DiamondBlizzard: I don't like to be mean, but I have a lot of problems with this character. The first and easiest to fix is the Black Guard, we already have an organization with that name so just to keep things easier I would say to change the name. Second part of the blackguard I don't like is why would you make an assassin group to fight Bandits. (despite what Assassin's Creed shows) Assassins are stealth killers and when drawn into a real fight, especially against numbers, they would be at a disadvantage. So why would you use Assassins to fight bandits who swarm and overpower with numbers and always have someone looking to fill the open spot of the leader you kill.
Now on to the character. It seems a bit way to overpowered, how can a person at the age of 24 use 4 different martial arts effectively, fight skillfully with a blade, be a master assassin, retire from anything, and learn any magic to its expert level. Plus having a blood enhancement (which I will get to later) What I see in this character is someone who has already reached it's peek and has no room to really grow throughout the rp.
Now as for the Blood power it seems a bit to convenient if you take the three other characters who have powers like that. For Silus it was an experimental procedure preformed by a powerful mage seeing if something like that was even possible, and even then it has plenty of bad points to it. Hikisaka had to let a demon posses his body, enough said. And Adrian was attacked by a werewolf to get his powers. Now even though each character gains something from the ordeal each of them have their own drawbacks. As I see of this hawk's blood I don't see such a thing could just be done so easily that it is just casually passed out upon recruitment and have virtually no drawbacks.
And my final part is the equipment, Although I know it is basically a copy of Ezio's gear, you have to loose the gun. The Theocracy of Hieledran is the only nation that has the technology to produce guns, and even with that they don't have the ability to produce miniature guns that could be hidden like that. And even if they did the Theocacy's technology is so well guarded most people have never even seen a gun before so it would be impossible to recreate them outside of Hieledran.
Esayo: I like the character and I don't see any problems that jump out at me so I'll accept her.
Razqua: No worries, I plan to end my open enrollment soon I just wanted to get a big number to start with as I have had the rp die many times before when the first round of drop outs come as people loose interest and it comes down to like me and two people trying to take on things meant for a whole team.
Now on to the character. It seems a bit way to overpowered, how can a person at the age of 24 use 4 different martial arts effectively, fight skillfully with a blade, be a master assassin, retire from anything, and learn any magic to its expert level. Plus having a blood enhancement (which I will get to later) What I see in this character is someone who has already reached it's peek and has no room to really grow throughout the rp.
Now as for the Blood power it seems a bit to convenient if you take the three other characters who have powers like that. For Silus it was an experimental procedure preformed by a powerful mage seeing if something like that was even possible, and even then it has plenty of bad points to it. Hikisaka had to let a demon posses his body, enough said. And Adrian was attacked by a werewolf to get his powers. Now even though each character gains something from the ordeal each of them have their own drawbacks. As I see of this hawk's blood I don't see such a thing could just be done so easily that it is just casually passed out upon recruitment and have virtually no drawbacks.
And my final part is the equipment, Although I know it is basically a copy of Ezio's gear, you have to loose the gun. The Theocracy of Hieledran is the only nation that has the technology to produce guns, and even with that they don't have the ability to produce miniature guns that could be hidden like that. And even if they did the Theocacy's technology is so well guarded most people have never even seen a gun before so it would be impossible to recreate them outside of Hieledran.
Esayo: I like the character and I don't see any problems that jump out at me so I'll accept her.
Razqua: No worries, I plan to end my open enrollment soon I just wanted to get a big number to start with as I have had the rp die many times before when the first round of drop outs come as people loose interest and it comes down to like me and two people trying to take on things meant for a whole team.
