MF&P contest #12 - the meeting (voting and feedback)

[Loksfjoer]

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Welcome to the Voting and Feedback round for MFP#12!

Voting and Feedback guidelines

• Please take your time to read through all the entries before voting for your favourite work. The reasons you base your vote on are up to you, as long the vote isn’t based on whether or not you like the author.
  It would be nice if you could share why you voted for a specific work.
• Giving feedback is optional but highly encouraged. When giving feedback you should be respectful and constructive. It’s good to point out any flaws or the things you feel could be improved or why you didn't like something, but don’t be mean.
  Make sure to point out what you liked or appreciated in the entry too.
• Contestants may (and are encouraged to) vote and/or give feedback for the other entries but shouldn’t vote for their own entry. If contestants wish to withhold a vote and only give feedback, that is good too.
• The entries are anonymous unless the writer asked for having their name added. That being said, writers may claim their work at any time during or after the voting period.
• The entry with the most votes will win, but in case of a tie a Contest Mod will cast the tie-breaker vote.
• You can vote for entries and post your feedback in this thread, but if you rather have your vote and/or feedback be anonymous you can PM it to @Loksfjoer.
• The voting period deadline is Thursday 12 September, 9:00 CET, which is 7:00 server time (both times are in a.m.).

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The Entries

A Forever Friend

By @Artexercise

We met, she and I.
The chaser and the chased.
In a bed and breakfast.
She had coffee, a deathly black.
and I a bagel with everything
yet nothing makes it so.

We sat at separate tables.
Just out of reach.
"Won't you join me?" she proposed.
And I considered the offer.
I am always.
Considering.

"No, I'm waiting," I'd say.
There are promises I made,
And dreams to keep.
Another lily on a stone,
And a song to cry
before my immortal lullaby.

Me and myself

By @Xandrya

It wasn’t easy; it was hard
For that piece of crap metal was once my car

The blood slowly inched toward my feet
Now there was nothing else but to meet

Sirens from near and afar filled the air
A sense of sorrow, a sense of despair

I took a few steps across the street
And knelt down beside the body that was once me

Killing Time

He was supposed to be here at this hour,
It was not like him to ever be late,
Pray tell me by what ungodly power,
Could delay thus force me to sit and wait?
The clock keeps ticking tick ticking away,
And with each passing moment I pondered,
Shall I still be waiting for him all day,
Or will he repay the minutes squandered?
Alas now comes a knocking at my door,
There is the visitor I longed to greet
I never knew him from my days before,
But ever so glad to finally meet.
The late gentleman takes me by the hand,
As Death shall come to visit every man.

[SsssssSsSsssSs]

I vote for Xandrya's!

[Mole]

It’s so interesting all three entries are about Death.

I vote for A Forever Friend.

[artexercise]

So as not to vote for myself, while I do like "Me and myself" and "Killing Time", I have a special place in my heart for a good sonnet. My vote goes to "Killing Time".

[Lexisheeps]

All three entries were really great! <3

I super liked the slow burn feel of, A Forever Friend. And the rhyming scheme and sentence flow in, Me and Myself, was totally fun! But sadly, I can only vote for one. So my vote goes to: Killing Time. It felt like it was stylized as a modern day Poe poem to me! And we all know that Poe's poems pwn posers !

Good luck to all of you! It was honestly hard to choose!

[Loksfjoer]

Another round of wonderful entries, thank you to everyone who submitted a piece and voted for this round.
Judging by the comments all entries were enjoyed and wich makes it a very close victory for Killing Time.
Congratulations! I will post the winning entry in the hall of fame.

I also want to apologize for taking this long to write this post.