Luke's cool and all but I have some doubts regarding on the concept of his powers and I'd like to point out some known issues so that he'll be on the right track.

First and foremost, characters who will be ORB prisoners should at least be 20 and above because the government stated that they will, by no means, house any Superhuman criminals who are younger than that age. If it happens that Superhumans under the age of 19/20 possess juvenile records, they are dispatched at a mental institution so that their powers can be contained and handled properly. If not still and they've already reached the age of 20 while remaining at the mental institution, they're automatically sent to the ORB. I've read in some parts of his history that he was placed on a juvenile detention facility and was later transferred to a much bigger prison.(ORB) If so, I assume you may have forgotten to change his age. But anyway since it's still a work in progress, I can understand.

Now onto his powers. My biggest doubts is that he is able to attain such demonstration of dark magic (able to summon demons and the like) at a very young age. While we all understand we're under fiction, I just like to emphasize some aspects of reality to make things logical and have more sense. In my opinion towards this case, if Luke possesses such power at an age of 16, I'm quite certain that he will be overwhelmed by it. One notable reason is the presence of demons alone. I don't have any definite repugnance towards them, (heck, even I find myself fascinated with the ability) but I feel like it's a little bit off. Luke can be terrified with that power, the very existence of these creatures can give him horrific nightmares from their appearances and growing up will have him develop a really unsettling behviour just from reflecting through what he's capable of. Personally, I think this whole concept of demon summoning is fit for a fantasy setting - which isn't a theme this RP tackles and that's what my opinion holds.

So here, I have an idea I can suggest to Luke so that he can fit in the RP as a well-rounded character. Since you're approaching a power with demonic themes, why not have him possess demon physiology? Like he's able to transform into a demonic creature on certain conditions. He can also possess some physical features as that of the creature within his human form. Let's say for example, he has small horns growing out of his head, reptilian eyes, a tail, perhaps a set of heightened senses or etc. while in human form. The second part of his powers isn't that bad at all and you can actually use that approach.

However, if you want to scratch off the idea of this power, I can help you find a suitable and more comfortable one to your liking as I have a variety of superpower concepts at my disposal.

I hope this isn't too much. I just want to help players with their character creation using any plausible and enjoyable means of concept building. If you have any questions regarding the issues I've pointed out, feel free to ask. Once you've fixed and edited your CS, just [@mention.] me or the co-GM so that we can look it over again. ^^

@Veridis Quo

EDIT: I was ninja'd XD Anyway, this is just a longer version of what Zelosse pointed out.

I can replace the demon summoning stuff with another power that thematically fits his character, but I don't really want to leave him with just the metamorphosis. It's not something that I want him to use often. (He doesn't just get powers when he transforms, he literally lets a malignant entity take the wheel.) So I'm alright with scrapping the demon summoning but I want him to have something else to use when he's not using his trump card.

There was also the "sacrifice" aspect of the power I really liked. I wanted Luke to give more and more of himself in order to save others.

I'd like to think of a power that is both demonic in nature and requires sacrifice, but I really can't think of anything else.

If it's an issue of my character not being mentally scarred enough, I can fix that instead.

@Veridis QuoHmm...there are a lot of things you can involve a sacrifice with. You may put it this way: Upon transforming into a demonic creature, Luke's strength and power are amplified to a certain extent. Through this, he can create a bond with an ally by blood ritual. (or whatever you call the 'getting one's blood in exchange of supernatural powers') With that bond formed, the ally is able to share a sum of Luke's strength while at his demon form. The ally is able to have augmented physical prowess and agility BUT he/she is only limited to partake it at a very short amount of time. It's like power gifting but like others, there should be some obvious drawbacks.

Also, there isn't a need to add more psychological affliction to your character. His current age just needs to be on the appropriate scale, one which he attained mental stability despite having such powers.

EDIT: I guess I've misread this part.

"So I'm alright with scrapping the demon summoning but I want him to have something else to use when he's not using his trump card."

This can go to a lot of ways. He can still use his power gifting while in human form but the strength and agility granted isn't as potent as when he's at metamorphosis but it's still strong nonetheless. Just tell me your thoughts about these. If it still doesn't fit right, or you want something else, I can provide more possible ideas.

So I'll be a bit inactive for the next 2 days (work-related stuff) but I'll be checking for new CSs and answer some questions, if there will be any.

After that, expect things to get started. ^^

All is going according to plan. Soon, we will reclaim the surface world.

I commented in the Interest Check but figured why not here since I found the link. I'd like to join this if there is room for another member. If you're all full up then it's cool, no crying over here. *Holds back sobs*

@Garrison the more the merrier! Come right in.

@GarrisonExcellent! Remember to read the character creation guidelines before giving your time to create a CS or you can ask me some questions if there are parts you're not sure of. ^^

@Dragonfry@LadyTale@Zelosse@Nytefall@Cuccoruler@Dirty Dan@Legion02@FantasyChic@Kingdoml1

IDK if this is all but the IC is up guys. You may now start posting!

So did we decide where I'd be for all of this, seeing as I'm already working for S.C.A.R and not a prisoner?

@FantasyChic I totally forgot. So sorry about that >_< I'll give you a PM shortly.

@Scoundrel

It's ok. I'm used to being forgotten about :(

@FantasyChicOh my, don't be that way. I'm just currently overloaded with work, that's all. I tend to forget things while I'm at it. XD

Ive taken first blood! More to come.
If you dislike grotesque murder do not read my sloppy post.

Haha, nice post. If I don't post tonight, I'll post tomorrow night. I have work tomorrow, and I don't get out until 10:30 PM.

@Dirty Dan I'm gonna edit into my post that he send you a message. Goes along the lines of "bring me the psycho" which is what we refer @cuccoruler as

Hey guys, I won't be able to join the RP. I tried to think of a replacement for my character's powers, but it was simply taking too much away from what he is. Best of luck!

@Veridis Quo It's ok bro. Sorry to see you go.

@Veridis QuoSorry to see you go as well but thank you for your time.

With that, I'm just going to have this open for other players to come and join until we've reached a specific number of IC posts.

Also, we're not having quite a lot of OOC chit-chats here, not that I'm worried of. I just wanted to check you guys out and know how're you all doing?