[OOC] I Reincarnated into the World of an Otome Game, But———?! (Now Accepting)

[Teyao]

@Teyao: What I find a bit more problematic is how the character just doesn't fit in thematically with the rest of the cast at the given point in time in the story we're starting at (read: the start of the 'game's' story). There's no clean way to integrate the character into the RP for the first who knows how long, and if I'm going to be completely honest here it's fairly unlikely that forcing them into the cast would lead to anything productive. Sorry.

@PKMNB0Y

Thats fair dude and It was in fact something that I genuinelly didn't think about.
Say if I adapted him to join the cast better would It have some other problem or was that the only one you found?

[FujiwaraPhoenix]

@MagusDream: Ah, makes sense. I just double-checked and realized it was "broken" HTML instead of BBCode, so my bad on not realizing that was intentional. Anyways, all good now. Accepted.

@Teyao: That... I mean, the problem is that the concept of the character means that I can't effectively judge it in the first place. I'd personally recommend scrapping the form altogether and starting from scratch, if anything.

[Teyao]

@Teyao: That... I mean, the problem is that the concept of the character means that I can't effectively judge it in the first place. I'd personally recommend scrapping the form altogether and starting from scratch, if anything.

@PKMNB0Y

Kay dude! I think I got an idea on how to preserve the basic premise (a Male dancer) while changing everything else

[FujiwaraPhoenix]

Uh... Yeah, I think that fundamentally that probably won't work out just by concept alone, but... You certainly can try.
In the interim, here's a Discord server. While I can say with a fair bit of certainty that I'll respond here just as fast, this might expedite communications a bit. Not mandatory, of course, but the option is here.

[Crusader Lord]

@Crusader Lord: Honestly, my biggest problem with this character is the weird (and maybe accidental?) suicidal ideation that the character portrays. It's one thing to pass away due to an accident or being a victim of some crime and be given a second chance, but to willingly take one's own life and, in essence, be rewarded for that?
...Yeah, doesn't sit right with me. I'll concern myself with the rest after that bit's fixed.

@PKMNB0Y

Oh no nonononononononono, that was not intended! I had just hoped for her to have a happier life in a new world. Not idealize, er, 'that'. Genuine accident on my part. Apologies. (T_T)

I have revamped and fixed her app! Should be looking better now in that regard, and a few others perhaps, I hope! :D

[Raineh Daze]

Possible Ending stuff

Elastasia Endings
Disinherited Archmage:
The default ending for Elastasia, brought up if the Heroine interacts with her in some capacity but never grows close enough to attract her romantic interests (and avert any scandals). Despite her brother's best efforts, Elastasia's tendency to miss important events, and increasingly overt pursuit of other women, lead her to inadvertantly offend the royal family before the first half of the game is even over, and her family responds by moving to keep her out of the public eye entirely. No longer considered for succession, despite her prodigious talent, Elastasia goes on to become famous for her magical talent and abilities... but carefully kept out of the way where she can do no more reputational harm.

So adept is her family at surviving political turmoil and the kingdom shuffling around them that nothing less than the complete end of the world prevents this ending from triggering.

Marquise Mage:
The second easiest ending to get--you simply have to befriend her enough to get the confession, which inevitably allows for averting the aforementioned scandal. Instead of being sequestered away to avoid trouble, Elastasia remains available throughout the entirety of the game's second half, eventually taking over for her ailing father in its latter stages... formally, at least, with Terys doing most of the actual running of things. Still, instead of being a powerful mage with no public exposure whatsoever, she instead goes on to be a powerful mage and the public figurehead of her family.

Heroine's Attendant:
The rarest of Elastasia's general endings, it usually only triggers by default when pursuing her brother as a capture target: instead of Elastasia taking over, the Heroine's actions raise Terys' public profile to the point where she gets passed over for inheritance and the still-besotted Elastasia opts to offer her services more directly to the heroine. However, enough of the flags can be set without triggering the route itself to set this up on other paths. Whilst the least palatable to many players from a character perspective, it offers several direct benefits regarding service availability and combat roles for the more strategy-focused second halves.

The Grand Barrier:
The only special ending (which is more than can be said for many secondary characters) Elastasia has requires the player to make some very strange decisions regarding their skill priorities and levelling choices. On the one hand, you have to max out Elastasia's initial interest in kinetic spells, something that won't even use all her levelling opportunities and therefore not too burdensome. But the player must also head down a route with a plain apocalyptic ending, and avoid setting the stage for the Good Ending, as well as avoiding any bittersweet ending where the Heroine sacrifices herself to put an end to the threat. Normally, this would force you into a bad ending, but if--without any prompting at all--the player opts to talk to everyone right before the ending is locked in and Terys is in charge of the family, they will discover that Elastasia has a unique dialogue line for this situation.

In this ending, Elastasia is the one to sacrifice herself instead, shackling herself to a ritual to maintain an impenetrable barrier between said apocalypse and the rest of the world such that time for a solution can be found. Not for mere days or weeks, but for up to centuries, leaving it standing as a feature in the world whilst everything else plays out like the good ending. In her previous life, Elastasia wondered if one of the developers had wanted to write an RPG sequel or the like and had squeezed this in as a justification for not having solved the major problem.

[FujiwaraPhoenix]

@Crusader Lord: Updated form accepted.

[Teyao]

Uh... Yeah, I think that fundamentally that probably won't work out just by concept alone, but... You certainly can try.
In the interim, here's a Discord server. While I can say with a fair bit of certainty that I'll respond here just as fast, this might expedite communications a bit. Not mandatory, of course, but the option is here.

@PKMNB0Y

Okay dude, I re-did the character in a hopefully better positive to join the cast at this point, please tell me if there are problems with any part of it.

Edith: It's on the same post as the original submission

[FujiwaraPhoenix]

@Teyao: Right. Form analysis:

• Personality. It's short. Like, really short. These three sentences alone don't give enough information about the character in my opinion; it's way too generalized and doesn't really build upon what little groundwork is set. Nothing plays into the way that the character is conceptualized beyond being a bit... 'Tropey', per se? That's also not getting into how hollow it feels without that elaboration; all three sentences feel like they want to 'start' explaining how the character acts, but none of them actually DO anything with that lead-in.
• Abilities and Skills. Undefined charm magic which he excels at? No. No. No. Absolutely not. Things like that are a one-way ticket to removing agency from other players' hands and possibly forcing their actions, and without any clear boundaries or limitations (or some sort of conversation defining them) I will always deny that on principle. That rule applies here as well.
• A general thing before getting into detail here: Every single 'paragraph' here is a sentence. A single sentence. Each. By definition, yes, a sentence can be a paragraph, but none of those 'ideas' at the core of each is ever built upon. Some sentences are incomplete, some run on for longer than necessary, and others still have errors in grammar that would otherwise make reading them somewhat difficult if the readers aren't inferring context or actively breaking up the sentences such that they are easy to digest. Given that we're all going to be reading and writing with posts from others at their core (as this is inherently a sort of call-and-response type of hobby writing), I'm left a bit worried that there might not be enough to gain from a post with this sort of writing to leave others with a sense of satisfaction in what they write—in other words, that the posts might not reach the general standard that everyone else's posts would be at here. This is only my opinion, of course, and I do not speak for everyone else with that statement. With that said, let's get into the next few sections.
• History: Can a) be collapsed into a single paragraph and b) does absolutely nothing in terms of defining who the character was or is up until this point in time (with 'this point in time' being the start of the RP). It's incredibly shallow and gives us absolutely no meaningful insight into the character, on top of the lack of information the readers might have otherwise been able to gain from the other sections. Speaking of which:
• Original Role/Background: Right, where to begin here...
  
  • As mentioned two points above, readability.
  • The backstory itself is a bit... Nonsensical? To sum it up as I see it: the son of a viscount, at the age of ten, sneaks out to watch a wandering troupe. Without any context as to why their son would be interested in dance all of a sudden, his parents sign him up for dancing—presumably ballroom dancing, as he is still nobility, and not any of the dances of the 'common folk' or those from 'more exotic lands' which I would have assumed he would have seen instead—but somehow see that he cares more about 'freedom' (which, honestly speaking, how would you do that with regards to ballroom dancing? Actively breaking the rules of the dance itself?) and stop?
    It just doesn't add up why a majority of these events would line up in the first place when we consider the type of nobility you paint the character's parents to be (that is, to say, the type that seeks honor, fame, and status among their peers). Reasonably, he never would've been given a chance to 'learn' what you're proposing in the first place—at least, not with the given scenario—and thus would not reasonably exist in this specific setup.
  
  Needless to say, I'll be rejecting this form for the reasons given above.

[Teyao]

@Teyao: Right. Form analysis:

• Personality. It's short. Like, really short. These three sentences alone don't give enough information about the character in my opinion; it's way too generalized and doesn't really build upon what little groundwork is set. Nothing plays into the way that the character is conceptualized beyond being a bit... 'Tropey', per se? That's also not getting into how hollow it feels without that elaboration; all three sentences feel like they want to 'start' explaining how the character acts, but none of them actually DO anything with that lead-in.
• Abilities and Skills. Undefined charm magic which he excels at? No. No. No. Absolutely not. Things like that are a one-way ticket to removing agency from other players' hands and possibly forcing their actions, and without any clear boundaries or limitations (or some sort of conversation defining them) I will always deny that on principle. That rule applies here as well.
• A general thing before getting into detail here: Every single 'paragraph' here is a sentence. A single sentence. Each. By definition, yes, a sentence can be a paragraph, but none of those 'ideas' at the core of each is ever built upon. Some sentences are incomplete, some run on for longer than necessary, and others still have errors in grammar that would otherwise make reading them somewhat difficult if the readers aren't inferring context or actively breaking up the sentences such that they are easy to digest. Given that we're all going to be reading and writing with posts from others at their core (as this is inherently a sort of call-and-response type of hobby writing), I'm left a bit worried that there might not be enough to gain from a post with this sort of writing to leave others with a sense of satisfaction in what they write—in other words, that the posts might not reach the general standard that everyone else's posts would be at here. This is only my opinion, of course, and I do not speak for everyone else with that statement. With that said, let's get into the next few sections.
• History: Can a) be collapsed into a single paragraph and b) does absolutely nothing in terms of defining who the character was or is up until this point in time (with 'this point in time' being the start of the RP). It's incredibly shallow and gives us absolutely no meaningful insight into the character, on top of the lack of information the readers might have otherwise been able to gain from the other sections. Speaking of which:
• Original Role/Background: Right, where to begin here...
  
  • As mentioned two points above, readability.
  • The backstory itself is a bit... Nonsensical? To sum it up as I see it: the son of a viscount, at the age of ten, sneaks out to watch a wandering troupe. Without any context as to why their son would be interested in dance all of a sudden, his parents sign him up for dancing—presumably ballroom dancing, as he is still nobility, and not any of the dances of the 'common folk' or those from 'more exotic lands' which I would have assumed he would have seen instead—but somehow see that he cares more about 'freedom' (which, honestly speaking, how would you do that with regards to ballroom dancing? Actively breaking the rules of the dance itself?) and stop?
    It just doesn't add up why a majority of these events would line up in the first place when we consider the type of nobility you paint the character's parents to be (that is, to say, the type that seeks honor, fame, and status among their peers). Reasonably, he never would've been given a chance to 'learn' what you're proposing in the first place—at least, not with the given scenario—and thus would not reasonably exist in this specific setup.
  
  Needless to say, I'll be rejecting this form for the reasons given above.

@PKMNB0Y

Okay dude, thanks for giving it a chance

[LostDestiny]

I know yall have already started but I was wondering if you had room for one more?

I have the basic idea of a character that was a courier NPC before. Not sure if that would fit in well if you still have an opening.

[FujiwaraPhoenix]

@LostDestiny: I would say that we're still open, but my problem with your concept is that we sorta already have a few characters who are "incidentally" tied up with the characters, and so overfilling that niche might be a problem in and of itself.

[LostDestiny]

@PKMNB0Y OKay well, I don't have any other concept in mind right now cuz I kinda hate "grandeous" character sooo. Thanks anyway.

[Shiyonichi]

I’ve got my interest in this RP. Room for one more?

[FujiwaraPhoenix]

@Shiyonichi: Yeah, I'd say there's room for more.

[Shiyonichi]

Sunday is Social Anxiety Day

• Name: Aliciana Amaryllis
• Age: 16
  
  (Estimated, possibly 17 or even 18. Alicia's exact age in the game was never specified.)
• Appearance:
  https://pin.it/4XtfiMB
• Gender: Female
• Personality:
  
  Shinobu Asakura is an optimist at heart, believing that a “New tomorrow will bring a new beginning, no matter the present, as long as you move forward you will be able to find what you’re looking for.” As such she kept her own kindness towards others despite her misfortunes and holds a surprisingly strong will due to her optimism.
  
  As she didn’t have many friends in either life, one of Shinobu’s goals is to make friends and maybe even find love. Unfortunately, due to a lack of social interactions, she is what you would consider a nervous wreck when interacting with other people. She is constantly stuttering over words and is generally shy and uncertain around people. Despite this she is willing to help and stand up for people in need.
  
  While her general personality is that of Shinobu, she is still influenced by Aliciana’s personality, namely she still holds Aliciana’s latent bloodlust. Due to this influence Shinobu developed a fear that Aliciana’s influence would cause her to be taken over by the bloodlust and become like Aliciana in the game, a complete psychopath. For this reason she actively fears killing others and tries her best to avoid a fight.
• Abilities/Skills:
  
  While she isn’t as powerful as her in-game counterpart due to not going down the route that would create “The Reaper'' and her dislike of killing, she is still very much a force to be reckoned with in terms of both physical and magical combat prowess as the original Aliciana was proficient in both. Though Shinobu’s style is very different. Aliciana used a scythe in combat to fit with her Grim Reaper motif, Shinobu chooses to fight with her fists. As for her magic Aliciana possesses very powerful Dark Magic. Shinobu prefers to use it more for the ability to hide in the shadows to avoid fights, though if she has to fight, she prefers spells like Shadow Bind to restrain her opponents or to charge her fists with dark energy to enhance her attacks. Aliciana is also capable of using demonic spells due to being experimented on, but Shinobu actively refuses to use these spells.
  
  Other than combat, Aliciana is capable of the skills that you would expect from a hitman, such as sneaking around and free running. Outside of that, Shinobu is actually kind of a klutz at everything else.
• History:
  
  Shinobu was born sickly and was constantly bedridden, confined in a hospital bed. Her mother and father constantly supported her and told her “New tomorrow will bring a new beginning, no matter the present, as long as you move forward you will be able to find what you’re looking for.” This was something she always kept in her heart and she constantly kept a positive attitude about her condition believing that if she kept holding on. So she waited and dreamed about the things that she would be able to do when she recovered. It was here that she was introduced to video games, specifically Cross Heart Academy, needless to say she very much enjoyed the game and its world and cast as it was the closest thing she could experience to having both friends and going to school. Eventually things would get better and to her delight, it did, advancements in medical technology eventually allowed her to recover and allowed her to recover and start walking with her own two legs, however, she wouldn’t get to enjoy her newfound life for long as she chose to give it up, as shortly after her recovery she would spot a child who was in the road as a speeding car was heading towards them. Shinobu leaped forwards and pushed the child out of the way… but couldn’t get away in time and was ran over. Her last thoughts were of lamenting her life, most of it confined to a bed and the amount of time that she had freedom was cut short, perhaps she could get a second chance? A second chance to live a full life?
  
  She would get that chance she would awaken in a blood soaked facility. The sudden awakening left her confused and terrified, as she looked into a glass to see her face… or rather what should have been her face, as who was staring back at her was a red eyed child, one she recognized as the younger version of a character from Cross Heart Academy… Aliciana Amaryllis all around psychopath, about to break out from the facility. Shinobu, now Aliciana, realizing that she couldn’t stick around and escaped into the night, despite her reservations about who she had become, decided to keep moving forward.
  
  The next few years of her life were difficult as she lived on the street. Unlike in the game where Aliciana became a hired Killer, Shinobu opted for a lower profile work, working as a courier in the city, which took advantage of Aliciana’s skill set. Four years after the escape, when she was doing a delivery, a horse carriage suddenly went out of control and threatened to run over a child. Aliciana dashed in and pushed the child out of the way, a repeat of the incident that ended Shinobu’s previous life, however, In this life Aliciana was much more physically fit and able to also get out of the way of the carriage.
  
  As it turns out, the child was actually the grandson of the headmaster of Starveil Academy. Due to her saving of his grandson and due to the fact that she was practically homeless, he gave her a proposal: he will adopt Aliciana and sign her up to the Academy giving her a home and a proper education. She thought about it and she agreed, one was due to the fact her current living situation was sleeping in alleyways and trying to live off what little she made in her courier job and the second reason is to experience the things that she didn’t experience in her two lives. Namely school and having friends. Perhaps she could make friends with the main cast, she thought, after all she knew all about them and they definitely didn’t know who Aliciana was. Right?
• Original Role and Background:
  
  Years ago there was an organization that took several orphans and subjected them to inhumane training and experimentation, eventually having the children kill each other to root out weakness, so that they could create the greatest killer. This worked out far too well, as one of the children slaughtered everyone else, eventually breaking out, having killed everyone that stood in their way to freedom. This child would not stop the bloodshed as this child would continue their killing spree as a contract killer and in a few short years they would become “The Reaper of the Criminal Underworld” becoming a boogeyman only spoken of in hushed tones. It was said that none who were targeted by the Reaper would survive.
  
  That was the backstory given to Aliciana in the game, most would find it rather edgy, though they wouldn’t find it laughable as Aliciana was responsible for some of the most nightmarish scenes in the game. Aliciana only showed up in the second half of the game, as she would be hired by specific factions that opposed the Heroine. She would take advantage of her young age to infiltrate the academy, as according to the developers, they didn’t want anywhere to feel safe when Aliciana showed up. To add to her infamy Aliciana more than lived up to her in-game reputation as she was one of the toughest bosses in the game, fully capable of wiping out a party who wasn’t fully prepared to fight her in a few turns.
• Other:

[FujiwaraPhoenix]

@Shiyonichi: Right, form analysis...

• I think at her core, your character is a bit too tonally dissonant from the rest of the cast. I can feasibly see child soldiers in the criminal underbelly; that's a very commonplace thing. But the specific circumstances behind the character's inception (the whole kodoku-esque creation method in particular) leaves a bit of an unwanted taste in my mouth, as the very specific trait of "possibly bloody psychopath hitman child murderer" with no real narrative weight behind it isn't something I think would fare well in the world...
  And, if I'm going to be honest, feels a bit one-note as written. A boss with a high difficulty spike who appears out of nowhere with no real meaningful history feels more like... Well, just that. I'd point to, say, SMT3's Matador, for example. People remember that boss because you're forced to fight them on the back foot and kind of just sucker punches you because you don't expect them, but otherwise isn't exactly memorable as a character.
• The circumstances behind her entry into the school in this 'timeline' feel a bit contrived. While I would agree that she would need an excuse to get off the streets to attend, "saving the headmaster's kid and getting adopted by him as a result" seems a bit too convenient. There are probably better, more reasonable routes to doing so that would lead to a character who ended UP with a reputation as a damn good killer (and you don't need to be put into a tournament to the death to facilitate being good at killing, if I'm being completely honest; it gets you the person who is the best at surviving, not killing), and I'd recommend considering those routes. Easy examples include things like "forced nobility to adopt her into the family" or "missing child now found" and so on and so forth, but I'm not going to force anything in that regard.

For the reasons above, I'm choosing to reject the form as it is right now.

[Shiyonichi]

@Shiyonichi: Right, form analysis...

• I think at her core, your character is a bit too tonally dissonant from the rest of the cast. I can feasibly see child soldiers in the criminal underbelly; that's a very commonplace thing. But the specific circumstances behind the character's inception (the whole kodoku-esque creation method in particular) leaves a bit of an unwanted taste in my mouth, as the very specific trait of "possibly bloody psychopath hitman child murderer" with no real narrative weight behind it isn't something I think would fare well in the world...
  And, if I'm going to be honest, feels a bit one-note as written. A boss with a high difficulty spike who appears out of nowhere with no real meaningful history feels more like... Well, just that. I'd point to, say, SMT3's Matador, for example. People remember that boss because you're forced to fight them on the back foot and kind of just sucker punches you because you don't expect them, but otherwise isn't exactly memorable as a character.
• The circumstances behind her entry into the school in this 'timeline' feel a bit contrived. While I would agree that she would need an excuse to get off the streets to attend, "saving the headmaster's kid and getting adopted by him as a result" seems a bit too convenient. There are probably better, more reasonable routes to doing so that would lead to a character who ended UP with a reputation as a damn good killer (and you don't need to be put into a tournament to the death to facilitate being good at killing, if I'm being completely honest; it gets you the person who is the best at surviving, not killing), and I'd recommend considering those routes. Easy examples include things like "forced nobility to adopt her into the family" or "missing child now found" and so on and so forth, but I'm not going to force anything in that regard.

For the reasons above, I'm choosing to reject the form as it is right now.

@PKMNB0Y

Ah sorry, I didn’t get my idea across too well. You know how you have a flash of inspiration and because you’re so caught up in it that you forget to make it clear to other people? Yeah I think that’s what happened.

To explain

The original Aliciana is meant to be a force of Nature Villain. She’s not a villain with understandable motivations. She’s more or less a concept in a human face. Like how the Joker Represents Chaos, Aliciana is meant to be a representation of Bloodlust, specifically of the Serial Killer kind, a kind of Bloodlust that finds killing euphoric.

So the concept with Shinobu and Aliciana is like a good person taking over the Joker’s body, but the Joker has a bit of Influence over them and they have to fight it off to keep their own identity.

As for what is in the game is that, I accidentally made it seem like she is meant to be a simple one off boss, rather she’s meant to be a more like Liu Bu from Dynasty Warriors or Nemesis from Resident Evil. Basically they are meant to be that enemy that shows up and is hunting you and you need to run and in the story they basically take the same role. Everyscene they are meant to be a “bomb”. She can and will kill someone, you just don’t know when or who. She is basically meant to be the collective boogeyman for the fan base.

Which is why I had Shinobu be a cinnamon roll. Because it would be the equivalent of something like Nemesis walking up and instead of killing Jill, hands her a flower and says. “Wannabe Friends?” You can’t say that wouldn’t be amusing.

As for the backstory. I’ll get rid of the whole having them fight to the death part, it’s only there to show the cruelty of the location. The point was just meant to be an explanation of why she is so strong despite her age.

As for the contrivances, is because I wanted to show that Shinobu at her core is still a good person despite the her situation, as it is meant to mirror her death and that she is still willing to do the same thing. I didn’t want to leave this scene as a one off scene and actually have some sort of consequence for her heroism, so I tied it into the reason why she went into the academy.

[FujiwaraPhoenix]

@Shiyonichi: Okay, I have multiple problems here, but let's try addressing them one at a time.

• The thing with 'force of nature' villains is that they are usually intended to "force progress" or create some sort of risk/reward factor. You mention, say, Lu Bu or Nemesis, but I'd also put villains like FE3H's Skull Knight or FE9/10's Black Knight in that. But, like, even putting specific generalizations aside, three of those four examples have a meaningful character behind them... And can be/ARE actively avoided.
  No, seriously. Most engagements with Lu Bu in DW games can be dodged around, for example, and you're never meant to take him down but also never meant to directly engage him in normal combat (or at least not before the game gives you the okay to). Sure, all of those characters can pop up and force player movement around them, but only Mr. X/ Nemesis actively pursue the player (and, like, RE is a horror franchise; they're MEANT to be that ever-looming presence that creates tension when you have few tools to effectively deal with them). The others appear and may posture a bit, but because of their nature as scripted encounters, usually won't actually jumpscare you for no good reason. Usually. And then after the fact, you're able to effectively play around their presence because they might only jumpscare once or twice, if ever.
  In short, I am of the opinion that even 'force of nature' villains should have proper character and motivations, regardless of what service those might actually provide... To say nothing of the fact that you just want the character to pop in for a random gank and murk a bunch of party members on a whim. That is, in my opinion, a bad design for a recurring character that would have no place in most scenarios; doubly so when the inherent presence of the character would warp gameplay to such an extent that you always have to play around them even if they never actually arrive... And in and of themselves have no inherent counterplay to deal with besides "just deal with it". Otherwise, villains who posture to just go around murdering people but have no meaning in the grand scheme of things are just handled as one-offs anyways OR end up becoming more of a nuisance to the player's progress rather than any sort of looming threat... Because, well, they wouldn't meant to be ones in the first place. This is completely divested from the personality of the character in question, but on that note...
• I still don't like the idea of the personality being what it is. The idea of a character basically going "and then I occasionally have sudden psychopathic urges and a desire to kill" feels super ham-fisted in my opinion, and if I'm going to be honest, I don't think I'd want a character in the RP who would do something like that. This is to say nothing of the power you've put them at to begin with, which would basically equate to "okay now we have a girl who probably needs actual psychiatric help wandering around who could at any time just murder a cast member" when you consider that a fair chunk of them don't actually have any sort of combat capabilities. That, I feel, is more problematic than the actual 'core' personality being proposed here. I don't really care if the mental image of a big bad hulking monster who would snap your spine like a twig is all nice and friendly because it'd be 'funny' when the cast will try to actively avoid them anyways by dint of their nature AND because of all the metaknowledge they would have. It creates problems in terms of creating natural interaction between characters and just generally creates dynamics that aren't fun to play with or around for the most part.
• There are, again, better and more meaningful ways to lead to circumstances to get a character from that sort of background integrated into the world in which the characters exist in. I do once again want to emphasize the idea that, being presented as the world of an otome game as it is, that this school has very high ranking children of nobility and royalty present. Allowing a child picked up off the street to enroll for no reason beyond saving the child of the headmaster for and ignoring the prerequisites of knowledge needed to enter to begin with and not immediately fall behind/drop out is pure folly in my opinion, and would reasonably never happen in a sane world.

My opinion, fundamentally, does not change. I don't like the character as they are presented now, and the logic and justification behind them doesn't change that fact. These follow-up statements, coupled with the points I made in my last reply, still stand. Character still rejected for the reasons given prior.

[DrabberRogue]

Hello there~! If you don't mind my intrusion, would you happen to be receptive to a newcomer?
I mean I guess the "(Now Accepting)" and "Apply" indicators should tip me off, but it feels weird not to ask... ^^;

Figure I might as well pitch the character concept I've got bouncing around in my head while I'm at it. See if there's anything that needs to be ironed out (or changed completely) before I go building a whole character sheet for it.

So in terms of the character as he was in the game I was thinking he would have been one of the heroine's potential love interests. A prodigal noble heir endowed with a talent for swordsmanship, a hereditary talent for dark magic, and a particular fancy for many stereotypically elegant noble things (ballroom dancing, formal wear, etc). Regarded as a star student at the academy, he was initially aloof to the heroine, but had several flags that could cause him to develop interest. Rather competitive by nature, he might even develop a rivalry with the heroine if she pursued combat skills, that being a major catalyst towards at least one of his endings.

Notably on any path where conflict broke out in the story's second half, the character if recruited would be a powerful unit in the player's party/army, but also a rather dangerous one should the wrong combination of flags be tripped...

Now, uh, this is the part where I reach a bit more. It depends on whether or not there's a villainess in this game, and whether or not I'm overstepping with this idea.

Several rare combinations of event flags could be tripped, according to the heroine's actions, that could lead to the character falling in love with the game's villainess instead. A possibility made less likely, but still not impossible, by the heroine pursuing his route. Once this occurred it would set off a background story that, if not averted, could lead to an infamously difficult endgame boss fight against the character.

I've also toyed around with the idea that, instead of being playable in combat routes, the character would die early on unless he fell for the villainess. This would make him impossible (or very difficult) to romance in combat routes, as well as letting him be a scary secret boss without giving the player access to another strong character.

This would also put the character getting isekai'd into him in the ironic situation of being a powerful combat oriented character, but who has a very strong incentive to try to prevent a combat focused route from happening.

So uh, that's what I got so far, attempting to organize thoughts into words.
Assuming the rp is open for me to even propose a character, that is~