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Fate Grand/Order, Epic of Remnant: Broken Boundary, Pseudo-Singularity - Fuyuki, Top/Brass Grail War

Only Servant Reviews at the moment.

Servant Reviews

@SSW

Jacob/Isreal review

- Can you clarify more on what Israel - Father of a Nation does? I'm pretty sure it gives him increased defense/attack, but not how much of an increased defense/attack. (Unless you expect him to be harmed by only attacks that are anti-country/hits with anti-country attacks, which would be a massive no.) Provide an example scenario to a mod if wish, since putting something into a scene in context always helps.
- Please add some limits to Jacob’s Ladder, or please reclarify its effect. The way you have it written, it sounds a lot like a "God says it's my turn to autohit you now." At the moment, the only restriction that comes to mind is that it procs against another servant's Luck. Luck is somebody's ability to defy fate, so that seems fitting. If you already considered luck a proper counter to Jacob's ladder, that's fine. I just want it noted in your NP somewhere. So other players don't go in thinking they have no counterplay.

@Yukitamas

Dante Alighieri Review

Yuki, please respond to the message sent to you by Indra, regarding examples of how you plan to use your skills/noble phantasms. As they are heavily relying on conceptual attacks, examples of their usage in a semi-serious manner would greatly help with our review.

@King Cosmos

Heracles Review

- Nine lives carries the concept of ""killing something no matter how many times it regenerates." Feel free to include that in your sheet. Since it's specifically designed to kill people with a healing factor.
- Non Plus Ultra - Pillars the Support the Sky at the Edge of the World doesn't really work with the rest of your sheet. Since it's basically dropping your spears and making a "everybody dies if they walk past them" point. Please message me, and we can talk about finding something that fits better. (General rule, chats will always go with the most meme usage of something, rather than the most useful or reliable. And Herc's character isn't really the kind to just throw his problems into the void.)

@Aoko Aozaki

Mehmed Review

- Please include info on what you consider to be 'Status effects' in your Ghazi skill. At the moment, it's a skill that basically negates any and all things that aren't a punch to the face. Which is a no, mostly on the grounds that it's just a better version of Protection of the Faith, without the risk of turning into an uber zealot. Consider reducing the range of its effects.
- Imperial Privilege (Roman), we're fine with an EX Imperial Privilege, on the grounds that it is strictly limited to 'Roman' skills. So no Chinese Martial Arts or Japanese sword fighting.

@ManyThings
Sigurd is accepted.

@Red Alice
Chiyou is accepted.

@Scallop
Samson is accepted.

Fate Grand/Order, Epic of Remnant: Broken Boundary, Pseudo-Singularity - Fuyuki, Top/Brass Grail War

@Flood

Master Review

- Please include more info on their combat training. So we have a general idea of what they can do for physical combat, and their own relative strength compared to other mages in physicals.

@GreenGoat

Master Review

- Please include more info on your staff. What level of fire does it produce, since you clearly imply it can generate fire. What kind of limits does it have, and how is her control of it.
- Please add a section on physical combat skill, and what martial arts she has been taught. The more info, the better.

@Yukitamas

Master Review

Accepted.

Sorry that only 3 reviews are done. The other two mods are kinda sick and tired, so we'll be doing more reviews later.

Deepest Abyss (Conquer the World)

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@Lonewolf685

He listened... He processed what the skull wearing speaker had to say... He was not impressed. It was all very obvious formalities. Tactical things that did not interest the Emperor. He had such a bad habit of just ordering things done, and watching others work out the formula. Mind you, some of his own work he did himself. Some of his own machines he built with his own two hands. Some mass produced of course. The two drones in the shapes of eagles, that sat on his shoulder, were clearly mass-produced. They were certainly flawed compared to what the emperor would have made, but the metals he needed were sparse in this underworld, and not plentiful enough to be wasted on higher quality drones.

His opinions on the others though... The one called Chryseis was interesting. At least he looked to be so. Perhaps a fighter who could run a front guard. He'd probably make mince of weaker enemies, but he was a soldier no doubt. Or at least as far as Velo cared.
Azrael was something of a wild card. He wanted only to kill humans. Not much use in building an empire, but if he needed humans culled... Well he had his uses. He would have to be killed, or contained. Maybe left in the Abyss while the others moved on. A choice for later.
Pandora? He'd reserve his own thoughts. She was silent. That was good. A jailer followed orders, perhaps she would take his too.

Then... There was Willowa. Very forward. He didn't bow back. Instead he just nodded, as a means of acknowledging her presence. It was wise of her to bow before addressing him. It showed class. She was clearly the most dangerous of the group in that regard. A classy lady was far more deadly than an ogre of an angel.

"I do hope you'll forgive my sudden request, but would you care to aid me in a little project with the mutts? You see, I've been struck with a delightful idea to strip them of their human intellect and render them beasts of pure instinct who would naturally submit to our greater power, but that would also entail a tiresome amount of posturing and one bad day could have them turn against us. I won't insult you by pretending to fully grasp your technology, but perhaps we could use it in conjunction with my elixer to firmly control a number of wolves to serve as our enforcers? The greatest result for the least effort, and you'd have the honor of programming the first in our no doubt considerably bevy of forces to command."

"Perhaps." Velo said, musing on this problem. "In my time, there was a need to control living beings, like wolves. To tame them to certain commands. To teach right and wrong. We used a magnetic collar, that would shock those who might turn on their owners. A strong enough pulse would kill them. Pain was a good motivator." He explained the thought rather simply.
"Why, I recall that I used such a device on my seventh wife. She thought me cruel, and refused to lay in my bed. I could have had her chained there, but that was meaningless. Merely punishing her gently until she chose of her own free will to obey... Yes. We can perform such a thing on these wolves quite easily."

He approached a dying wolf, one that still clung barely to life. His gauntlet pressed against its burst open chest... And he began to extract the essence of life from it. Its body turned cold, and lights faded in its eyes. The gauntlet he wore hummed, and a single of many dead lights turned on.
He gestured to one of his drones, and as soon as it landed, he began to rip it apart. The chest opening up, the sigils and wiring that filled its body were exposed.
"Willowa, for the living, we can start by finding ways to amplify their pain sensors. That way I can use less energy, and thus make more collars on the cheap." He explained, already taking fabric from a wing and stripping it into sheets. Perfect sizes for collars. Metal meeting with each of the small sigils that lined it. The light in his gauntlet would fade, and within a short while, the first of possibly several collars was constructed. "Yes, this shall work perfectly. Control via the avoidance of pain."

Deepest Abyss (Conquer the World)

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@ZAVAZggg-@TheWindel-@Not Fungus

It was certainly an interesting moment talking to the fallen creature that Azrael was. Fallen in a sense that it had fallen from his creator's good graces, and been left to languish for all eternity. On the other side, Velo the 27th considered himself blessed in many ways. For example, he was always going to drink fine wine, and he was always going to rule. In one way or another.

It was true what Azrael said. Even if he did have a machine to eradicate all humans, he wouldn't use it. It was meaningless to use such a thing, as monsters were a absolute chore to control, unlike humans. All you had to do was breed them to have absolute faith in a central power. The rebels who appear once a decade would be torn apart by his loyals. That was how it goes.

"Well, I'm more than accepting of an alliance, and to allow others to join." Velo said, gesturing briefly to Chryseis and the strange skull-like being. "You may both refer to me as Emperor Velo the 27th, Divine Leader of the Unending Empire that Conquered the Heavens. Or simply Emperor Velo, if that is too much effort on your behalf." He could have used his full title, which took at least two minutes to completely rattle off. But he didn't want to waste too much time. He was immortal, but he still had to live in the moment.

"Either way, we should start. The other groups that are gathering shall no doubt follow behind us."

Fate/Top Brass

@Anakin I sent in two possible Caster choices. Let me know what you think, and which you'd prefer. Otherwise I might just end up going with the Father of Magic, Zoroaster. Just dump solar death onto my enemies.

Fate/Top Brass

I'm in. I got a Caster already in mind.

Deepest Abyss (Conquer the World)

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The emperor hated interruptions. In fact, interruptions from minor beings was the worst kind of thing that could screech his speech to a halt. If he was describe the werewolves, he'd compare them to something like a slug congealing off a wall with a sickening thud. Their presence alone was like walking through sludge. Filthy. FILTHY. FILTHY! And filth? A god emperor like Velo the 27th must purge such things from his sight.

The emperor raised his hand as he took a step back. The emperor did not get his hands dirty with filth. Instead, he had his Right Hand for that. Well that, and his drones. His cloak opened up, and three drones unfurled from the depths of his imperial majesty. Those three drones surged out, seeking out distracted targets amongst the pack, and zapping them. Arcing electricity sizzled at their fur, before the massive claw of his Right Hand would smear their brains along the floor. That electrical charge coursing through their bodies was the last feeling some of them might feel. Violence was the call of beasts, and humans were beasts.

A sharp pain exploded in the emperor's chest, an arrow notched right into his chest. An arrow plunged into his heart, or where it should be. Piercing through his chest, and pinning the back of his cape to his back. Disgusting. Velo scowled as he pulled it out, throwing it aside. Where the wound was, a red liquid drooled out. But, it clearly wasn't blood. It was too thick, like maple syrup. Oozing out, before stopping midway down his chest. As if time was rewinding, it was being pulled right back towards the wound, rolling and gushing back into the small hole the arrow had left behind. Any ooze on the arrow leapt off the blade, joining the rest of his 'blood' in his chest. Hardening, it became flesh once more.

"Filth that lays hands on a God Emperor must DIE!" Velo snarled, finally showing some bite of his own. His finger gestured, and all the drones, and his right hand, descended upon the werewolf archer who had personally crossed him. It was likely he'd be a smear well before the emperor's fury was spent on his corpse.

"Azrael." Velo said, finally relaxing as he approached the fallen angel. Using his name, what an honor for the genocidal monster. "Once we are free, is there anything you desire? As the rightful emperor of all humans, I can offer you any desire that fleets past your vision. Consider it a gift if you will, for giving your aid in my ceremonial return to the surface."

Deepest Abyss (Conquer the World)

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"You are the grandson of Emperor Velo the 18th, and the child of Emperor Velo the 25th. Never before in the history of the empire has two such potent bloodlines connected into you. Their heir. The one best suited to convey the words of an empire, and to rule undaunted. May your reign last for a hundred years."

Emperor Velo the 27th had long surpassed the quaint notion of 'a hundred years.' He had even surpassed the lukewarm idea of a thousand. Two thousand was so far beneath him that he hadn't even bothered to celebrate it. Was it three thousand years? Or was it ten thousand now? He only knew with a certainty that he had grown bored of counting, and calculating the days was meaningless in the Abyss, where the days mingled together in such a way that one could easily drag a full week together. Wait... What was he even doing? He couldn't even be bothered to remember that.

_{"Stop! Stop hurtings me!"}
Oh right. At that very moment the emperor was standing over some gremlin or another. Some warlord from a kingdom he had never heard of. Claiming to have tried to invade the Abyss and make it his own or something of the like. Must have been a long time ago, as the gremlin was now practically ancient. Withered white hair, wrinkles beyond count. How disgusting aging was as a concept. How weak it made others. Why would you need such a thing? That was why the emperor had rejected that weakness. He had thrown the very concept of aging away. He was a true undying immortal. Because as the young looking man stared down at the feeble old conqueror... He felt no remorse as the heel of his Right Hand pressed down on that skull. A little more pressure and it could pop.

"And why should I?" Velo said. His words were buried in boredom. So unamused by any possible answer that he couldn't even sound invested. "The Abyss is no longer guarded, and you started declaring yourself king of the world. Running down the halls and disturbing my much needed rest." The golem he commanded creaked a little, as if about to simply step right down. The gremlin just spat out in disgust.
_{"A nap! You torment me over a nap! The world is free to conquer and you spend your time tormenting me over a n-"}

CRUNCH!

The spray of brain matter that now clung to the heel of the Emperor's Right Hand would need to be washed off. The only place Velo could think of in short order was perhaps... The Lagoon? Others had probably gathered there, to relax or simply to celebrate before they left. No doubt the emperor could make his way out on his own, but why bother with that? He could use the help. Would certainly make things much easier on him. No doubt others would flock to his leadership.

"Right Hand, follow me." Velo said, and gestured for his golem to follow. He needn't have said anything, but it was the way of an emperor to like the sound of their own voice.

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The Lagoon

"Of course neither of you would have the means to get past the rabble." The emperor's words were the way he chose to introduce himself. Stepping out silently from around a pillar of stone. The red eyes of his guardian followed after him, as the red clad emperor stood there. His hands wrapped over his chest. A lesser man might have introduced themselves first before making such comments.

"They are a pack, and you are merely two. A pack does not fear the lone wolf, but rather a larger pack." Velo said, stepping onto a rock that stood over a pool of water. His eyes focused on each of the two he had approached. One, a vampire from his rough estimations. The other... Perhaps the only being in the Abyss who had been here longer than he. Azrael. If they had spoken to each other, it was so long ago that he could not recall the specifics.
"If you two are so interested in crawling your ways out, you are in desperate need of a pack of your own. To pool your talents together, under a greater, and more noble cause." The emperor's talent for needless speech-giving was on full display. "What say you, to a temporary pack?"

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Deepest Abyss (Conquer the World)

Emperor Velo the 27th

Evil grows in cracks and holes
And lives in people's minds.

• Title: The Immortal Emperor
• True Name: Emperor Velo the 27th
• Age: Very old. Insanely old. So old that the empire he once ruled over is so buried in myth that nothing they say about it is true. It's actually kind of an insult.
• Species: Immortal / Former-Human
• Weapons:

Constructs + Weapons

- The Emperor's Right Hand: When an emperor dies, their soul is saved by the next emperor to create their 'Right Hand.' An adviser of sorts who exists to carry out the new emperor's will. Their soul eventually released to pass on to the afterlife once the new emperor is ready to rule alone. Unfortunately for Emperor Velo the 26th, his heir had no desire to ever release him from servitude.
The Emperor's Right hand is a golem that rivals the greatest of any era, and perhaps greater. It stands roughly twelve feet tall, and is heavily armored to protect its only vulnerable part, the core with its irreplaceable soul. It's capabilities are primarily in combat, and other routine actions an emperor might need. This particular version has been modified to have weapons, something no previous Right Hand has ever used.
The primary weapons are a fairly simple electrical claw that can discharge nearly lethal amounts of electrical energy into a target within a moment after contact. Other weapons include a flamethrower attachment, and a cable that can launch its fists at targets and then reel them back in. Other changes can be made as needed, though the more complex the change, the more time is required for Velo to make those changes.
In the most dangerous of circumstances, it is possible for Emperor Velo the 27th to open up his Right Hand, and pilot it directly like a mech suit.

- Imperial Drone x10: Simple drones that orbit around the emperor. They are all shaped like the empire's chosen animal, the eagle. They can unleash a taser-like arc of electricity from their talons, though nowhere near as strong as the charge that comes from the Right Hand. Sustained attack can knock out even a fierce enemy in the Abyss. Or serve as a distraction for Emperor Velo the 27th to high tail it out.

- Command Gauntlet: A gauntlet that establishes control over the various constructs that Velo has created. If damaged or destroyed, all constructs go into a sleep mode, until the emperor can replace the gauntlet, or repair it.

• Species Traits:
- Immortality: Emperor Velo is immortal. The kind that doesn't come with any kind of hang-ups. No 'I must drink the blood of the innocent' or 'I must perform a ritual.' He's immortal, and you can't kill him no matter how much you hack him apart. Cave his skull in, or splinter his bones into powder, and he will refuse to die. The main problem is that the process of undoing damage like this can take a day, and his body is no more durable than that of a typical human. As such, he's particularly vulnerable to typical methods of sealing up a human, like a dungeon, or a lot of heavy chains.
• Special Abilities:
- Magic Artifactory (Lost Technology): The empire of Vayron developed a unique knowledge of Magitech that is far superior to anything in the modern area. At its peak, the emperor commanded entire armies of loyal machines powered by his magical energy. These machines are forged in the depths of the Abyss, with regular constructs using the emperor's own magic, and superior constructs often requiring the soul of another denizen to power. The more powerful the soul, the more powerful the construct. All constructs he has made are listed under 'Weapons.'
With enough souls, something as complex as a floating fortress can be constructed. Just takes a lot of time to get all the material.
• Inventory:
- Construct Forging Tools: Various simple tools designed to help the emperor create various constructs, or to make repairs.
- Imperial Outfit: Still as pristine as the day he entered the Abyss. These garments are the robes of an emperor. At one time it was tradition for new clothing to be made for the emperor to wear daily, and old clothing would be sold on the market. As there is no more market, or tailors to make him a new outfit, Emperor Velo simply never removes his clothing, least he be forced to dispose of it.
• Background: Emperor Velo the 27th was destined to be a great emperor. He ruled the land of Vayron, one of the old world's greatest empires. At its peak, it ruled a land that dwarfed all other contemporary nations. Its emperor sat on a throne that hovered in the air, and would radiate with the power of the sun overhead. He commanded fleets of ships that flew through the air, and castles would roam around the land devouring smaller lands. Gardens of trees and shrines to gods were common markers, and the land was a paradise on Earth. There was nothing the people or emperor did not need that wasn't accommodated for in spades. Except, this was all earthly pleasures, and Velo knew this. In fact, he knew it so well that he refused to give it up. He hated the very notion of there ever being an Emperor Velo the 28th to continue on after his death. Why should he?
So, as the emperor, he began research into something the previous emperors had always avoided. A search... For immortality. But the search for such a thing would end only in tragedy. The knowledge that came to him in his research was cruel, and required a great deal of sacrifices. And so, he began to set in motion the greatest tragedy of the old empires. Seals were placed at the farthest edges of his land, and a temple was forged to channel the magically energy that would gather from all over the land. In a single day, the land of Vayron was wiped clean. All the people vanished, as their bodies burned up in the emperor's machine. Energy lanced down into his body, and when he stepped out of the chamber, he was alone. Immortal, and alone. Unable to ever die. But part of him did die. His empathy. He was no longer a part of humanity, but rather a monster in human flesh.
His machines remained, and thus the king set forth on a cruel act of war against the world. But a single king, no matter how immortal is not invincible. Other nations rose up against him, and heroes of legendary status battled him. He was defeated soundly, and unable to die they were unsure what to do with him. The Abyss though, was always hungry, and an immortal meal would never pass away. That was where the emperor belonged. His body tossed into the depths, and his laughter echoed out.
To this day, he is still trapped there. Despite his armies having long corroded into dust, and his kingdom built over a hundred times.
• Other: The day the Abyss was no longer guarded happens to coincide with 'Emperor Day' a celebration of Vayron's emperors. As such, Emperor Velo considers this event a gift to him for his patience.

Deepest Abyss (Conquer the World)

Still a major WIP. Working on other details like weapons and magical limitations.

Emperor Velo the 27th

Evil grows in cracks and holes
And lives in people's minds.

• Title: The Immortal Emperor
• True Name: Emperor Velo the 27th
• Age: Very old. Insanely old. So old that the empire he once ruled over is so buried in myth that nothing they say about it is true. It's actually kind of an insult.
• Species: Immortal / Former-Human
• Weapons:

Constructs + Weapons

- The Emperor's Right Hand: When an emperor dies, their soul is saved by the next emperor to create their 'Right Hand.' An adviser of sorts who exists to carry out the new emperor's will. Their soul eventually released to pass on to the afterlife once the new emperor is ready to rule alone. Unfortunately for Emperor Velo the 26th, his heir had no desire to ever release him from servitude.
The Emperor's Right hand is a golem that rivals the greatest of any era, and perhaps greater. It stands roughly twelve feet tall, and is heavily armored to protect its only vulnerable part, the core with its irreplaceable soul. It's capabilities are primarily in combat, and other routine actions an emperor might need. This particular version has been modified to have weapons, something no previous Right Hand has ever used.
The primary weapons are a fairly simple electrical claw that can discharge nearly lethal amounts of electrical energy into a target within a moment after contact. Other weapons include a flamethrower attachment, and a cable that can launch its fists at targets and then reel them back in. Other changes can be made as needed, though the more complex the change, the more time is required for Velo to make those changes.
In the most dangerous of circumstances, it is possible for Emperor Velo the 27th to open up his Right Hand, and pilot it directly like a mech suit.

- Imperial Drone x10: Simple drones that orbit around the emperor. They are all shaped like the empire's chosen animal, the eagle. They can unleash a taser-like arc of electricity from their talons, though nowhere near as strong as the charge that comes from the Right Hand. Sustained attack can knock out even a fierce enemy in the Abyss. Or serve as a distraction for Emperor Velo the 27th to high tail it out.

- Command Gauntlet: A gauntlet that establishes control over the various constructs that Velo has created. If damaged or destroyed, all constructs go into a sleep mode, until the emperor can replace the gauntlet, or repair it.

• Species Traits:
- Immortality: Emperor Velo is immortal. The kind that doesn't come with any kind of hang-ups. No 'I must drink the blood of the innocent' or 'I must perform a ritual.' He's immortal, and you can't kill him no matter how much you hack him apart. Cave his skull in, or splinter his bones into powder, and he will refuse to die. The main problem is that the process of undoing damage like this can take a day, and his body is no more durable than that of a typical human. As such, he's particularly vulnerable to typical methods of sealing up a human, like a dungeon, or a lot of heavy chains.
• Special Abilities:
- Magic Artifactory (Lost Technology): The empire of Vayron developed a unique knowledge of Magitech that is far superior to anything in the modern area. At its peak, the emperor commanded entire armies of loyal machines powered by his magical energy. These machines are forged in the depths of the Abyss, with regular constructs using the emperor's own magic, and superior constructs often requiring the soul of another denizen to power. The more powerful the soul, the more powerful the construct. All constructs he has made are listed under 'Weapons.'
With enough souls, something as complex as a floating fortress can be constructed. Just takes a lot of time to get all the material.
• Inventory:
- Construct Forging Tools: Various simple tools designed to help the emperor create various constructs, or to make repairs.
- Imperial Outfit: Still as pristine as the day he entered the Abyss. These garments are the robes of an emperor. At one time it was tradition for new clothing to be made for the emperor to wear daily, and old clothing would be sold on the market. As there is no more market, or tailors to make him a new outfit, Emperor Velo simply never removes his clothing, least he be forced to dispose of it.
• Background: Emperor Velo the 27th was destined to be a great emperor. He ruled the land of Vayron, one of the old world's greatest empires. At its peak, it ruled a land that dwarfed all other contemporary nations. Its emperor sat on a throne that hovered in the air, and would radiate with the power of the sun overhead. He commanded fleets of ships that flew through the air, and castles would roam around the land devouring smaller lands. Gardens of trees and shrines to gods were common markers, and the land was a paradise on Earth. There was nothing the people or emperor did not need that wasn't accommodated for in spades. Except, this was all earthly pleasures, and Velo knew this. In fact, he knew it so well that he refused to give it up. He hated the very notion of there ever being an Emperor Velo the 28th to continue on after his death. Why should he?
So, as the emperor, he began research into something the previous emperors had always avoided. A search... For immortality. But the search for such a thing would end only in tragedy. The knowledge that came to him in his research was cruel, and required a great deal of sacrifices. And so, he began to set in motion the greatest tragedy of the old empires. Seals were placed at the farthest edges of his land, and a temple was forged to channel the magically energy that would gather from all over the land. In a single day, the land of Vayron was wiped clean. All the people vanished, as their bodies burned up in the emperor's machine. Energy lanced down into his body, and when he stepped out of the chamber, he was alone. Immortal, and alone. Unable to ever die. But part of him did die. His empathy. He was no longer a part of humanity, but rather a monster in human flesh.
His machines remained, and thus the king set forth on a cruel act of war against the world. But a single king, no matter how immortal is not invincible. Other nations rose up against him, and heroes of legendary status battled him. He was defeated soundly, and unable to die they were unsure what to do with him. The Abyss though, was always hungry, and an immortal meal would never pass away. That was where the emperor belonged. His body tossed into the depths, and his laughter echoed out.
To this day, he is still trapped there. Despite his armies having long corroded into dust, and his kingdom built over a hundred times.
• Other: The day the Abyss was no longer guarded happens to coincide with 'Emperor Day' a celebration of Vayron's emperors. As such, Emperor Velo considers this event a gift to him for his patience.