@WilsonTurner They won't exactly be avian as we know it though, but the closest description would be avian. They fly, seem to possess similar adaptations, but at the same time evolved very differently. Very.
I like trains.
^ Completely relevant
(But cool with that concept- can't wait to read it or somethingwhatever)
I am going to make a faction,which in his planet had two centers of great power , like having one europe to one side and another europe to the other side , speaking in terms of human history
Ive never played the bad guy before, but this nation will definitely be the bad guy lol
Mostly still a work in progress, ill add more things when they come to me
I do hope your nation is the manipulative bad guy type. I know a certain orange-blooded species that might like to get their unanimously dark hands on some of them.
Or, you know, you could colonize the Rissan, then make a bunch of different territories which shove competing nations and religious groups into arbitrary mixed areas. You could also recruit a bunch of them to keep your rule secure, then end up with a rebellion led by them because they have to bite into forbidden materials in order to open up the battery packages for the rifles.
I mean, you've got the right uniforms.
I am going to make a faction,which in his planet had two centers of great power , like having one europe to one side and another europe to the other side , speaking in terms of human history
Can't wait to see it! I've always liked to toy with that idea, it'll be nice to see what you do with it.
I'll have official accepts up soon along with my own app, I'm pretty busy with RPGC right now. Nothing more fun than airships, apocalyptic cycles, and nuclear holocausts!
Keyguy, I'm scared. I don't know why I am scared to be reading your entry but... I am absolutely terrified. And I need to work on my own, now that TTL is over and done with. Crap. But I have to work on a latin paper tonight. D:
Keyguy, I'm scared. I don't know why I am scared to be reading your entry but... I am absolutely terrified. And I need to work on my own, now that TTL is over and done with. Crap. But I have to work on a latin paper tonight. D:
Keyguy, I'm scared. I don't know why I am scared to be reading your entry but... I am absolutely terrified.
No main character dies this time. In fact, it's pretty optimistic and cheerful. In the same way Sound of the Sky is optimistic and cheerful while the world is slowly ending due to desertification and the death of anything alive in the ocean.
I know this have a lot of errors so please help me, this is like a draft copy
Name of nation: United Nations of Rathlar Species:
They are almost human,except that they are a bit more taller and a lot more stronger to withstand gravity in Rathlar
Description of government:United Nations -They are a entity in the planet which try to bring balance to the world and unity and is conformed by various member states which can vote in the Great assembly in various things (example:Program to bring help in some part of the Planet , etc).The Greatest position is the "Representative Of Rathlar" which is selected between all the nations , anyone in the world can postulate but the different spheres in the world supports that which aligns with their ideology or agenda.But even with this the UNR is impartial in everything, Planet Rathlar:This planet is the biggest habitable planet in the Milkyway , almost about 10x Earth,its about 2/4 of sea,because of this almost everything is avaliable in good amounts. Description of military:
-The UNR uses military only to defense the peace in the world but their military is limited by the support of other member states and great powers.Because of this they have the more advanced of the world but of medium size. -In Rathlar , the doctrine of Combined Arms has advanced more than others doctrines and the UNR uses this doctrine too: Aircraft , Ground Units and Naval Units have similar development and one cannot advance without the other , The Great Powers in Rathlar plan to use this doctrine too in space , making a mix of everything. -The Airforce is based on attacking almost everything present in the battlefield because of this they have a great payload, anti-naval missiles to air-to-air missiles.The UNR have designed the most advanced aircraft in the world ,with help of other nations of course,this is the RN-105,only the UNR have the facilities to make it and currently is denying any petition of this airplane.The rest are common 5th generation Harthal Airplanes.
This Aircraft is the first orbital fighter and bomber in the world , actually all the nations which helped in the development have the airplane blueprints(All nations),It have been made to get very fast at any point of the world and can be converted to bomber or fighter depending on the situation.The RN-105 can get to the Orbit of the Rathlar and some of it weapons can make a orbital bombardment.
-The Ground units are 4th generation,except for one the tank RT-520,this was exclusive for the UNR and none has access to it,currently is the best tank in the world but the UNR can only produce it in limited amounts,The Rathlar Doctrine on tanks is attack and defense , the tanks are slow but their firepower and armor is one of the best of their time , milky way speaking.
This tank is the first tank in using the railgun technology , it has a composite armor made of Iridium and Titanium as main materials,it has one the best motor made in Rathlar an is capable of going to 130 km/h.(medium low velocity in the world)
-Naval Units 4th generation nothing special here.
Technological Overview:They are advanced as late XXI century Humans , they currently have more industrial techs than spacial ones , the techs ahead of their time are :The nuclear fusion,which is revolutionizing the world , but this have their problems too , the 2 greatest spheres of influence in the world are currently developing a weapon of mass destruction based of Fusion.Which is making the world go to the abysm and the Super High Speed Internet and High Speed Radial Transmisions , this tech is capable of sending transmission faster the light itself but only in a great antenna with high power supply.The Tech was made to make the communication easier since the planet is 10x Earth,The industries in Rathlar are massive and efficient.But the nations in the world tend to make weapons and new technology. Cultural Overview:There is a globalization going in Rathlar thanks to the UNR ,but the separation is great between one continent to another , you maybe will find a Victorian culture and in another place a Radical Teocracy,because of this the UNR have some problems with some nations.Which doesnt recognize the UNR.(You can find of everything) History:The UNR was made to bring peace to Rathlar and have almost all the nations in the world as members,in Rathlar are a total of 32 continents ,there a lot of cultures and ideologies but none of them is Utopia , the world was shattered between conflicts and the wars were brutal , It was not until a great war happened it Rathlar in which almost every Harthal was affected , at the end of this there wasnt a true winner or a loser ,Then all the great powers decided to agree in something , the creation of the UNR that maybe seems like a try to fight in other battlefield , but the UNR stays independent from ideologies and external influence , they try to bring peace to the world , it has solved about 11405 international problems since it creation,but the problems are still there . Other:
I know this have a lot of errors so please help me, this is like a draft copy
Name of nation: United Nations of Rathlar Species:
The of height standard is 1.73 meters,the live expectancy is over 80 years ,others live until 120 , they are omnivores , in everything else they are almost human except for one thing ,all of them have a mark in the right hand which symbolizes Rathlar the planet in which they are
Description of government:United Nations -They are a entity in the planet which try to bring balance to the world and unity is conformed by various member states which can vote in the Great assembly in various things (example:Program to bring help in some part of the Planet , etc).The Greates position is the "Representative Of Rathlar" which is selected between all the nations , anyone in the world can postulate but the different spheres in the world supports that which aligns with their ideology or agenda. Planet:Rathlar:This planet is the biggest habitable planet in the Milkyway , almost about 10x Earth,its about 2/4 of sea . Description of military:
-The UNR uses military only to defense the peace in the world but their military is limited by the support of other member states and great powers.Because of this they have the more advanced of the world but of medium size. -In Rathlar , the doctrine of Combined Arms has advanced more than others doctrines and the UNR uses this doctrine too: Aircraft , Ground Units and Naval Units have similar development and one cannot advance without the other , The Great Powers in Rathlar plan to use this doctrine too in space , making a mix of everything. -The Airforce is based on attacking almost everything present in the battlefield because of this they have a great payload, anti-naval missiles to air-to-air missiles.The UNR have designed the most advanced aircraft in the world ,with help of other nations of course,this is the RN-105,only the UNR have the facilities to make it and currently is denying any petition of this airplane.The rest are common 5th generation Harthal Airplanes.
This Aircraft is the first orbital fighter and bomber in the world , actually all the nations which helped in the development have the airplane blueprints(All nations),It have been made to get very fast at any point of the world and can be converted to bomber or fighter depending on the situation.The RN-105 can get to the Orbit of the Rathlar and some of it weapons can make a orbital bombardment.
-The Ground units are 5th generation too,except for one the tank RT-520,this was exclusive for the UNR and none has access to it,currently is the best tank in the world but the UNR can only produce it in limited amounts
-Naval Units 5th generation nothing special here.
Technological Overview:They are advanced as late XXI century Humans , they currently have more industrial techs than spacial ones , the only T two techs ahead of their time is the nuclear fusion,which is revolutionizing the world , but this have their problems too , the 2 greatest spheres of influence in the world are currently developing a weapon of mass destruction based of Fusion.Which is making the world go to the abysm and the Super High Speed Internet and radial transmisions , this tech is capable of sending transmission faster the light itself but only in a great antenna with high power supply.The Tech was made to make the communication easier since the planet is 10x Earth. Cultural Overview: They in this have two great separations , ones think that the democracy is good the other side things that the monarchy is good , both sides share a global culture thanks to the UNR , but that is only thing they had in common , both sides have their own costumes and religions (maybe 2 Jesus),the democracy side have more liberal and socialism ideology and the Monarchy side have Fascist with comunist ideology. History: Rathlar History started to be writed 5500 years ago , in different places almost at the same time , the war and civilization started to florish about 4200 years ago ,in that time the total population was of 500 million in the world , different civilizations and culture started to expand as the commerce and discoveries advanced , in the year 600 BC(Before Contact) there was about 30 predominant empires around the planet , all making alliances with each other and fighting between them , there was two continents important to the history , one was Astalth the other Zurtk , both of them had great civilizations , great armies , great culture and great expasion , they were incomunicated until 1400 AC (Age of Contact) , Zurtk developed the goverment of Monarchy having in them stable states all controled by a monarch and Astalth had only know Democracy making them semi-comunist and liberals.When both form of goverment were in what we call the Dark Ages they meet each other , the result was desastruous , when the delegations of both continents meet each other , they could find only differences and hate , since then there was always a battle for power from both continents , when the age of colonization started , nations from both sides fighted for land until the end to get what they wanted they couldnt accept a peace treaty , like in our timeline , the only mayor event which disrupts our time line is the Great War the only great war in Rathlar,Year 1940,A crisis for getting a big island in the middle of the two continents was fatal , the distance which stoped any kind of war at mayor scale between both continents was over , the new inventions like the airplanes made it easier to fight over distance .The Island called "Rathlar Abysm" was never disputed between any nation until now ,in both continents the most powerful state declared the island for themselfs,there wasnt any long talk about this , there was only one order to give ,"Fire" , the moment which both continents was waiting for centuries was going to start , in total the world had 30 Billions of Harthals alive at the end there were only 19 Billion, landings , naval combat , ground battles and Air fights were made for about 20 years , both continents drafted all the population they could , in total 10 billions men were drafted , it was all crazy , in the most radical nation of both sides decided to educate childs to combat since 6 year old and others drafted them from 12 years old,in middle of the chaos ,the nuclear power was found and with the final weapon at hand for both sides , this world maybe would only be ash for now , if it werent for this weapon , this was the stop for the Great War ,both sides knew what was coming for them if they sended the order to launch a nuclear bomb . A truce was made ,for this the UNR was made a organization to search the peace of the World and to maintain the truce forever,since then both sides entered the cold war ,both sides support the UNR trying to get all the influence they can. Other:
Could be longer, but the app doesn't matter to me as much as actual posts. Aside from the usual typos and the like, there's not much of a problem (Although I did chuckle a bit when you put Fascism and Communism in the same nation). Being myself, I'd love to see the culture fleshed out. Considering the whole antitheses thing that's going on, it'd be especially interesting to see how their thoughts differ regarding religion.
Here's a small fix. No attention was paid to formatting and semantics, i'll halp with that when you ahve the final version roleld out =)
I avoided rephrasing entire sentences where I could as not to change what you meant, but there were sections that simply did not make any sense whatsoever, so I tried to guess what you meant by them and put it into words xD. In general, don't be afraid of the period. It makes it much easier to read if you have more smaller sentences, rather than oen that spans a line and a half. Especially when it covers multitude of topics - See 1st sentence of the race description. You used one to describe height, life expectancy, what food do they eat, and at the end - oh yeah, they are mostly human. I would start with saying they are msotly human, and then follow up with the differences, just one or two at a time.
Name of nation: United Nations of Rathlar Species:
The average height is 1.73 meters, the life expectancy is over 80 years, some live to 120. They are omnivores, in everything else they are almost human, except for one thing: all of them have a mark in the right hand which symbolizes Rathlar, the planet on which they live.
Description of government: United Nations -They are an entity on the planet which tries to bring balance to the world and unity is conformed by various member states which can vote in the Great assembly on various things (example: Program to bring help to some part of the Planet etc.) The Greatest position is the "Representative Of Rathlar", which is selected between all nations. Anyone in the world can postulate but the different spheres in the world support the candidate which aligns with their ideology or agenda. Planet: Rathlar. This planet is the biggest habitable planet in the Milky Way, almost about ten times as big as Earth. About 2/4 of the surface is covered by an ocean. Description of military:
-The UNR uses military only to defend the peace in the world, but their military is limited by the support of other member states and great powers. Because of this they have one of the more advanced forces of the world, but medium in size. -In Rathlar, the doctrine of Combined Arms has advanced more than others doctrines and the UNR uses this doctrine too: Aircraft, Ground Units and Naval Units have similar development and one cannot advance without the other. The Great Powers in Rathlar plan to use this doctrine in space too, making a mix of everything. -The Airforce is based on attacking almost everything present in the battlefield. Because of this they have a great payload, from anti-naval missiles to air-to-air missiles. The UNR have designed the most advanced aircraft in the world, with help of other nations of course. This is the RN-105. Only the UNR have the facilities to make it and currently is denying any petition for this airplane. The rest are common 5th generation Harthal Airplanes.
This Aircraft is the first orbital fighter and bomber in the world. Actually, all the nations which helped in the development have the airplane blueprints (All nations). It has been designed to get very fast to any point on the world and can be converted to bomber or fighter depending on the situation. The RN-105 can get to the Orbit of the Rathlar and some of it weapons can engage in an orbital bombardment.
-The Ground units are 5th generation too, except for one: the RT-520 tank. This was exclusive for the UNR and no one else has access to it. It currently is the best tank in the world, but the UNR can only produce it in limited amounts.
-Naval Units are 5th generation, nothing special here.
Technological Overview:They are as advanced as late XXI century Humans. They currently have more industrial techs than spacial ones, the only two techs ahead of their time are the nuclear fusion and Super High Speed Internet and radio transmission. Nuclear fusion is revolutionizing the world, albeit with it's own problems - the 2 greatest spheres of influence in the world are currently developing a weapon of mass destruction based of Fusion, Which is making the world go to the abyss. Super High Speed Internet and radio transmissions is a technology capable of sending transmission faster then light itself, but only with a great antenna with high power supply. The Tech was made to make the communication easier since the planet is 10x Earth's size. Cultural Overview: There are two large fractions, one thinks that the democracy is good and the other side thinks that the monarchy is good. Both sides share a global culture thanks to the UNR, but that is only thing they have in common. Both sides have their own costumes and religions (maybe 2 Jesus). The democratic side has more liberal and socialist ideology and the Monarchy side has Fascist with communist ideology.
History: Rathlar History started to be written 5500 years ago, in different places almost at the same time. The war and civilization started to flourish about 4200 years ago. At that time the total population was 500 million people. Different civilizations and cultures started to expand as the commerce and discoveries advanced. In the year 600 BC(Before Contact) there were about 30 predominant empires around the planet, all making alliances with each other and fighting between them.
There are two continents important to the history, Astalth and Zurtk. Both of them have great civilizations, great armies, great culture and great expasions. They were separated until 1400 AC (Age of Contact). Zurtk developed the goverment of Monarchy, comprising of stable states all controlled by a monarch. Astalth had only known Democracy, making them semi-communist and liberals. When both forms of government were in what we call the Dark Ages, they meet each other. The result was disastruous. When the delegations of both continents met each other, they could find only differences and hate. Since then there was always a battle for power. When the age of colonization started, nations from both sides fought for land until the end to get what they wanted. They couldn't accept a peace treaty, like in our timeline. The only major event which disrupts our time line is the Great War - the only great war in Rathlar, Year 1940. A crisis centered around territorial claims for a big island in between of the two continents was fatal. The distance which stopped any kind of war at major scale between both continents was overcome, the new inventions like the airplanes making it easier to fight over distance. The Island called "Rathlar Abyss" was never disputed between any nation until present day. On both continents the most powerful state claimed the island for themselves. There wasn't any long talk about this, there was only one order to give, "Fire". The moment which both continents were waiting for centuries was going to start. Before the war the world had 30 Billions of Harthals alive and at the end there were only 19 Billion. Landings, naval combat, ground battles and Air fights were waged for about 20 years. Both continents drafted all the population they could, in total 10 billions men were drafted. It was all crazy. In the most radical nations of both sides it was decided to educate children in combat since 6 year old and others drafted them from 12 years old. In middle of the chaos, the nuclear power was discovered and with the final weapon at hand for both sides. This world would have been only ash by now if it weren't for this weapon. It was the end of the Great War. Both sides knew what was coming for them if they sent the order to launch a nuclear bomb. A truce was made, for this the UNR was founded - an organization to search the peace of the World and to maintain the truce forever. Since then both sides entered the cold war , both sides supporting the UNR trying to get all the influence they can. Other:
As mentioned above, communism and fascism don't mix too well, in fact they were each other's worst enemy. If the planet is 10 times the size of earth, it either needs to be hollow or the people insanely strong to withstand such gravity. Also, you mention the two continents meeting in a "dark age" - that doesn't look like good age for intercontinental sailing to be achieved :D
I was just gonna go with essentially smart utah raptors gone evolution and having been genetically engineered so that they would eventually be smart, where they then started expanding from their jungly jurassic world to space because of the tech inside genetic labs on the ground from unknown peoples. And the fact that the entire planet they live on is literally a massive experiment gone wrong- the original owners left, leaving behind a gold mine in the genetic laboratory databases, booting what would be millenia-long tribal raptor peoples into modern+++ era, where they eventually found out that their planet is about six times younger than all the planets around them, and the sun, and everything, and that the core of the planet was actually three miniature black holes, kept stable and used for energy by massively complex indecipherable machines in the heart of the superplanet.
Simply speaking, an artifically created planet that used the gravity from controlled miniature black holes to both create the planet- just let the gravity break through but not anything else, and let the dirt and crap collect and then terraform after you've blown up and collected all the nearby planetoids and asteroids, and then do whatever to the surface.
Three miniature blacholes, orbiting each other in the center of a massive planet, controlled tightly by a super-advanced AI that continually refuses to admit my peoples, who are fine with that beacuse they couldn't hope to match it, nor could they do anything to it without risking their entire nation in the process. ;DD
Oh, you guys are going to love my nation! Or hate it. Depends on how well your diplomacy skills are. Just saying...the nation is a representative democracy at its peak....tribal at worse(and most common). Some of the 'countries' are suited to certain tasks tahn others, but each 'country' has their own quirks and diplomatic methods of reaching their goals.
I like the Kraikirans, buncha smart emo ravens xD But I do have nitpick - the compressed helium in the scales would not aid flight whatsoever. The more you compress it, the denser it gets and is going to "float" less. Ideally you'd want vacuum in there. also it'd be kind of hard to get into their system as it's so light it would just stick in the upper levels of atmosphere above the oxygen and float out into space and it doesn't really form any compounds that could be eaten.
@Forsythe Man, I knew my science was off. I was kinda taking inspiration from a documentary in which they envision what aliens would look like on another planet. But I guess there simply isn't enough room for enough helium. The ones I saw using helium was practically 75% gas and was about the size of a truck. I guess I'll have to think of something else.
Initially, I wanted to have some kind of an anti-gravity substance in their scales. But I thought it might be too outlandish. Vacuum on the other hand... I'm not sure. I thought vacuum does not contribute to lift?
But anyway, I'll think of something :D. Maybe the anti-gravity substance won't be so implausible. I mean, they recently found some kind of a substance in a species of crab that's harder than steel alloy, so... Maybe I could take a page from Sid Meier's Civilization: Beyond Earth?
Smart emo ravens is a somewhat accurate description :)
