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samreaper said
god damn it! why is no one replying? my post is stillt he last post and its been two days now people!

Cause reasons I stated, and David is also waiting on someone.
I really just need to get into a posting mood.

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AeronFarron said
She finished off her food then stood with his help. "Jerk." she said as she rolled her eyes. She quickly paid for their meal, plus tip, then scurried out of the restaurant. Alucard was hot on her heels.

"So, what do we do now, Lieutenant?" she asked with a grin.

He chuckled as she called him a jerk, nonetheless she took his hand and accepted his help in which he pulled her up with ease. As she paid for the meal she then rushed out of the restaurant. Hikari smiled watching her as Alucard ran closely by. He pulled out some money as well, putting down the same amount Haruka did all around just out of kindness. "Thanks for the meal!" Hikari called out before he chased Haruka.

Once he caught up, which he did rather fast, she asked what they were going to do now with a grin. He grinned back before looking up at the night sky, it was perfect. He looked down grabbing Haruka's hand before running forward, lightly pulling her as he looked back at her laughing, "C'mon, we can't be late!" he said as he kept his grin.

Hikari had brought her to what seemed to be a small gala. There were lanterns hung up everywhere and shops were open with allot of their items being sold for lower prices than normal, hell even some of them were free. There were even a decent amount of games. "This is the place I wanted to take you," Hikari said smiling at her, not sure if he should still have been holding her hand or not he slowly let it go, "I thought with the gloom in the Seireitei this would be a nice place to get away from it all. Everyone needs a decent day off, one away from training and official work...So this is ours, I hope you like it."

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drallinix said
allright im working on improving the cs I was a bit rushed earlier ill go more in depth.

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KabenSaal said
The part about Flash-Stepping past someone has to suck if they are faster than you are.

Most likely wouldn't work.

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Nicias Askani said
When around crowds or people he doesn't know he is uncomfortable.
When around crowds or people he doesn't know, he is uncomfortable.
do you see the difference?

Yeah, David just informed me.

....Still, bad writing on their part. Understandable misunderstanding, here, have a nana

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drallinix said
ok character is finished

For starters his last name, Tenshi, it’s realistic that people have the same last names and first. Rarely both, but to put it out there I have a character whose last name is Tenshi. Just putting that out there.

Second, his appearance. Kurisa used that for a Zanpakuto spirit, it’s changed but I’m sure it’s still important to his story. Something for Kurisa to speak on but I would suggest changing it anyways, just my take on it.

Now onto his personality, where I see you constantly contradict yourself…

drallinix said He is quiet, but not reserved. He enjoys being around people he likes and is outspoken then.

I mean, a quiet person is a quiet person either way it goes. But that one is fine…Just a minor nitpick, I guess?

drallinix said When around crowds or people he doesn't know he is uncomfortable. Women in general make him uncomfortable, but he can talk to them like normal.

If he doesn’t know he’s uncomfortable (Which I think is damn near impossible honestly. Sure you can question if you are or aren’t and be conflicted, but….), then how does he know he’s uncomfortable around women?

drallinix said He dislikes vain people.”
“He then joined when he could and now wishes to find a seat amongst squad 11.

ಠ_ಠ

drallinix said He will say how he feels regardless of who he is around and doesn't mind conflict.

But…He’s quiet….I don’t understand how someone could be quiet but say how they feel regardless of who they are around, a bit contradicting. Unless he’s quiet until on the topic of his feelings, if that’s the case then fair enough it’s just bad formatting.

drallinix said He grew up in the soul society as a slave.

T..That’s it? That’s all for that subject? Not gonna shine anymore light on that? Alright, I’m sure you’ll go into detail about everything el-

drallinix said He trained for years as a child to master his sword techniques.

drallinix said extreme speed and sword proficiency

…Ok, guess you aren’t gonna go into detail about everything else. Would help understand and get to know your character better, also would be nice to know how you get the extreme speed and extreme sword proficiency. But that’s a thing for another time it looks like.

Now onto your Zanpakuto…As for the spirit I’m not sure how that’d work exactly. Considering Zanpakuto Spirits are different spirits they wouldn’t look exactly like you unless you’re taking the term, Zanpakuto are a reflection of yourself, very literal. This also goes back to the earlier statement of your appearance.

drallinix said Lions claw He flash steps past the opponent and slashes them with his sword while it is infused with golden spiritual energy. Greatly increasing its cutting power.(cooldown 1 post)

The minimum cool down is two post to avoid spamming. I think this ability should have 2 – 3 at least.

drallinix said burning earth He stabs the end of his blade into the ground and gold flames erupt from the ground in a line towards his opponent.(cool down 2 posts)

I mean it is a linear attack, but I think a two post CD would be too quick even still. Bump it to four atleast.

drallinix said Kings cloak Gold spiritual energy envelops him. It appears like golden flames surrounding his entire body giving off an unearthly glow. These flames burn anything but him that they touch and extend along his sword as well.(lasts 4 posts has a 5 post cooldown)

I’m fine with it if everyone else is.

drallinix said Phoenix He uses an immense amount of spiritual pressure to heal his wounds(takes a lot of his spiritual energy only usable once every three days)

Fair enough.

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drallinix said
ok character is finished

I'll give my take on it in a bit.

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Supposed to hang up flyers, geez.

The 100 - Currently Accepting Mischievous Teens

Awesome....I forgot minor things like how he got his nickname(s), and how he got those scars but I guess I can reveal those in the IC.

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KabenSaal said
That is because they weren't invited.

Because you don't know anyone or anything but Nishiki's ass....Here, have a nana