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Hmm... To stay up late writing a post only to regret it in the morning, or go to sleep and save it for tomorrow...?

That is the question.
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Your birthday, you say!?


Also, you are very handsome boss. ;) And I love your tattoo!


My birthday is still tomorrow, it was midnight in the UK when i first said that.

And thank you Co-Boss, coming from someone as attractive as yourself means a lot to me!

I have a sudden urge to visit texas I'll take some pictures of my birthday cake when it arrives!
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oh no i feel so overwelmed i dont know where to start can someone help me
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@Dynamo Frokane Bruh, if you come to visit America, be sure to stop by Georgia, I'll show you how to decapitate a foam pigeon with a shotgun
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@Silver Fox

"Er, no Ash. Just because they say 'Netflix and chill,' that does not mean they are just going to watch movies."


Shhh shhh let the naive baby continue to think innocent thoughts xD
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gah, forgive me for my shitty poetry

hidden meanings are so fun, though.
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@Dynamo Frokane Bruh, if you come to visit America, be sure to stop by Georgia, I'll show you how to decapitate a foam pigeon with a shotgun

"Georgia! I love Georgia! It's the one state where I can pull a gun and get a stampede torwards me rather then *away* from me."

"I think there's still an APB out on my ass there."
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@rocklee I'm sorry, I think I confused you earlier! While we here at Shine City are always accepting new characters, you still have to go through an approval process before you can post in the IC section or move your CS over to the character tab!

Now Sonny seems like a lovely character, but I'm going to need your 'Persona' section to be just a bit longer than that. I usually look for a bare minimum of two paragraphs, but I love, love more because I'm a sucker for details! A way that you could lengthen it up for me is by changing the 'Persona' heading to 'Bio/Personality', that way you can add a little spiel about your character's history! You don't have to tell us everything, just some of the basics so we get a good understanding of where he comes from!

Now I see that you've already posted IC, which is a no no if your character hasn't been approved yet, but I'm sure it was an honest mistake, so no worries! Plus it gives us a great opportunity to go over the quality requirements of this game!

We require all posts to be at least three paragraphs long. Now I know what you're thinking, "But Narcy! My post has a lot of dialogue, so I have three paragraphs!" or, "I hate reading long paragraphs, they hurts my eyes! That's why I write short, three sentence paragraphs instead!". That is absolutely, 100% fine, we all have our different ways of writing and I don't want to make you feel like I'm putting you in a box creatively. I too love shorter paragraphs and dialogue out the wazoo, so you are not alone!

A good rule of thumb to remember is that a standard paragraph has about five sentences in it. So if you have a lot of dialogue in your post or you just like writing shorter paragraphs so it's easier on the eyes or something, aim to give me at least fifteen sentences and we should be golden.

Also, this game is in the advanced section, so we have to answer to the highest grammar standards. This doesn't mean you have to be perfect, we all misspell a word or forget some punctuation every now and again, but we do need to make sure we are proof reading our posts. There are a few lines in your last post where you did not begin the sentences with capitalization, left the punctuation off the end, and did not capitalize the letter "I" when referring to yourself (or in this case, Sonny!). I need you to fix those for me, as well as adding a few more lines to it to make it longer. If you're struggling to add length you can always describe Sonny's surroundings more, or maybe what he's wearing, or the temperature outside, etc., etc. Details are your friend, embrace them!

Let me know if you have anymore questions, darlin'!
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<Snipped quote by Narcotic Dollie>

My birthday is still tomorrow, it was midnight in the UK when i first said that.

And thank you Co-Boss, coming from someone as attractive as yourself means a lot to me!

I have a sudden urge to visit texas I'll take some pictures of my birthday cake when it arrives!


I ship it

@rocklee Would you like some help? :3
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Ababababa ;';';';' Chaos hasn't been on in 4 days so I guess no finishing up the collab (unless they come on) >> Aw. And [@Chaotic] if you read this, just want you to know i'm not putting you down or anything! I have finals, maybe you do or life is just weighing on you right now. It sure as hell is weighing me down... Gah. Anyways <3 just keep on beating life~
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@rocklee I'm sorry, I think I confused you earlier! While we here at Shine City are always accepting new characters, you still have to go through an approval process before you can post in the IC section or move your CS over to the character tab!

Now Sonny seems like a lovely character, but I'm going to need your 'Persona' section to be just a bit longer than that. I usually look for a bare minimum of two paragraphs, but I love, love more because I'm a sucker for details! A way that you could lengthen it up for me is by changing the 'Persona' heading to 'Bio/Personality', that way you can add a little spiel about your character's history! You don't have to tell us everything, just some of the basics so we get a good understanding of where he comes from!

Now I see that you've already posted IC, which is a no no if your character hasn't been approved yet, but I'm sure it was an honest mistake, so no worries! Plus it gives us a great opportunity to go over the quality requirements of this game!

We require all posts to be at least three paragraphs long. Now I know what you're thinking, "But Narcy! My post has a lot of dialogue, so I have three paragraphs!" or, "I hate reading long paragraphs, they hurts my eyes! That's why I write short, three sentence paragraphs instead!". That is absolutely, 100% fine, we all have our different ways of writing and I don't want to make you feel like I'm putting you in a box creatively. I too love shorter paragraphs and dialogue out the wazoo, so you are not alone!

A good rule of thumb to remember is that a standard paragraph has about five sentences in it. So if you have a lot of dialogue in your post or you just like writing shorter paragraphs so it's easier on the eyes or something, aim to give me at least fifteen sentences and we should be golden.

Also, this game is in the advanced section, so we have to answer to the highest grammar standards. This doesn't mean you have to be perfect, we all misspell a word or forget some punctuation every now and again, but we do need to make sure we are proof reading our posts. There are a few lines in your last post where you did not begin the sentences with capitalization, left the punctuation off the end, and did not capitalize the letter "I" when referring to yourself (or in this case, Sonny!). I need you to fix those for me, as well as adding a few more lines to it to make it longer. If you're struggling to add length you can always describe Sonny's surroundings more, or maybe what he's wearing, or the temperature outside, etc., etc. Details are your friend, embrace them!

Let me know if you have anymore questions, darlin'!


i understand i just was very confused on the details so i am glad i am told this so i can correct everything and do this right. Im am very embarrassed sorry i will fix everything now. So I need more in my post and I should've been approved and i'm so sorry about that. I will be sure to proof read more closely. I was in a place where i was always busy so I couldn't pay attention. I am usually more detailed i'm sorry. Again I hope you do not think of me as an illiterate child breaking all the rules.
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<Snipped quote by Dynamo Frokane>

I ship it

@rocklee Would you like some help? :3


well I got in trouble....But I still do thank you!
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@Narcotic Dollie

I fixed The bio and persona hopefully to your expectations. Now i'm fixing that damned post and everything should be squared off and A OK
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@rocklee I wouldn't say you were "in trouble"; rather, you were advised on the way things run here, further increasing your knowledge of roleplaying! :3 I still learn new things about RP and myself every single day in regards to writing, and everyone here was once an amateur in regards to roleplaying at some time.

Despite this, we continue writing so we can get better at it and, most of all, have fun with others! If you felt discouraged or apologetic, don't - we're all very understanding people and we can understand circumstance can make things a royal pain in the butt! :P

I gave your app a looksie in Dollie's place. Might be a little short for her tastes, however it looks really good in my opinion! Consider your app accepted, unless another GM says otherwise. :D
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Hey, boss. How you been? Happy birthday, by the way...I've had a lot going on, but I just stumbled by the thread again today and wanted to wish you a very happy birthday!

I apologise for my hiatus from everything - I'm dealing with a mental illness, but I appreciate everyone's patience with me.

Happy birthday, boss!



#nomakeup
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#longhairdontcare
#weneedsomeindianupinhere
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@Dynamo Frokane Its morning over here and Happy Birthday Boss! Thanks for everything you do and for bringing these wonderful people together in Shine City! You're an awesome GM to have so we're all pretty damn lucky.
I hope you have a splendid day~ <3
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@MyCatGinger thank you for the birthday wishes and....

HOLY GOOD GOD YOU ARE ATTRACTIVE
@Narcotic Dollie are you seeing this?!

Why is this RP full of such hot GMs?

Truly the best present ive gotten all day, thank you both for the birthday wishes.

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I ship it


I sorta do too, but I think @Bozo has claimed that spot already :3

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@rocklee I wouldn't say you were "in trouble"; rather, you were advised on the way things run here, further increasing your knowledge of roleplaying! :3 I still learn new things about RP and myself every single day in regards to writing, and everyone here was once an amateur in regards to roleplaying at some time.

Despite this, we continue writing so we can get better at it and, most of all, have fun with others! If you felt discouraged or apologetic, don't - we're all very understanding people and we can understand circumstance can make things a royal pain in the butt! :P

I gave your app a looksie in Dollie's place. Might be a little short for her tastes, however it looks really good in my opinion! Consider your app accepted, unless another GM says otherwise. :D


Oh thank you! I do need improvement so this really helps. This is only my second RP and i feel like a took a very big bite with this one but I think I can do it!
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#nomakeup
#goodmorningbeautifulshinecity
#longhairdontcare
#weneedsomeindianupinhere




I sorta do too, but I think @Bozo has claimed that spot already :3

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It's a love triangle! Well, you have Bozo beat in the appearance category, so you're one step ahead, Boss! :D And Bozo, I'm saying this because you've chosen not to reveal yourself yet, not because you're any less handsome or attractive than the Boss is! ^-^

Oh thank you! I do need improvement so this really helps. This is only my second RP and i feel like a took a very big bite with this one but I think I can do it!


If you ever need any help with regards to roleplaying, feel free to shoot me a PM and I can get back to you with some expertise real fast! :P The same can be said for any of the other three GMs, as well as most of, if not all, the players. I actually GM'd my second RP (meaning I ran it), and it turned out to be OK, however that was simply beginners luck. Considering this is only your second RP ever and you joined something more advanced than most, I can act as your guide and help out, if you so desire, however we expect you to obey the rules and keep up :3 But I have confidence, considering you're already looking better than me when I started out.
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@Dynamo Frokane Oh, that reminds me! Monsieur Boss! Would you mind if I used the extravagant young Kimasu as a means of interacting with Sonny? Sure, a player could come across him in the street, buuuuut considering people are mostly going places or are staying at home, I think the liklihood of that happening is slim (well, without them being smashed off their face, at least). A sober, calm, gentlemanly young man could give him something to do and maybe spark some gay vibes.

Just asking because I'm gonna make a Ryoki post soon (finally) and it'd be easier to combine if I did it all at once, ya know?
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