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Dervish said
There's way too many applications to justify anyone having two characters, and I'd rather people focus on one character over two to see if they can handle the load.


I'm guessing I shouldn't bother writing up my notes for my illicitly mercantile volus in the form of a CS, then? ;-; I'll submit the notes anyway, to be used as an NPC if anyone wants to - honestly, he'll probably work better in that capacity, considering how physically inept the volus are. It was fun and good practice coming up with the character anyway.

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Name: Loral'Zanis vas Korvus

Race: Quarian

Gender: Male

Age: 28

Class:

Engineer; Med-tech

Appearance:

Like many quarians, Loral'Zanis vas Korvus is of a slight, very lithe, but athletic build, but is tall for a quarian, standing at 5'7" and somewhat above most others of his species. There's nothing at all special about him, especially since many would never witness his face and what he really looked like, but he took special care of his suit to look at least somewhat presentable. He wore a lightly armored suit made of cheap metal and parts bartered during his time on the Station. It gave the suit an unusual mix of metallic color along his torso and extremities, but fit well with the solid bluish-purple of the cloth that was draped over it. He sported an hood like cloth over his head and helmet, hiding the various spouts and wires that jutted from the back, akin to how many of the female of his race wear hooded material. It is light, draped and layered onto his shoulders and underneath the makeshift carapace on his shoulders and torso.

Loral is a very habitual person, tending to forming habits with his hands in particular, whether it be scratching a specific area or fiddling nervously near his helmet, they have to be doing something or holding onto something. What annoys people most is the usual, incessant clicking of a pen should he find one or the scraping of a utensil on whatever surface it can find. His voice is a deepish baritone with a heavy quarian accent sounding more in like to the human arabic, distinct and precise with a moderate monotone sound to it, with a slight stammer when nervous or excited and especially when angered. Loral is very articulate, despite his accent, and speaks with precise diction, even in spite of his stammer when out of his comfort zone. Walking with an air of supreme confidence and with a purpose, Loral is very much a quarian, in that he moves to not waste time and in as much an efficient manner as possible, sometimes prone to cutting corners or taking short cuts. He is quick and sometimes jittery with energy when he moves and is almost always moving. Despite this, Loral has extremely steady hands and near perfect vision in his eyes. He is prone to clicking his tongue when idle and is noticeably swerving his head to whatever catches his attention the most.

Background:



Weapons

Systems Alliance M-5 Phalanx - Acquired from bartering with fellow colonists on a planet that hunted large, predatory animals for game.



Elkoss Combine M-4 Shuriken - Cheap and effective. Bought from regular weapons dealers on Cartegena



Equipment List

— Reinforced shields implants
— Makeshift immuno booster implants
— Various custom made boosters and medicines for his own immune system
— Equipped with copious amounts of dispensable medigel
— Regular Quarian Envrio-suit
— Flashbang Grenades

Powers:

— Cryoblast
— Overload
— Energy Drain
— Neural Shock
— Incinerate

Talents:

— Pistols
— Hacking
— Damping
— First Aid
— Medicine
— Electronics
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There we go!

Tried my hardest. Hope it's up to snuff. I have ways and back ups if the whole exile thing isn't particularly catching or if it doesn't work out well. The ending may be a tad rushed, as it was around 5 a.m. when I finished, but I attempted to make a few edits to hopefully make it run better.

I wouldn't at all mind someone telling me if the history doesn't work well or if it's not thought out enough so that I can fix it before the deadline. :o

EDIT: Ugh, I forgot to edit out the timeline notes for myself. @_@ Whatever. I'll get to that later. I need to run some errands.
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Edited my Profile. After reading Sixsmith's, I realised I hadn't really given all the information I have on Kali mentally - things like the way she moves or speaks that I had in mind, but had not yet 'put to paper', so to speak. I also added more detail to the History, and will likely continue to do so tomorrow - nothing major, just adding bits and pieces that hint towards Kali's personality a little more. I also de-sexmonked Kali's parent ship. xD
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Holy shit, quarians are everywhere!

You guys are going to make this really hard to chose, aren't you?
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I think thats the plan...

I'm finishing up Jaerdi Tal and posting him today. The galaxy needs more Salarian goodness.
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Dervish said
Holy shit, quarians are everywhere!You guys are going to make this really hard to chose, aren't you?


I mainly went for a quarian 'cause there was only one other at the time. xD But yes, our sole goal is to torture you and make you suffer when choosing between us. We're just cruel like that <3
In all seriousness, though, I can always go back and work on my backup/secondary/NPC/something volus character instead, if that makes life easier. Volus are even more unloved than the Salarians.
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You should do a brackets style elimination. Or we could have some kind of write off! Mass Effect themed of course.
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Salarian hitman awesomeness over here.

A shorter sheet for me but i think I've covered everything.

Bonus points to anyone who figures out who he is distantly related to.
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Alrighty, edited mah CS. @Mosis Tosis, I appreciate it you going english teacher like that. Run-off sentences often slip through my paragraphs.

@Echo: Haven't read your CS, but saw your image, so I'm taking a guess here, is he related to Kirrahe?
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Nope.

No-one so obvious....

;)
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Chorban the keeper guy in ME one?
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Wild guess, uh... Anoleis?

Dat butt face Salarian in Port Hanshan.
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Though I'm disappointed you did so by a wild guess, you did in fact get it right Sixsmith. He was hatched in the same city, which in Salarian culture makes him related.
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Darn, I'll get the next one right.
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Purdy, very Purdy. Think derv has to walk back into an office and suddenly notices a large pile of paperwork to gobthrough lol.
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Dervish said
And that's fair by me. :) Life comes first, just let me know what's up from time to time.


Thought I'd replied to this, but it appears my phone played mind-games.

If I know work is coming to play hardcore I'll let you guys know, the same with is I have holidays or something appearing. I'm not expecting that until August however.

PS, to avoid searching through each and every post in the OOC, I'll find the CSs and PM them to you with the name of whoever put them there. Save you the time and such and gets those chosen chosen all the quicker.
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I've pretty much just finished college so I'll have plenty of time to write stuff out. If by some small chance anything else pops up, I'll let people know but as I said it's not going to happen. Definitely. Probably. Maybe.
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And now it's time for the critiques and the sheet selection.
If any of these seem particularly harsh or sarcastic, it is not a judgement of you as a person and I appreciate your interest all the same, this is merely a blunt and honest critique of what has been submitted for review.

Enjoy.





























And finally, the moment you’ve all been waiting for, the chosen 8.



And of course, the reserve roster in case we have anyone drop out. These sheets were good, but were edged out (in some cases only ever so slightly!) by the initial 8. Should an opening pop up, I will PM the owners of these characters and ask if they are still interested in participating.



In all cases, there was a lot of fantastic effort put into these sheets, and it's been an absolute joy to see the response to this game!
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Did you sleep man? I thought it'd be at least end of today before this was up lol.

Got to say though, fantastic criticism on it all.

And I will hold my hands up, I had help from Hades. We both thought it'd be interesting to be on the other side of Mindoir. I may even state something that let's Tanya click the pieces and prepare for a stand off :D
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