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At the risk of sounding impatient, any idea when you two will get a chance to review my CS? I posted it 3 days ago, edited 1 day ago.
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Beautiful.

But damnit you saved @DrewVonAwesome.


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@Hillan@Lord Wraith

At the risk of sounding impatient, any idea when you two will get a chance to review my CS? I posted it 3 days ago, edited 1 day ago.


Once Wraith gets off work, we'll get on it, alternatively tomorrow. I promise we haven't forgotten about you.
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@DrewVonAwesome damn those meddling kids! I'll get you next time! For I am secretly Old Man Jenkins!
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I have zero idea what to post since Danny is kind of keeping to himself. I'm tempted to have him scold an NPC for doing something not so green-like.
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I have zero idea what to post since Danny is kind of keeping to himself. I'm tempted to have him scold an NPC for doing something not so green-like.


Dumping toxic waste into the ocean? Wouldn't be very Green of him.
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Dumping toxic waste into the ocean? Wouldn't be very Green of him.


Fun fact: Everyone in the Xavier Mansion also moonlight as a villain in Captain Planet.
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At the risk of sounding impatient, any idea when you two will get a chance to review my CS? I posted it 3 days ago, edited 1 day ago.


All right, the sheet is decent, but with some modifications necessary. She's too powerful - too well rounded, sharing almost all the same abilities as Sabertooth, someone who's not really known for ever needing a team to accomplish his goal. As such, you should tone down her healing factor a smudge, Wolverine could heal from taking a nuclear warhead to the face.
Her claws should be limited to flesh, wood and other things of such strength. Stone and metals would require very sharp steel to cut through - or greater strength than she posses.
Her agility should be toned down a bit, Matrix Dodging bullets is redundant when she can heal gunshots in a timely manner. Being agile is fine, but being in the same ballpark as Spider-Man is not. Relying on her predator instincts instead of just side-stepping someone's hail of lead.
You should put more focus on her sense of smell over her hearing or sight.
In the same vein, her abilities far outnumber her limitations, so you should consider adding one or two of those.

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Thanks for the critique. I totally agree that's too powerful after rereading the CS again. I guess I just caught in making my own lil' Sabretooth clone.

I've started revising the sheet, and hopefully I'll have it ready to be reviewed again tomorrow.

I'm considering adjusting her history a bit to give her more time in the "civilized world".
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I'm considering adjusting her history a bit to give her more time in the "civilized world".


I was gonna suggest something like that, too. Though, I wasn't sure just how "feral-esque" you want her to be.

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@HillanDid you ever finish your relationship sheet?
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@HillanDid you ever finish your relationship sheet?


I did not. I got hella sidetracked. But fear not, I am free tomorrow, too. So, I'll hopefully get a couple more names down the list, at least.
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@Hillani been there man take your time
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@DrewVonAwesome I WAS JUST SHOWING OFF A TRICK.

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@Sep I'll see about getting something up in the next couple hours then.

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@BlackSam3091 WILLY POWER UNITE!

It's a pity that Will isn't young enough that he can say something like that without understanding how it sounds kinda wrong.

That'd make for an interesting battle cry :L
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@Sep It's less about age and more about how naive he is
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Mirror, mirror on the wall, who has the prettiest post of them all?
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