[OOC] Stargate - Alliances - Into the Unknown

[Sep]

Name: Miyako Sora
Race: Human
Age: 31
Appearance: 1,73 centimeters tall, with straight black hair reaching just above the shoulder. She has dark brown, nearly back eyes. She has soft and nimble hands with which she carries out her work as surgeon. She has a black tattoo in the form of a broken chain across her lower back, one on her left shoulder in the form of stylized angel wing and another one on her right in the form of stylized demon wing.
Title: Doctor /Military rank: Colonel
Nationality: Japanese
Organization: Homeworld Command
Skills:
Medical degree
post-doctoral training in surgery
Degree in biology
Military training (specialized in sharpshooting)
Eight dan in Kendo.

History: Miyako was born in a military family. As such from an young age, she knew she will end up in the family business so to say. Still combat wasn't a thing she was attracted to as much as medicine. So as compromise, while she still joined the military for her family, she still finished her medical degree.

In kind of a rebellious phase, a few years after joining the military, she went ahead and got herself those tattoos after a huge falling out between her and her parents. Things escalated to the point where she was disowned, but she paid that no mind. Instead of getting hang over that incident, she concentrated on her career.

Slowly, but steadily she escalated through the ranks until she reached the rank of colonel, which she took as great honor for herself. One day she was approached by some higher ups with a proposition.'Was she willing to join a some kind of project.' According to them this was going to be a one time proposition, if she was to refuse it now, she will never be approached or see the two of them again. Seeing how she already broke ties with her relatives a few years ago and the fact herself had no family, Miyako decided this was only the natural progress forward so she readily said yes. That was how she joined the SGC.

Personality: Miyako is in general very calm and collected person. She is very hard to get agitated or angry, but once that fuse has been lit, explosion is bound to happen. She likes to spend time among people and have nice chats with them. Another thing she likes to do is spar whenever it's possible. Be it with weapons or just hand to hand, she enjoys every kind of fight as it proves excellent way to relieve stress. As practitioner of Kendo, her main strength is sword fighting, though the experience and knowledge she acquired with the sword proves useful in hand to hand combat too as her reflexes are fast and her vision sharp. Another weakness Miyako has is towards alcohol. She likes to drink sake, though the military regulations make it difficult to drink freely, so that's mostly reserved for when she is off duty.

how's this one? Anything I need to edit?

@rivaan

1) Rank I will let @Forsythe comment on.

2) A Degree in Biology, and a Medical Doctor that can perform surgery at 31... in the Military? :P Might want to cut one out (Probably biology) doesn't mean you can't contribute to any medical problems. Like Fraiser or Beckett did.

3) You can't train to be in the military while at university, at least not in any country I know ;) A way to really spite your family, if that's what you wanted to do would be for her to join the Military... and then to become a medic/doctor.

4) Theres two gaps, I personally only care about one. Between joining the SGC and being stationed aboard the Nyx what did she do to prove herself worthy of joining such a small team?

[rivaan]

Righto~ I will start editing those thigns... good thing I saved the word file... hehehe.
as for the family thing, well the idea was her family were military, so as compromise between her and familly she both became a doc and join military for everybody to win~ I think the fall out between her and her family will be somethign not connected to story like, maybe a boyfriend... or trying to ahve her marry or something stupid like that that usually causes the familly frictions in animes and tv shows.

and okey I will think of what will happen in that gap. ^_^

[Sep]

Righto~ I will start editing those thigns... good thing I saved the word file... hehehe.
as for the family thing, well the idea was her family were military, so as compromise between her and familly she both became a doc and join military for everybody to win~ I think the fall out between her and her family will be somethign not connected to story like, maybe a boyfriend... or trying to ahve her marry or something stupid like that that usually causes the familly frictions in animes and tv shows.

and okey I will think of what will happen in that gap. ^_^

@rivaan

Well I think the best way to do that then, which makes sense would be maybe she starts University to become a Doctor then gets pushed into signing up when she leaves a qualified Doctor?

[rivaan]

yep that was pretty much the idea lol go to get degree; get degree; become military; and I imagine the military has a post doctoral training so it all works out lol

[Sep]

yep that was pretty much the idea lol go to get degree; get degree; become military; and I imagine the military has a post doctoral training so it all works out lol

@rivaan

It does, military forces now a days have a lot of training programs. So that works, it just wasn't too obvious.

Once this is done @Forsythe will still need to check over your sheet.

[rivaan]

okey, no problem with that but about the rank, should I just lower it?

[mrambo90]

Is this a Multi National Force like Atlantis?

[Sep]

okey, no problem with that but about the rank, should I just lower it?

@rivaan

It depends, me and Forsythe need to discuss it when he's back. Blacks rank is from an old RP that died, and it's been a couple of years since that assignment so we're thinking of having the Character promoted. We don't want a Doctor outranking the Captain ;) Though if you want the Colonel in your name you could go a Lt.Colonel if you want to lower it the now.

Is this a Multi National Force like Atlantis?

@mrambo90

Multi-national, Multi-planetary ;) As long as if you're from another planet you're either from an ally or have a good reason :P. Though yeah, there will be poeple from all over the world.

[rivaan]

okey... lt.colonel it is*goes to edit*

[mrambo90]

okay thank you

[Sep]

okay thank you

@mrambo90

No problem, any other questions just give me a shout.

okey... lt.colonel it is*goes to edit*

@rivaan

Thankee, let me know when they're all done :)

[rivaan]

so here is a question: can i write she took part of a few off world missions in skirmishes with the lucian allience? Cause as much as I'm sure trietes work(yeah right I bet the lucians try to break it every time they think they can get away with it)

[Sep]

so here is a question: can i write she took part of a few off world missions in skirmishes with the lucian allience? Cause as much as I'm sure trietes work(yeah right I bet the lucians try to break it every time they think they can get away with it)

@rivaan

Like the Goa'uld/Asgard Treaty it doesn't stop all fighting. It just goes to the point where they go "You leave these worlds alone, and we'll leave those worlds alone." and then theres a lot of leeway with it. So yeah you can have had skirmishes with the Lucian Alliance, and the treaty is a new development (I forgot to put on that it was officiated in 2014). So it has only existed for two years anyway ;)

[rivaan]

skirmishes FTW~~~ lot's of bambambambam(that's supposed to be machinegun fire) Also why is there no P90s in the inventory of hte ship? It's like one gun I remember seeing most in stargate :3

[Sep]

skirmishes FTW~~~ lot's of bambambambam(that's supposed to be machinegun fire) Also why is there no P90s in the inventory of hte ship? It's like one gun I remember seeing most in stargate :3

@rivaan

Because with the ship designed for long deployment we need ammunition that can be universal between all our weapons and sadly that doesn't work with P90s. When the RP starts however you can always petition with the Captain to try and get some on board.

[rivaan]

you just made my day... or at least my next 5 min lol.

[rivaan]

My Hider

Name: Miyako Sora
Race: Human
Age: 31
Appearance: 1,73 centimeters tall, with straight black hair reaching just above the shoulder. She has dark brown, nearly back eyes. She has soft and nimble hands with which she carries out her work as surgeon. She has a black tattoo in the form of a broken chain across her lower back, one on her left shoulder in the form of stylized angel wing and another one on her right in the form of stylized demon wing.
Title: Doctor /Military rank: Lt. Colonel
Nationality: Japanese
Organization: Homeworld Command
Skills:
Medical degree
post-doctoral training in surgery
Military training (specialized in sharpshooting)
Eight dan in Kendo.

History: Miyako was born in a military family. As such from an young age, she knew she will end up in the family business so to say. Still combat wasn't a thing she was attracted to as much as medicine. So as compromise, she first finished her medical degree then signed in the military, where she got her post-doctoral training.

In kind of a rebellious phase, a few years after joining the military, she went ahead and got herself those tattoos after a huge falling out between her and her parents. Things escalated to the point where she was disowned, but she paid that no mind. Instead of getting hang over that incident, she concentrated on her career.

Slowly, but steadily she escalated through the ranks until she reached the rank of lt. colonel, which she took as great honor for herself. One day she was approached by some higher ups with a proposition.'Was she willing to join a some kind of project.' According to them this was going to be a one time proposition, if she was to refuse it now, she will never be approached or see the two of them again. Seeing how she already broke ties with her relatives a few years ago and the fact herself had no family, Miyako decided this was only the natural progress forward so she readily said yes. That was how she joined the SGC.

Within SGC, Miyako proved herself on a number of different off world missions. Most of which included skirmishes with the Lucian Allience or providing relieve to worlds that were met with disasters. In one of those missions she was forced to take command after their leader was gravely injured. Due the reasons they were hit without warning on a planet that wasn't supposed to have any hostile targets, Miyako and the rest of her squad were forced to retreat towards the gate and try to evacuate from the planet. It took time and a lot of bullets before they were able to secure the gate for long enough to open a wormhole and leave the planet. Miyako herself took a shot to the left leg right before they stepped through the gate. Now she has a very vague scar on that place, but she always looks at it proudly as it reminds her of leading the rest of her squad off that planet despite the insane odds against them.

Personality: Miyako is in general very calm and collected person. She is very hard to get agitated or angry, but once that fuse has been lit, explosion is bound to happen. She likes to spend time among people and have nice chats with them. Another thing she likes to do is spar whenever it's possible. Be it with weapons or just hand to hand, she enjoys every kind of fight as it proves excellent way to relieve stress. As practitioner of Kendo, her main strength is sword fighting, though the experience and knowledge she acquired with the sword proves useful in hand to hand combat too as her reflexes are fast and her vision sharp. Another weakness Miyako has is towards alcohol. She likes to drink sake, though the military regulations make it difficult to drink freely, so that's mostly reserved for when she is off duty.

this better :3?

[mrambo90]

Name:Masaru Tanaka
Race:Human
Age:25
Appearance:Tanaka stands at 182.88 Centimeter tall and has a lean muscular build with a jet black Crew Cut and focused Hazel eyes. He has broad shoulders and bares a fading horizontal scar under his right eye. He usually wears a slight grin across his face hiding his excitement for all of the new surroundings around him. He is Commonly in his nations fleckturn combat uniform and uses the equipment of the ship.
Rank:Second Lieutenant
Nationality:Japanese
Organization:Homeworld Command
Skills:
Military Trained
Direct Action
Air Assualt
Unconventional Warfare
Reconnaissance
First Responder qualified
History: Masaru was born and Raised Osaka before moving to Tokyo at a young age due to his parents work as English translators and a was quick to become fluent in English from his parent and proximity with American children and developed to speak the language without and Accent. Coming of Age he went against his parents request and joined the Japanese Ground Self Defense Forces and flourished. He was deployed to the 19th Infantry Regiment, in Kasuga and worked as a interpretor between US Marine and Jgsdf soliers. He spent alot of time in US Marine and Joint Operational Trainings and exercises and even was trained in ship defense aboard Navy Assault Carriers. He was accepted into the Japanese Special forces group at Twenty one and after training was deployed in the Iraq Occupations for a year and a half before returning to Japan. Masuru gained his commission at twenty four. Masuru was destined to be sent to the Atlantis expedition as a representative of Japan and to bolster security and search and rescue teams , He was diverted to the X-307 for the same role and to ensure japans continued political support of the United States.

[Sep]

Name:Masaru Tanaka
Race:Human
Age:25
Appearance:Tanaka stands at 182.88 Centimeter tall and has a lean muscular build with a jet black Crew Cut and focused Hazel eyes. He has broad shoulders and bares a fading horizontal scar under his right eye. He usually wears a slight grin across his face hiding his excitement for all of the new surroundings around him. He is Commonly in his nations fleckturn combat uniform and uses the equipment of the ship.
Rank:Second Lieutenant
Nationality:Japanese
Organization:Homeworld Command
Skills:
Military Trained
Direct Action
Air Assualt
Unconventional Warfare
Reconnaissance
First Responder qualified
History: Masaru was born and Raised Osaka before moving to Tokyo at a young age due to his parents work as English translators and a was quick to become fluent in English from his parent and proximity with American children and developed to speak the language without and Accent. Coming of Age he went against his parents request and joined the Japanese Ground Self Defense Forces and flourished. He was deployed to the 19th Infantry Regiment, in Kasuga and worked as a interpretor between US Marine and Jgsdf soliers. He spent alot of time in US Marine and Joint Operational Trainings and exercises and even was trained in ship defense aboard Navy Assault Carriers. He was accepted into the Japanese Special forces group at Twenty one and after training was deployed in the Iraq Occupations for a year and a half before returning to Japan. Masuru gained his commission at twenty four. Masuru was destined to be sent to the Atlantis expedition as a representative of Japan and to bolster security and search and rescue teams , He was diverted to the X-307 for the same role and to ensure japans continued political support of the United States.

@mrambo90

Is this finished? Your history seems quite... jumbled up and it's like "Bam, bam, bam". Standard casual rules do apply so I would like to see a couple of reasonable lengthed paragraphs (Don't worry I don't expect an essay ;)). If English isn't your first language I can forgive some of the language mistakes but as I said, there seems little actual progression it just seems to be "I was here, here, here, here and here." Your reason for being on the ship is good, not denying that but I'd like a lttle more on his time in Atlantis to why he was the one chosen to go on the 307.

In terms of the skills. This one I'm not so tough on because the military do try and teach people a lot during a short amount of time, but I'd like to see a little more in terms of a link between your History and your Skills, looking good so far though :)

My Hider

Name: Miyako Sora
Race: Human
Age: 31
Appearance: 1,73 centimeters tall, with straight black hair reaching just above the shoulder. She has dark brown, nearly back eyes. She has soft and nimble hands with which she carries out her work as surgeon. She has a black tattoo in the form of a broken chain across her lower back, one on her left shoulder in the form of stylized angel wing and another one on her right in the form of stylized demon wing.
Title: Doctor /Military rank: Lt. Colonel
Nationality: Japanese
Organization: Homeworld Command
Skills:
Medical degree
post-doctoral training in surgery
Military training (specialized in sharpshooting)
Eight dan in Kendo.

History: Miyako was born in a military family. As such from an young age, she knew she will end up in the family business so to say. Still combat wasn't a thing she was attracted to as much as medicine. So as compromise, she first finished her medical degree then signed in the military, where she got her post-doctoral training.

In kind of a rebellious phase, a few years after joining the military, she went ahead and got herself those tattoos after a huge falling out between her and her parents. Things escalated to the point where she was disowned, but she paid that no mind. Instead of getting hang over that incident, she concentrated on her career.

Slowly, but steadily she escalated through the ranks until she reached the rank of lt. colonel, which she took as great honor for herself. One day she was approached by some higher ups with a proposition.'Was she willing to join a some kind of project.' According to them this was going to be a one time proposition, if she was to refuse it now, she will never be approached or see the two of them again. Seeing how she already broke ties with her relatives a few years ago and the fact herself had no family, Miyako decided this was only the natural progress forward so she readily said yes. That was how she joined the SGC.

Within SGC, Miyako proved herself on a number of different off world missions. Most of which included skirmishes with the Lucian Allience or providing relieve to worlds that were met with disasters. In one of those missions she was forced to take command after their leader was gravely injured. Due the reasons they were hit without warning on a planet that wasn't supposed to have any hostile targets, Miyako and the rest of her squad were forced to retreat towards the gate and try to evacuate from the planet. It took time and a lot of bullets before they were able to secure the gate for long enough to open a wormhole and leave the planet. Miyako herself took a shot to the left leg right before they stepped through the gate. Now she has a very vague scar on that place, but she always looks at it proudly as it reminds her of leading the rest of her squad off that planet despite the insane odds against them.

Personality: Miyako is in general very calm and collected person. She is very hard to get agitated or angry, but once that fuse has been lit, explosion is bound to happen. She likes to spend time among people and have nice chats with them. Another thing she likes to do is spar whenever it's possible. Be it with weapons or just hand to hand, she enjoys every kind of fight as it proves excellent way to relieve stress. As practitioner of Kendo, her main strength is sword fighting, though the experience and knowledge she acquired with the sword proves useful in hand to hand combat too as her reflexes are fast and her vision sharp. Another weakness Miyako has is towards alcohol. She likes to drink sake, though the military regulations make it difficult to drink freely, so that's mostly reserved for when she is off duty.

this better :3?

@rivaan

I don't have anything else, criticism wise until @Forsythe returns, but I will say well done. This is presented in a nicer way than the original and fills in what I needed. As I said, we'll have to see what Forsythe thinks but you're looking good.

Reporting in o7

@Forsythe

I have just figured out what you meant... it's a little guy saluting.

[rivaan]