@Vongola_HasayoAlright so based on what you have it doesn't seem Aiba would be considered selfish at all. Like he did everything to help Tatsu. And it seems that wouldn't stop him from helping others. It's like he's two different characters. The happy go lucky friend you keep around. And then the jerk that you're like "why do I hang out with this guy?" Based on his personality. But his history doesn't allude ot anything of the latter. I'd recommend the maybe focusing up just a little bit on who you want him to be. People are full of contradictions, so it's not a worry. And it would make sense that he would develop a selfish streak after the incident, but you need to show that a bit better. Maybe he has a slight conflict in him where he wants to help, but he's afraid rather than saying he is selfish. THe point is, based on the history and how you make him out to be, he doesn't seem selfish. Other than that, he is looking good so far.
@SleepingSilenceSo, I think your character is pretty good. Apart from my lack of information regarding the location (which is my fault) everything seems in order. Since this is imperative to everyone, and because I hadn't exactly decided on location yet I was gonna try and wing it, but stupid me, I forgot the whole point it'll play in character creation. So, I'm gonna make a decision here. after much deliberation I weighed my options. You can be from wherever in the world you want. The problem here is, that doesn't help when it comes to having to speak different languages. Technological advancements doesn't mean you have educational or other advancements that make you speak multiple languages. However, I was thinking we could use some kind of cheat either by the digital world or through the digi-protocal app.
The gist is, we will be spending most time as a group in the digital world when it comes to battling the Demon Lords' forces. However, there will be time spent in the real world. Using the the means by which we get to the digital world we will be able to travel back and forth and have the kids as a group go wherever they want essentially. My character, will likely be from America, though I haven't quite made him/her. I have my idea overall, but I wanna see what our gender ratio is before I finish completely.
@Keyblade87Heh... Edward. But on to business here. So, I think you've got a solid correlation between birth and personality. I think if we're going by
somewhat realistic standards you can play off that fact that he is tall for a 17 year old japanese boy, if he is really japanese. The average height is around 5'7" for a 17 year old male in japan. But really he's a fine character. I'm not really accepting just yet though! I'm gonna hold off until everyone finishes completely, edits and all. I'm giving until this wednesday for everyone to finish up as a first round draft for now. Mostly because I'm not in a particular rush with school and work and stuff. And partially because I wanna make sure everyone has time to work comfortably. Not
too much time though lol since you know, I don't want you guys dropping like flies.
@HuggoSo! He's pretty good. And as a writing tutor at my college, I see tons of students who don't speak or write in English as their first language. You'll get better with practice! So good job there. I think you hit all the bases. And yes! It is very possible for a digimon to have stumbled into the real world. It happens all the time after all. However, he'd likely have been pulled back not long after. You know?? Anyway, take some time to go over it, fix some of the grammatical mistakes you might see, and make sure you're already for a final judgement by Wednesday.
@VeradanaWell there isn't much to go on here. A couple things I would point out though include the choice of digimon and the history presented as it is. I think you are limiting yourself a bit with the choice as is. i think it is something of a good line as it at least has a sense of continuity between the evolutions, but it could definitely be better. Strabimon i think might be a bit of a "eh" choice, especially considering he is to Lobomon as Flamemon is to Agunimon. It might serve you better to reconsider. You may also miss out on the chance to reach a mega evolution like I'm hoping each character gets a chance to reach if the rp lasts because the options aren't really available. And even though some are, they just don't seem like they'd fit with the digi-line. Regardless, on to the history. You could serve to elaborate on the level of strictness of his home versus others to give a better idea of how they differed. How much did he actually know about other kids' home lives to make that assumption. How has that strictness affected him in different areas of life? things like that.
hopefully this has been helpful to you all!
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