[OOC] Corrected & Connected

[Anonymous]

@TalijaKey Haha, that sounds great XD

[AliceInRedHeels]

^^ I changed Alyssa weapon around, if anyone's interested. Also @NeoAC, theif!! Hah, nah, go right ahead and shamelessly use it. ;)

[Anonymous]

@AliceInRedHeels Does my CS need anymore touch ups or is it fine? I guess Genkai is getting swamped with school work -.-'

[AliceInRedHeels]

@Anonymous Hmmm mind expanding on the internal heat source of your weapons? Seems a little redundant to cut something open and then immediately cauterize the wound? Also it's not exactly balanced. Maybe add in a few disadvantages and such? While guarded and finicky slightly contradict, I can see how it's plausible. But about his breakdowns? How bad are they? Would they effect his ability to do his job? It be an issue if he explodes of the handle during a mission. @Krauxis I think what @Genkai meant was what I just asked Anon, it seems like it be too easy for her, if you elaborate on the downsides of a heavy aggressive attacker it would balance out and give us a way to make missions a little more of a even playing field for everyone. With her Cynicism, It's more of a wording issue I believe? She was asking if you could tone it down.(I think, don't quote me here >.>) Having her being angry at world makes it sound like she's going to constantly rant about how hard and evil the world is and end up getting annoyed when people don't agree. I think being cynical is more 'I know the world is wrong and I don't trust it' which isn't bad. Never trust a GvN. Calming down from teenage angst is one thing, being less obvious with it, or more mature in handling it is complete different. @NeoAC Hmm perhaps Unmotivated instead of Slacker, because of the way you describe his other Traits it seems once he has a cause he's more then wiling to put forth the effort needed? You could give a slacker a cause of a life time and they'd still put off doing it..hah.. Also I know you said you were going to change part of the weapons functions around, but how heavy are they? I'd imagine there'd be a bit of a recoil from the vibrations, would that throw off their accuracy? Is it a directed attack, a small narrow beam of sound, big boom on impact or general area, like the small sound waves expand to large ones out to encompass a certain area? Also would it cause damage to one of us, on the off chance we'd get caught in the blast? @Hella Cute If you want to come up with a few ideas for new spells, go ahead, but care to run them by us first before adding them to your CS? @TheMusketMan Would he constantly be on his bike? If so perhaps making him almost a centaur but half motorcycle instead? It would be a valid reason to have the bike in the DgtWld and would be pretty snazzy. If not we really still don't see a real value for it besides flash and to make him look cool. It be a bit unfair to the others if they're left running around, and he's zipping circles around them?

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Mkay, I think I touched everything that was bothering me. These are my own personal thoughts, so you might get multiple feedback. As usual, hope I didn't come across as mean, hah. ^^; Questions, comments, concerns are always welcome~ ~ Alice

[Anonymous]

@AliceInRedHeels Ok, I'll get those points fixed up ASAP! So more disadvantages for the weapon and expansion on his emotional breakdowns?

[AliceInRedHeels]

For now, yep. At least that's all that's bothering me. Ah actually, @Anonymous that whole boomerang thing? How does it work? I can see using them as a throwing weapon, but the shape of the weapon doesn't really lend for the aerodynamics to make a return trip. Perhaps attach them to wires or something you can physically pull them back, less change of them getting lost if someone dodges or knocks them out the air. Still the same downfall with the rope thingy, but perhaps a easier thing to ascertain?

[vietmyke]

also Anon, just a small note- As a Corrector finishing his training your character is given an upgrade, right now I'm seeing 2 upgrades: the heat power, and boomerang throw ability. Not to mention that he also has kickboxing. turn it down a bit?

[Anonymous]

also Anon, just a small note- As a Corrector finishing his training your character is given an upgrade, right now I'm seeing 2 upgrades: the heat power, and boomerang throw ability. Not to mention that he also has kickboxing. turn it down a bit?

@vietmyke

Alright I'll cross off the boomerang ability for a possible future add on. Thanks for letting me know. I've also edited his weapon description and added a disadvantage. As for his breakdowns, I elaborated a bit on it. Hopefully I've addressed the concerns. If there's anything else that needs tweaking just tell me and I'll gladly edit :)

[NeoAJ]

@AliceinRedHeels I'm glad I have to go ahead on the format steal :) It is very pretty. That's a good point on slacking. I just went with that first because I figured that was the only way I could think of to describe Maya. I'll update that right away. As for the guns, they are meant to be directed attacks at a certain target. I got the idea from a couple of reports I heard about the U.S. military experimenting with sound cannons to attack combatants in Afghanistan (as well as the episode of Brooklyn Nine-Nine where Diaz shoots Boyle with a larger scale model.) The dial settings I've incorporated into the guns can be used to spread that out into an area-of-effect cone shaped blast as well. Since there are capabilities on the guns that would affect teammates, it stands to reason that harmful waves would affect them as well, but given the relative familiarity with the Tokyo unit I would hope Atomik's reputation means her teammates are aware of where she is firing and when. There is some recoil with the guns, and definitely during her first year, Atomik would not have been able to handle them, but for steady firing she is fine. It's on bigger pulses (anything from 7-11) that the recoil is noticeable, but if she's firing a larger single pulse on that level it shouldn't come back to bite the team in audible manners. Just she'd be kinda out of commission for a few seconds. Also I've updated my CS with the new settings on the gun as well as the biography. Don't hesitate with the feedback there either.

[Genkai]

I'm here, was busy this morning/afternoon with dentist work, have another appt. next week, oh joy. I'm going out tonight with my parents cause I'm 24 and they're my only friends. >___> But tomorrow I'll have the house to myself which means essays and posts will be getting done. So I've done some quick skimming but what exactly should I be looking at? Who is needing feedback or to double check with me? I will check out where I have been mentioned/summoned of course. I'll be online for roughly the next hour or so but I'm also doing some work with college emails and crap like that. During the hour, I will plan on getting my sheet posted and hopefully at least our lovely co-GMs will be ready to do the same while we flesh out the rest of ya.

[Anonymous]

@Genkai My CS is needing feed back/approval. The CoGMs have kindly coached me on a couple edits, but your input is important as well. Please fill me in on any changes you would like done.

[vietmyke]

Our overlord has returned! Also she should check in on our GM-Group chat so we can discussify a few things! <3 Me.

[Genkai]

Goodness, is it 3 hours of babbling? XD I don't know if I have time to read it all @vietmyke And sure @Anonymous though me and the others did talk about your submission and the others, last night?/two nights ago? (right when you did it/when I was about to go to bed) So I do trust they've been able to steer you in a good direction but I will surely double back and check it out now.

[AliceInRedHeels]

@Genkai Not completely babble....I think...there's some important bits.

[Genkai]

Hey where is the sheet for Anon? I know my vision sucks but for the love of god, I can't find it around here...

[vietmyke]

its a bit more than 3 hours yeah... I just had a couple bits I'd like to confirm with you since you're online.. lol -Anon's sheet is now on page 4 btw,

[Genkai]

Oh it's above me! Okay haha. I see it now. And I'll pop on in a sec, so if you wanna reiterate anything, I'll be there, may be easier than scrolling.

[Anonymous]

@Genkai Alright thanks a bunch :)

[vietmyke]

Lol don't bother scrolling through Genkai, its a bit of a mess, just read the most recent posts, theyre all that matter.. lol

[NeoAJ]

I guess I finally have my sheet up now Genkai (Top of Page 3) if you want to have a look through that.