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Naruto: Path to Enlightment”

“This is a thumbs up. It's denoting a gesture of friendship. Do you accept?” - Saburo Uchiha
“God damn, you’d think my eyes could have seen that coming.” - Chihiro Hyuga






Overview”

“Voila! My magical tent is here!” - Aoi Don Maquia
“Wow, this is a neat trick Aoi, where'd you learn it? And where did you get the tent too, for that matter?” - Akio Tendou




To give you a short overview, it's important to represent where we are currently in the Narutoverse. After all the Narutoverse is filled with stories of old, so it'd be a good idea to represent that by giving a timeline to start with. Our RP takes place 200 years after the birth of Sarada Uchiha and Boruto Uzumaki. For the setting that means we'll be living in a somewhat more modern world (comparable to ours) but this being Naruto and thus, being highly inconsistent with tech canonically (there's been earpieces and mecha's but then we also have swords, and no guns), we have taken several liberties to maintain the feeling of Naruto that we all love so dearly.

As such you have to imagine a mildly modern setting, where we now have things mixed like a low amount of trucks, cars and motorbikes, but also still have prominent carriages with horses, mules or what have you. This also means that new tech has made new social changes, and as such the shinobi are featured less prominently in shinobi villages, that are now turning into something more akin to.. shinobi cities? Either way, skyscrapers and economical centers now litter the horizon inside the village, although it's obviously not as bad as it seems - there's still some quiet places you can hang out, or live. The changing social scene has also led to a decrease in the number of shinobi, atleast in the smaller villages. The main forces are still in the five big villages and even there they have a lower wage than before - it's not so much possible anymore to get by on a genin-wage.

This RP will also feature a more slice-of-life approach, although that is debateable. We will ofcourse still do plenty of missions, but we like character interaction as much as the fights in Naruto, and as such we place a prominent focus on the character interactions. Don't worry, you can still beat up bad guys. Another thing that is important for us is balance and we make sure to review each sheet adequately. If you want a powerful missing nin, it's probably best to look elsewhere. But Partisan, you might say, you have rules about prodigies and how they're better than the rest! That's not balanced! Ah, yes. You see, besides the balance, we also like conflict not only with outside forces (missing nin, typical bad guys or organisations) but we also like internal conflict where multiple characters don't like eachother. The prodigies are a tool to us to achieve this - most of them are, you'll find, not social at all and some even have some form of a god complex, or at the very least are a bit more arrogant. They're more or less tools to assure that we have some conflict between characters, atleast at the start.



New Victims Recruits: Read!

“Well done, seems like you actually want to live!” - Takeshi Ruzuzaki
“Ooooooh, Tsukiya-chan! Let's take it and share it! You take one of her beautiful eyes, and I take one!” - Yopparai Ramu Koku




Welcome to Naruto: Path to Enlightment, thank you for taking the time to read through this massive wall of text, or atleast attempting to before getting scared off. If you are going to continue reading, good! Otherwise if you leave we'll hate you forever. Choose wisely.

Regardless of what you do it's important to know that this is a reboot of an older RP. The last RP went well and we would've continued if our head GM was still around. This thread is a workaround of sorts to make sure we can (and will) update the thread. Besides that, having a clean sheet to work with can be good sometimes.

However this also means something for you; there'll be established characters that have a history together and it can be hard to fit into that. There'll also be a history of sorts with events that are important. Fear not; I encourage you to read it (atleast some) but it's not required because of the nature of this RP. It's possible for your character to be a fresh graduate and as such to not have any knowledge of what has been going on (maybe some, but minimal). So it's very much possible to join the RP even if you weren't here from the start.

That said, a lot of the RPers in this RP have no problems with answering questions as long as they're asked in a respectful manner. Actually, I bet if you cuss and swear at us we'd probably answer you anyway. So if you have questions just ask (or yell) and we'll get to it. Probably. No promises. I can be lazy.



General Rules”

“I am surprised that you picked a fight with Yamato-senpai after that. Yamato-senpai is quite capable, and I think he would beat both of us with ease.” - Saburo Uchiha
“That Yamato bastard won't beat me. I don't plan on losing to him, Kusaru, or anyone for that matter. Add that to your encyclopedia of facts.” - Daiki Naito




  • No godmodding.
  • No perfect characters (Mary Sue and Gary Stu).
  • GM team has final say. Always.
  • One-lining is not acceptable. Two lining isn't either.
  • Consistency is key. We understand posting a little less sometimes. There's limits, though.
  • Beware the gore; yes, it's allowed but don't overdo it.
  • As for sexual content, take it to PM's and show us a fade to black; make it implied. What you do privately isn't our concern. It's RPG's concern, however. (*cough* If you receive sexy pictures from someone I demand to see them. *cough*)
  • RPG rules apply. Always.
  • Respect everyone. Please do not argue OOCly. Do what you need to if it is ICly.
  • Changes may be made with or without notice. Probably with, because we are online 24/7.
  • Kekkei Genkai are to be made unique. If they are blatant copy paste or cliché we reserve the right to decline them.
  • Same applies to hiden.
  • No tailed beasts for now. Why? Because you need to earn it ICly with our acceptance, not be gifted it. Don't ask, unless you believe it's detrimental to your character that's been around a while.
  • Your character is a chunin, not Madara. No EMS, Rinnegan, whatever the hell you can think of. Keep it simple, but interesting.
  • Prodigies have the benefits of being 2-4x stronger than regular chuunin and having an additional A rank jutsu. The prodigies are meant to sow initial division between players, to enforce a degree of conflict between the players aside from the obvious plot driven conflicts. Don't ask for one, we will approach you.
  • Be diverse and dynamic with creating your characters; don't be set in stone for what you want and be prepared to change your ideas as we go. This means; don't be an asshole if you don't get what you want. Either scrap the idea or change it to our liking.
  • Be original, don't be a rip-off of the original cast and their kids. I know it's hard but I believe in you guys. You can be related to but that's different than I'm Madara's kid who somehow survived all those years.
  • The GM team is full of idiots. We make mistakes. Deal with it, we're here for our own pleasure as much as yours.
  • That said, we also do not like to place us in charge of your pleasure entirely. We're not getting paid for this, we don't get much more gratification other than we enjoy doing it so far. Keep that in mind when you complain to us, and think to yourself if you've ever GMed. It's a hard job. Also realize that you yourself are allowed to plot for your own character and that we are not opposed to helping with that.
  • We're also not opposed against PVP conflict. If you want to take someone's sharingan or whatever, you can do that. Just.. make sure not to be an ass about it regardless of which side you're on on that plot. Work stuff out.




Character rules”

“Friendship family. Noted.” - N.C.4
“Yuna, get it together, you're not a cat anymore ...” - Yuna Hojo




Because Naruto is a diverse world with diverse techniques, with some more balanced than others, we have chosen to make several rulesets for characters for each rank. This is to avoid situations with, for example, a chunin who has the rinnegan, fighting some chunin who barely has a single B rank technique. It's also to avoid broken jutsu, such as Flying Thunder God, being used to cheese fights. It might seem like a fun thing to give your characters, especially if they have a historical reason for having that jutsu. And I agree, it's a fun niché thing that makes it more interesting. But looking at pro's and con's for these kind of jutsu, we have to decide that ultimately it's not worth it, because that means your jutsu will give you pleasure, but it will detract that of those that go up against your character, or those that wanted something similar but got denied. It's put in place to avoid bad situations where two people cannot reach an ultimatum about fights. Simple as that. We do not accept arguments about these things, they're set in stone.

Jutsu Limits”


Note: N/A in front of a rank means 'no limit' within reason. You can use as many of these as you like although that doesn't mean you have to use every one of them. They also need to make sense. A character with an aptitude for high level lightning jutsu will probably have more of these N/A lightning jutsu than fire jutsu. Simple as that.

Genin”

  • 0 A-rank.
  • 1 B-rank.
  • 2 C-rank.
  • 2 D-rank.
  • N/A E-rank.


Note: due to the 'side character' nature of the genins (small roles in plots) exceptions can be made. Trade offs are part of those exceptions, so approach us with ideas.


Chunin”

  • 1 A-rank.
  • 3 B-rank.
  • 4 C-rank.
  • N/A D-rank.
  • N/A E-rank.


Jounin”

  • 1 S-rank.
  • 3 A-rank.
  • 4 B-rank.
  • N/A C-rank.
  • N/A D-rank.
  • N/A E-rank.


Kage”

  • N/A S-rank.
  • N/A B-rank.
  • N/A C-rank.
  • N/A D-rank.
  • N/A E-rank.


Note: Kage-level characters will not be judged on their jutsu lists or anything of the sort, they will be judged on identity: are they interesting, are they worthy of the kage-level stamp and do they serve a good, useful purpose? That's because once you reach jonin status, it becomes really quite easy to pass into kage-level areas, and beyond kage there are no ranks. That means the power levels within kage-level characters fluctuate heavily.


Banned Jutsu”


General bans refer to simply not being allowed to have this jutsu on any character, in or out of battle.
Combat bans refer to bans for combat only, meaning they are allowed outside of combat.
Limit jutsu refer to jutsu that are allowed, in and out of combat, but have limited usage.
Jutsu list will be updated as we go and encounter issues. If we encounter no issues, the list will remain like this. If we encounter more we will add jutsu and notify you.





Interesting Links”

“Sanguine. I will kill you. I don’t care what I have to do, but I will do it.” - Jaakuna Sawada
“Am I scared? ..damn right, I'm shit scared!” - Takeshi Ruzuzaki
“Well, good thing I came prepared for an overnight stay, by bringing absolutely nothing...” - Shin Maru




Location list - this is a list of (possible) locations in the RP. There are more obviously, but these are the ones we created to give players some freedom as to where to go with predefined locations. Want to go on a date with another character? Why not visit the Minamoru Restaurant, the Mighty Naruto? Or maybe you want something classier, in which case the Don Maquia Opera and Theatre is probably the right way to go.
Active character list - the list of currently active player characters (NPC's may be listed if they are notable) and below, you'll find the latest team layouts. These are supposed to be up to date whenever we start a new arc, but it might happen it's not. In that case please notify us.

Arc 1: Road to Party - in arc 1 of the RP the crew sets out to have a party at Yamato's lakehouse, but things turn bad when three other fresh chunin graduates were murdered in the bushes.
Arc 1: The Meeting - in this chapter the crew meets before heading out to face a danger. It shows that these chunin are still desperate for acknowledgement from higher up as they chase after the killers themselves.
Arc 1: Ending - in this chapter the arc is ended. This is the end post, marking the start of the next arc.

Arc 2: Start - in this chapter, arc 2 was started with the mission to retrieve several scrolls for the land of Iron, which would open up diplomatic capabilities with the secluded samurai.
Arc 2: Meeting Kusaru, ending - in this chapter, the crew meets Kusaru and her henchman and companion, Gian. The two don't seem hostile but have a kill order on their head, so Yamato and Daiki attack. The rest of the crew either joins or stops them, leading to a lack of bloodshed. Kusaru seems satisfied and leaves, after a show of good will.

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Naruto World, Geography and Places

Locations in Konohagakure




An Overview




As the years changed so did Konohagakure: with the Shinobi becoming less and less important with the arrival of new technologies, and the need for housing ever growing it was evident that the city had to expand in ways not thought of before. With new technologies like cranes and such skyscrapers made a new appearance. These small appartments were available for small sums to accomodate the lowered wages for those hit by the technological outbreak. It wasn't all positive, but nowadays the negative side effects of technology are largely overcome.

The city is still bustling with greenlife, as is Konoha's tradition. They are after all still a village hidden in the leaves. As such there are plenty of parks and recreational areas, lakes with beach shacks to enjoy a calm day in. There are also plenty of new shopping streets, loaded with different styles of shops - new shopping centres or even shopping skyscrapers have appeared, with every shop you can imagine located conveniently in 1 spot. Not to say that there is no traditionalistic small housing areas, because those are still plentiful.


Smalltown




Smalltown is the traditional part of town; an area reserved mostly for middle class incomes with an occasional lower class or higher class citizen living there as well. Defining features are a traditional and calm feel, as the area is largely populated by small families with two working parents, schoolgoing children and some older couples. Besides houses the area is also rich in small shops attached to some houses - for instance, ramen shops, gift shops or small supermarkets.



Although Smalltown is intended for usage mainly by families, the areas closer to the center of the village frequently see lots of students and people going out, and as such there's not as many supermarkets or regular shops, and more ramen shops and bar's present in the area. As such it's a good hangout for many of the local youth, whether they come from smalltown itself or from an area in the high density housing areas. Some of the more notable and useable features of this area include...






Financial District


With the growing populations there was a call for an economical district, an area rich with skyscrapers, offices and large shopping malls to contrast the small traditional shops in Smalltown. And as a result Moneylanes appeared, funded and constructed by the Minamoru Building Corp. which was founded and led by Reijo Minamoru, Yamato Minamoru's father, who is a well known politician and economist, and also has questionable connections to the local mafia.

The small and bustling streets offer many shops, many of which are owned by the Minamoru family. Some of the stores are catered to Shinobi, such as Minamoru's Shinobi Superstore - Buy your senbon launcher today, and get a 50% discount! Ahem. Yes, there's plenty of commercials and hanging boards everywhere - a hazard for shinobi who are looking to get around the financial district quickly by jumping above the streets. Besides the obvious financially aimed buildings located in skyscrapers and covered shopping malls, there's some noteworthy buildings here such as the Don Maquia Opera and Theater, located in the Southeast of the district.

    Noteworthy locations inside the Financial district.





Downtown


When Downtown gets mentioned in an official report, it's usually a filing of murder, because downtown is where all the ugly stuff happens - the lower class lives here, mostly people who lost their jobs when technology took over. Seeing as Konohagakure enjoys a status of being the most central village, this area is rich in immigrants from Sunagakure and Kumogakure. Some of these immigrants are shinobi who have gone great lengths to hide that fact from the officials, lest they be slated into service of the Konohagakure armed forces. As such there are sometimes particularily violent crimes here as ex-shinobi commit murders, thefts and arson. Most of the jonins spend a lot of time here keeping the peace, an effort that has proven relatively fruitless. It's become so bad, the local Yakuza has also decided enough is enough and started cracking down violently on these immigrants causing trouble - this has done nothing but increase violence, fear and increased the workload for the jonins heavily. The area is quite bad, but there are sparkles of hope - some of the children in this area that went to the Shinobi base school turned out to be excellent mediators in these areas as they know how the people here live - as a result there's been a 50% decrease in violence when a local shinobi interferes, rather than a shinobi from another area.


“Some kids from Odarame street, Downtown, hanging around.”





Village Outskirts


Although Konoha is stilled walled in, their borders expand far beyond those walls. As such there are numerous (often wealthy) families living in their own little estates or houses outside of the village to maintain a maximum of peace, quiet and ofcourse, to demand respect since there are little people who can afford to live here. As such it's mostly lonesome shinobi who've been granted their own space, and wealthy families that reside here.

The outskirts consist of a large forested area if we go by the definition of Konoha's borders, so for simplicty we'll only consider the area within 5km around the village, which is where most people live anyway. Aside from forests there are also plenty of lakes, some small and some large - beach houses are commonplace here nowadays. Some of the noteable areas in the area include...






The Kage






Famed for: Founder of Konoha, Mokuton, Sage mode.



Famed for: Co-founder of Konoha, establishment of institutions, creation of various techniques (Shadow clone, Hirashin, Edo Tensei...)



Famed for: Mastering all the techniques in Konoha and reaching the highest approval rating of them all.



Famed for: Deadling with Kurama's rampage, mastering Hiraishin (Yellow Flash), creation of the Rasengan.



Famed for: Dealing with the 4th Shinobi war, greatest medical nin of her time, strongest woman of her time.



Famed for: His trademark sharingan, sensei of the saviors of this world, prodigy in ninjutsu.



Famed for: Defeating Pain of the Rinnegan, saving the world, general mastery of all Tailed Beast powers, achieving the level of the Rikkudo Sennin, reforming Konoha's position in the world and bringing upon an era of peace.



Famed for: Being the first Uchiha as a leader, restoring the Uchiha clan, reforming the general organization of the police force.



Danzo Shimura's great grand daughter and victim of general public shame once many Konoha governmental documents were declassified. The Shimura fell from their grace during the orange Hokage's and Sarada's reign, pushing them into tight social dilemmas and limiting their access to certain jobs. Though the clan wasn't responsible for Danzo's many illegal activites, their indeniable link to him caused general distrust from the populations and a need to receive an apology from the entirety of the clan.

Momo Shimura was a firm believer in jutice and sought to make things right. Her clan apologizing was of course, an outrageous option, but Konoha's anger wasn't unjustified. Having as much talent as the progenitor of this mess, she quickly ascended ranks and befriended Sarada Uchiha as she reached the end of her term. Despite the suffering brought to the Uchiha by the Shimura, Momo was deeply trusted by Sarada and was, quite ironically, given charge of Root. As salvation for her clan and to purge the sin of Konoha's past, she abolished the entire organization and instored a new insitution known as the 11th Corp. It would be founded on similar operations, but adhering to general human rights and of course, would only work via the approval of the population.

This action not only earned Konoha's forgiveness toward the past but also allowed Momo to be demanded as the Hokage when Sarada reached the limit of her position. Her reign as Hokage was a rather peaceful one with multiple reforms regarding the law being made, especially with general expension going on.

Famed Ability: Oxygen Siphon




Gonba was the choice after Momo, being the great grandson of the famous Ichiraku ramenshop owner. It didn't seem like an obvious choice but he had transformed into a great cooking nin, who was able to use the instruments of his cookery in displays of great strength, and use his raw ingredients to attack.

However the reason for his choosing wasn't his strength, although it was definetely a factor, it was his ongoing support for the industrialization for Konohagakure, which played a large part in the current situation of Konoha's politics. At this time it wasn't expected that the industrialization would impact the shinobi trade as heavily as it did, providing Gonba with a large amount of support to become Hokage. Progresses made under his rulership included the creation of a high tech police facility, which over the years made regular shinobi investigators almost obsolete to the point where shinobi investigators were only called on when a crime was commited by a shinobi.

Furthermore the building of a large scale kunai factory was done, providing even regular citizens with a set of these for a cheap price, but ultimately, also meant that regular citizens had a lesser need for protection by Konohagakure shinobi, and ultimately also led to the devaluation of the kunais in circulation at that point in time.

Famed Ability: The Ultimate Recipe




A Hokage whom, like the old times, proved his worth through power alone. Recognized as the strongest Shinobi Konohagakure had produced since Hiruzen Sarutobi and Naruto Uzumaki. However Tenzu was mostly known for being the first shinobi to have both parents come from the Water Country, while he was born in Konoha as they immigrated. He lived off poor most of his life as his parents had very low qualifications, he didn't gave much of a choice and enrolled as a pofessional shinobi.

He discovered his telents there and became known as the most talented Chuunin of the decade when he was 15. A year later he was promoted to Jonin and was given highly sensitive operations. He eventually hit politics as his notoriety got the attention of many big shots, and later on his portfolio was massive enough to enclude people from all parts of the country. As he reached the Hokage's personal circle, he already had many mob bosses supporting him, which left Gonba lacking in trust toward the powerful shinobi.

As Gonba passed away, Konoha was given a choice, and Tenzu was not one of the recommended nin to be elected. However, the massive lobby Tenzu had achieved and his general prowess that assured many military oriented inviduals got him the votes to reach the top. He is still considered the Fourth God of Shinobi to this day despite the many scandals regarding him.

Famed Ability: Weather manipulation




Mariko's primary skills were not in combat or martial prowess but rather in diplomacy and economics. There was a large call for this after Tenzu nearly instigated a world war and a break down of the shinobi alliance with his violent shows of power, which were almost on par with the fourth Raikage's bouts of showing off.

Mariko Hyuuga had a hard time dealing with the increased level of Yakuza activity in Konohagakure despite attempts to reform, including crack downs, bargaining and even surrendering power to them at points in time. Despite all attempts to get rid of the illegal Yakuza activity she remained largely unsuccesful and was mocked constanly for failing to deal with the issues at hand, despite her best efforts.

Current critics say there was little she could've done but she is still widely regarded as the 'worst Hokage to ever exist' and as a result of that she resigned at an early age and immigrated to Kumogakure, along with a small portion of the side branch to protect her byakugan.

Famed ability: Hyuuga prodigy




The Hokage elected almost immediately after Mariko's resignation, he was more or less the "default" Hokage meant to maintain someone at the peak of executive power and keep some control over the village's actions. Although praised for representing the diversity of Konoha's modern population by being the first Hokage with pure Kumo heritage (though he was born in Konoha), his performances could be considered stagnant to say the least. His predecessor gained the title of worst Hokage the village had ever known, but he did not take as many initiatives as she did, making it less damaging for public opinion and the city's finances.

Some good things came from his reign, however, as he managed to strengthen international relations even more and ease exchanges in terms of people (shinobi exchange programs) and trade opportunities. Economically the leaf had known a slightly growth, but socially the plague of Downtown and the never ending complaints of the people often fell at deaf's ears. It didn't help that he was part of these Hokage who were not renown for being one of the stronger individuals of the shinobi line but simply someone with a lot of popular backup. His credibility hit an all time low the year of his assassination.

Ayame and Fujitora Choko, two individuals close to him, have seized the chance in changing the ways work in the village and promptly assassinated Zeno 12.5 years into his mandate. He will go down as the third Hokage who died in battle as he was on the throne, second to be assassinated in front of his people. His legacy is still to be determined as only history will judge his actions in the long run.


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Active Character List

“Aoi-sensei, why didn’t Ken swoon over me? Are my tits not wonderful?” - Rin Reikan
“Well, it's either because he was raised right by his mom to not be a horny lil' shit, or focusing on the mission.” - Akio Tendou




Current Ruling Kage”

  • Ayame Choko


Current 11th Corps Leader”

  • Fujitora Choko


Current Jonin Commander”

  • Tsukiko Umene


Genin”

  • Tatsuya Kajiya-Terumi


Chunin”

  • Akio Tendou
  • Chen Chideta
  • Daisuke Yama
  • Gin Kakiyama
  • Momoi Hiromoto Yasei
  • N.C.4, Junshiro
  • Saburo Uchiha
  • Shin Maru
  • Shouken Washi


Jounin”

  • Aoi Don Maquia
  • Tsukiko Umene
  • Yamato Minamoru


Rogue Nin”

  • Kokatsu Tendou
  • Takeshi Ruzuzaki
  • Yopparai Ramu Coku




Current Teams

“Quit joking Chi-chan, you know I pride myself on my Tits-of-Steel!” - Momoi Hiromoto Yasei
“I think tea would be a good thing right now. Or maybe a shot of sake..” - Gin Kakiyama




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the Keihatsu

“the Enlightened.”







The Keihatsu, or the Enlightened, is a recently surfaced group of highly skilled individuals. The current list of members barely reaches 25 members, although we cannot be sure about exact numbers since the group is extremely hard to pin down. Because of that, their current hierarchy is unknown, further investigation being obstructed due to the way the group is set up. They consist of 5 main forces, namely the legs, which are the small groups, those who fight for them and collect intelligence in exchange for money or power. Besides that, you have 2 arms consisting of two organisations, both of which are extremely powerful. We advise you to handle individuals from this group with care, although they haven't shown signs of hostility as of yet. The arms are the workers of the group, who are used for delicate tasks and covert operations. The people in these organisations seem to be mostly on par with chunin or jonins, however the leaders of these groups are extremely powerful. The body, or torso, consists of the groups main force. They are the people who guard the organisations carefully built operational bases, and have similar levels of expertise as the arms, with similar power levels. Since these people rarely leave the vicinity of the base, upon spotting a member of this particular group, great care is to be exercised. If they are out and about, it means there's a big operation happening.

Operations

“Our primary function is to eliminate the world of scum.”


Keihatsu operate mostly from the shadows, but the few ties we have seen from them related to any operations they have commited in and outside the villages revolved mostly around dealing with both Yakuza and unwanted, criminal individuals. As such we have found little reason to stop them as long as they do not interfere with village related missions, or as long as they remain a force we can handle. Current intel suggests that, at this time and moment, they are still a force we can handle.

However, when they strike, they strike hard and fast, usually leaving no trace of entry or leaving. The fights generally happen swift although they are different each and every time - some resemble ANBU styled assasinations, others resemble a brute attacking a target with powerful force, and others simply.. dissapear. The only reason that we knew they were behind this was the odd eye witness that managed to survive or spot what was happening, and once a jonin managed to hear about the organisation during an assasination. Not much info was obtainable, but it was enough to give us a name for the organisation.

Alliances, organisations and lieutenants

“Once the scum is gone, we will restart the cycle.”


As of yet we have no useable intelligence on their alliances, inferior organisations and lieutenants. We simply know that some of the Yakuza have surrendered to them out of fear for their deaths, since they are targeted, however these organisations were noted to dissapear shortly after. We do not know where they have gone, but we assume they assimilated into the 'leg' portion of the organisation.

It's to be noted that several rogue nin were presumed dead, but eye witnesses later clarified that they were indeed still alive, and actually a part of Keihatsu. This brings danger to our villages as they may have intelligence on village weakpoints, or intelligence about our military forces. Exercise extreme constraint when dealing with these rogue nin who are found with Keihatsu - they may or may not be protected by the Keihatsu, and rogue nin hunters are to be put temporarily on hold if their target is found to be Keihatsu.

The organisations below the Keihatsu, working for them in the 'leg' portion of the organisation are mostly hired mercenary shinobi, ronin or even an odd Yakuza group. They seem to do the ground work, allowing the Keihatsu to move forward towards their goals, and they're the only group of the Keihatsu that we're able to capture and interrogate. However, it seems most of them don't actually know why they are fulfilling certain tasks and they claim to be motivated by money or power.

All other portions of the Keihatsu are still under investigation, however we've not been able to find out any new info on names, or powers.

Goals

“After we restart the cycle, life will be better for shinobi.”


We haven't yet obtained intelligence on the goals of the Keihatsu although their operations seem to point out that their goals exist of weeding out criminality or violation of societal norm breakers. As such we have given them room to maneuver, hoping to possibly find out their goals from heavy investigations on their targets and methods.




Kusaru Tsurenai, supposed leader of the Keihatsu. Handle with care.



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Hokage


Zeno

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Jounin


Aoi Ayame Daiki Fujitora Tsukiko Yamato



Katsu

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Chunin


Akio Chihiro Giichi Gin Momoi N.C.4



Nobunaga Reihana Saburo Shin Shouken Yuna



Chōkashi Chen

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Genin


Tatsuya

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Rogue-nin


Kokatsu Takeshi Tsukiya Yopparai

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Keihatsu

Kusaru Gian
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I am very interested in this RP and should have a post up later today.
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Good to know, looking forward to it.
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Cool setup. I likes.
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Shall place Nobunaga soon. I'm here though. :D
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Hidden 9 yrs ago 9 yrs ago Post by Flood
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May I join?

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@floodtalon Hey, give me some time to look at the character sheet as I am currently working on a rather large post. @Kal-El @Akashi Mayhiro and @Savato may obviously also look and grade the sheet.

Also I'd like to say thank you for actually making a CS before asking if you can join, that way I can actually determine if you're a good fit for the RP. I like your style.
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@floodtalon Of course!

Anyway, I couldn't help but notice a couple of things about him. The fact that he's a sociopath is alright, however don't feel bad if he's seen as a liability by authority, warranted or not. It's the path you chose after all.

Alright, concerning history: The first part is Kakashi. Completely. Now this alone isn't a problem, until we add in historical context. This is an era of peace and Naruto turned the world into a fantasy-like BS utopia where friendship prevails. Of course we're not that ridiculous, but mentality did change and camaraderie is seen as just as important as the mission (unless it's secret operations like N.C.4's, but those aren't really disgraceful considering they're not made public usually). So this portion is a bit iffy. I'd also like to point out that sure he can be quite unique and all that jazz (aren't we all?), but is he THAT invaluable? Shinobi are easily interchangeable, even if they have a Kekkei Genkai. If he's already a possible liability, I don't think superiors would see him as that valuable. The issue is mainly his importance. If you want we can discuss this more privately.

Now moves. Generally solid move set, nothing complicated. I would like to make one thing clear: He's chuunin for a reason, mastering a 3rd element wouldn't be all that simple for him. I say, you choose one to be the 'third' element, one he'll have a harder time mastering than the second (which is just slightly weaker than wind). This leads to weaker jutsu and slower progression. Is that clear enough?

This review seems long but these are minor details. Find a solution to history to make a little more believable and apply jutsu restriction and you're game!
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@Savato

I totally understand all your points.

Your first point I would like to address. Would it be a possibility for the Chideta clan to be famous? That way they kept Chen around because he was important as a figurehead of sorts. I was kinda iffy too on how I could make him important. If you have any suggestions I am totally open to them. Also, yes I did draw inspiration from Kakashi when creating Chen.

Your second point is much easier to address. The only jutsu he's "mastered" is wind. The other two it's just that he as those for just in case situations.
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You'd need a pretty believable reason for them to be famous, especially since they're not canon. Check the character tab, I have a Minamoru clan sheet there that you can use to describe the clan, that way you can say how they are famous.

Either that or you can just describe it in the history, but that'd be pretty hard to do in a summarizing manner.
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@floodtalon If you want to make a custom, influential clan: There's a Sheet under 'Minamoru clan' in Partisan's character tab, you simply copy it and make the Clan sheet. However we have a lot of famous clans so do I recommend it? Not really, but that's just me. So yes, it is an alternative. Or simply have his family involved in politics of some sort. There are a lot of not very farfetched ways to explain this.

Well, for jutsu, it still applies. The usual element amount used by Chuunin is 2. So either fire or water will progress slower than the other secondary. It's the limits we give to elements.

Edit: Screw you Vuur, I hate being ninja'd. Especially in a ninja RP o;
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Thank you for the opportunity, but I'm pulling out of this one. Have fun everyone! ^^

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@Savato *forms handseals* Fuck Savato no Jutsu!

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@ShardHello and welcome! First off, I'd like to say that the general coding of the sheet makes it a lot easier for us GM's to read it. Categories being in bold and separated with underline makes it feel more organized.

I'll start with the moves:

-The Kekkei Genkai is a form of enhanced chakra flow I assume? If so, it can affect ANY inanimate object or specific objects to your character? I didn't quite get that.

-Sharpen: How sharp does it get? Flying Swallow from Asuma and Samurai Sword Technique essentially do this (and at a higher rank).

-Force: Once again, a little detail on scaling would be great. Give examples if you want, but make it possible for us to imagine.

-Vibration: I get the effects here but you'll have to, once again, detail how it works, how long the effects last and how much do the effects vary depending on size?

-Shear: So it's like Sharpen... But sharper? This is strange, and kind of makes Sharpen useless if you can just use this.

-Flash: Nothing wrong with it, I just find that one pretty good. Nice

-Ethereal: We've hit Tobi zone. Okay, before I outright deny this, I want you to detail it A LOT more (as you respond to this post, put the description in) because this is easily a gamebreaking move. However we all know details can make things a lot better. Don't get your hopes up, I'm still inclined to downright ban it.

There isn't much else to say, the rest is pretty solid. It'd be interesting if this small clan came from a small country due to the fact that they obviously have Chinese origin names and that's almost nonexistent in the Naruto world. But that's just an idea. Anyway that's my review.
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