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Now, I know ores aren't my job, but I do have a few nitpicks with it...
Greystone: I noticed the description said it was very light, while also saying it was lead. Lead is actually very very heavy.
Bronze: bronze is not a naturally occuring metal, but a tin and copper alloy. is slowsilver tin?
Ebony: If Ebony is not harder than Iron, it cannot be sharper. Buuut harder things arre more brittle, so that will keep it balanced.
Adamantium and Mythril: Not actually a nit pick but what if you had a thin layer of mythril over adamant plates? That could potetially be overpowered.
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Some of those nitpicks have weight, but with things like ebony, its defined here because its not necessarily the same as real life... There may very well have been an event in Tiiens past that alloyed lots of tin and copper, and so bronze would seem like a naturally occurring material...
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If it matters any, hat you see on the front page in Fallen's posts aren't the actual "revisions", rather the place holder for her to use later. As you may not know, fallen is having some computer issues and needs some time before she can get to a usable terminal again. Rest assured there will be many changes to what you see, but for now you'd simply need to patient as we work around the issues.

Also, get in mah belly.
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Noooo NOOOO!!!

Not the belly!!!

FallenReaper! Save me!
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Let's make a baby!

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Let's make a baby!


That is the least tempting offer ever.
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Also, should we rebalance dieties, so to speak? I noticed that there are only three goddesses, so it might be time to break out rule sixty-three. for the greater good. Also, Leehno is female? If so, wouldn't a more feminine A at the end of the name be more suitable? Leehno just sounds slightly more masculine to me. So, yeah. Those are the changes I suggest when people get around to it.

Anyway, CS.
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Name: Alaira Taenn, the Berserker.
Age: 39, Roughly equivalent to a Human's 24 in terms of physical appearance and maturity.
Mageblood: Clima.
Class: Electromancy, knows a small amount of Aeromancy (High jumps are the cornerstone of her fighting style; thus she can jump quite high or reduce the impact of a fall, but no more)
Previous Magic Training: Barely any. Just enough to know he can actually cast. All other training comes from repeated practice.
Race: Half-Forest Elf, though Elf is dominant.
Appearance: Alaira stands at an impressive 7' 4", tall even for her kind. Unlike her kind however, she has a much thicker, more muscular build as opposed to the thin, slender frames of her Elven compatriots. This likely owes to her human heritage, as her mother was built like a tank. She has long dark brown hair that reaches to about a third of the way down her back, as well as bright Cyan eyes. Her skin is bronzed, owing to the massive amounts of time spent outdoors (She can hardly remember a time she had any sort of building to sleep in save the occasional time she could afford to sleep at an Inn and eat).

Her features are as strong as she is, though still quite feminine. Coupled with her slightly shorter ears, Most other elves are easily able to tell she isn't a full Forest Elf, Which usually leads to the other Elf avoiding her on that principle alone. But if they took the time to get to know her, they'd realize she is an abrasive ball of malignant fury, and would probably be discouraged from speaking with her anyway. There are three slash-shaped scars on her left cheek, likely made by the claws of a beast of some sort. She has other scars, but most of them are covered up by whatever clothes or armor she happens to be wearing.

Alaira owns a fairly impressive suit of Fortite armor, which originally belonged to her mother (Although it did require a slight reforging, given that Alaira is two feet taller than her mother was). It's Pearl-pink color often leads to ridicule when she is seen in it among the more... terminally stupid members of society, but she's quite fond of it anyway. The plate-armor's most defining feature is the Silver trim inlaid among the plates, as well as the imagery of stars and constellations engraved and inlaid with yet more silver. Her lance, however is much less impressive, being a simple Iron spear.

Bio: Alaira Taenn, as she is known today, is a wandering adventurer known locally for her incredible strength and her short temper. Apparently she had once pinned a man by his pantaloons to the top of a spruce tree when he made the less than wise decision to invade her personal space. She doesn't like to be touched, and espescially not in the chest by a drunken bar patron. Anyway, she had managed to forge a bit of a name for herself among a village or two, before a near death experience with a drake caused her to rethink her abilities. It was with great reluctance that she admitted she needed training in her magic as well as her spear, and so she set out for the Twilight college.

Apparently she has been through terribly traumatic experiences during her childhood(Including the destruction of her village), but nobody save her seems to have survived, and she certainly isn't telling. Any attempts to learn more about her are often met with extremem indiscriminate violence. Whether this is caused by a desire to keep a secret or some involuntary rage at the memory is uncertain. She also seems to hate plants, contrary to most of her race. The only thing most people seem to know is her extreme belligerence and her equally extreme bloodlust and apetite for destruction (She has caused more property damage to the college in the past week than most students do in a year. Mostly to potted plants), but why? what warrants this immense hatred of... well, everything? However, though she'll never admit it, even to herself, she is a bit lonely.

Positive attributes: Brave, Strong, Athletic, determined, High magical endurance, protective(Not that this ever seems to matter), Talented Blacksmith and armorer, Great at making Jewelry and engraving, good hunter, Reasonably good cook, Knows how to survive out in the wild.
Negative attributes: Aggressive, belligerent, Short tempered, Trust issues, violent, Claustrophobic, Illiterate, Fear of caves, Fear of Psychomancy, Vulnerable to Psychomancy (Though impossible to control, she often breaks down into a gibbering wreck if she can 'feel' someone poking around her mind, and she has an extremely difficult time seeing through illusions), Possibly Schizophrenia, Her personality seems to be split, though the other fragments are not 'awake' yet, dislikes Eysires greatly, and is just plain rude.
SOOPER SEKRIT WURD: Rebirth.
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Freeshooter92 said
Now, I know ores aren't my job, but I do have a few nitpicks with it...Greystone: I noticed the description said it was very light, while also saying it was lead. Lead is actually very very heavy.Bronze: bronze is not a naturally occuring metal, but a tin and copper alloy. is slowsilver tin?Ebony: If Ebony is not harder than Iron, it cannot be sharper. harder things arre more brittle, so that will keep it balanced.Adamantium and Mythril: Not actually a nit pick but what if you had a thin layer of mythril over adamant plates? That could potetially be overpowered.


Well, technically, Ebony could be sharper than iron without being as hard, but it would be extremely difficult to keep it that way. And not all hard things are brittle. Diamond comes to mind,
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Well, technically, Ebony be sharper than iron without being as hard, but it would be extremely difficult to keep it that way. And not all hard things are brittle. Diamond comes to mind,


Actually, diamonds are brittle. They are very hard and cannot be easily cut, but they will crack under pressure if struck hard enough.
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Draconilian said
I promise I'll get up a CS sometime soon.


Good to know.

Lucius Cypher said
Let's make a baby!


Well that's fucked up on several different levels.
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Sundered Echo said
Oh Gods.I had wondered if that might be the reason you weren't on the IRC today. This is terrible news...I really hope your internet is back working again soon. Until then, 1000 hugs from me to tide you over... Keep coming back here for more. XDWe'll keep Jayda and Xid safe for you, no executions or anything. You aren't missing much in Aftermath right now though anyway, things haven't quite yet got back fully into action.


Thank goodness, I was worried there for a bit. And I've got a Navi post and aim to post it later tonight, maybe or tomorrow.

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Nice, do you think there would be anything that would require me to change his background? I noticed there were some changes to the Esyire's description, and that of the Scorched Lands. Do you think any of that would prevent the clan rivalry in his background from happening?


I left the Esyire's open, as well as with any character race descriptions, open for PC creativity. The main idea behind the description was to aid in PCs keeping in some sort of union. :p Nothing big. As for Clan rivalry, it's still possible with the lesser (smaler) branched off clans of Esyires.

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Yo, do whatever you feel you got to. You don't need to fulfill any particular niche, and there will enviably by someone with the same race and magic as another. All that matters is how you play it.


This I agree with namely since this provides more PCS for the Noxomancy alignment besides there's 3 different aspects you can choose from, not just shadow.

Freeshooter92 said
Now, I know ores aren't my job, but I do have a few nitpicks with it...Greystone: I noticed the description said it was very light, while also saying it was lead. Lead is actually very very heavy.Bronze: bronze is not a naturally occuring metal, but a tin and copper alloy. is slowsilver tin?Ebony: If Ebony is not harder than Iron, it cannot be sharper. harder things arre more brittle, so that will keep it balanced.Adamantium and Mythril: Not actually a nit pick but what if you had a thin layer of mythril over adamant plates? That could potetially be overpowered.

There's some things I'm still editing as I wanted to get something up as a place holder and due with a lot of revamping, not everything is perfect or to satisfaction so if you spot something bring it to my attention. But please be nice about is all I ask. I've done a lot and it most of it is based off the Old OOC, which I tried to keep as close to it as possible. As for the combinaition of mythril and adamant plates would be impossible since Mythril doesn't play well with other metals. (I'll add this to the OoC when I get time.

My first concern is getting PC accepted then start the IC. Speaking of that, I'll get Khan and Mar's up shortly...

Sundered Echo said
Some of those nitpicks have weight, but with things like ebony, its defined here because its not necessarily the same as real life... There may very well have been an event in Tiiens past that alloyed lots of tin and copper, and so bronze would seem like a naturally occurring material...


You also forgot the Gods did shift everything aorund after the world was destoryed the first time so any real rules don't really apply to the letter in Tiien. Trust me, you'll be glad it doesn't in the future acts.

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Noooo NOOOO!!!Not the belly!!!FallenReaper! Save me!


*pops Lucius's belly wide open...*
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I think I´ll be the first and only human :/
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WitchChild said
I think I´ll be the first and only human :/


Most the NPC teachers are Human and in time, Mar will look like a human and Uicle, maybe, and Athalus are both humans.
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Freeshooter92 said
Also, should we rebalance dieties, so to speak? I noticed that there are only three goddesses, so it might be time to break out rule sixty-three. for the greater good. Also, Leehno is female? If so, wouldn't a more feminine A at the end of the name be more suitable? Leehno just sounds slightly more masculine to me. So, yeah. Those are the changes I suggest when people get around to it.Anyway,


You also forgot there's 3 minor goddess, the Naga ones, roaming around betwen the mortal plane and heavens. Not to mention there's a reason there's mostly males that survived the war, with only 3 I'm primarly going to focus on: Aarem, Xiah, and Ren. Right now, I've been guessing on the dieties's genders and if we went by names, then there hardly be any females at all. -_-
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Actually, diamonds are brittle. They are very hard and cannot be easily cut, but they will crack under pressure if struck hard enough.


I've stepped on a diamond before, against concrete, while walking normally. It ruined the bottom of my shoe, and nothing else happened.
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That's a rubber shoe. I've hit a diamond with a hammer before, and it crumbled to powder. Even if it was an industrial diamond.
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You also forgot there's 3 minor goddess, the Naga ones, roaming around betwen the mortal plane and heavens. Not to mention there's a reason there's mostly males that survived the war, with only 3 I'm primarly going to focus on: Aarem, Xiah, and Ren. Right now, I've been guessing on the dieties's genders and if we went by names, then there hardly be any females at all. -_-


I'm just saying slight edits to names might be in order, or just a few little things shuffled around. I feel like we didn't really utilize the dieties the last game, and I think that's a shame. And, I guess my job is to be the guy that brings little mistakes or oddities to your attention so's dey can be fixed up proppa. As for metals, I'm just really knowledgable on the subject, given I took metal shop as well as four semesters of material science. If you ever nee to know the physics of any sort of material or structure, let me know. I'd like to put some of my talents to use here, given that I lost the meager world-building job I had when the site died.
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WitchChild said
I think I´ll be the first and only human :/


Not true, there's Locas, Uicle, Athalus, Brandt, Annabeth, Numerous characters whose authors left or disappeared, and another guy who I've got planned (GEOMANCY VIKING. GRAB YER MEAD)
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What if I don't like mead? You can't make me have any!

Also, I've got a character in mind, and I think he'll be up shortly.
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Hah. I had an idea for a character, re-read the sheet and now have lost my idea again
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