I updated Sayuri with the Konoha earphone communicator as I forgot to include it on the first try.

Could anyone review her and Chinatsu, please? I already gave her my stamp of approval, and when Lilly ads one last tech we came up together with, I will be ready to review her again.

Made the last edit to Chinatsu's CS, she should be good to go now. ^_^

Both look good to me. Accepted.

So Gero do you have an ETA on when I may be transferred to a different team with Kato.

My New character: Ariska Namine

sorry about her being already there by the way.

review and feedback is more than welcome

Review of Ariska Namine :

I will keep it in a more summarized version for now.

A. ) A bit strange that they have an ANBU from Takigakure. From what I know and remember is that Kumogakure's influence isn't near that place. Even when she had to leave the place, it would make more sense if she would be from the Frost or Sky country. A small change that would make more sense in my opinion. I will keep my personal opinion on the further history however as I am a bit doubtful about it.

B. ) Just a pet peeve, but what is the affinity? Fire or lightning chakra nature?

C. ) Some extra equipment for het jutsu

Explain this please? What kind of extra equipment?

D. ) Some traits and skills are kind of swapped?
I also am not sure about the heightened senses. Though ANBU are elite shinobi, I kind of think that should be removed or be compromised with lowering the other traits/skills.

E. )

- Hidden: Maito Yoshito (righteous might)

Kind of OP. It all just suggest that it will be a beam that it is capable of dealing massive damage. But how is the lightning generated? How is the attack formed? If it just a beam that is being launched after the streak of handsignals, I want to see more handsignals and a more balanced weakness. Kind of not want to accept a custom technique that is like that. Else I would suggest to look at False Darkness, which is kind of the same idea.

-Chakra Nageru (chakra hurl)

I am not sure if you know, but a blade enhanced by a generic lighting chakra nature, is able to pierce through rock and material like that. To parry it would mean that the person needs to use a chakra flow technique of equal or better power in order to deflect it. I kind of advise to put more thoughts/detail in your custom techniques cause I kind of get the idea that they are rushed.

F. ) The summoning ;

-Fly and high speed? I kind of not accept that. Even for short distances, how far is a ''short'' distance? Fifty meters?

- Dream Weaver, how is the genjutsu cast? Touch, breathing in a fume or what? What does the peacock use to get the person in a genjutsu? And I think that the traditional way of breaking out of her genjutsu is quite possible. Else it would be instantly A or S ranked in my opinion.
- Wind Release: Whirlwind, is Gale windpalm? Why not just put that there?
- Multiple Mirage, weakness? And again : how does the peacock put one in a genjutsu?

I would advise to overlook the CS and edit it to make things more cleared out on how and such.

I will post tomorrow with some characters. Am at the moment kind of needing Nim, Alice and euhm probably Roro for it.

I would like to point out to Nathan that you wrote KumAgakure instead of KumO. Though a village hidden in bears sounds hilarious you should probably change that. :p

It's early, normally I would not say anything but I think that you are really being a bit too harsh in viewing his CS. And it is coming across like you don't want his character or rather you don't want him to have another character. If so, why? This harshness is kind of annoying, and this early in the morning I don't filter what I say, so maybe keep that in mind when you reply?

Thanks so much. :P

Gerontis said
I will post tomorrow with some characters. Am at the moment kind of needing Nim, Alice and euhm probably Roro for it.

Oh god... Now I'm both scared and curious.

Fieryfly said
I would like to point out to Nathan that you wrote KumAgakure instead of KumO. Though a village hidden in bears sounds hilarious you should probably change that. :p

XD We have to do that at some point. A Village of people hiding inside bears.

LillyDove said
It's early, normally I would not say anything but I think that you are really being a bit harsh in viewing his CS. And it is coming across like you don't want his character or rather you don't want him to have another character. If so, why? This harshness is kind of annoying, and this early in the morning I don't filter what I say, so maybe keep that in mind when you reply?Thanks so much. :P

It wasn't meant to be harsh. I could be way harsher with reviewing to be fair. I review by pointing things out and asking for either details or some changes. It may look like that, but I am keen on not using strong words or anything that could give the image that it was a harsh review. Maybe it came over like that due the lot of things I questioned and requested to changed, but that is merely cause it would be wrong to just think ''I already have asked five things to be changed, I will let this one slide''. That would give him some hard time when another GM notices his Cs has some faults and make me look like a bad reviewer, due being overly nice.

Another note is that a reviewer needs to be objective and not subjective. This means that even though having nothing against Alternathan, I can't bypass things. It would be unfair to everybody else, including him.

@Nathan:

- I have nothing against her being Takigakure as you explained it nicely in the story
- Make the Elemental Affinity clean as Alice stated, please - just to avoid confusion and unpleasant moments in the future + " The extra equipment part " - as with the previous, we want to avoid confusion
- Every character must have some weaknesses, even ANBU
- Explain and fix the custom techniques
- Every summon needs a history, be it a Ninja Tiger or a Peacock

@Lilly:

It might have been harsh, it might have been not - balance above all things, and especially here when we all want to enjoy the story with balanced characters.

Thanks Alice for reviewing

Thanks Lilly for standing up for me

Thanks Fox for the clear overview and specifics

I will edit my CS accordingly

Glitchy is Genkai still in this RP? I'm not to sure if she is or not. I haven't seen that name in a while.

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If you joined the secret group Glitchy would you still somehow function in Shinichi's team?

Genki be here.

Gamer geek said
Glitchy is Genkai still in this RP? I'm not to sure if she is or not. I haven't seen that name in a while.

There's another user called Genkai on these forums, so I wouldn't get me confused with them :P

But yes, I'm here, again.

Cuco said
There's another user called Genkai on these forums, so I wouldn't get me confused with them :PBut yes, I'm here, again.

When did you get here! No fair, no ones allowed to change their names.
Anyway, I assume I need to tell Niji that the good ol' team will never be back together. I'm sure if you wanted to transfer back you could but I'm not going to force you to come back if you don't want to.

Gamer geek said
When did you get here! No fair, no ones allowed to change their names.Anyway, I assume I need to tell Niji that the good ol' team will never be back together. I'm sure if you wanted to transfer back you could but I'm not going to force you to come back if you don't want to.

I've been here quite a while actually. Something you would know if you paid more attention :P

You'd also know that I was already put back on your team the moment I re-posted my character. We haven't had the chance to do anything about it because for most of the time I was here they weren't even sure you were still around XD

Don't worry about Niji's secret group stuff, she's staying in the team but could be called away if there is some reason for her to do anything sans her team.

Cuco said
I've been here quite a while actually. Something you would know if you paid more attention :PYou'd also know that I was already put back on your team the moment I re-posted my character. We haven't had the chance to do anything about it because for most of the time I was here they weren't even sure you were still around XD

Thats 10 laps for back-sass...but yeah, sorry bout not checking the OOC a whole lot. At one point I was just ridiculously busy and wasn't really checking up on anything. Now get to running!

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GlitchyBugger said Don't worry about Niji's secret group stuff, she's staying in the team but could be called away if there is some reason for her to do anything sans her team.

Alright, I was just curious as to rather or not it'd mess anything up. I don't know how it would work out though when we're on an active mission and you get called in somehow.