Okay @The_Written_John The character is fucking awesome. I have to finish the last of the reading. But please dont get rid of her. You can adjust her to make her a chaos scarred though. There is a trick. Make her mother a Cambrion but make her mother the child of a Demon and a Chambrion that has almost no other blood. As in the other races blood is generations back so its like 3 generations of Cambrion breeding with demons.

I think I'm going to completely redo my character's background and magic. Looking at it again now that I'm awake, I've decided that I think it's trash and I don't like it.

@vietmyke If you want any other opinions you could post it or PM it.

Edit: Didn't notice the last page.

I havent looked at it yet so. Its totally up to you. I'll be here for the next three hours or some then I'm taking my mother to lunch so I'll probably be away for a while so don't destroy anything while im gone

Sorry for the double post but i cant edit at mentions in.

@The_written_john Okay nice job on the character. Obviously the race thing has to get sorted. i dont think its a huge problem. We can talk about it. The only big problem is the magic/god relation. Its not the magic itself all that is fine. So Channeled magic needs a source. Either and item or another being. Typically a god/elemental lord/fae lord/Devil. So for her channeled magic she either needs a magic item that allows her those abilities or you need a god that grants them (Wild magic is fine no worries there) If you would like perhaps she has some relation to the Elemental Lord of Air or Elemental Lord of Storms? (I actually dont have a gender for Elemental lord of Air so it could be the Elemental Lady if you would prefer)

@vietmyke Im reading your cs next I promise

SORRY! i was busy with college! Again, sorry for the pessimism, I have a hard time taking critisism at first, ignore my salty kiddyness! XD @themerlinhawk!

So, I need to make her mother a cambrion, who was born between a demon and a cambrion, which made Lux a Chaos Scared

As for gods, im sorry, I thought an item to channel the magic could mean a weapon or something of the sort, and I will have no problems with her having relations with the Air or Storm god/goddess/etc. Could you please private message me on how I could edit my characters bio to relate to this? Or should I just put into the gods section that she has met them, or something?

Also, is her abilities too weak for her Will? Should I add more? Improve upon them? Could use your assistance.

EDIT: Added the part about her mother being a cambrion with a demon and cambrion parent which makes lux Chaos Scared, I also added to the gods section that she has relation to the lady of air, though, it's pretty blank beyond that, I didn't exactly know what to write, if you need me to write more, I will, if you help XD

DOUBLE EDIT: Added some themes to the application in the form of Battle and Normal theme, just for a little bit of fun.

@The_written_John Alrighty I sent you a PM with the elemental lord stuff and I shall read back over the character again when im done with the other character sheet i have to take a look at. And no worries about the criticism thing. I'm EXACTLY the same way so I understand which is why things that I have a problem with on character sheets I try and be as nice and as open about why I think they need to change as I possibly can be

Question: How hard would it to make a djinn that was a nephilim...if that makes sense.

Easy the child would the child of an angel and a Djinn of your choice. Did you have one of the species of Djinn in mind?

Easy the child would the child of an angel and a Djinn of your choice. Did you have one of the species of Djinn in mind?

My app good now?

Particularly I have a good picture of an ifrit although if I really wanted to I could find another djinn type...the hardest part is explaining the celestial siden

@The_written_John Yes its lovely you can move it to the character section

@Archangel89How so?

It's really just planning dynamics...ifrits being generally evil-esque and the angel I had planned on being that of the Lightbringer. I'm either going to have him be the sort of bastard son of an evil entity trying to be good or shunned by both factions and and somehow obtaining god-hood or "nirvana" as it were.

@Archangel89 Angel's arent neccesarily good. Infact there are 6 light divines and 6 dark divines, while the dark divines could be considered bad in that what they represent is seen as less savory they arent EVIL in the sense of the word the same way the light divines arent GOOD in the sense of the word. Angels and Demons aren't good or evil inherently. Additionally Ifrit aren't evil they are the agents of chaos and bad fortune. Shaitan are evil

Well here's my inspiration and I'll leave it up for debate on lineage cause I know an ifrit is part of it lol

Maybe an Ifrit and an orc? or maybe an ifrit Hellspawned?

I like the idea of the ifrit and infernal...and a thought just occurred to me could he be an avatar of fire and could I get some information on the elemental deities if I go that route

I like the idea of the ifrit and infernal...and a thought just occurred to me could he be an avatar of fire and could I get some information on the elemental deities if I go that route

Unfortunately no. Now I hate to say that outright because you're probably going to see me posting more than a few things as the NPC Christian Highfell who is the Avatar of Storms. At the same time that will probably illustrate a little why my answer is no. So quick lesson on how Galendar's gods work. Beings that fit into the Divine Will category are prohibited from personally interfering in the affairs of mortals because they are SO outrageously powerful. Hence the existence of Avatars. An Avatar is literally a person who has been given unlimited access to a gods magic and who has had a serious upgrade to their will. In fact the Supreme Will category is mostly for Avatars, any one else with a Supreme Will is a very special circumstance. Now if you wanted to make him a Cleric of the Elemental Lord of Fire that would be cool. And I'll happily provide more info on any of the Gods if anymore wants more detail. I just didnt want to flood the opening post ^^'

@Themerlinhawk So how's my character? Should I keep it or change it?

@Vietmyke I just read through it again. Oh my god a solely Wild magic user, unique breed of Fae and he has the kind of back story that would have made Christian all but stalk him and offer him a job. Christian loves outcasts and people with a grudge. XD Your character is sweet. The only thing I'd ask is that for the magic section you just class all of his stuff as being Wild magic (just so we know). After that its all good. Also. Purely food for thought. If you want. You could include a god relation. There are a group of beings that are ALMOST gods as far as Fae are concerned. So I like the whole Art of the Way thing. So my thought was. Maybe one of the Fae lords taught his people the Art/sired this race of Fae? so you could conceivably have a Fae Lord as his god relation. Here is the tricky part right now. There are only three currently: Mab, Titania and The Erlking. If you want to use one of them I'd personally go with the Erlking since hunting and killing things are sort of his style. The other option is to do a little more leg work and come up with ANOTHER Fae Lord or Lady (Mab and Titania are female) so it would be up to you to come up with a name, flesh the being out a little and all that. Id add them to the list and you could include that with your character. As you can probably tell I've stolen liberally from folklore for the Three Fae lords I have. I was getting ready to add a fourth by the name of Oberon. If you wanted to take that and run with it or come up with something unique id be cool with that. Totally optional