the best of humanity's natural stock, solidly stepping into a realm only other Gifts can challenge... But such things are for the future...

People of interest
Family
(I'm honestly not sure what else to put here.)

[RoflsMazoy]

[@Aquatanama] Woo yeah, sorry for taking so long to respond but you're good to go by my standards. I'm not technically the full GM, (bah, kind of only half a Co-GM at this point) but the lads do trust my judgement usually. If there's no vetoes, then by tomorrow I think you can go ahead and put him in the characters tab.

[RoflsMazoy]

@Aqutanama Oop I messed up the tag I think.

[Aqutanama]

@Aqutanama Oop I messed up the tag I think.

@RoflsMazoy

I see you tried to spell my name. Aqua tanama = Aqu tanama. It is strange that when reading it people add the extra A there. Funny enough people would call me Aquaman on Xbox or try to say it. When they did that, they would add the extra a. Aqua-tanama. Some seemed like they tried while others were on the other end. I think someone called me Aquafina or something. At the time I was like is this an Aquaman water commercial or something? I mean I have the hair.

Of course, I don't have the hair anymore. Too many negatives. Anyways, thank you for looking into this for me.

[Lewascan2]

@Aqutanama
Yo! With Rofls having dropped the go-ahead, you should be good to move that CS of yours over to the CS tab!
I'll be shooting you a discord invite to the server. If anything more may or may not need to be done with the character, it'll be easier to discuss it there anyway.

[MagusDream]

Just dropped by and I'm wondering if this is still open to join. I'm kinda interested on what there is here so far.

[Lewascan2]

@MagusDream
I can definitely say we're still open. There's not really a "maximum cast size" that I know of.
So, as long as you can throw together a character that will pass muster, you should easily be able to hop on the chaos train.

Currently, we're in the waning stages of wrapping up the trio of "intro Arcs" (some being rather further along than others *cough*Ot Herap Yo*cough*), so you'll likely be sliding in either during the last bits of the "Midnight Tounament" arc that's about to go batshit or during the start of the next arc. Admittedly, Midnight is also extremely crowded in terms of PCs already though, so it may not be the best fit.