Just tell me what's wrong with it, and what the issue is

Still awaiting word on my CS.

VitaVitaAR said
@GuyYouWishYouDidn'tKnow: Tsukumogami are not former humans(and in fact contracts that were formerly humans do not exist in this setting). They are objects that have gained a living form and sentience of their own.

I was more of referring to the whole aspect of the legend in terms of how the soul they acquire is based on the life-force of the origin point, but that's just semantics so I'm fine with changing that. Are there any other issues on that front?

Arachne is actually fine given her nature(she'd probably haven been something slightly different from human originally but I can't imagine her not being available as a contract). That said, I do see one particular issue in her powers area and one thing I want further clarification on.

Firstly, the issue I see is the web ability, which enters into an uncomfortable area of omniscience, even if it takes a little while to establish.

Secondly, what exactly would be able to be severed using the string-cutting abilities?

On the web, it's no so much omniscience as an expanded perception to allow what's basically the equivalent of "scrying". She can't be fully aware of all states of reality at any given time, nor can she do something like "use the present state of affairs to reach a calculation of the future", but if she wanted to find a specific person on the web after it's made she could. That said, she can't tell what the person's doing or anything, she can only conclude that "there is a person at this location" and "that person is X".

If that's still too much I can remove it, of course.

On string-severing it's in theory anything based on connections or boundaries. I'm guessing your worry is her doing something like severing the connection between one part of a person's body and another, basically allowing an instakill. In which case, the way I was going to handle that was that, even for Fusion/Summon, she can't sever strings where one end is attached to a Contractor or similar being without said being's consent, if that makes sense. Let me know if you need more limits attached or whatnot.

@Dead Cruiser: I agree with what Vita said about it and honestly, I'd like an actual explanation of his strength. It's one thing to list off characters and a game designer (by the way, he worked on several games with normal human protagonists and I honestly don't know about putting the rest on the same level), but...I'd like to know what sort of stuff we can expect. Are they strong enough to throw cars around, uproot trees to use as clubs, suplex trains, that sort of thing.

Base form, I'd say lifting and tossing a car is near the height of his strength. Fused, he'll be lifting that same car with one arm. Surya himself could pick up a subway car and wave it around like a toy.

Now, each of their power varies with their level of anger at that point, so there would be moderate shonen-esque divergences from the stats I just listed in certain scenarios.

Forgive me if this sounds powergame-y but I'm hesitant to give specifics about Monshiro's strength because I want to ensure that he has the most physically powerful contract. Sheer strength is essentially all he has, and if he ends up outclassed in that regard, his contract would seem pretty pitiful.

Could I have the final info on my app? Should I change anything else?

@Erasmus: There's no specific issue, I'm just trying to make the decision.

@GuyYouWishYouDidn'tKnow: It seems okay to me, but I'm going to wait until I can see what Tachi thinks.

@Sketcher: I never said you had to make your contract a god, I meant that if you were going for spirit you should probably be a little more specific. Hoenstly, those abilities don't work particularly well for Athena aside from maybe reflecting the whole defensive warfare thing a little.

Tachi said
...suplex trains...

Dang it, now i gotta go play FF6 again...

Setting related question, how long has creating contracts been around?

I can answer this.

Very long. Long enough that a lot of myths were people not understanding contracts way back when.

Thanks! Anyways, I updated Ao's personality to make it lean more toward narcissism, gave him a fog ability to enforce his weather theme, and updated Alex's picture because it was going to the wrong site or something weird.

Updated

Edit: I updated the 'luck' ability to be able to have an impact in combat/plot related things, but only if it's not initiated by me. Basically I can't use it to avoid/shortcut things, but opponents/GMs can use it for flavor if they want to. Which will probably never happen but the option will be there.

VitaVitaAR said
@Erasmus: There's no specific issue, I'm just trying to make the decision.@GuyYouWishYouDidn'tKnow: It seems okay to me, but I'm going to wait until I can see what Tachi thinks.@Sketcher: I never said you had to make your contract a god, I meant that if you were going for spirit you should probably be a little more specific. Hoenstly, those abilities don't work particularly well for Athena aside from maybe reflecting the whole defensive warfare thing a little.

I was going for the god of war more than the god of wisdom :/
I thought it would reflect Athena better for him to be physically weaker yet nimbler unlike the other god of war Ares who's mostly seen as the muscle-head.

So what can I do to make it better? >.<

Well... Athena actually is a goddess of wisdom and strategic warfare, so her abilities should reflect that.

Also the fusion should reflect... well, Athena is a greek goddess. While it doesn't have to completely look Greek since, well, look at my Artemis and all, but it shouldn't be a crusader with crosses everywhere.

@Aurus: I think he's acceptable now, I think.

How about that? >.<

Name: Jack "Kane" Kaneonuskatew Bosney

Age: 16

Appearance: Kane

Personality:Likes to go by his shorten middle name, Kane is a serious mannered person who has seen the extremes of nature of both animal and man alike.He tends to have fits of Melancholy on a full moon but other then that he is a social creature with goals that he wants to achieve. He has a mind of a wolf, a hunter, always alert for danger. He is willing to spend weeks hunting his prey(or project) down to the finish. He tends to keep his opinions to himself, unless they're asked for, which he willing give. His sense of honor is picky at things, as a potential alpha of his pack, he won't harm the weak, but unless they have some meaning to the pack or he deems worthy would receive his protection.

Clubs:Student Council(president) Part-time job(keeper of the temple)

Brief Back story: His mother was a beautiful Cherokee Indian woman with blood linking her to the old chieftains of the old times, making her a princess of sorts. She was living away from the reservation when she met her future husband Kane Bosney . His father was a European mercenary that was visiting the states for additional military training when they chanced upon each other. When they first met, it was love at first sight. Jack never got to know his mother, for she had died giving birth to him. Keeping his son with him, he took to all parts of the world with his work, growing up in the hostile environment all the time, he learned the trade and grew into a efficient fighter. His father knew that he would miss out on other parts of his needs of a growing boy. So every Summer when he wasn't with his father,he was with his grandparents, who were powerful shamans in their own right. In the states, he begun learning about the other half of his linage, the half that had been able to talk to the spirits for years and is steep in such history. If his travels with his farther opened his eyes to the cruelty and madness of mankind, his visits with his grandparents taught him how to keep the balance, the peace and violence of his nature within his mind. It was on his last trip that he was able to discover his best friends and partners for life. He was sent to japan as an exchange student,for everyone agreed to some extent that he should go to high-school. His father choose the Covenant Academy for his son so that he get to experience the school life without loosing his edge. He stays at a temple on the skirts of town. Since it situated in a forest with a large amount of grounds, He finds it to his liking, working and taking care of the grounds, earning his place and a moderate allowance. Keeping with rigorous training and mediation, he was able to create a second contract with another spirit creature.

Contract(s): Spirit Animal (Dire Wolf) Spirit Animal (Dire eagle)

Contracted Beings:
Name: Gage (Ohcumgache)

Type: Spirit Animal

Personality: Gage has a sense of humor that is rarely seen as funny to others. He is an ancient spirit, reserve for royalty or people with high promise in the indian nation to guide and teach. He usually push people through light hearted snide comments and dry obversations. He is loyal, trusting friend that instructs Jack on spiritual matters and folklore that he has picked up in the spiritual world.

Powers: Acute Hearing and smelling, Increased Stamina, Telepathic Communication (Only with his spirit Animals) Shamanism arts.

Fusion: Don't Expect to get away.. His speed increases by leaps and bounds, skin becomes tougher as well. His howl becomes a destructive sound wave that reaches out to about 14-20 feet in front of him. His jaws become more powerful, able to tear chunks out of stone and leave holes in steel.

Summon: Nuff Said Even with the bracelets on, he never makes a sound while moving. His senses are better then jacks on all fronts, Jack has never seen his friend get tired from running, and only retreats back in the spirit world when his time is up. He enjoys the hunt still, and will at times chase something down just for the fun of it, letting the creature go once it got caught. His speed and agility are in classes of their own.

Name: Lakota
Type: Spirit Animal

Personality: Noble and define, he is the king of the sky. He see's the long view of things, and acts accordingly. Often with instructions that don't make sense, he rarely speaks of the roads that lay ahead that only he could see from his lofty perch in the sky.

Powers: Increased sight can see clearly up to a mile, Increased Tenacity, both physical and mentally. Telepathic Communication

Fusion: Towards the sky Jack gains a set of wings that allow his to have ability of flight for a short time. His sight also increases to the point that he can see clearly up to two miles.

Summon: Let me show you He only grows to his full size if the occasion calls for it which is around the size of a bull with the wingspan of 25 feet. The size that he normally uses is that of a slighly larger version of the golden eagle with increased wingspan. His sight can reach up to 3.5 to 4 miles out, while his speed while flying can go up to 75 mph, and while diving he can without breaking a sweat get over 300 mph. He tends to just fly and keep with in contact with jack if something arises or he curious about something that he can't seem to find.

I'll look at all the bios in a minute, but, um, I just realized I don't think the IC link got posted here.

I'm thinking of joining, but I'm going to assume that Lucifer is too OP and come up with another god or mythological being to go with my first idea (Prometheus). I'll post once I come up with a second.

@Tigger: Okay, he seems fine to me. Accepted.

Could you help me out with mine if there's anything wrong at this point?

Humans:
Name: Kyle Lockhart
Age: 18 (Senior)
Appearance:
Personality: He is known to be a bit rebellious, especially when he thinks that he was given an order just so that someone in charge could exercise their power. He follows the rules when he sees the point of the rules and agrees with them, and when he knows he'll get caught.
Psychologist report:
Both of his parents were skilled contractors. In their raising of him, however, they were very strict. Disobedience was punished swiftly and severely. As a result, he grew up seeing his life as a series of rules that had to be obeyed, lest he face punishment. He is essentially ruled by his Ego, having little understanding of why you shouldn't behave in certain ways. When he joined the Academy, this view was extended to include the school. He sees the administrators and teachers more as prison wardens than as friends or instructors. I believe this has led to him viewing himself and other students as slaves to the administration.
Clubs: Muay Thai Club, Debate team
Brief Backstory: Unlike many contractors, he spent his early years going through American prep schools. His parents tended to choose the strictest ones they could, believing that he needed to learn discipline more than anything else if he was to be a contractor like them. Money wasn't really an issue, as his parents had both long exploited their gifts for great profit. When he got to high school and his parents saw fit to teach him the basics of being a contractor, he did what he was supposed to do. He chose one of the more "acceptable" beings to make a contract with. He transferred to Covenant Academy, but he soon realized that despite all of his power, he was still subject to the laws of his teacher, and the school staff, whether those rules actually protected people or not, or even if they didn't work.
When the summer arrived, he used some of the money in the expense account his parents had left him to pay for school, and traveled to Italy, to a remote shrine. He took a piece of a statue to the goddess that had fallen off and, after transferring to Japan, waited for the appropriate time. When November 13th arrived, he summoned her to ask for her help freeing others from the oppression he saw them under. She agreed.
Contract(s): Sindri, Feronia

Contracted Beings:
Name: Sindri
Type: Dwarf King
Personality: Hardworking, Likes building and making things. He has a weird sense of humor, often laughing at the failings of others, especially when they do something that he thinks is easy, like Smithing. Likes to study machines, though he seems to be having trouble with computers, as they are so different than what he's used to. Likes to hang out at a blacksmith's shop in the city, one of the few places where such a place could still exist.
Powers: Preternatural understanding of machines and metallurgy, resistance to heat, increased strength (currently 3x), tougher skin
Fusion: More muscular build, beard, slightly shorter. increased powers from contract. Resistance to magic and lightening.
Summon: 4'8", Muscular, large build. Beard. Wears armor that resists magic, heat, and lightning. Carries an ax that shoots flames from it on command.

Name: Feronia
Type: Goddess
Personality: Values her freedom. As a goddess of wildlife, health, and fertility, she can be a bit flirtatious, however, she is kind, only fighting to protect others or herself. She was once prayed to by slaves, hoping for their freedom, which made her a goddess of freedom.
Powers: Healing (self and others; accelerates the body's healing rate. Currently can't heal mortal wounds.), accelerated growth/revival of plants, animal speech
Fusion: Androgenous, they glow with a light like sunlight, bringing healing to those around them. Can control plants or animals, though plants are obviously much slower.
Summon: A beautiful woman, clothed in natural materials, though the specific materials vary with her mood and the climate. She can heal people or revive the recently dead. She can even restore life to dead wood or other plant materials. She has a kind of telepathy with all wild animals, and they obey her will, should she ask it of them. Should she see a serious injustice, she will not hesitate to step in to stop it.